A Figmental Truth

[Snow Candy]

Yep, so here I am with another fanfic at the moment. I'm writing a different story but like the last story....I have Earth characters and Earth stuff on here....and that since I hated my first fanfic, I decided to make up for it, I must make up for it! Okay, this story is a new fanfic story. This is in the KH world but of course it'll not be anything related to the future KH games and yes, it does take place but in my own point of view and remember how they got the note from King Mickey or whatever, that well not be in there since I don't know what the note meant and such. So think of it, almost as if KH starting again but in a fanfiction world, well not literally starting it. Except the Organization XIII has found a way to come back (except for the fourteenth member rumored in KH: 358/2 days due to not knowing much about the game and that it'll be too late for me to do anything by then, even if did came out sooner or whatever but you get what I mean, don't you? ) and instead of making two more Organization members. It also takes place on Earth half of the time and other half, Kingdom Hearts worlds. I am willing to take any suggestions, that'll make this story better. I know this was long.. oh and before you read. I must tell you that I'm in the processing of making this chapter and I'm not good at grammar and sometimes puncture. I'm good at mostly spelling and I'm willing to have anybody help me. Just PM me if you like the first chapter. ^_^ .
Whew! That was long but you'll find out about the characters as you read along. Otherwise I will you this, it includes the characters that were in KH game....and this time, think of it as though they did it realistically or whatever....and I will try to make this fanfic, creative and unique! Any suggestions recommend and would be good! I'll credit anybody for anything else or whatever!

ALSO CHARACTERS ARE FAKE AND IF ANYWAY REAL, IT'S JUST COINCIDENTAL! SO DON'T SUE ME, PLEASE, I WILL TRY TO MAKE ANYBODY WITH THE NAMES LOOK GOOD! XD

Well read on, if you'd like!

Thanks for reading this part and I'm sorry if I bored you with my long comments. >_<
I'M VERY SORRY!!!!!! XD

Hai, hai! (I mean, yes, yes!)

[All-Star Gamer]

Sounds interesting, But you might want to explain the "earthling" thing a different way. Technically, almost every world that you visit in the game could be considered "Earth," since they are modeled after real live locations and historical events.

that's my only beef with it. Other than that, the plot is good. There are a few fics with organizaton XIII "Returning" from beyond already in them, but if you do it in an original and interesting way, you'll definatly be able to attract some readers.


Good luck on tearing down the fourth wall!

[Snow Candy]

PROLOGUE

NOTE: Sorry the delay, lot had to be looked over as well as checked by myself. Thanks for beta-reading, Neloangelo! :D

There was nothing. Not a light shining, not even a single moment was passing by. There was nobody in sight at all as well. Instead just an eerie silence that would drive one’s mind crazy and the darkness that stretched around it.

“Where am I?” It was then that a person’s voice spoke up. One couldn’t see the voice but from the questioning tone, it sounded very much like a stranded yet weak traveler, stumbling upon a wrong turn along the path or somehow got caught up in a big mess.

“Behold, this is darkness.” A cold voice responded from within.

The silence was still humming despite two voices that awoken it. Nobody was there. Was he hearing things? Or was it just his imagination?

“And this darkness, is caused by the darkness in your heart.” There was another silent moment. “You’ll be in here unless you can seek a way out.” It continued as if it were speaking to nobody else but itself.

“A way out, what do you mean?” The uncertain voice continued.

It was then another voice spoke from within. It was different then the first.

“Don’t listen to him! The light can help you.” The third voice said.

“Wait what? What do you mean, the Light?”

“The Light is much stronger then the darkness.” The same voice continued to explain. “It will always be.”

“Silence, you imbecile meddling one.” The cold voice cried out. “The darkness is more powerful. For it creates a much more deep power that will overtake the light, it is much vast and powerful.”

“Now, I’m totally confused. So who are you guys?”

“A friend.” The third voice replied. “A friend who’s here to help.”

“Really? And what else?” The traveler voice wondered out loud.

“Trust the light,” It replied, not really answering his question.

