Freestyle Rap Session?

[RememberRoxas]

I think more of you guys should have rhymes in two word/two syllable rhymes.
Take an Eminem verse for example. Here are the ending words of his lines.

pitbull
spits wool
gets full
skip school
sh!ts cool
kids stool

Nice verses anyway.

[Healing Vision]

Originally Posted by Traskix

One big shot, its all you got
to that final blow, that'll show them whos
in control of this race
to see who'll get first place

I'm running faster as the heat increases
with the world spinning
and the challenge increasing
more and more people say "im the best!"
while i sit back and see what will happen next

Then something happens that makes everyone crashing
falling to the ground
but im steady and I don't budge
I get up fast and and head for that finish line

but really who will win this amazing race
when the crown is just a foot away
a whisper in the wind could claim it all
for that gold that shimmers
It'll say whose the winner

'Sup?

Can't match the name, the face, or the flow.
I got a message to let you young ones know.
I crack out beats full blast kept in tow.
Subliminal thoughts harboring the so-so.
I heard you like politics, i got a taste for economics.
Lets stay realistic, now get socially statistic.
I'm that urban sound that fiends from the semi-underground.
I carry the resolution to form my own revolution.
The kind of reform that far exceeds the norm.
We pick it apart, with this ear splitting art.
Oh wait a second, did I forget to mention?
Bring it back for a second, let me have your attention.
Whats going on in your mind when your writing these lines?
I know that your mine and I tell you all the time.
The stuff I put sick like some crazed lunatic.
I'm here to inspire not set the place on fire.
With whats pumping through I've never felt so alive.
Which one of you young kids can even equal my drive?

[Shinra X-2]

I'll send waves to every nation
of my latest compiliation
cause I'm a victim of alienation

Through tough times my heart becomes strong
It just seems that my sister does no wrong

and I cannot prove that she does
But I'm the best there ever was!

It always seems I come up short
just like my nerdy friend Mort

I'm MC X-2
and I do what I do!

[TerraFTW!]

Uhh
A lot of friends of mine seem to live in a mansion with Gleemed Trees/
While I live in a one story house with a mother that shits Cream cheese/
Bitch please/
Get on hands and knees/ While I seize/ what used to be/ my Neice/
Thats fucked up, and screwed in the head by the media/
Cause all the kids are depending on everyone else to be leading ya/
But going ahead, cause shit seems to be what T.V. is feeding ya/
but hell, I suppose im a hypocrite since my rhymes be needing ya/
Huh i kinda feel hungry, better go pick up some Taco Bell/
with my girlfriend in the passengers seat talking up fucking hell/
On the way back I better stop to get some gas at the nearest Shell/
While the person im handing money to seems like he can't even spell/
and then I wake up tomorrow and find out he was a mass killer/
and the last person he served was the person after us, and just decided kill her/
Man that day seemed to be kind of a chiller/
Cause I found out that the mans name was Mr.Miller/
Who was that? Who was He?/
Only a Sly cat that lived right next to me/
Used to baby sit me too/
But i guess i never knew/


Seriously i want your feedback on this one. Yall like it?

[Traskix]

Oh snap! ^ i liked it, its like i kno ur whole life story...sorta


here we go back again, to the same spot
to search for our freedom
that'll be higher than the great oak tree
but the music sends the word through the air

like a flair, we get the signal and we're ready to go
let out the flow, let these words come to life
and glow inside your mind
and you'll never forget, that you messed with
the best out of the rest

Oh wait didnt tell you that,
that girl you saw before changed a lot
the beat that bops and words that pop
are coming out differently now
with a change of heart into a new form of art

[RememberRoxas]

@TerraFTW.
Pretty good.Kinda unusual story.I also thinkk you kinda ruined the flow in the begining with "My Niece."

[TerraFTW!]

Originally Posted by RememberRoxas

@TerraFTW.
Pretty good.Kinda unusual story.I also thinkk you kinda ruined the flow in the begining with "My Niece."

