The Exiled - Page 157

rpgangel · 06/14/08, 03:19 AM

i'll be writing bits and pieces, probably conversations that take place between events, but im not too good at writing fights ^^;; but yes, ill be using the original as a base...right now im looking over all the characters and trying to portray them correctly. no use writing if i accidently make someone who's lazy become hyperactive... xD

Ojike · 06/14/08, 01:21 PM

NobodyImportant · 06/14/08, 03:26 PM

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Originally Posted by Ojike

Lol, Zaverxi looks so emo....awesome job!

Mastermind · 06/14/08, 04:20 PM

I like Xenge's bust the most.

NobodyImportant · 06/15/08, 01:10 AM

In something completely unrelated to the channel, I finally finished making my Bleach AMV! Woohoo!

Oh yes, something on-topic.

I'm trying to figure out what Zaverxi would wear when he's not wearing the organization robe and coming up a blank. Yeah, I figured he'd still wear black, but...that's not really descriptive. Guess it's time to go window shopping online. XD

yoyoj06 · 06/15/08, 03:39 AM

wow ojike those are really good, i like delacroix and the mustache

no ruxel!?!?! lol, good job again, they all look really cool

Ojike · 06/15/08, 05:38 AM

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Originally Posted by yoyoj06

wow ojike those are really good, i like delacroix and the mustache

no ruxel!?!?! lol, good job again, they all look really cool

He's on his way. I was gonna draw him today, but there wasn't much time left, so I drew Xodyc instead because his hair is quick and simple. >.>

Angel's Prayer · 06/15/08, 02:40 PM

Those look awesome Ojike. I too like the Delacroix Bust in particular. I just find the shading really neat. Hatching's been a fave technique for me lately.

The Lionheart · 06/15/08, 07:11 PM

woah. damn i've missed alot.

sorry guys i was gone at camp for a week, i just got back like 20 minutes ago. and of course, being the nerd that i am, i checked teh forums.

but anyways, i love both the fights. great writing ojike & OB

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nice picture AP, i love the new style. glad you found yourself a new scanner =)

Ojike; i like charxai's picture, and the rest of them too. lol at zaverxi's face. idk why, it just made me laugh.

i apoligize guys, i havent worked on turning the story into script AT ALL. dam summer school has been keeping me pretty busy. i dont think i'll get as much exiled stuff done as i hoped. i would be, but i have athletics in the morning (summer workouts suck) and then i have school. so yeah, thats watsup with me.

i think i'm gonna mess around with the site a little, i'm gonna take off the photo albums link and just link directly to the DA page. and i think i'll add AP's new daxic picture and ojike's busts.

be talkin to you guys soon

edit: just saw the zax bust, very nice ojike =)

Ojike · 06/16/08, 01:55 AM

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Originally Posted by Angel's Prayer

Hatching's been a fave technique for me lately.

I know right? It's so fun. D: It's my favorite thing about the Bleach manga.

AO- If you're uploading my busts to DA, I'd rather you put it in the scraps. And I don't think AP wants that Daxic on DA at all. >.>

The Lionheart · 06/16/08, 02:58 AM

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Originally Posted by Ojike

I know right? It's so fun. D: It's my favorite thing about the Bleach manga.

AO- If you're uploading my busts to DA, I'd rather you put it in the scraps. And I don't think AP wants that Daxic on DA at all. >.>

lol at misunderstanding.

i was taking about on my site xD i haven't really done anything on the website in ages, i figured i should change a few things around.

edit: I've noticed that the wallpaper for the site is kinda... well... unoriginal. I know NI made a pretty sweet one for yoyo, but i figure that mine should be different.

so i was wondering if anyone could make me an exiled wallpaper. anthing would be fine, i'm not asking for excellence, just originality. thank you guys alot

pokepotterkhkids · 06/17/08, 06:16 PM

You Must read, young padawan. Guide you, the force shall, if learn of the exiled, is your wish.

