The Exiled

[╬ProperArtist╬]

Originally Posted by pokepotterkhkids

That proves Girls are more likely to do what they want to and boys are more likely to give up, no offence.

Actually it's just like Ojike said. We don't give up we just have to work our way out of our situation. Most of the girls from our school pretty much have gives that let them do whatever they want. Which would mean they are given money instead of really having to work for it. When for the guys we have our own jobs and pay for everything else (car notes, rent, groceries, gas money, travel, and everything else) Hell I spent close to 900 dollars of my own saved money on a trip to New York. But meh

Just goes to show you that guys don't give up where as the girls haven't. Then again most of them aren't camera shy so they've become models....

[pokepotterkhkids]

Originally Posted by Sir Schmoopy

Becoming a Death Note fanatic? I AM a Death Note fanatic.
I wanted to give Critvox a Death Note, lol.

lawl

Well, that's good to know.

Originally Posted by NobodyImportant

Lol, that reminds me. At the anime convention I went to a few weeks ago I saw a Zexion with a Deathnote.


It totally made me lol, considering Zexion's weapon is a book. What book is more dangerous, hmm?

Also, on a related but bizarre note, I also saw a girl dressed up as a pikachu with a Deathnote. Scary.

Scary is right...

Lawl. Probably the Death Note

Originally Posted by OogieBoogie

Actually it's just like Ojike said. We don't give up we just have to work our way out of our situation. Most of the girls from our school pretty much have gives that let them do whatever they want. Which would mean they are given money instead of really having to work for it. When for the guys we have our own jobs and pay for everything else (car notes, rent, groceries, gas money, travel, and everything else) Hell I spent close to 900 dollars of my own saved money on a trip to New York. But meh

Just goes to show you that guys don't give up where as the girls haven't. Then again most of them aren't camera shy so they've become models....

Okay. I get it then. Just like Lex and I have to work hard to get the record deal. DX. And we've already worked so hard. I wonder if we can find someone else to get us one, but then again, her uncle had a deal with Gwen Stephani, I think Angela Aki, well, a whole bunch of famous people. I just forgot who...

Edit: I finished writing a song, and i think i have the music for it. If anybody wants to see/know/hear, just say the word.

[Ojike]

Originally Posted by pokepotterkhkids

I bet you wouldn’t be saying that if I got all famous and was seen everywhere you looked…

No, I'd say that to anyone in the Exiled. The Exiled is something for fun. A career is far more important, and can actually make you money. :0

That proves Girls are more likely to do what they want to and boys are more likely to give up, no offence.

How's that not offencive? It's borderline saying "girls are better than boys". =l

Oh, and has anyone ever played hand and foot? It's really been inspiring, at least to me. It's really intelectual and stuffs, you should try it. It's the kinda game i could see the Exiled playing. it's all about strategy.

Strategy, you say? I'm good with strategy. =D

Originally Posted by NobodyImportant

Also, on a related but bizarre note, I also saw a girl dressed up as a pikachu with a Deathnote. Scary.

Can Pikachus even write? >.>




Also I came to a final decision for Daxic's ultimate goal. It basically revolves around AP's old design for Daxic's possible final form. Daxic.:SnakeForm:. by *EXILD-ORDER on deviantART I decided that the creature that's formed around Daxic is a parasite from his home planet. It would normally form around a smaller creature and constantly consume it's blood as nurishment, while also taking control of its body. But through scientific genetic alterions, via Salix, it has been made to feed on acid. And in return, gives the host control of its body. Well it's more like Daxic is control it from the inside with the acid...but still. Salix also took out the creature's heart, using his element, and set it in a dormant heartless state until a new heart fills the empty space in its chest. This is where Xana's heart comes in. With Xana's heart at the center of the beast, it's been given a tad bit of her abilities. Specifically: the ability to turn back time. But only by a little bit. Enough to saaaaay....reverse a fatal wound? It also has the ability to spit acid. :0 The only draw back is that Daxic's acid usage is cut back some, so he can keep feeding the beast. But I think it's a worthwhile price to pay. :3

[rpgangel]

of course pikachus can write! i mean, jigglypuffs can...well, if you count that as writing...>.>

yay i win for Ojike's idea contest (though it wasnt a contest xD )

i keep drawing random characters, taking a good look at the person, then say 'wtf was i thinking?!', crumpling up the paper to a ball, then throwing it in the garbage. i did that all throughout spanish and not once did my teacher say anything...until i threw my skecthbook in frusteration across the room...>.>

i need to say something exiled related or this'll be spam.
uhhhhhhhhh...