If you actually like Heard it than read it, it probably would have sounded a lot better. Which seems to be the problem with a lot of "Text" freestyles.

[Endless Warrior Sora]

Originally Posted by Healing Vision

'Sup?

Can't match the name, the face, or the flow.
I got a message to let you young ones know.
I crack out beats full blast kept in tow.
Subliminal thoughts harboring the so-so.
I heard you like politics, i got a taste for economics.
Lets stay realistic, now get socially statistic.
I'm that urban sound that fiends from the semi-underground.
I carry the resolution to form my own revolution.
The kind of reform that far exceeds the norm.
We pick it apart, with this ear splitting art.
Oh wait a second, did I forget to mention?
Bring it back for a second, let me have your attention.
Whats going on in your mind when your writing these lines?
I know that your mine and I tell you all the time.
The stuff I put sick like some crazed lunatic.
I'm here to inspire not set the place on fire.
With whats pumping through I've never felt so alive.
Which one of you young kids can even equal my drive?

I strive to equal your drive
And drive ignorance off to the side
And bide my time with each and every line
Steadlily gettin better
Perfectin my flows
I'm ready and gettin setter
And when I go
Ima be blastin off again
Team Rocket status begginin to end
And then when I'm up in the stars
So far that I no longer strive for cars
Instead Ima just get hotter than Mars
Droppin these interplanetary bars
For my sanitary cause
More enjoyable than Haagen Dahz
Bendin laws
Bumpin louder than chainsaws
So yes Ima a kid and I strive to be
what God wants me to be that I know is inside of me
Nothin else bindin me
No more darkness blindin me
Ima just keep grindin see?

[sorafinalform]

yea i get what you sayin. TFTW yo rap was nice and tras... well you tried

Which one of you young kids can even equal my drive?

I accept your challenge HV!!! (and no more talking in this thread unless it's followed by a rap please!!!)

My turn i guess let me show you how we go
We stay fresh and clean whiter than the coldest snow
No need for introductions yall should already know
If ya boy get started den da scene is bout to blow
Im hot
Way to hot to have the ice around my neck
We stop
Then we speed it up so theres no need to fret
On top is where we be if you don't believe us then check
I know you feel the heat the sweat is drippin down ya neck
Anywhere i am i set the roof on fire
The dance floor is blazin and i can't get no higher
I'll blame it on MaryJane dat bitch there is a liar
Call me sir or call me sire Just don't touch on my attire
Leave you danglin like a wire then i'll pop you like some tires
Forget everything thats prior to you becoming a buyer
Im the ruler of this shire so everything you conspire
It will simply backfire so progress you won't acquire
Get caught in the crossfire watch you lose what you desire
Yo life condition is dire we watch as the shit expires
The blood it simply perspires you shouldn't have overtired
Your body it transpires you suck like a vampire
You out im the umpire yo ranking it is a squire
I get the strongest inspired to come join my empire

Tell me what yall think about this one!!! please!!!

[Healing Vision]

Originally Posted by Endless Warrior Sora

I strive to equal your drive
And drive ignorance off to the side
And bide my time with each and every line
Steadlily gettin better
Perfectin my flows
I'm ready and gettin setter
And when I go
Ima be blastin off again
Team Rocket status begginin to end
And then when I'm up in the stars
So far that I no longer strive for cars
Instead Ima just get hotter than Mars
Droppin these interplanetary bars
For my sanitary cause
More enjoyable than Haagen Dahz
Bendin laws
Bumpin louder than chainsaws
So yes Ima a kid and I strive to be
what God wants me to be that I know is inside of me
Nothin else bindin me
No more darkness blindin me
Ima just keep grindin see?