“You cannot help him!” the first voice said, sounding more outraged.

“And why is that if I might ask?” The second voice challenged it.

“Because he has gotten himself dragged into the realm of darkness, no light will ever shine for him.”

“But if there’s a will, there’s a way and that’s not true, the light is stronger.” The second voice replied optimistically.

“Oh really is that so? Then what happened to Riku?” The cold voice challenged the optimistic one.

“Riku’s fate has nothing to do with this one.” The second voice shot back.

“STOP!” The traveler screamed as the voice kept going on and on. It just couldn’t be.

No. Not this, not the darkness. Not him. This couldn’t be, could it?

It was then he could feel as if he couldn’t breathe nor be able to see.

No, where’s the light? He thought. The light? The one that he was talking about?

Whoever the voice was. But wait a minute, who was the other voice?

The optimistic, cheerful, reassured voice. Who was it?

And the first, it couldn’t be. Could it? Was the first voice belonging to the traveler….who could be possibly him?


It was then the blackness was gone and soon blinded by what seemed to be bright sunlight. It was then a pair of hazel eyes flickered open, seeing the picture of his room slowly forming around him as if he were in a storybook. It was within a few minutes that a boy with hazel eyes and unkempt, short, light brown hair laid still, staring up at the dull white ceiling as if it fascinated him. So he wasn’t in darkness but what was that strange dream about anyway? How come the voices sounded familiar? Was it because he heard of them before or was it because he had heard of them before? Some dream, like I’ll ever be in darkness. He thought as he stretched his legs and forced himself to get up. Dreams like that will never be real. There’s no way that I’ll be trapped in darkness. The darkness can’t get to me! That kind of darkness is just a figment dream of mine, though it did feel like it was real. It was then he rolled out and off the bed but had managed within minutes to pick himself up. He instead tried to focus on going on ward to the bathroom and get prepared for the day. It was all just ridiculously plain stupid and very much a weird dream he’d ever had.
Or so, that’s what he thought at the time.

Okay, sorry for it being so short, somewhat vague, and abrupt but it was hard coming up with a good prologue! And this is supposed to be the mystery of the three people. Clue one: NOT any characters from Birth By Sleep. Too late in the time line for that. XD Sounds like Riku situation, sort of but much different! Similarities? You betcha! But not saying how and why. Criticize and review please! Remake of Chapter One coming right up! Yes and this is the main character as the stranded traveler..er..whatever you wanna call it.

[All-Star Gamer]

It's good for a first part, but there are lots of errors that you should take care of. Try rereading it later, and see what you think.

Keep doing your best!

And FYI, I was saying that many of the KH worlds, such as the Land of Dragons and the Pride lands, are based off of actual locations in the real world. I'm just saying you might think of giving Mac's world a different title other than 'Earth' since other worlds could also be considered 'earth' as well.

[axemyxas100]

Sorafan, that's cool! A NEW FANFIC! I LOVE THE IDEAS AND THE FIRST CHAPTER! ^_^ I love your story...ooh it's Mac in the KH world. ;D Anywho, I agree w/ that Allstargamer user about the world name...I know what you can call Mac's world...instead of Earth...: MAC WORLD! JK JK! JK! JK! SOMETHING COOL THOUGH! LOL! Great story...so far though! I'm pretty sure you'll find something. I have a feeling it's going to be better then the first fanfic, you wrote.

[Snow Candy]

Note: FINALLY CHAPTER ONE RE-WRITE!!!! Sorry for the delay and if it does need more stuff tell me. I made it less exciting but the idea of this chapter is to let you know—or at give you a part in the story where Mac discovered KH during one of the boringest days of his summer vacation, thanks to one of his closest friends.. Only about three weeks after school ended. :D So comments please! Oh and sorry for the dialogue formatting.



CHAPTER ONE (RE-WRITE VERSION): It's Worth The Shot Right?


Bring! Bring! Bring! The phone was off the hook, sounding off. “Coming, coming, coming!” A deep voice called.
There was the sound of footsteps that could be heard as the speaker was heading towards its destination. Bring! It was then a hand grabbed the phone off the headset.