oh yeah, no one answered my question. T~T oh well, ill just make an assumption and start writing bits of the storyline myself, then show it to people and see what they say. the bits will be no longer than a page on Microsoft word though ^^;

[Ojike]

^ What is it you're writing? I think I missed the question. >.>

ALSO

DAXIC VS XIGBAR also Zexion, THE COMPLETE CHAPTER

“So...” Daxic taunted as he entered the encased room via one door of darkness. “You managed to beat the little girl after all, Zexion. I’m impressed.” “Don’t patronize me, Daxic.” replied the shorter nobody. He sat quietly in his little white chair, in the small white room, reading his little black book. Xana lied only 3 feet away from Zexion, unconscious. Daxic stood behind Zexion, a smile on his face. “Tell me, Zexion. Why did you kidnap Xana, rather than just killing her?” “Because,” Zexion snarled as he shut his book out of frustration, “Xemnas requested it. You know this already, so what’s your point in asking?” Daxic began to pace left and right, making sure to stay behind Zexion. “My point will become clear soon. Have you ever stopped to ask yourself why you had to kidnap this girl?” “Only a fool would preform such an action without question. She’s obviously bait.” Daxic stopped. “Correct. And the baited happens to be a nobody named Jynx. He’s unlike any other nobody, and he doesn’t even know it. If he were to side with Xemnas, there would be no power to stand against him.” Zexion turned to face Daxic, puzzled. “What are you suggesting, Daxic? That the two of us join forces against Xemnas? Marluxia asked the same thing of me before, in vain.” Daxic began inching towards Zexion, the smile ever present. “No, Zexion. I’m not asking for your aid. I’m asking for your silence.” Zexion attempted to stand, and summon his book, but Daxic had his weapon summoned before Zexion’s knees could lock. A quick slice across the throat, and the battle had already come to an end. Zexion’s arms fell and dangled, as he fell to his knees. He looked at Daxic in a daze before falling forward, dead. “I apologize, Zexion, I really do.”, Daxic muttered as he stared at the corpse. “But I can’t let any of you survive. Why else would I have waited so long to call on you?” His eyes wandered to the knocked out Xana, who lay but a few feet from Zexion. She started to come to, and Daxic backed into another portal of darkness. She looked up just as the portal began to close, and caught a glimpse of his eyes. Daxic was not smiling at this point, because Xana was not supposed to know he was there. Regardless, she passed out shortly after, likely passing the whole scene off as a dream.

A few miles away from the battle between Xemnas and Jynx, Daxic exited from his door to darkness atop a skyscraper. “Only one left.” he said to himself, amused. “So don’t prolong the inevitable, Xigbar.” The one eyed nobody floated down, landing a few feet behind Daxic. He chuckled to himself, scratching his cheek. “You knew I was listening?”, he asked with a smile. Daxic turned, an all knowing look on his face, and responded “I made a note a long time ago to always assume you were listening.” “Ha! You ARE a clever little SNEAK. Just what do you plan to GAIN from this? What’s the POINT?” Daxic smirked, and began to slowly walk backward. “It’s simple, really.”, he explained. “We just aren’t meant to have hearts. What do you think would happen if we gained hearts? We lost our hearts long ago. If we WERE to gain hearts, they wouldn’t be ours. What kind a consequences would come from taking and using someone else’s heart? Would the original heart’s owner cease to exist? Or would we become the original owner? Would we lose our newfound powers?” “I don’t see how this JUSTIFIES what you’re doing?” Xigbar retorted. “If YOU don’t want a heart, all YOU had to do was say ‘NO’ when we asked you to join.” “You didn’t let me finish. Another thing that may happen when you open Kingdom Hearts...what if all the hearts inside escape? I’ve got about 100 enemy hearts sealed up in there, and I don’t intend to let them free.” “I see.” Xigbar and Daxic both lost their smiles. What had once been a pleasant partnership has come to an end. The two are now enemies, and only one could come out alive.

