Kingdom Hearts: Namine's story (an Interactive Fanfic)

Heartless_Tidus · 05/27/08, 09:53 AM

The Story of Namine

This is a Namine version of 358/2 days. This takes place from the end of Sora's story in Chain of memories to the start of Kingdom Hearts 2. This is the exciting part, every chapter there will be a poll asking what you all think should happen next in the story. Comments and Criticism are happily accepted.

"I can't believe he forgave me, after all I have done to him and his memories"
The Blonde haired girl has sitting in her chair at the topmost floor of the evil castle, Known as Castle Oblivion. She ran her fingers slowly over the glass memory machine, with the slight image of the spiky haired boy that she had made a promise to, she promised that they would be freinds, real friends.

"I saw his memories, his amazing adventures in those worlds." Namine quietly said to herself.
"I just wish I could go out there and see the sights he has seen in person." Namine started silently crying to herself.
"B-But that evil organisation, they m-m-ade me stay in this castle and desroy Sora, Donald and Goofy's memories!" She angrily yelled at the empty white walls.
She tightly clutched her Sketchbook to her chest." My sketchbook, the only thing that makes me happy in this castle of evil" She thought to herself. "But that's silly, I'm a nobody, I can't feel happiness..." A single tear slowly slid out of her eye and landed on a piece of paper on the floor. "Oh, this must have fallen out of my book." she said outloud, trying to lift her mood. The paper had a message written on it, It read:
Despite all the things you've done to us, as a thank you present for helping us defeat Marluxia, I left the gummi ship at the base of Castle Oblivion, -Donald

WerewolfNobody · 05/27/08, 11:48 AM

hmm... interesting idea. I believe I shall vote!

-Arcana-X- · 05/27/08, 04:36 PM

I like how the plot is going, but the story is very choppy. You change very quickly with no time to elaborate on the situation. There are minimal problems on capitalizations and spelling.
But I love how you let readers take control of the story depending on what they vote on.
Please continue!

Heartless_Tidus · 05/28/08, 09:07 AM

Thanks for your comments! I'll add the next chapter when the poll for the next chapter closes.

View Poll Results: Should Namine check out the Gummi ship and see if she can pilot it?
Yes	3	100.00%
No	0	0%
Voters: 3. You may not vote on this poll

05/27/08, 09:53 AM	#1
Heartless_Tidus Keyblade Novice Join Date: May 2008 Age: 13 Posts: 88 Rep Power: 0	Kingdom Hearts: Namine's story (an Interactive Fanfic) The Story of Namine This is a Namine version of 358/2 days. This takes place from the end of Sora's story in Chain of memories to the start of Kingdom Hearts 2. This is the exciting part, every chapter there will be a poll asking what you all think should happen next in the story. Comments and Criticism are happily accepted. "I can't believe he forgave me, after all I have done to him and his memories" The Blonde haired girl has sitting in her chair at the topmost floor of the evil castle, Known as Castle Oblivion. She ran her fingers slowly over the glass memory machine, with the slight image of the spiky haired boy that she had made a promise to, she promised that they would be freinds, real friends. "I saw his memories, his amazing adventures in those worlds." Namine quietly said to herself. "I just wish I could go out there and see the sights he has seen in person." Namine started silently crying to herself. "B-But that evil organisation, they m-m-ade me stay in this castle and desroy Sora, Donald and Goofy's memories!" She angrily yelled at the empty white walls. She tightly clutched her Sketchbook to her chest." My sketchbook, the only thing that makes me happy in this castle of evil" She thought to herself. "But that's silly, I'm a nobody, I can't feel happiness..." A single tear slowly slid out of her eye and landed on a piece of paper on the floor. "Oh, this must have fallen out of my book." she said outloud, trying to lift her mood. The paper had a message written on it, It read: Despite all the things you've done to us, as a thank you present for helping us defeat Marluxia, I left the gummi ship at the base of Castle Oblivion, -Donald

05/27/08, 11:48 AM	#2
WerewolfNobody Organization Member Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: Australians all let us rejoice, for we are young and free... Posts: 432 Rep Power: 2	Re: Kingdom Hearts: Namine's story (an Interactive Fanfic) hmm... interesting idea. I believe I shall vote!

05/27/08, 04:36 PM	#3
-Arcana-X- Twilight Knight Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Croagunk! Do poison sting on the poison sting! Posts: 801 Rep Power: 1	Re: Kingdom Hearts: Namine's story (an Interactive Fanfic) I like how the plot is going, but the story is very choppy. You change very quickly with no time to elaborate on the situation. There are minimal problems on capitalizations and spelling. But I love how you let readers take control of the story depending on what they vote on. Please continue!

05/28/08, 09:07 AM	#4
Heartless_Tidus Keyblade Novice Join Date: May 2008 Age: 13 Posts: 88 Rep Power: 0	Re: Kingdom Hearts: Namine's story (an Interactive Fanfic) Thanks for your comments! I'll add the next chapter when the poll for the next chapter closes.

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