“Hello?” a male’s deep voice answered. “YO MAC, WHAT’S GOING ON?” a loud voice yelled, causing the boy with gelled, light brown hair to hold the phone away from his ear. Geez, if he keeps this up, I’m going to go deaf. The boy named Mac, thought as he heard this.


“Who is this?” Mac yelled back as if the person was intruding his phone line.

“Dude, you don’t recognize my voice? What after we known each other since I was born.” The other person on the other line asked, a bit of hurt and shock sounded in his voice.

“Oh it’s you, what do you want?”

“Geez are you like in a bad mood or something?”

“Yo, Quinn. What’s up? How are you? Is that better? No, sorry, just got up.” Mac said exasperated by his younger brother. He realized that he and his brother usually got along, so he had no idea why he was speaking like an anti-social monster.

“Oh I see. So are you hanging with the guys today or you doing nothing?”

“Nothing. I guess. Everybody except Herold is on vacation or at a different camp. Why?”

“Well before I left, I forgot to remind you I have three video games or rather some you could try, you know just to lighten up your mood and get going.”

“Quinn, you know I’m not into video games. I haven’t been.”

“Oh come on, Mac. At least give this one a try.”

There was a bit of silence as Mac was wondering what kind of game Quinn could suggest. He liked Halo but he preferred to play it when the guys were around. Not to mention, they did have a box load of games and systems in their family room. It was then he sighed and gave in. After all, Quinn knew good video games.

“Sure, what’s it called?” Mac asked. He didn’t even bothering to write it down on a piece of pad and pen that was right in front of him. “Kingdom Hearts. Try it Mac. Try it.” His brother continued on.

“Okay, so what’s it about?” He wanted to know.

“I can’t tell you everything but a name to remember: Sora.”

Sora? What kind of name was that? A girl’s name? It sounded like a Japanese name. He wondered if it could be a Japanese girl’s name.

“Okay Sora, is that a girl by any chance?” Mac wanted to know.

“Nuh-uh. It’s a guy in the game and his name in Japanese means ‘Sky’.”

Sky huh? Wow, couldn’t it be more like a jet or speed? Why Sky?

“Okay. So how’s camp going for you?”

“Good and how are you and the rest of the family doing?”

“It’s empty now. Mom and Dad left for work. Eileen’s at a friends house and Cliff is handling camp fine.”

Mac said observing around the kitchen, wondering if he can anything to eat. He heard his stomach grumble as Quinn finished with, “He actually likes it.” Mac could remember when his youngest brother who was ten didn’t want to come to camp; because he thought he wouldn’t have any friends and that he thought camp was some nature outdoor place with nothing to do. Several weeks passed and the news from Quinn, Mac was glad to hear that Cliff was doing well and enjoying it.


“So can I talk to Cliff?” He wanted to know. He wondered if his younger brother was doing alright. They haven’t talked since he left for camp.

“Yeah you could but he’s asleep. Hey do you want him to call later?”

“Yeah, that’s fine Quinn. Have fun at Camp.” Mac said.

“Ditto. You go have fun with that video game I recommended.”

“Sure and maybe.”

“Maybe so. Bye.” Quinn cried happily.

“See ya,” Mac replied, pressing the HELLO button off. He glanced up at the digital clock that was on the wall of his dad’s cluttered office. It read: 10:30. Too early to call Herold, Mac thought as he looked up at it.

‘Wonder why Quinn likes that game. I mean it sounds good and all but from what I heard it’s supposed to be a total waste.’ He thought to himself as he started to yawn and saw that he should cook breakfast, he forgot. He glanced at the clock; it was almost 9:30. I should call Herold, bet he’s the only friend I feel like hanging out today. He thought. He would be sure to do that after he was done with his breakfast and finished with watching the soap opera, Romantic, Madness, and Complex Lies where the show would have its grand season finale soon.