The Lionheart · 06/17/08, 06:21 PM

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Originally Posted by Mastermind

Yeah, they shut down the last thread because it was full of too much awesomeness. So, I guess we just continue from here.

Here's the current list of ranks:

1 ZAXELDION (???)
2 REXTANSE (TERANES)
3 XOWLIN (WOLIN)
4 XANA (ANA)
5 ZIXAN (ZAIN)
6 XODYC (CODY)
7 JYNX (***)
8 DrBANXON (BRANDON)
9 RUXEL (RULE)
10 SALIX (SAIL)
11 KAARIX (***)
12 CHARXAI (RICHAR)
13 ZAVERXI (ZAVIER)
14 DAXIC (CIDA)
15 SABIXEL (BLAISE)
16 LEXINOTH (LITHOEN)
17 JIXAH (JIHA)
18 OJEX (JOE)
19 ZHYMARX (YZMAHR)
20 DELACROIX (CLADEROI)
21 XISHN (SHIN)
22 SKYX (SKY)
23 XENGE (GENE)
24 LONEX (LEON)
25 XATSUIN (AUSTIN)
26 XALATINE (TALANIE)
27 AXIT (TAI)
28 XENRA (ANRE)
29 LENXUZOB (ZEBULON)
30 CAXBOJ (JACOB)
31 MYROMEX (X)

(I also cut out Rogexeg, and moved Lenxuzob and Myromex down in rank. Lenxuzob, since I figured Brandon wouldn't mind and him being there would make it an even 30. Myromex, because I just thought it fitting that the most mysterious and unknown member join last.)

that's the ranks of all of the characters in the Exiled Order. These are basically teh characters of our story.

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Originally Posted by Mastermind

Story Outline

PART/STORY/CHAPTER ONE Beginnings.

-Organization XIII is resurrected by an unknown being (Trinity), except for the traitors from Chain of Memories and KH2(Marluxia, Larxene, Axel, and Roxas).

-The empty spaces are filled with Rextanse, Xana, Daxic, Zaxeldion, and Xowlin.

-Over a severe difference in opinion, Rextanse and Zaxeldion decide to defect from Org. XIII. Xowlin and Xana follow with them.

- Daxic and Xigbar, who discovered this information, rat them out to Xemnas. Xemnas (along with Xigbar, Zexion, and Saix) confonts and assaults the four. Daxic's there too, but not to fight.

- During the battle, Zaxeldion attempts to fend them off alone, while the others escape. He gets poisoned by Zexion, just before Xana manages to tap into her powers and get everyone out of there. This is where Daxic's obsession with Xana's powers is born.

-Daxic is sent, as a mole for Xemnas, to join them.

-The recruiting of the first 9 of the Exiled takes place(this makes 14 if you include the original 5). This part should be a time lapse, that gives an overview of the other members.

-Daxic informs to Xemnas that the Exiled have grown too large, and need to be cut down (though he's telling them FAR too late, on purpose. He hopes the Exiled will end Org. 13 without him having to lift a finger). Organization XIII, along with an extremely powerful heartless, attacks the Exiled Order.

-The Exiled eventually end Organization XIII, and we reveal to the reader Daxic's plan to break down the Exiled in a similar fashion(none of the other members know he was a mole, but some just don't trust him anyway).

- Through a series of events that took place during the battle, Rextanse and a battered Jynx, enter "The Void" to attempt to bring Jynx back to the conscious world.

- A keyblader scout(Ricti), who has been spying on Org. 13 since their resurrection, returns to his base to report the past events the other Keybladers.

During the time Ricti is away, the Exiled recruit members 14-21, and Rextanse returns with Jynx from “The Void”.

-Assuming that the Exiled are attempting to use Kingdom Hearts, like Org. 13 did, the keybladers attack members of the Exiled Order separately (learning from Org. 13's mistake: not fighting as a whole group). While the members are off on a specific assignment (perhaps the recruiting?), the keybladers attack while they're scattered about.

-Each keyblader looses, save Liri. Though she won her match, she spares her adversaries because of her crush on Rextanse. Ricti, Jixah's brother, is killed by Daxic without Jixah knowing.

