The Exiled

[gene chaos]

wow that idea sounds really hot. KF ur is excellent

[Knightflare]

Originally Posted by Ojike

It's a shame the manga I'm making with someone is also centered around gang violence. :< And I dare say the main villain my be more evil than Daxic. D=

Did I just shat myself a little bit? :[


Oooh. New stuff for the Spin-Off, characters, mainly.

Zixan and Xodyc were exiled from a Mid - High Classed Biker Gang who were associated with the O13's. After being Exiled, they helped Xana out after Rex had parted ways with her after their own removal from the O13's.

Zixan is a natural power house and is a crazy hand to hand fighter.

Xodyc is an amazing swordsman, who doesn't like letting guns solving his battles, unless he absolutely HAS to. Think Goemon from Lupin III or Virgil from DMC.

Doctor Banxon is an incredible surgeon and scientist who was fired from his job after being introduced to drugs which he started to abuse. After being fired, he went crazy and made his own drugs for his personal pleasure. This results in his lack of his "eyes", so he wears shades all the time. Some of the drugs he makes are actually helpful and harmless. One of them is a drug that totally enhances someone's adrenaline and brain power and keeps it on "overdrive" until it wears out. But constant use of this drug is unhealthy.

Rex, who is good friends with the Doctor, is actually addicted to this drug, as well as Ecstasy. That's why Rex is a great fighter physically and mentally. He begins to quit after Kaarix and Lorixssa come into the story. Even without the drug, he's still a great fighter. 22 years of "Tricking" (the city's most popular "martial arts") and Street Fighting, as well as killing and gang experience, has made Rex sorta like a one-man army, or at least, one man gang or something.

He's 30, btw.

Kaarix is one of Rex's Dancers at a Club he usually performs at called "Club Vice 'e Virtue". She used to be associated with the O13's, but departed with them after an event that caused her to lose her job in one of the clubs managed by the O13's. During an attack at Rex's club (which happens DURING the story), she showed incredible Capoeira skills against some of the O13's Lower Ranked Thugs. Rex thought she was useful to the Exiled (who was slowly gaining shape) and took her in. They slowly fall in love with eachother throughout the story.

Lorixssa is Rex's best friend who he hasn't seen in 18 years. After an attack at their country-sided village by Rex's very own brother who went insane after realizing the joy of killing, Lorixssa escaped to the city miles away. Rex wasn't so lucky. The O13's found him and took him in and trained him until he found a rank alongside the rest of them. Lorixssa actually joined a gang called "D & S" who are actually Law Enforcers disguisd as a gang. Police are present in this story. A totally huge annoyance to the gangs around the City. After Rex and Lorixssa reunite, drama happens. You'll see.

I'm actually wondering if I can get the permission to have Lorixssa and Kaarix be bisexual... This way, the events AFTER the story would work out because I got stuff planned out for some of that stuff.

I'm also thinking of a sequel for this spin-off. With all the characters that everyone made for the original Exiled 2. CYBERNETICS ARE INTRODUCED AFTER THE FIRST STORY, which could help the ending leading to the sequel.

The characters in this spin-off will use ACTUAL weapons in real life. Like Berettas.

Whoever has an "X" in there name are considered to be in a gang, it's like a gang oath thing.

-FUN FACT:-
Rex's original name is actually Terry Teranes.
As a child, he was made fun of because of his last name. Being called "Terry Tyrannosaurus Rex".

[Mastermind]

Wow you're really thinking this through. It sounds very interesting, KF.

[yoyoj06]

cool ideas knightflare, now where does ruxel fit?

and last time i checked kf, you are controlling kaarix in the absence of its creator, so make her how you want

[The Lionheart]

Originally Posted by Knightflare

I'm actually wondering if I can get the permission to have Lorixssa and Kaarix be bisexual... This way, the events AFTER the story would work out because I got stuff planned out for some of that stuff.

lawlz whatever KF, you just want teh lesbian hawtness XD

i'm loving your ideas, except for the fact that charxai's not in them *goes off in a corner*

and OB, i think we should RP stuff out. its a good idea, though i doubt people will get into it.

