The Exiled

[Mastermind]

AP, how can these "Injustice" be filled with anger and hate? They are Nobodies correct?

[Dawning Twilight]

Originally Posted by black_myth

k guys i did a rewright on my story. its a bit better with the spelling but not the best. i could not find anyone to edit it. the first few chapters is on Lithoen i hope you enjoy. ill be posting these about 2 to one a week.


Lexinoth
-The pawn in a game of revenge.-

Chapter 1:

hmm it's pretty nice B_M

Originally Posted by Angel's Prayer

I knew this day would come... I have finally seen an Orange Cow. But I digress... On the subject of Locations....I do not quite get what you're asking me for xP...
On the subject of Theme songs, I'm gonna find some, I haven't listened to a song with lyrics in ages. 13th reflection's ringing in my ear...
On the subject of Quotes, I'd like to give myromex something wise, and yet violent and dark.
" A sword held by two soldiers cuts both their heads. I should hope not to make that same mistake." <3
On the subject of Nobody Descriptions,
Injustice- A high-ranking Nobody. It is a vessel filled with anger, hate and madness. It moves around quickly, violently hitting anything in its path using the two whips on its head. Their rampage is often unstoppable.
On the subject of Backgrounds, I shall work on those. soon.
On the subject of retardedness, I wants me a "special dad crossing" sign :<

ORANGE COWS? neat quote AP ^^ oh and here's your sign lolz

Originally Posted by Mastermind

AP, how can these "Injustice" be filled with anger and hate? They are Nobodies correct?

exactly what i was going to ask. hmm perhaps these Nobodies are filled with a nature of going on rampages rather than hating and feeling angry?



Also i thought of some new elements if it already belongs to anyone let me know ok. ^^ also if anyone needs me to explain them i will
*Doctor
*Reverse Polarity
*Sacrifice
i took Distance off because Reverse Polarity includes it ^^



*Chapter Update*
i finished Chapter 31 it includes Xaneth's shocking background so i hope everyone looks into that =D
the link is in my sig and below if you need it =D
http://forums.khinsider.com/fan-fict...rm-key-10.html

[Mastermind]

Hey DT, would you mind not quoting those long posts (especially stories)? It's just a wee bit annoying to scroll through the same thing twice. Also, I'm not trying to single you out or anything. I'm not trying to single you out, it's just that I noticed you'vee done it most on this page. So, everyone, please stop qutoing mile-long posts. Try to shorten it to what you're going to address. Sorry, if I'm being too nitpicky.

[Dawning Twilight]

Originally Posted by Mastermind

Hey DT, would you mind not quoting those long posts (especially stories)? It's just a wee bit annoying to scroll through the same thing twice. Also, I'm not trying to single you out or anything. I just noticed that you have a habit of doing it. Sorry, if I'm being too nitpicky.

sorry about that i'll make sure to shorten the post in a second.... ^^;;;

EDIT:
how is that?

also after thinking about the Injustice Nobodies i was thinking that maybe it's kinda like a planted emotion that isn't real. kinda like they're programed. is that what you meant AP?

[Angel's Prayer]

Originally Posted by Mastermind

AP, how can these "Injustice" be filled with anger and hate? They are Nobodies correct?

They are purposely given such emotions, or illusions of which by Darthex, Otherwise, they become normal Dusks, they are a mutation, so to speak....

It was bright orange cuz it got wet in the rain, thus it's normal color of cream darkened to orange.

[Dawning Twilight]

Originally Posted by Angel's Prayer

They are purposely given such emotions, or illusions of which by Darthex, Otherwise, they become normal Dusks, they are a mutation, so to speak....

It was bright orange cuz it got wet in the rain, thus it's normal color of cream darkened to orange.

oh this makes a lot more sense now. so is it kinda like Salix's ability? the one used in recent chapters with the creation of human like Nobodies?

[Angel's Prayer]

I figured of Darthex could plant hatte in the higher form of Nobodies, why not in his minions, too?

[NobodyImportant]

Before anyone thinks about it, I had dibs on wood a while ago. Haven't made the character yet, but dibs on control over wood anyway!

[Dawning Twilight]

Originally Posted by Angel's Prayer

I figured of Darthex could plant hatte in the higher form of Nobodies, why not in his minions, too?

ok so it is similar in a way. they're like elementally related or something xD cool ^^

Originally Posted by NobodyImportant

Before anyone thinks about it, I had dibs on wood a while ago. Haven't made the character yet, but dibs on control over wood anyway!

cool idea i once had an idea for a guy who used toothpicks in battle lol it may sound weird but it would have worked if i had thought up Xishn to replace him shortly after. =D

also just to let twilightabyss, NobodyImportant, MasterMind, DrBanxon and knightflare know their characters will be returning in the final chapter of Salix I it will explain what happened to them after they entered the castle. so anyone of the five who wants me to PM them a copy before i post it eventually on the thread let me know ok cause we're approaching the end very quickly only about 6 or 7 more chapters. ^^

[Angel's Prayer]

Wood? So it's different from flowers?

Oh, and on Chapter 31, great job DT! A little gruesome for my taste, but I can really get the feeling of panic and fear when I read it. Also lot's of blood on the 1st paragraph. 5 of them I believe ^^

[Dawning Twilight]

Originally Posted by Angel's Prayer

Wood? So it's different from flowers?

Oh, and on Chapter 31, great job DT! A little gruesome for my taste, but I can really get the feeling of panic and fear when I read it. Also lot's of blood on the 1st paragraph. 5 of them I believe ^^

yep wood think trees rather than flowers in a meadow NI has a very cool idea =D yay thanks AP. yeah blood was needed to describe the pain and suffering Sora is sent through with his fight against Salix and others sorry if it was a bit overboard. actually truth be told i've already written the ending of Salix I and i have a feeling the ending is going to shock everyone a lot with a surprising death and another reappearance of Xatsuin, Zaverxi, Rextanse, Zixan and DrBanxon in the concluding chapter. ^^ i can't wait to show it to everyone and let them read it. =D 36 chapters and 132 pages.

EDIT:
God i hate editing the chapters though ><;;;

[Ojike]

The themes don't HAVE to have lyrics, AP. You can learn alot about a person by what music they listen to. That's not discluding instrumentals. Those probably work better, actually.

And I think location refers to their place of origin.

[Dawning Twilight]

^ah so the music can be non-vocal and purely instrumental? and yes location is where they lived before becoming a nobody that's what i did at least ^^

[NobodyImportant]

Originally Posted by Angel's Prayer

Wood? So it's different from flowers?

Oh, and on Chapter 31, great job DT! A little gruesome for my taste, but I can really get the feeling of panic and fear when I read it. Also lot's of blood on the 1st paragraph. 5 of them I believe ^^

Killer trees FTW. ^^

Yeah...wood is like...trees, furniture, toothpicks (lol) Houses, boats....anything made of wood can be used to pwn someone.

*imagines the character siccing a pirate ship on someone, lol*

[Dawning Twilight]

Originally Posted by NobodyImportant

Killer trees FTW. ^^

Yeah...wood is like...trees, furniture, toothpicks (lol) Houses, boats....anything made of wood can be used to pwn someone.

*imagines the character siccing a pirate ship on someone, lol*

wood can be deadly it could give other character's splinters. splinters hurt a lot lolz

NI i have something about the story that involves your character Zaverxi cause he's always pissed off xD but yeah i'll PM you and you let me know if it's cool ok ^^