The Exiled

[The Lionheart]

okay guys. turning the first chapter into script seemed to be a little harder and more time consuming then i thought it would be. However, I do have one question on a part in the story.

Exiled: Chapter 1
Pulling a "als;kdfa", Xowlin turned his head in frustration toward Rextanse and summoned his staff, He looked Rextanse in the eyes and shouted, "Look, nobody is perfect Rex, ok?"
Rextanse seeing Xowlins, summoned his Great Blade, “Armageddon”. "We got this you guys. Let's finish it."

First, what the hell is an als;kdfa?

second, is it supposed to be, Rextanse seeing Xowlin or Rextanse seeing Xowlin's expression?

and I feel like there should be a comma between Rextanse and seeing.

but that's just me.

[Mastermind]

Originally Posted by Axel Owns

First, what the hell is an als;kdfa?

No clue...

second, is it supposed to be, Rextanse seeing Xowlin or Rextanse seeing Xowlin's expression?

and I feel like there should be a comma between Rextanse and seeing.

but that's just me.

I think there should be a comma between Rex and seeing. I don't know about the first part.

[╬ProperArtist╬]

Originally Posted by Axel Owns

second, is it supposed to be, Rextanse seeing Xowlin or Rextanse seeing Xowlin's expression?

"Rextanse, seeing Xowlin's summoned blade"
^
This is how it's supposed to be done.

Originally Posted by Axel Owns

First, what the hell is an als;kdfa?

My guess is it means pulls a WTF moment. Basically it comes out of nowhere the whole situation of Xowlin engaging Rextanse is unexpected.

[NobodyImportant]

It's a leetspeek expression. Basically bashing your head/hand on the keyboard in a 'wtf' statement.


Also, Lorixssa looks SEXY. Especially with that backdrop of hair. When her hair is unbraided it's almost twice as long.

Y'know, that's an interesting thought. Her weapon is bladed hair ties, so what would happen if she could summon one for every hair on her head? That would be an awesome final attack. She leaps into the air, her hair unbraiding and spreading around her in every direction, and each one terminates in a bladed hair clip. Then she somersaults and does a Sonic the Hedgehog kind of attack on people, lol.


Well actually, for every single hair would be impractical. But each pigtail could be like...20 different minibraids braided together, and each of them could have their own hair clip. Medusa attack!

[Knightflare]

Originally Posted by NobodyImportant

It's a leetspeek expression. Basically bashing your head/hand on the keyboard in a 'wtf' statement.


Also, Lorixssa looks SEXY. Especially with that backdrop of hair. When her hair is unbraided it's almost twice as long.

Y'know, that's an interesting thought. Her weapon is bladed hair ties, so what would happen if she could summon one for every hair on her head? That would be an awesome final attack. She leaps into the air, her hair unbraiding and spreading around her in every direction, and each one terminates in a bladed hair clip. Then she somersaults and does a Sonic the Hedgehog kind of attack on people, lol.


Well actually, for every single hair would be impractical. But each pigtail could be like...20 different minibraids braided together, and each of them could have their own hair clip. Medusa attack!

She'd have the sun in the background! : D
Too bad she can't do something like that in the spin-off :[.

In the main story, definitely, but not the spin-off. Haha

Kinda reminds me of the Concurrences after a Quickening on Final Fantasy XII.

[Ojike]

Originally Posted by Axel Owns

second, is it supposed to be, Rextanse seeing Xowlin or Rextanse seeing Xowlin's expression?

It's "Rextanse, seeing Xowlin,". In that original version, Xowlin was Xowlins, because at the time his original name was still Winslo. But Winslo eventually decided to take the s off(I think I might be the only one he told this to >.>), and changed Xowlin's original name to Wolin.

THE MORE YOU KNOW! *rainbow forms behind me*

[Knightflare]

I finally remembered the word "Vigilante" and that's probably the best way for me to describe a member of the Exiled in the spin-off.

Vigilante

–noun
1. a member of a vigilance committee.
2. any person who takes the law into his or her own hands, as by avenging a crime.
–adjective
3. done violently and summarily, without recourse to lawful procedures: vigilante justice.

Basically, the Spin-off Exiled are a group of Vigilantes.