[╬ProperArtist╬]

I really like that idea KF.

I have an idea for the Jynx character, however...
To make him more realistic and sort of the first step towards cybernetics in the story, He'll of been found by Org13 as a child after his family is killed by the ruthless gang defends as best he can but he's only a child and is shot (well grazed) in the face, which is why he has the scar. Left for dead he is essentially homeless and spends all of his time fighting in the streets to survive. Hunting his own food, fashioning his own weapons, and beating up those who attempt to steal any of these things from him.

Being a rash individual after 10 years he rushes the Org13 strong hold and demands to fight their leader, still young and brash he is of course beaten, however seeing his usefulness and ability to adapt quickly he is asked to join. He's really only used for the idea that he's quickly able to adapt to any situation, which can come in handy for most missions they have to go on. Knowing that he'll eventually turn on them for the purpose that they killed his family; Long story short he gets set up and the "cops/government" capture him and he's thrown in one of the worst prisons of the time.

He's tortured and beaten constantly, seeing as being as stuburn as we all know Jynx to be he tries fighting them back each and every time he see's an opening. Being used again he's forced to undergo a series of experiments, sorta like a Super Soldier.

Long story short he wakes up whilst they're experimenting on him and he escapes, whilst killing everyone in his wake (as just a flash of what he can do).

He's got a hit on his head seeing as he's technically a fugitive on the run from the government. Org13, after knowing of his still existence, want him dead as well for fear that he'll seek revenge on their leader. Not to mention every other person who knows of his existence and also of the bounty. The Exiled find out about his existence and recruit him into their crew, however not without resistance. (Rextanse takes care of that)

Just an idea of Jynx's new character bio

[Knightflare]

Originally Posted by OogieBoogie

I really like that idea KF.

I have an idea for the Jynx character, however...
To make him more realistic and sort of the first step towards cybernetics in the story, He'll of been found by Org13 as a child after his family is killed by the ruthless gang defends as best he can but he's only a child and is shot (well grazed) in the face, which is why he has the scar. Left for dead he is essentially homeless and spends all of his time fighting in the streets to survive. Hunting his own food, fashioning his own weapons, and beating up those who attempt to steal any of these things from him.

Being a rash individual after 10 years he rushes the Org13 strong hold and demands to fight their leader, still young and brash he is of course beaten, however seeing his usefulness and ability to adapt quickly he is asked to join. He's really only used for the idea that he's quickly able to adapt to any situation, which can come in handy for most missions they have to go on. Knowing that he'll eventually turn on them for the purpose that they killed his family; Long story short he gets set up and the "cops/government" capture him and he's thrown in one of the worst prisons of the time.

He's tortured and beaten constantly, seeing as being as stuburn as we all know Jynx to be he tries fighting them back each and every time he see's an opening. Being used again he's forced to undergo a series of experiments, sorta like a Super Soldier.

Long story short he wakes up whilst they're experimenting on him and he escapes, whilst killing everyone in his wake (as just a flash of what he can do).

He's got a hit on his head seeing as he's technically a fugitive on the run from the government. Org13, after knowing of his still existence, want him dead as well for fear that he'll seek revenge on their leader. Not to mention every other person who knows of his existence and also of the bounty. The Exiled find out about his existence and recruit him into their crew, however not without resistance. (Rextanse takes care of that)

Just an idea of Jynx's new character bio

I definately like this idea. It helps out.

Originally Posted by gene_chaos

wow that idea sounds really hot. KF ur is excellent

That makes me want to work on this a little harder. Thank youuu.

Originally Posted by Mastermind

Wow you're really thinking this through. It sounds very interesting, KF.