This just in, what have you to report.
Sat on it for a second with a reasonable retort.
Rhymes laid out flat, not a single one is plain
Stripping the foundation such is the force of real gain.
I stack up bricks each symbolic of two weeks of pay
So fast it dwindles at the mercy of yet a single day.
Shelling out for rent, cost of gas, even cellular communication.
At the end of the day where is the sense of my own litigation?
If you don't yet know the struggle here's a taste of what it is.
The world is still hectic, no remorse anywhere you live.
On job number one its always been in and out.
I'm verging insanity, this I can live without.
Second job on it way, scheduled openings to midday
Too exhausted to say, but I cope in my own way.
The body is breaking down, its too much take.
This fatigue is very real, its not even worth it to fake.
Ones life on the regular, always covering the bases
Input so spectacular, hiding the dread from our faces.
Look left, look right, things full of devastation.
Speak up, I can't hear, shove lines without hesitation.

Originally Posted by sorafinalform

yea i get what you sayin. TFTW yo rap was nice and tras... well you tried

I accept your challenge HV!!! (and no more talking in this thread unless it's followed by a rap please!!!)

My turn i guess let me show you how we go
We stay fresh and clean whiter than the coldest snow
No need for introductions yall should already know
If ya boy get started den da scene is bout to blow
Im hot
Way to hot to have the ice around my neck
We stop
Then we speed it up so theres no need to fret
On top is where we be if you don't believe us then check
I know you feel the heat the sweat is drippin down ya neck
Anywhere i am i set the roof on fire
The dance floor is blazin and i can't get no higher
I'll blame it on MaryJane dat bitch there is a liar
Call me sir or call me sire Just don't touch on my attire
Leave you danglin like a wire then i'll pop you like some tires
Forget everything thats prior to you becoming a buyer
Im the ruler of this shire so everything you conspire
It will simply backfire so progress you won't acquire
Get caught in the crossfire watch you lose what you desire
Yo life condition is dire we watch as the shit expires
The blood it simply perspires you shouldn't have overtired
Your body it transpires you suck like a vampire
You out im the umpire yo ranking it is a squire
I get the strongest inspired to come join my empire

Tell me what yall think about this one!!! please!!!

Strength to stretch the jaw
Yet flow adrift etched with flaw
I'm bringing the truth full blast with the law.
Forget what you know even what you saw
I'm leaving your jaw dropped and loomed with awe.
We battle with the soul, minds, hands and paws.
I hear the dog barking but he retracts his clause.
Your intimidation is a fragmented as the jigsaw.
Take it to the playground and surface the seesaw.
We stand equal at each end right before draw.
Everything I'm laying is coming out straight and raw.
As I rise you sink, second thoughts of a withdraw?
Step down, turn the table, you're not catching this outlaw.

lmao.

[Traskix]

i guess i'll watch as i see what will happen this time
i might not be good, but i really dont care
i tell a story from whatever comes in mind
from a fairy tale to one that makes ya blind
with the images that you cant beileve
from people dying or glittery wings

but nothing really has a happy ending
only the true and bold can get what
thier asking for, to earn that spot
that can cost a life and lose all hope
it'll go down the drain, far away
from the grasp that you had

it slips away and the dreams are shattered
and gone forever, it'll never return
to the same person
because that person is gone
far away to who knows where
one way to find out is past that
gate to a higher place
and raise your voice and defeat the rest

[Square Ninja]

why don't we all be honest with ourselves here and call it the poetry thread?

[Healing Vision]

^Agreed .

[TerraFTW!]

Originally Posted by sorafinalform

yea i get what you sayin. TFTW yo rap was nice and tras... well you tried

Could you be specific with what was wrong with it so next time i can improve?

[Traskix]

ha yeah poetry...thats what i feel like im writing

The untold story of a real G
it might be fun to play with a gun
with ice on your arm and chains around your neck
they gleam like the grill of platinuim and gold
but you have a family at home
so what that doesnt matter
the hood is your wife and the street our your kids
you leave them wondering if daddy will ever come home
but theres no way when its filled with drugs and money
and those hoes that he sleeps with
nobody knows the untold story of this G
he came home one night, with one too many pills
blew up his family and didnt even know
now he sits in guilt wishing he can take it back
but he cant, so he cries wishing he never chose the gangster life


ok i totally made that up...sad but i like it