PART/STORY/CHAPTER TWO Weakness.

-The Mystic Order is introduced. A brief description of their past as a group is given. (The option of individual human pasts will be there, just before each Mystic Order member is defeated, though it take up too much time/prove unnecessary.)

-The Exiled continue to recruit members, adding members 22-30 (Or should this take place AFTER the Mystic Order?)

-The Mystic Order honorably challenge the Exiled to battle, in attempts to see exactly why Trinity shows so much interest in this group of nobodies. Each group of Exiled members is teleported to a separate place in time and space to fight their respective Mystic Order member. This is all just to show their strength. If they wanted, the Mystic Order could crush the Exiled Order without breaking a sweat, if they attacked as a group.

-In a bit of a Dragon Ball Z style (jump from fight to fight in order to make the battles seem longer than they are), each battle takes place. And, again with many casualties on the Exiled's side, the Exiled win and are taken back to the dimension they're used to.

-Do to the massive number of casualties, and the near victories ONLY gained by exploiting small weakness of the Mystic Order, some of Exiled get their wake up call of how weak they really are. Many of the members go off into solitude to train, while others do so as a group. This is when Jynx and Rextanse (Xatsuin sneaks in with them) re-enter "The Void", to learn to hone their powers. Upon which time, they are ambushed by Xemo.

-At this time, the Reverse Order's Exal shows his face and warns all the members of the upcoming "test", before leaving with a cocky laugh. He gives this warning in the form of a group of questions and riddles.

PART/STORY/CHAPTER THREE Conspiracies.

-(The battle with Xemo is carried over, and finished in this chapter)Most of the members are still training, some are done, The Order of Sin give their assault on each individual member. This takes place within their minds.

-While the attack is taking place, the Reverse Order hold a meeting, to discuss their goals and plans (this serves as their introduction). The details on the clone experiments that created them and Jynx are revealed.

-The results of the battles with the Order of Sin vary. Some win, some loose. Those who win become better for it, while those who loose become even more consumed by the sin they lost to. This event causes each of the members to realize that it's time to regroup back at The Castle That Once Was. This does not include Jynx, Rextanse, and Xatsuin, because they’re still struggling through “The Void.”

-They each arrive only to meet the Reverse Order standing at the gates. This battle causes the most tragedies of all, leaving about 8(give or take a few) members alive. During this battle, Jynx and Rextanse return from the void just in time to aid the wounded. After everything was said and done, (everyone beaten, battered, or dead, and the Reverse Order eliminated) the traitors ambush everyone else, and kidnap Xana.

PART/STORY/CHAPTER FOUR Betrayal.(or) Endings.

-Daxic reveals the full extent of his plans. That he plans to combine his and Xana's powers to create a beast of ultimate power. “The Eater of Worlds”, a creature made of acid, with Xana’s newly formed heart as its core. And it would be under HIS control.

-While Daxic begins the creation of his eater of worlds, the last of the knocked out Exiled come to. They realize what happened, and begin searching for Daxic and the other traitors. As they get closer and closer, they begin to loose faith in the idea that Xana's still alive.

-The finally locate Daxic when the creature is completed, and Xana is nearly drained of all of her energy. The final battle takes place, atop the roof of The Castle That Never Was (unless we can come up with a better location).

-At the end of the battle most everyone is dead. Jynx is able to destroy the world eater, and Daxic soon after. He joins the other survivors in a sigh of relief. That is, just to find out that Daxic wasn't dead. He couldn't be killed. He simply reformed from the acid.

-At this moment, Trinity finally reveals herself. With the simple phrase "Sleep, ye restless soul.", Daxic fades into nothingness. She tells the few survivors her role in the story. That she brought Org. 13 back to life, that it was her fault the Mystic Order attacked, and that the Order of Sin were her former disciples (and a gift given to the Reverse Order to do with what they will). She told them that this was all to give Jynx, the one of two nobodies ever to gain a heart, enough strength to seal Kingdom Hearts for good.