[╬ProperArtist╬]

Why doesn't Lorixxsa just use the Solar Gun in the Spin Off?

I mean it's a nice little reminder of her Exiled counterpart.

YouTube - MGS4: Big Boss Face Camo + Solar Gun = Win

Change it's style up a bit but it could work. Using the sunlights rays in a weapon so in a way she has unlimited ammo.

[Knightflare]

Originally Posted by OogieBoogie

Why doesn't Lorixxsa just use the Solar Gun in the Spin Off?

I mean it's a nice little reminder of her Exiled counterpart.

YouTube - MGS4: Big Boss Face Camo + Solar Gun = Win

Change it's style up a bit but it could work. Using the sunlights rays in a weapon so in a way she has unlimited ammo.

Well, I guess we could use something like that.
I'd rather use a larger solar gun though, to fit her more military like style. : P
Still, a solar gun is a solar gun, right?

Thing is, I got to find a way to work it out because I'm pretty sure that a lot of the story is taken place at night. : P

It'll work out though.
I'm the god damn Knightflare.

[NobodyImportant]

Originally Posted by OogieBoogie

Why doesn't Lorixxsa just use the Solar Gun in the Spin Off?

I mean it's a nice little reminder of her Exiled counterpart.

YouTube - MGS4: Big Boss Face Camo + Solar Gun = Win

Change it's style up a bit but it could work. Using the sunlights rays in a weapon so in a way she has unlimited ammo.

How about we go one step farther and have her running around with a giant magnifying glass that can shoot lasers as soon as she tilts it properly? Lol.

[Knightflare]

Originally Posted by NobodyImportant

How about we go one step farther and have her running around with a giant magnifying glass that can shoot lasers as soon as she tilts it properly? Lol.

How about her hair things have magnifying glasses in it?

[NobodyImportant]

Originally Posted by Knightflare

How about her hair things have magnifying glasses in it?

Well the centers of them could be magnifying glasses, sure! And then have the yellow metal petals around them. Yep!

[Knightflare]

Originally Posted by NobodyImportant

Well the centers of them could be magnifying glasses, sure! And then have the yellow metal petals around them. Yep!

I GUESS WE SOLVED THAT, didn't we?

Whew.
I'm all out of shape today. Haha. Came back from my girlfriend's birthday and I'm probably going to see if I can get a little energy to make a picture or two. :]
I'll see what I can do right now.

(I'm actually about thinking about getting a pirated Word Processor. I REALLY don't want to, but I don't have the money to buy one.
I'll think about it, tonight.)

[pokepotterkhkids]

Originally Posted by Knightflare

I finally remembered the word "Vigilante" and that's probably the best way for me to describe a member of the Exiled in the spin-off.

Vigilante

–noun
1. a member of a vigilance committee.
2. any person who takes the law into his or her own hands, as by avenging a crime.
–adjective
3. done violently and summarily, without recourse to lawful procedures: vigilante justice.

Basically, the Spin-off Exiled are a group of Vigilantes.

I'm suprised. I just finished watching The Messengers (8:20 am) and you auctually got me to have a TMNT flashback. I'm working on LEXLYK's stuff atm. SHould be done soon. My trip 2 reno got canceled. I was lke "DAMN! NOw I can't take a picture of me cosplaying as Reno by the 'Welcome to Reno' sign!"Anyways,the trip was supposed 2 rest me. I hiked 2 miles before I had the worst Astma attck of mah Lief. And then the next day, me and my Oniisan ran 3 miles pushing a 100 pound cart. While I was waiting for the 5 hours, I sat down on a rock and wrote about Lexlyk, and made fun of Xodyc's wrting, I kept on noticing grammatical and spelling errors.

Does ny1 think it's safe 4 me 2 talk to OB about exilde stuffz only?

Was that spam?

[NobodyImportant]

Originally Posted by pokepotterkhkids

Does ny1 think it's safe 4 me 2 talk to OB about exilde stuffz only?

That makes me want to cut you.


So anyway, KF, I was thinking about Lorixssa's hair things today again, and there seems to be a problem with how they look. What part of it clips onto her hair if the middle is a magnifying glass?