Yeah, I hope it is interesting :]
I had influences from a prequel from my Aether story and GTA4. lolol
The prequel for my story is a lot more darker and deeper but still has gang violence in it. Lack of Police, Law Enforcement, and Freedom can make a place incredible dangerous, that's what the prequel for my story is kind of about. So I had the most of my influence from that. lol

Originally Posted by yoyoj06

cool ideas knightflare, now where does ruxel fit?

and last time i checked kf, you are controlling kaarix in the absence of its creator, so make her how you want

Ruxel is definately in the story. Trust me on that one. ;D
Yeah, I forgot I was in charge of Kaarix. x3

Originally Posted by Axel_Owns

lawlz whatever KF, you just want teh lesbian hawtness XD

i'm loving your ideas, except for the fact that charxai's not in them *goes off in a corner*

and OB, i think we should RP stuff out. its a good idea, though i doubt people will get into it.

Not really just the hotness. After the story, Rex takes Xana, Kaarix, and Lorixssa away from the dangerous city and out to the country, so they can live in peace while waiting for Jynx's return from his fight with Daxic. In the main story, Rextanse marries just Kaarix and Lorixssa is just there. In this spin-off, I think it'd be easy for Kaarix, Lorixssa, and Rex to just marry eachother. Or something like that...

But the hotness is like...50% of the reason, kinda.

And Charxai's role is coming... I still got more stuff to figure out and all that.

[╬ProperArtist╬]

Originally Posted by Knightflare

Not really just the hotness. After the story, Rex takes Xana, Kaarix, and Lorixssa away from the dangerous city and out to the country, so they can live in peace while waiting for Jynx's return from his fight with Daxic. In the main story, Rextanse marries just Kaarix and Lorixssa is just there. In this spin-off, I think it'd be easy for Kaarix, Lorixssa, and Rex to just marry eachother. Or something like that...

I think i want Jynx to die this time around. Meaning getting shot up or having his super soldier like abilities wearing off after so many times their being used. Considering he escaped before they finished testing and finalizing his design, there are bound to be flaws in his abilities. Seeing as it's realistic it would make more sense. However, I'd rather have him die with Xana being able to see him die, and it's peaceful. Like he dies of blood loss and exhaustion. Xana goes into a panic trying to keep him alive, she's freaking out and tells Dr. Banxon to help him but all he can do is give him something that'll numb the pain and he dies in her arms.

[pokepotterkhkids]

Hey, Sorry I've been out for a while. Life is hectic. Anyways, either tomorrow or wednesday imma post Riax's finalized character form. I've been having dreams about her and am using them to characterize her.

That, and I have a potential member for The New Organization and her brother Cody doesn't really want her in it. He's a frigging tough sell.

Arianna your brother is a complete idiot. He doesn't want you in the New Organization because you have school. It's not like we auctually do anytthing except be lazy and chat. Mostly, the only things the members do is read the clubs magazine then take advantage of our rare trips

Originally Posted by Ojike

THAT'S JUST BECAUSE WE'RE SO AWESOME. No but..the irony is that we're not japanese, so I guess your brother's allowed to like us. xD If he can make an awesome character, consider him "in", but he shouldn't expect to live long/do much if he wants in right away. Seeing as the ball is somewhat already rolling. But I think it's beginning to slow into another halt...

Also, before I posted, this page was entirely spam. From beginning to end. THAT MAKES YOU GUYS SPECIAL.

Yah, but he hates anything to do with japanese. Wow. That's... random.

I'm making him give it up.

Keywords: making him

My Cost: He wants to play my games now. Apparently, when he beats DBZ for his friend, he wants more fighting action.

I have his hate list. He's gonna post it when he gets a myspace. I think it's gonna be on all about me.

My Hate List
1. Kelly
2. When Kelly Calls me Xaldyn because of my name. It's not my fault that mom named me Dylan
3. Naruto
4. When Kelly calls me a pervert because I'm looking at pictures of Kagome and Sango naked
5. Kelly's obsession with all things Japanese
6.Kingdom Hearts
7. Kelly's Obsession with Kingom Hearts
8. Kelly's Obsession with Riku
9. Kelly's obsession with the organization
10. Xodyc
11. Arianna
12.Cody
13.Arianna and Kelly
14. Kelly and Arianna cracking jokes

See! He wants my Naruto game but it's number 3 on his hate list! Can at least some of you talk to him everyonce in a while. He's really bugging meh.