-Sacrificing his heart and soul, Jynx seals Trinity within Kingdom Hearts, and removes the lock. This prevents anyone, even a keyblade master, from opening Kingdom Hearts again. It's simply too powerful, and too pure to be tampered with. And Trinity's natural urge to send the world into nothingness is one that cannot be allowed to roam free. Eventually, she will erode from the inside out (being the mistress of naught), leaving Kingdom Hearts devoid of anything but what it was originally meant to have: Light.

-The remaining members band together, yet again, in attempt to recreate the Exiled from the ground up. There are signs, though, that some of the members thought to be dead might still be alive/return.

I'm not really sure where/when we could fit the whole Darthex stuff in there...any suggestions would be nice.

this is the basic story outline.

The Exiled: A Kingdom Hearts Tragedy: That's our story on the forums.

Charxai Chronicles - Exiled Order Database: That's a collection of almost all of our data. That website has around 100 pages total, and was made by yours truly

EXILD-ORDER on deviantART: Our DA page. All (or most) of the pictures relating to the exiled can be found there. Most pictures were drawn by Angel's Prayer, but OogieBoogie, KnightFlare, and Ojike are also some of our artists.

The Exiled Order - Ones Forgotten About: This site was created by yoyoj06, and is the website for our story.

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Originally Posted by jerrypinkus

What is this all about?

I don't get it.

to answer your question, this is basically our story. It's a work in progress, but eventually, we'll get it done

edit: and ppk, could you make your sig a little smaller? it's throwin my screen all outta wack.

edit 2: ojike - WTH happened to your photobucket?!?! none of the links work. i can't go to your main page or the exiled album DX

Ojike · 06/18/08, 05:40 AM

http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e3...xtansebust.jpg
http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e3.../Ruxelbust.jpg
http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e3...d/Skyxbust.jpg
http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e3.../Xodycbust.jpg
http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e3.../Zixanbust.jpg

The next batch. :0 I'm pretty ashamed over Zixan. I don't know why, but it just doesn't satisfy me. I may try again with him later. Also Skyx came out looking like a Daxic jr. Creepy.

And wtf did that person's post get deleted? >.>

AO- Nothing happened to it. I just gave you the tags, instead of the urls. That way you COULDN'T get into my photobucket. >

AND FOR THE LOVE OF GOD AND ALL THAT IS HOLY, PPK, GET A SMALLER SIG.

Mastermind · 06/18/08, 07:26 AM

I absolutely love Ruxel's bust.

06/14/08, 03:19 AM	#2341
rpgangel Xana the Fallen Angel Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Running around the Exiled, keeping things in check once again...nah, I'm with Jynx-kun. ^^ Age: 16 Posts: 1,309 Rep Power: 5	Re: CREATE A MEMBER version 3.0 i'll be writing bits and pieces, probably conversations that take place between events, but im not too good at writing fights ^^;; but yes, ill be using the original as a base...right now im looking over all the characters and trying to portray them correctly. no use writing if i accidently make someone who's lazy become hyperactive... xD

06/14/08, 01:21 PM	#2342
Ojike The Truth Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: In your head. Age: 20 Posts: 1,706 Rep Power: 5	Re: CREATE A MEMBER version 3.0 http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e3...acroixbust.jpg http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e3...harxaibust.jpg http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e3.../Daxicbust.jpg http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e3...d/Jynxbust.jpg http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e3.../Salixbust.jpg http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e3.../Xengebust.jpg http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e3.../Xishnbust.jpg http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e3...averxibust.jpg http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e3...eldionbust.jpg Guess what I've been doing. :0 During my breaks at work, I've just been feeling like drawing Exiled members that I haven't drawn yet. Then I just figured, I may as well do everyone. I may color them later, but no time in the near future.

06/14/08, 04:20 PM	#2344
Mastermind Ad Hominem Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Hidden in the clouds. Posts: 2,013 Rep Power: 8	Re: CREATE A MEMBER version 3.0 I like Xenge's bust the most.