A few hours passed by as the phone in Mac’s house rang. “Hello?” Mac said into the phone, assuming that it was Cliff calling from camp or his parents who were checking up on him from work. “Pac-Mac, what’s happening?” An excited voice rang in his ear. “Oh urm, not much.” Mac said, recognizing the person. It was one of his friends, Herold Harperlis. One of his friends but of course nobody knew how Mac and Herold became good friends since they seem complete opposites. Whereas Herold was more into video games unlike Mac who gave it up when he was just eight. Herold also didn’t care to go to the coolest parties in town whereas Mac would and Herold was a dud at every sport except for Football and Track whereas Mac was good at kicking a Soccer ball to shooting a Basketball into the hoops. Not to mention, Mac seemed more serious and easygoing whereas Herold was more of the goofy, outgoing person. The only common ground they had at the time was attending the same schools together. They were also picked on by the same bully named Albert Grunningtone who was in the same grade as them. He was taller, sarcastic, rude, and scary all at once. They became friends after they both made sure that Albert and his friends butt were kicked, thanks to their other friends and the authority. Although they still didn’t seem quite as close, it had led them to being better friends. “So are you free today?” Mac wanted to know, hoping his friend was. “Yeah, I’m up for anything.” Herold said. “So would you mind coming over? I want to try out some video game.” He wanted to know. “Sure, I’m up for anything.” Herold said. “Just wondering if you've played this game Kingdom Hearts before?” Mac wanted to know. “Kingdom Hearts? Pfft! Who hasn’t?” There was silence on Mac’s end of the line as if Herold just told him he’d rob a bank in the latest Joker costume. “Oh right, my bad.” Herold apologized realizing what he just said.
"It’s a pretty sweet game, why?”
“I was thinking about playing it but I heard it was kiddish and lame.” This time, it was time for Herold’s side to go all mute. It took a few minutes until, “It’s not that kiddish, there are moments where a game can get serious and it’s far from lame.” Mac could tell how serious he was. Unlike most of his other friends, Herold knew what was serious and what not. For once, he was glad that his other friends were on vacation. They probably would just laugh at both him and Herold if they knew he was playing a game that wasn’t something cool like Halo and that it was just somebody else who can him a more insight advice on video games instead of just his brother.

“So are you still willing to come over,” Mac looked up at the clock that said 9 am. But he wasn’t ready yet.

“About 1 p.m., which is 5 hours from now?” He had some stuff to do including some chores while his parents were gone to work as well as eating his own lunch.

“Oh yeah, definitely, see you then.” And with that Mac agreed and the two both hung up.

3 Hours Later….


“Why isn’t it Pac-Mac! What’s happening, dude?” Herold greeted him, and Mac moving aside, let Herold in and ignoring the high five.

“Not much. I was going to try to play Kingdom Hearts…” he trailed off.

“Who recommended you the game?” Herold’s eyes widened as if somebody else just told him that Mac was a real live alien.

“Quinn.” Mac replied, without enthusiasm, that Herold seen to have.

“Oh yeah, my other buddy. How’s he enjoying the summer camp?”

“He’s doing good; he’s at that summer camp up in Willowfordis.”

“Oh I see, cool.”

“Fine but do you mind if I use your PS2 to at least teach you or get you motivated?”

“Sure, why not?” Mac said, remembering that his brothers always told him if he was ever interested in playing any of the video games, he could use any of the game system and the games, just as long as he didn’t break any of it. Herold nodded at this. “So where is it?” He wanted to know. Mac forgot that Herold didn’t know where the systems were since they used to put in the living room but switched everything and were now in the family room. “It’s downstairs in the family room.” He said remembering. “Okay, then, lead the way.”