Originally Posted by Angel's Prayer

*randomly appears out of nowhere

....

greetings.

It has been a while, and I'm sure most of you are irritated, if not completely enraged of my absence here for the past few weeks (months?) A lot has happened, some very important things for me. Still, I know that's hardly an excuse to just abandon the Exiled Order, and I'm indeed sorry for that. Truth be told though, I haven't the faintest clue what's happened in my absence and what I'm supposed to do now. You can very well ignore me and such, if you feel you really don't need me. But as long as I can still go online and visit this place, I'd like to be of some use to you guys, whether I'm still a member or not.

Hey! I've heard of you!!!!!!!!! Your'e the one that draws really good!!!!!!!

*Bows*

Sensei...

Teach me all you know

(that gies for you too NobodyImportant!!!)

Originally Posted by OogieBoogie

HOLY SHIT IT'S AP!!!!

No we don't frown upon you because you haven't been able to be here for the past couple months. It happens to everybody and you don't have to tell us why because like i said it's happened to at least once to everyone here.

Any who yeah AP we still need you. You're a kickass artist and you know it! There's still several character designs you need to finish or redo for some of our members and there are also a couple new members that would probably appreciate it if you could do their character sheets for them. At most AP the only things that have been happening are:

1.
The Writing of the Organization XIII battles with the Xziled.
2.
Discussing what should be the official first chapter I.E. The Reverse Order Intro or The Separation Begins.
3.
Handling the inclusion of new members into the Xziled.
4.
Making a hit list for all those characters within the Xziled who die at some point in the story, and if we may we were going to include Zhymarx, Mymorex, and Xalatine in that list, because i remember you telling me over IM that they do in fact die.
5.
Figuring out if there will be an Xziled 2 or will we just cut everything off after the Betrayal Saga, and if so we needed to find a place to put the Xior Saga.

That's about it AP um if you need any of updates or info just ask around and I'm sure you'll get the answers your looking for.

Oh and btw before i forget, I'm going to need (well i think we're all going to need) the Xziled robe designs you made a while back. If we are truly to use that style then every character sheet that has been made thus far is subject to change and should probably be redone.


It's good to have you back as always AP and I look forward to hearing more from you soon.

EDIT: If there's anything I missed or forgot to tell AP please feel free to fill him on that as well.

Yes, I probably would. I suck at drawing. I can't even draw the God I worship (the dot. ALL MUST OBEY!!!!!!!)

uhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh.......................... ......

Originally Posted by Axel Owns

lol MM.

Well holy cracker-jacks batman, its AP!

OB pretty much covered everything, but i don't think we could kick you out of the exiled for any reason at all. you've helped us visualize each others (and even our own) characters in a way that probably wouldn't have been possible without you.

I think i speak for all of us when i say we're glad to have you back.

P.S.: if anyone wanted to post on the RP, that would be perfectly fine with me.

back? More people for me to meet? *Shudders and hides behind Zexion*

Originally Posted by Ojike

He was never the only one....

*goes in a corner to listen to My Chemical Romance*

MM-Hopefully 1 month isn't quite long enough to consider it dead. Because reviving dead threads is against the rules, and will result in the closing of the thread. >.>

My friend knows my chem!! she's awesums!!!!!

Originally Posted by Angel's Prayer

Ah, if you're referring to these:
http://i46.photobucket.com/albums/f1...newuniform.jpg
http://i46.photobucket.com/albums/f1...ewuniformb.jpg
http://i46.photobucket.com/albums/f1...ewuniformc.jpg

I'm not entirely sure which one we picked, but now that I've seen these things again, I vote for the first one, albeit its a fancy version of the original.

I don't mind redrawing some of the characters, but right now I have no means of getting my pictures to the internet (hence my little activity at DA as well.)

