Poetry

[DecisivePumpkin]

Ooo. Skittycat, the first one is my favorite, I really like it. Here is something I wrote a while ago. I hope it isn't horrible.

A bleeding heart is harder to hold.

I covered your ears;
to block out what they'd say.

I built brick walls;
to keep others away.

I wrapped you in band-aids;
to prevent you from bleeding.

I made your heart metal;
to stop you from needing.

I cut you open;
to make sure your bloods red.

I hoped that you'd love me;
But you only look dead.

[gexion]

~~No,of course it is not horrible DecisivePumpkin...the opposite.It's really good,full of heart,bloody though...probably broken heart(?).I liked it a lot....but why dead in the end? :(

Here goes mine!I wrote this one some months ago...for DevArt....but it has a place here too =D....nothing special but tell me your feelings/opinion after readin it plz~~


"LOCKED UP IN LOVE"

A frozen heart,
lack of love...
Sadness,madness,
you think you screwed up
Stand up,listen up
I'll burn you up,
not you....your heart...
Frost will turn into tears ....
Tears flowing away from your heart....
You've been burnt up,
your heart is back...
locked up in love...
A rain of ashes,
a tornado of feelings...
Awakening..
You're locked up in love...
You think I made it up?
Don't make me laugh.
Sadness,madness...
were scattered in dawn...
Music of life,
wakes you up...
You're locked up in love....

[Snow Candy]

Great poem, Gexion! You're locked up in love, great ending! :D I also like the stand up, listen up part also! Keep up the good work! :D

[Chosen Again]

BAM!!!!

The Plunge

The river flows
The ocean sings
And you know
That each day brings
Another tear
And lots more hate
I am not here
So can you wait
Though days pass on
And hands are held
I am not any
Longer well
Feelings won't stay
Beneath the skin
I can only hope
It won't hurt again

[CtR]

I like how the pace reflects the chaos that is implied within it =)

My favourite part was

Feelings won't stay
Beneath the skin
I can only hope
It won't hurt again

I really liked this particular part because I can relate to it xD

Nice use of imagery.

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This I wrote quite a while ago now, be warned >_> it is quite long. Sorry.


Without looking back
You walked away
And I couldn't find the words
There was nothing I could say

Bitter tears they fell
Gently to the ground
I could feel my heart breaking
But I still didn't make a sound

The sky grew darker
Grey clouds overhead
The rain fell down around me
Whispering every word you have ever said

The wind made me shiver
A deep burning cold
And I was lost in memories
Of all the lies you have told

And suddenly, I see things clearly
Suddenly I understand
I was never anything to you
Though I followed your every demand

I gave up everything I had
Just to be with you
But Now I finally see it
And I dont know what to do

All I know is that I am alone
And that time is standing still
And despite everything I love you
And I know I always will

I listen to the water
The waves singing a lullaby
The wind calms down
I have no more tears to cry

I look at your footprints
Follow the trail with my eyes
Smiling I breathe deeply
I have already said my goodbyes

And now I go to freedom
Now I go to find hope
I will be stronger now
I know that I can cope

I walk forwards
I walk towards my goal
I just want to be me again
I just want to be whole

The water closes around me
And suddenly I know
That to find true freedom
I just have to let go

And suddenly there is nothing
And all there is is peace
And all I hear is my heartbeat
And I all I feel is bliss
And your face it fades from my mind
Your voice cant hurt me now
Falling deeper, but it doesnt hurt
For once I feel alive
I smile as I sink further
The Rest..Is Silence

[Snow Candy]

Wow, CtR, great word choice! I love all of it!

I have to type a poem and soon!!!!!!

[Chosen Again]

The Light of Day


If you could only face the night
When the day had left your side
If those creatures turned away
At the light of day


Never lost but never found
And now we listen to the sound
But never hear what they may say
In the light of day


So now I'm sweating in my bed
Awake, I fear what's in my head
I get down on my knees and pray
For the light of day


Empty minded run this race
Trying to escape your face
Banished by the smallest Ray
Of the light of day


And even for the sharpest witted
The dark atrocities committed
Seem to simply fade away
In the light of day


Now I try to understand
Why you never held my hand
Why'd you leave you didn't say
In the light of day


Now I try to win this fight
Push the tears back every night
Because I know I'll be okay
In the light of day

[Darkness Princess]

I've already read The Light of Day from your poetry thread, Chosen but I haven't seen BAM! Before... Interesting poem... I liked it a lot. =D

CtR, your poem was epic, a bit too long for my tastes but still you managed to pull it off.