The two boys then head downstairs to what looked like a pitch black room but with a hit of switch, the light flooded on what looked like to be a medium-sized room where there was a white couch standing in front of it. The walls were painted green and there was a big flat-screen TV that stretched out. Aside from those were glass cases that hung on the walls nearby where there were tall glass shelves that were attached. In each shelf, it held something. The first shelf held the portable games from Gameboy Advance Color to Nintendo DS on the top shelf. On the lower shelf were the bigger game systems from the original Nintendo 64 to the latest PS3. The games were on the side cases nearby those shelves, arranged neatly and also labeled. Mac scanned for the ones labeled PS2 and saw it was on the bottom. He opened it and saw there were Final Fantasy VII games, Final Fantasy VIII, and the entire collection of the Final Fantasy series that was ever released on the PS2, Grand Theft Auto, and then finally found two Kingdom Hearts boxes. “Try Kingdom Hearts. Just Kingdom Hearts, that’s the first game of the series.” Herold suggested as Mac took out the game box. Mac then popped open the game box and got out the disc. After a few minutes of setting up of the Playstation 2 and turning the television screen to the right channel.

Herold pressed the button open and put the Kingdom Hearts disc in and closed it. The two boys then relaxed. Herold sitting on a red and white couch that didn’t match the room while Mac sat on the black leather yet comfy sofa. The screen was pitch black, then slowly it faded to white and soon the opening credits appeared. Mac could feel some kind of bizarre curiosity and ecstatic feeling as an image of Sora, looking out what looked like to be the ocean came onto the screen. Once it did, the classical melody of ‘Dearly Beloved’ filled the room; Herold instructed Mac what to do as they started the game. As they waited for the introduction to come up on screen, Herold turn to Mac. “Remember if you need any help or clarifications. I’ll be here.” All Mac could do was nod, wondering if it’s anything like. It was worth the shot right?

[KershaFangs]

Hmm, fair story line, but a bit over-used in my tastes for fan fictions. However, you could take any basic over-used clichè topic for a story and just with a bit of throughout thought and create that one thing that makes that story an individual from its hundreds of other clones basic starter topics.

Frankly, spelling, perfect. Thank you for that, but you just need to know some of the more proper capitalization for some nouns and names. Grammar is very good and most mistakes are fairly simple.

However a big thing here is your time progression. It just seems to me that one second he's in his brother's room, then he's playing soccer from nowhere! A big thing to also help is between two different characters conversing is to skip a line inbetween each dialogue line. It'll be easier for the readers to follow.

As far as I can see however, this story could really have that potienal to be amazing. You just need to find that within the writing. I'm so happy to be helping write this and bring that astounding feature in your fan fiction into reality! Send me the second chapter as soon as you are done writing it, alright? K, thanks. ^-^

[Snow Candy]

Ok, don't worry. I'm still developing it but it's coming out SOON! So please be patient!

[axemyxas100]

Yeah, I can't BE patient, lol! Can't wait to see more of Mac's life and the part where you introduce Sora and the Organization and take them to diff. world! So this wait better be worth it, considering you only have three readers. Oh well, I'm not demanding too much, just wish people can try and appreciate your story as they appreciate others. Well Sorafan, nice editting with the chapter. Oh btw, what Disney Worlds are you doing again?

[princess namine]

Great story, though I saw 1 spelling error and the grammer wasn't that great but it's still a good story.

[Snow Candy]

Heh. Yeah, I'm editting that chapter...now...and thanks for the pointing it out....

Chapter 2 is coming soon. It's getting editted.

Disney World, axemyxas are all the worlds in KH games and of course I'm adding my own world and then of course, a Disney World!

ANY SUGGESTIONS people?

[princess namine]

If I come up with one but I'm clueless right now.

[Snow Candy]

OK but I'm no longer putting this story up on this forum any longer.

1. I opened up a fanfic account
2. I rather type it up, get it editted, and get it back (which I haven't got a response from the person who was editting my story, if she/he even remembers...)
3. It's tiring putting up on the forums...if you know what I mean.
4. Oh and I did change names for purposes of my own.

EDIT: OMIT THIS IDEA.

[KershaFangs]

I'm sorry... I've been through a lot lately, which includes major study cramming and midterms and having my computer taken away from me...

But I guess I'm just really a bad beta..;~;

I can finish it in about a hour or so, but only if you'll put up with me...

[Snow Candy]

Okay, that'll I do....but I'm still planning to move it to another location. Sorry guys.

FINAL DESCISION. MAKING MORE CHAPTERS! XD