I'll see what I can do, but this month is a busy one for me as I'll be enrolling in a new college.

Also, is it just me or has it been rather hush-hush for the KH games? (I recently just discovered FF13's extended trailer so yeah, I haven't been online in forever.) Nice to hear from everyone as well.

i lurve them all!

OOOH! What kinds of colleges??? I need info. Otherwise i might as well enroll to Kingdom Hearts Nerd Academy

Kh is always hushhush. Haven't you noticed that yet. Nomura likes toying with little kids minds because he makes everything so... not obvious in kh, but oh no, in ff, he makes the bosses harder, but it's easier to understand what the hell is going on. You odn't even know what's going on if you've gone past the 100% completion mark.

It has an extended trailer? I had no idea! I've been a little busy brushing up on my albhed and working on The New Organization.

How can the lighting from that frigging trailer scare the shit out of me when real lighting doesnt.

But then again, I just got over my fear of real lighting and thunder last year. (all thanks to my obsession with a namely cranky permanent pms nobody who controlls it. Yeah. I'm at that level of obsessionness

Originally Posted by OogieBoogie

I'd say what would be cool is if we use all 3 designs in some form or fashion.

May depending on certain ranks certain character would have a different style coat?

Or

Perhaps we just put up all 3 designs and as members join they pick which one they want?

Or

We could just take the two designs that we don't want and give them to the Mystic & Order of Sin seeing as I'd figure they'd too have a different style of robe other than the plane Organization XIII style.

DIT:

Just putting this out there I really like the 3rd design because of the single strap going down the middle and it looks a bit more royal than the rest of them, unless you guys wanted to use that style of robe for the Mystic Members? The 2nd Design I honestly do not really care for, which I would say would most likely fit the Order of Sin maybe? The first seems to be a basic version a little different but nothing really special although it could work for us; the stance it's drawn in really makes the coat stand out though.
Just my thoughts on the whole Xziled robe situation.

i lik the idea that we all choose out own

Originally Posted by Axel Owns

hey ap, since we're on the subject of redrawing characters, could you redraw charxai? i'm really not trying to sound pushy or anything, but the sword is off on his picture. tyvm =) of course, if there's more important drawings, do those first, because mine really isn't very important.

and on that subject, i was thinking that i kind of need a new design for charxai's weapon. right now it's supposed to be exactly like cloud's buster sword, except a little larger and all black. i would still like it to be a two-handed sword, but does anybody have any more original designs? charxai's sword just seems a little plain to me.

thank you all for your help.

oh, and i vote #3, and we originally voted #2 (although i dont know how)

i want riax drawn after i post, i changed her loks

Originally Posted by Ojike

I vote that the Exiled wear the first uniform, the Mystic Order wear the second, and the Reverse Order wear the third. I've also been wondering if we should omit the Order of Sin. It's a fun concept, sure, but nonsensical(not to mention cliche). If you think about it, having several members fighting one sin would get repetitive and boring. I move that we remove the Order of Sin. :0

AO- AP's design is far less plain than a black, oversized buster sword. >.>

But really everyone needs to be redone, seeing as the robes are out of date. But I wouldn't want to put that kind of load on AP, who has done more than enough for us. I, or somebody else, need(s) to do some character sheets similar to http://kh2.ffsky.cn/pic/char/13/saix02.jpg with the mug shot and weapon illustration.

That isn't neccisarily true. It all depends on what Cloud is compensating for by carrying that around. It doesnt have to be kjust zack and aeriths deaths.

Originally Posted by OogieBoogie

I'll take on the position of artist and do it. I mean I'm officially on Summer Vacation so I'll have time to relax and finally art to my hearts content, plus I figure I owe it to everyone here seeing as I haven't done much in the way of sit on the side lines for almost a year now.

So I'll take on the duty of being the officially artist as far as Character sheets are concern. Head Shots are my best work as it is so it only makes sense haha.