[Ecstasy]

I forget who posted the article, but I was inspired by this: Digital Journal - Man Killed by Pet Spider, Eaten by Creepy Crawlies

Anyways, yea.

“Ant Farm”

Buzz. Click. Scratch.

A dashing, delectable feast of wilting gray flesh sits
Reclined on his couch, wearing a wide, haunted smile.

Sparkling white spiders dangle from his lips.
Two hard, glistening shells gnaw through his dull eyes.
A toupee of termites slowly pinch through his hair
And dig through his scalp.
His skin crawls as vehement mounds of ants wildly
Tear each other apart.

Buzz. Click. Scratch.

Silky red snakes gush through freshly ripped holes.
Slices of skin dangle in the web that
His wonderful widow has weaved.
The lizards revel in the growing stench of rotting flesh
And decomposition.

They crawl through, scourging and devouring.
They nest, breed, feed and burrow under flaps of broken skin.
They tower over his body as he lies helplessly in submission.
His head, his brain, shifts into a feeble bed and diner.
They rummage proudly with their powerful pinchers and
Digest this meager lump of meat.

Buzz. Click. Scratch.

[CtR]

o_o Baka Ushi your poem was very impressive, the repetition of "Buzz. Click. Scratch." worked really well, which is nice to see because sometimes in writing repetition can be over and misused. The fact that it is non rhyming also worked really well ^^ I am a huge fan of free flow style poetry and you pulled it off really well, something which I am still working on how to do D: The graphic descriptions you use can really build a mental picture of the scene, which, though it was a little disturbing, was very effective.

=) I liked it.



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Here is another of mine, I tried to find a shorter one this time =P though most of mine are often long 0_0 for some reason I have a real difficulty in writing anything remotely happy too o_O anyway, let me know what you think.



Invisible


Moon shines down and rain starts to fall
I look at you but you dont see me at all
a ghost in the breeze
a whisper in the trees
I begin to wonder If I am even real

Your eyes see right through me
and you dont hear my voice
emotions drain away
I see no other choice
I turn around and walk away

Rain falls harder and the night grows colder
But I no longer feel it as I stumble on
the air grows quiet
and all is still
I look down at the darkness

I close my eyes and breathe in deep
My heart beats faster as I think
I wonder what it would be like
I wonder if you would care
Would you care if I was no longer there?

A brief second, suspended in time
A momentary pause, everything stops
Falling, spinning, dancing in air
flying freely without a care
Then all is quiet, all is still, only the water knows


Moon shines down and rain continues to fall
I look at you but you dont see me at all
a ghost in the breeze
a whisper in the trees
I begin to wonder If I was ever even real

[Chosen Again]

Not a huge fan of free verse.

What is poetry that doesn't rhyme but vague prose?

[CtR]

Originally Posted by Chosen Again

Not a huge fan of free verse.

What is poetry that doesn't rhyme but vague prose?

Though poetry shouldn't be restricted and bound by rhyming, often when someone writes with the sole purpose of creating a rhyme they can lose what they are trying to say. Sometimes the rhyme can seem forced, poetry shouldn't be like that. Whether it rhymes or not it is about the flow and way it moves. In my opinion anyway, it is more about expression than constriction (:

[Chosen Again]

That's why I have no beef with omitted rhymes. It's when poetry is just a string of descriptive words that I think it loses purpose.

[Wolf Enigma]

Truth Behind Bloody Eyes

Every thing is waiting on a red rose
Now that everything has become an illusion
A gun in my fragile hand
What’s happening? I don’t understand
What is god’s special plan?
Is it to save us?
No, of course not
He wants us to die

Now my life is nothing but a lie
Why is that I have no alibi?
So now I have nothing to live for

I don’t need anyone to preach for me
Every lie is something you can’t see
But now I have seen the light
I now know what is wrong and right
So throw away the book
Get back the life they took
Never fall into their lies
Let the real image of life in your eyes
The angels of death are coming for me
Alas, I can not run or flee
My whole life is passing before me
Now that I’m the only one that can see
The truth that lies behind bloody eyes

Lies are truths
Truths are lies
All that you know hide behind bloody eyes

[Chosen Again]

Nocturnal Romance

I close my eyes and
Dream that you love me

So hold my hand
It won’t be easy

Because I tried
To separate my mind

But in the end I lied
When I said “It’s all right”

You’ll never know I cried
And on the inside died

‘Cause in the end I lied
When I said “It’s all right.”

You close your eyes to
Me and try to leave

I hold your hand
You can not leave me

It’s not okay
And I could never stay

And in the light of day
You had to go away

You'll never know I cried
And the inside died

And it won't be all right
Without you by my side.