Daxic had yet to stop moving backward. Just as he’d reached the edge of the building, Xigbar had summoned his two guns and fired them both at the serpentine nobody. Daxic pushed off the edge, jumping off the building. He arched back, Xigbar’s needle like bullets just barely grazing his nose. Down the red headed nobody fell, his body limp. Suddenly, Xigbar had appeared directly above Daxic with the cockiest of smiles. That damned teleporting ability. Floating in the air, he fired a barrage at Daxic, causing Daxic’s black coat to turn red with blood. If this didn’t kill him, the 100+ mile drop would. But when Daxic hit the ground, the sound was not that of organs and bones liquifying like they should, but acid. His body splashed like a water balloon, when it hit the ground, into a bright green acid and began to burn through the ground. Xigbar stared in wonder over the events that just took place, until the crinkling of chains grabbed his attention. He turned around to see the blade of a chained scythe flying towards him. Quickly his eyes followed the chain to his attacker: Daxic, with a sword at the other end of the chain. Was that other Daxic just a clone made from acid? But it looked so real! Regardless, Xigbar teleported a millisecond before the sythe could hit him. He then appeared, upside down, a gun pointed inches from Daxic’s head. As Daxic slowly turned his head in all directions to locate Xigbar, Xigbar shifted along with him. Left...right...up...down. Just as Xigbar fired, Daxic ducked. A chain wrapped around Xigbar’s neck, and yanked him down. During the split second he was falling towards the roof of the building, Xigbar glanced to see another clone still forming from acid. The nobody landed hard on his head. Hard enough, even, to render him temporarily unconscious.

When he came to, two Daxics were leaned over him, one grinning wide and other looking puzzled. Xigbar, not sure if he was hit so hard that he was seeing double, managed to mumble “You never did that before...” The inquisitive Daxic replied “What? Making clones? If I’d shown you all I was capable of, I wouldn’t seem as weak would I? And if I didn’t seem weak, you wouldn’t have hesitated to shoot me while you had the chance, and I would have died. And I don’t too much enjoy dyeing, you see.” The smiling Daxic stumbled back, and liquified into a pool of acid. The pool began to burn through the roof of the building, but not as fast as the other clone, as this clone wasn’t as potent. Daxic then placed the sword end of his chained weapons across the dizzy nobody’s throat, one hand on the handle of the sword and the other ready to press down on the blade. “You are a martyr to your cause, Xiggy. And for that, I will make your second death a quick a painless one.” Daxic gave a strong and swift press down, and Xigbar was no more.

Or so Daxic thought. He was shocked to look down and see nothing below his blade. He stood up and turned around to see the tip of Xigbar’s gun pointed directly at his forehead. Without a second thought, Xigbar fired. This time, the nobody finally hit his mark. Daxic’s head jolted back, and came forward just as hard. “Didn’t you just get on to ME about hesitation, FRIEND?”, Xigbar taunted. Knowing not to trust his eyes, however, he grabbed Daxic’s head by the cheeks and examined the wound. It was bleeding acid. “Shit!”, Xigbar thought to himself. He began looking around for the real Daxic, not knowing that what he shot wasn’t a clone. Daxic swiftly cut off both of Xigbar’s hands, rendering him defenseless. Xigbar, who was currently trying to figure out why Daxic was still alive, didn’t even think to consider teleporting to safety. Daxic stood still, his sword and scythe raised in the air. “Another thing you didn’t know I could do: turn my own body into acid. And it doesn’t have to by my whole body, either. It could be just my skin...but stomach...my brain...even the blood that fills my veins.” With that, Daxic quickly cut across with his sword, this time succeeding in removing Xigbar’s head. His body folds over, on top of the head, as he de-fragments into a white and black flame and fades from existence. Daxic de-summoned his weapon, and rubbed the wound on his head. After a bit of scrubbing the wound was gone, and Daxic could once again enjoy the show that Xemnas and Jynx were performing in.

(Daxic talks too much -.-)

[rpgangel]

Originally Posted by Ojike

^ What is it you're writing? I think I missed the question. >.>


(Daxic talks too much -.-)

the Exiled story...you know, the reason you wrote that fight? i asked if the original (if thats what we're calling it) was ditched.

and dont worry, all bad guys talk too much...

[Mastermind]

That was an awesome fight Ojike.

