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    Nobody Anzai Koyanagi's Avatar
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    Default Understand

    I cannot understand
    that is all I can answer you with
    The words you speak, the gestures you make
    They’re unclear to me

    I cannot understand
    that is all I know to say
    when you make those faces, when you show those emotions
    that mean nothing to me

    I want to say ‘I am sorry’
    or to understand you someway
    but there is no movement in my chest
    nothing that murmurs deep inside

    I want to say ‘I get you’
    and relate to what you want
    but nothing reaches out from my heart
    but a cold, nothingness

    So even though you’re trying so hard
    and even though I’m listening aptly
    I can only nod or shake my head to questions
    because…I cannot understand
    My heart frozen over, let it rest for all eternity

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    Default Re: Understand

    Quote Originally Posted by Anzai Koyanagi View Post
    I cannot understand
    that is all I can answer you with
    The words you speak, the gestures you make
    They’re unclear to me

    I cannot understand
    that is all I know to say
    when you make those faces, when you show those emotions
    that mean nothing to me

    I want to say ‘I am sorry’
    or to understand you someway
    but there is no movement in my chest
    nothing that murmurs deep inside

    I want to say ‘I get you’
    and relate to what you want
    but nothing reaches out from my heart
    but a cold, nothingness

    So even though you’re trying so hard
    and even though I’m listening aptly
    I can only nod or shake my head to questions
    because…I cannot understand
    I like it very much. You put a good meaning to it, a situation that we all can probably relate with in some way. So the story is good! The usage of words is also good, and you rhyme quite often (I'd like to see a bit more though but that's my opinion). The rythm is also good.

    In other words, keep doing what you're doing! :D

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    You won't get me, not this time. soraking10's Avatar
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    Default Re: Understand

    I'm a bit iffy on the way you approached this, but I do like the overall meaning that you were putting out there. I think a lot of us can relate to this feeling of not understanding someone's actions, and then being left in the dark. Hell, even I can relate to this on some levels. The style to which you have the stanzas are great, and the repetition in the stanzas are great. So, nice job ^^;





 

 

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