AO- I say stick with the weapon that AP drew, I mean if you gave him a giant sword like Cloud wields that would kinda defeat the purpose of Charxai's element. I mean if the nitrogen is meant to slow and wear down enemies then wouldn't he want a weapon that makes him faster and more maneuverable than the opponent he's facing. If that's not the case then I only see Charxai's element as a means to slow his opponents movements down enough so he can strike without having to really try. I mean just think about it :/

Ojike- I honestly prefer it if the Mystic Order were the ones to where the 3rd robe. It seems more royal than the others and considering they're back grounds and the jewelry they were it would go well with them rather than the Reverse Order. I also believe that the Order of Sin should be dropped as well considering they really don't serve much of a purpose and losing to them would be pointless as is anyway considering only a handful of members within the Xziled can even feel emotion.

Just my 2 cents....

U SUK

Ur already on Summer Vacation? *Hugs Roxas pli\ushies* He;s starting his and you'rs is already over... *cries*

isn't that part of CLOUD not the SWORD???

Originally Posted by Axel Owns

ty for you're 2 cents OB, i'll think about it.

but mah inner love for 2-handed swords probably won't be overcome.

and i think you're a great artist for drawing profiles.

so wait, are we gonna draw profiles and the way that saix looks (his second face scares me)? i kinda like the way it is.

Of couse it scares you. It scares my little sister too. hahaha. Clkoseup of saix's face, lifesize orochimaru picture, and pictures of kadaj and sephy scare the shit out of her.

Originally Posted by OogieBoogie

The way Ojike explained is how character sheets are done.

• Mug Shot
• Facial Expressions
• Weapon
• Brief Description of Said Character

The way i see it this way is best, but that's just my two cents....

dit:

I made a poll in the art section so as to see which robe design people enjoy more. You guys can go there and vote as well if you'd like.

http://forums.khinsider.com/fan-art/...ml#post2923448

Cool

more stuff to put in.

joy

Originally Posted by gene chaos

hello exiled been a long time sorry i haven't ben on in a long time and i know i have been an underproductive bum so if i could help in any way let me know

and more members to meet *hides behind Sauske*

Originally Posted by Axel Owns

kk OB thanks for clearing it up for me.

and hey GC!

anyways, i have decided charxai will stay with the two handed sword. idk, it's just kind of reflective of his personality and fighting style. a one-handed sword just isn't "how he rolls" xD.

lol

that's from a convention ad. hahahah

Originally Posted by OogieBoogie

Okay now i know this is going to sound far fetched coming from me, but I think we should start the rp up again. I mean hell it brought most everyone to the forums and business was booming. Hell we even got some good ideas out of it that we're actually using now.

However, I think this time the rp should be based of something relevant to the story. That way it'll keep most everyone there and seeing as it's an actually plot/storyline piece for the Exiled story we wouldn't have people leaving or complaining.

So what do ya guys say?

We have several plot lines to choose from:

Exiled vs Organization XIII
final battles, meaning near the end when Xemnas & Jynx are about to go at it for the final time. Seeing as all the other fights are written out this is really the only battle left to be done and since it includes most of the others it kinda makes sense.

Exiled vs Keybladers
I know we already did an rp about it, but if you guys wanted to redo it now would be the time.

Exiled vs Mystic Order
I really don't see this one working out well considering we need just about everyone on top of people to RP the Mystic Members. These battles would most likely be done better over a yahoo conference or a giant melting pot of each other's own POV's of how the fights are going. Kinda like how Axel_Owns and dark_light13 wrote Marluxia's battle only this would be on a much bigger scale

Exiled vs Reverse Order
Seeing as Jynx and Rextanse are off facing Xemo during this time. Both me and him could rp
2 of the reverse members and whoever portrays the other member has to know his personally. I vote Ojike.

Betrayers vs Alliance
Let's face it we've all been wanting to see how this would play out and we can finally do it. RPG being unavailable doesn't hurt us either considering she's not really even in this saga other than being "technically" dead.