[╬ProperArtist╬]

Ojike that battle was absolutely amazing. I absolutely LOVE how you got Xigbar's personality down to a science. The foreshadowing in the moments before the battle is also enjoyable.
Daxic doesn't talk to much, he essentially just gives the right amount of info needed in every situation. His manor of speaking lures you into a false sense of security whilst his actions tend to make you rethink your past judgments about him. He's devious, spineless, smart, and opportunistic like a SNAKE. So yeah the talking thing is just find like it is.
I do believe this battle has inspired me to finish the Jynx vs Xemnas fight which I will probably do tonight considering I'm on my mac I'll just have to type it up as I think it and I can't sleep :/

DIT:

Jynx vs Xemnas Part II



"I feel..cold."
It was dark inside, nothing and nobody near for miles as Jynx lay flat on the pavement.
"I..I can't move"
He uttered as he began opening his eyes trying to use his arms to left himself up in vain.
He began to drift off again as he heard a familiar voice.
"Hehehehe...You have abandoned your purpose..."
The voice echoed
"XEMNAS!"
Jynx began to shout
"You Did This! You Put Me Here!"
He gritted his teeth trying to move himself.
"The first time was a warning, next time I won't be so generous.."
The voice laughed
"If I ever get another chance I swear..."
Xemnas interrupted
"What? Kill me?"
He laughed at the thought
"You are nothing more than a simple tool Jynx."
"The sooner you realize that the easier your life will be."
"A failed experiment bound to serve out your life in service of Organization XIII.."
Jynx chuckled a little
"I hate to break it to ya..but you but I'm nobody's tool.."
Xemnas smirked
"Oh...well then what of your friend..."
He reached down, smirking, as Jynx's face changed from anger to shock.
Xemnas pulled his hand as he revealed the face of Xana.
" Will you protect your dearly beloved? or just let her fade away into nothingness..."
"My My...choices choices..."
He chuckled a little.
"You better not lay a hand on her Xemnas or I'll.."
He was cut short yet again
"Or what? You'll Kill me? Like i haven't heard THAT before"
"Soon you will realize your purpose. Why allow these foolish emotions control your life..."
"Anger and Hate are supreme..."
Jynx interrupted
"I maybe ruled by my emotion but at least I have a heart!"
"Not destroying countless beings and worlds to obtain one."
"I will never join you..."
Xemnas retorted
"So It's you then.."
"You have come this far and still you understand nothing..."
"You will come over to my side. Even if i have to destroy ever last thing you care about..."
"Yes..It will all be over soon enough whether you want it or not"
"..Follow the cool chill down your spin...."
Jynx regained control of himself, as Xemnas' voice dissipated into the atmosphere.
He opened his eyes struggling to his feet slowly stumbling back against a tower nearby.
He turned slowly looking around frantically as he laid his eyes upon the skyscraper off in the distance.
"Here!"
A voiced echoed as Xemnas emerged from a corridor to darkness atop this colossal tower.
The atmosphere around them began changing into a dark void.
Towers began to crumbling at the roots and any and everything spiraled freely in the open air.
Jynx questioned
"How in the..."
"Xemnas shouted"
"You see!"
"This is the power of the true darkness. Nothingness itself!"
"Don't fight the truth!"
"What you always have been..."
"I'm afraid I have to decline your offer FRIEND!"
Xemnas smirked
"Then you leave me no choice..."
The atmosphere began breathing heartless upon countless heartless.
They flowed from the surfaces spiraling and contorting their bodies every which way as they escaped.
Xemnas stood looking firm atop the skyscraper looking down at the chaos below.
He glared at Jynx and Jynx back at him.
With a flash Dusk & Dawn appeared in Jynx's hands as he gripped them firm rushing through the hoard of heartless that surrounded him, cutting down dared to attack.
Jynx reached the skyscraper banishing his blades away running up the side.
He reached the top looking up to see Xemnas glaring down at him.
"So it's you then.."
Xemnas uttered once more
Jynx's eyes were caught by Xana's body laughing limp near the edge of the tower.
Jynx whispered
"Xana!.."
Xemnas smirked
"Don't bother. Your voice can no longer reach her where she is..."
"Not to worry...soon you will join be joining her..."
Jynx infuriated
"You will die here today Xemnas!..."
He smirked
"Hmph..Go ahead and try..."
The two readied their blades in anticipation for the Ultimate Showdown.
One Will Triumph and One Will Fall

Part III coming soon

[Xodyc]

good fights
I enjoyed them both

[Angel's Prayer]

Good news...

looks like I managed to find myself a Scanner, so I now present you with my alternate art style for the Exiled...



What I particularly like about this art style is how I move my pen when I draw like this. The curves are all very graceful, and I feel very soothed and content when I draw like this. The feeling is reflected here, and I can't really put a particular word to it, but it feels very old-fashioned.

