Continued 358/2 days fan story

aldrain · 07-08-2008, 09:52 AM

The last thing i remembered was a voice saying "you will leave this world sooner than u think. You are not like the others". The I woke up. "Roxas, you passed out like a bird hit with a stone. What happpened" "I dont know I had a terrible pain in my head" "Oh okay so were gonna leave to collect hearts. I heard that Saix found a heartless that has like twenty hearts in its capsoule. Its gonna take a few of us to take it down. What do ya say, you up for it?" "Heck, yeah I am!" We ran out of the white room and headed for the lab. We got to the teleporter to find Saix and Xemnes there. "Are you guys ready for this baby?" Axel shouted from the doorway" "Depends what you mean by ready" Saix answered spitefully. "Hello Roxas" whered that voice come from? Just then a figure materialized from the shadows. "WHAT IS SHE DOING HERE?!" Axel and I blurted at the same time. "She will train with us" I pulled out my keyblades, Axel pulls out his Ringblades, Saix and his Tamahawk, and Xemnes and his 'lightsabers'. "What's your weapon?" I asked "Magic" she said flatly. I was dumbfounded the only one who had used magic was Larixine I thought. "Whatever, lets hunt" To be continued (again)

Well theres one more part and it will be a HUGE shocker (kidding) Enjoy

Anonymous · 07-08-2008, 10:17 AM

Ok, since you're new here, you probably don't know that this should be in the same thread as the other part of this story.
(that's ok though).
So maybe I mod can delete this or merge it or something, who knows.

Anyway, as for the piece itself, I have the exact same comments as last time. Make it far more detailed, and seriously- work on your grammar.
(I'm still interested by the story though) =D

07-08-2008, 09:52 AM	#1
aldrain Keyblade Wielder Join Date: May 2008 Location: Well were ever i am its dark and i can here laughing Age: 13 Posts: 223 Rep Power: 0	Continued 358/2 days fan story The last thing i remembered was a voice saying "you will leave this world sooner than u think. You are not like the others". The I woke up. "Roxas, you passed out like a bird hit with a stone. What happpened" "I dont know I had a terrible pain in my head" "Oh okay so were gonna leave to collect hearts. I heard that Saix found a heartless that has like twenty hearts in its capsoule. Its gonna take a few of us to take it down. What do ya say, you up for it?" "Heck, yeah I am!" We ran out of the white room and headed for the lab. We got to the teleporter to find Saix and Xemnes there. "Are you guys ready for this baby?" Axel shouted from the doorway" "Depends what you mean by ready" Saix answered spitefully. "Hello Roxas" whered that voice come from? Just then a figure materialized from the shadows. "WHAT IS SHE DOING HERE?!" Axel and I blurted at the same time. "She will train with us" I pulled out my keyblades, Axel pulls out his Ringblades, Saix and his Tamahawk, and Xemnes and his 'lightsabers'. "What's your weapon?" I asked "Magic" she said flatly. I was dumbfounded the only one who had used magic was Larixine I thought. "Whatever, lets hunt" To be continued (again) Well theres one more part and it will be a HUGE shocker (kidding) Enjoy

07-08-2008, 10:17 AM	#2
Anonymous The Unknowing Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Amongst others Age: 15 Posts: 1,550 Rep Power: 4	Re: Continued 358/2 days fan story Ok, since you're new here, you probably don't know that this should be in the same thread as the other part of this story. (that's ok though). So maybe I mod can delete this or merge it or something, who knows. Anyway, as for the piece itself, I have the exact same comments as last time. Make it far more detailed, and seriously- work on your grammar. (I'm still interested by the story though) =D

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