06/15/08, 01:10 AM	#2345
NobodyImportant Keyblade Wielder Join Date: May 2006 Location: Anywhere that's dark, I'm there...lurking, unseen, invisible in the shadows... Age: 22 Posts: 336 Rep Power: 3	Re: CREATE A MEMBER version 3.0 In something completely unrelated to the channel, I finally finished making my Bleach AMV! Woohoo! Oh yes, something on-topic. I'm trying to figure out what Zaverxi would wear when he's not wearing the organization robe and coming up a blank. Yeah, I figured he'd still wear black, but...that's not really descriptive. Guess it's time to go window shopping online. XD

06/15/08, 03:39 AM	#2346
yoyoj06 Ruler of Light Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: Illinois Age: 19 Posts: 587 Rep Power: 4	Re: CREATE A MEMBER version 3.0 wow ojike those are really good, i like delacroix and the mustache no ruxel!?!?! lol, good job again, they all look really cool

06/15/08, 02:40 PM	#2348
Angel's Prayer ...killed instantly... Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: In the Garden of Hopes and Dreams, being mauled by Hummingbirds... Age: 19 Posts: 2,075 Rep Power: 6	Re: CREATE A MEMBER version 3.0 Those look awesome Ojike. I too like the Delacroix Bust in particular. I just find the shading really neat. Hatching's been a fave technique for me lately.

06/15/08, 07:11 PM	#2349
The Lionheart Exiled Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: One hundred miles away, son, ready to strike. Age: 17 Posts: 1,262 Rep Power: 4	Re: CREATE A MEMBER version 3.0 woah. damn i've missed alot. sorry guys i was gone at camp for a week, i just got back like 20 minutes ago. and of course, being the nerd that i am, i checked teh forums. but anyways, i love both the fights. great writing ojike & OB . nice picture AP, i love the new style. glad you found yourself a new scanner =) Ojike; i like charxai's picture, and the rest of them too. lol at zaverxi's face. idk why, it just made me laugh. i apoligize guys, i havent worked on turning the story into script AT ALL. dam summer school has been keeping me pretty busy. i dont think i'll get as much exiled stuff done as i hoped. i would be, but i have athletics in the morning (summer workouts suck) and then i have school. so yeah, thats watsup with me. i think i'm gonna mess around with the site a little, i'm gonna take off the photo albums link and just link directly to the DA page. and i think i'll add AP's new daxic picture and ojike's busts. be talkin to you guys soon edit: just saw the zax bust, very nice ojike =) Last edited by The Lionheart; 06/15/08 at 07:52 PM.

06/17/08, 06:16 PM	#2352
pokepotterkhkids Member Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: Zexion's Mystery Box, with the hottness called Mail 'Matt' Jeevas Posts: 161 Rep Power: 2	Re: CREATE A MEMBER version 3.0 You Must read, young padawan. Guide you, the force shall, if learn of the exiled, is your wish.

06/18/08, 05:40 AM	#2354
Ojike The Truth Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: In your head. Age: 20 Posts: 1,706 Rep Power: 5	Re: CREATE A MEMBER version 3.0 http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e3...xtansebust.jpg http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e3.../Ruxelbust.jpg http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e3...d/Skyxbust.jpg http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e3.../Xodycbust.jpg http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e3.../Zixanbust.jpg The next batch. :0 I'm pretty ashamed over Zixan. I don't know why, but it just doesn't satisfy me. I may try again with him later. Also Skyx came out looking like a Daxic jr. Creepy. And wtf did that person's post get deleted? >.> AO- Nothing happened to it. I just gave you the tags, instead of the urls. That way you COULDN'T get into my photobucket. > AND FOR THE LOVE OF GOD AND ALL THAT IS HOLY, PPK, GET A SMALLER SIG.

06/18/08, 07:26 AM	#2355
Mastermind Ad Hominem Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Hidden in the clouds. Posts: 2,013 Rep Power: 8	Re: CREATE A MEMBER version 3.0 I absolutely love Ruxel's bust.

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