It saddens me how little I could grasp without Photobucket raping the picture of such detail (teh chains, teh chains!!) But then It's not that perfect. Good Lord Daxic, what long and lady-like legs you have! Be that as it may, I'm still quite happy with the picture overall. I especially like Daxic's cool, calm yet murderous look about him.

Also whoever uploads this to DA before I do gets no moar drawing privileges from me
I should have said this a while back, but it wouldn't hurt giving me a heads-up before posting my work on the joint DA account.

[Ojike]

Thanks guys.

rpg- Go ahead. O: If you're rewriting, also, just be sure to use the original writing as reference material.

OB-

at least I have a heart!"

I didn't think Jynx had a heart yet. >.> Or does he just think he does? Good read, otherwise. :B

AP- Very awesome. O: I like the new style. Kinda a mix between CLAMP and Hiro Mashima. And it wasn't me who uploaded the pictures. D:

[NobodyImportant]

Originally Posted by Angel's Prayer

Good news...

looks like I managed to find myself a Scanner, so I now present you with my alternate art style for the Exiled...



What I particularly like about this art style is how I move my pen when I draw like this. The curves are all very graceful, and I feel very soothed and content when I draw like this. The feeling is reflected here, and I can't really put a particular word to it, but it feels very old-fashioned.

It saddens me how little I could grasp without Photobucket raping the picture of such detail (teh chains, teh chains!!) But then It's not that perfect. Good Lord Daxic, what long and lady-like legs you have! Be that as it may, I'm still quite happy with the picture overall. I especially like Daxic's cool, calm yet murderous look about him.

Also whoever uploads this to DA before I do gets no moar drawing privileges from me
I should have said this a while back, but it wouldn't hurt giving me a heads-up before posting my work on the joint DA account.

Whoa dude, nice. Are you gonna redraw everyone now? XD Because you are full of WIN.



....and we have a joint DA account?

[Mastermind]

OB- That was awesome! I love how you're portraying Jynx.
AP- Awesome change in style and awesome pic. If you choose to redraw Zixan, please don't make him as skinny as you did in his first pic (which I loved BTW). Use Ojike's pic of him for reference to what his body should look like. (It's the picture illustrating Zixan's prequel chapter BTW)

[╬ProperArtist╬]

Originally Posted by Ojike

OB-
I didn't think Jynx had a heart yet. >.> Or does he just think he does? Good read, otherwise. :B

You have a point I'll probably edit that out later. If anything now his heart does like Yusuke did when he became a demon. Meaning beating once every couple minutes. Their still shattered remains but they still have the properties of a heart. I guess with that says it makes him feel like he's actually got a heart and during the fight maybe Xemnas will spill all the beans?

I've been thinking about what you said about Daxic's final form and I believe he should look like his normal state when he's in full control only he's got that parasite around him, maybe he could even spark lightening around him.
It's your call though.

Originally Posted by Angel's Prayer

Good news...

looks like I managed to find myself a Scanner, so I now present you with my alternate art style for the Exiled...



What I particularly like about this art style is how I move my pen when I draw like this. The curves are all very graceful, and I feel very soothed and content when I draw like this. The feeling is reflected here, and I can't really put a particular word to it, but it feels very old-fashioned.

It saddens me how little I could grasp without Photobucket raping the picture of such detail (teh chains, teh chains!!) But then It's not that perfect. Good Lord Daxic, what long and lady-like legs you have! Be that as it may, I'm still quite happy with the picture overall. I especially like Daxic's cool, calm yet murderous look about him.

Also whoever uploads this to DA before I do gets no moar drawing privileges from me
I should have said this a while back, but it wouldn't hurt giving me a heads-up before posting my work on the joint DA account.

Whoops that would be me. We were supposed to be making a joint Exiled account so we could have all the art in one place. I put your name in the info area giving you recognition for the drawings.
Next time I will alert you before hand.

Btw Your new style is absolutely amazing. So does this mean you're doing all the Exiled in their original clothing (meaning outside their robes).

Originally Posted by Mastermind

OB- That was awesome! I love how you're portraying Jynx.

Thank you MM. I figured I'd go into a different direction with him. Instead of being just a hot head. He's actually thinking and understanding and comprehending the situation instead of charging full speed. It pretty much goes a long with his power considering he's prone to adapting to his surroundings.

[Victor]

For Critvox in the spin off I'ma give him a suit like the one Light wears in Episode 37 when he does his creepy and awesome laugh.