Again just my two cents :/

uhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh.........

come again?

Originally Posted by OogieBoogie

Fine
(25 25 25 25 25 25 25 25 )

Dude, wat does all those 25s mean?

Originally Posted by Ojike

Actually, things wouldn't be complicated at all if we did the betrayal fight. By that time in the story, both Ruxel and Exal are gone.

The Mystic Order battles are held in different..dimensions, I guess. So it'd be easier to do that, with the characters who are involved, on yahoo (or possibly even through PM). Also, just a reminder that the Mystic Order fights are several Exiled members against one Mystic member.

As for the Keybladers fight, since we NI (if I remember right)has the original log, all we'd have to do is build on that by adding in the other members.

The Org.13 final bout you could write by yourself, OB. Seeing as it centers completely around Jynx and Xemnas. The other members involved you should know well enough to write for. Just...don't have Daxic say "just as planned." >.>'

that sound funny for some reason

Originally Posted by Knightflare

Okay guys.
I had a dream and it made me want to start an Exiled Spinoff.
Okay?
It's totally different, completely different.
Not even having anything to do with any Kingdom Hearts stuff.
Just, completely different.

I'm a little skeptical about this idea, though, so I want your opinions. It's pretty much the same story as the Exiled. Jynx is the Main Protagnist, Daxic is the Main Antagonist, centers around "The Exiled."

But, of course, it's different.

It takes place in a Fictional City. Looks very modern. Cars, Skyscrapers... Looks kinda like New York City but different. One thing about this City that makes it different from every other ones are the GANGS.

That's right. The gangs.
The Exiled is a notorious gang made up of skilled street punks that were Exiled from the things that mean a lot to them. But, the Exiled isn't just a street gang, but a group of freelancers who would do anything for the right amount.

Characters are pretty much the same except for the fact that they don't have powers, besides skills that are described as "Supernatural". Backgrounds are sorta different, too, but they're remain very similar.

Characters: (Some of these ideas have to change, though.)

Exiled-
Jynx - A ruthless punk who's aiming to kill someone in mind.
Daxic - An insane fire-headed bike thug who wants to rule.
Rex - A "Street Legend" who was thought to have died after being exiled from the O13's.
Xana - A young little lady who was forced to defend herself using a gun after her departure from the O13's.

The O13's are a ruthless bunch of people who won't stop at nothing to get money. Originally had 13 Members but after a certain event, they are now left with eight members.

The Mystic (Mistiqs) and Reverse (The Reversals) Orders are present as well.

It usually revolves around Gang Wars and Daxic's betrayal and other key events that happen in The Exiled's Main Story.

Well, right now, my mom is celebrating her birthday, so I don't have a lot of time to exaggerate.
Gimme some ideas and tell me what I need to change!

more people with dreams of exiledness!!!

Originally Posted by OogieBoogie

I honestly like the idea. Hell we could even make that idea into what the Exiled actually is supposed to be if everyone agrees. It's unique and even though in our minds it's based off Kingdom Hearts, no one else would know that.

It's more like our own story.

One change i would like to make is the name of the Mistiqs group be changed to Elite Manifesto

I like the idea, but that's just me. As either a spin off or the actually story.

*trying to remember where the word 'Manifesto' was heard before*

...

Bleach?

Naruto?

heh.

Originally Posted by Ojike

It's a shame the manga I'm making with someone is also centered around gang violence. :< And I dare say the main villain my be more evil than Daxic. D=

umm.... is daxic more eviler than sephiroth is or more evil than how hard it would be to beat aqua terra ven and sephy all at the same time on the hardest mode?

Originally Posted by Knightflare

I'm actually going to write the whole thing if I get the time...
But, if the main one doesn't work out, then this can be the main.
BUT KEEP FOCUSING ON THE MAIN ONE.
THIS ONE IS MINE, YA'LL, until I say. ;]
I have to rely on ya'll to come up with the ideas for the main story so I can figure out how to transfer it to mine.

I'mma make pictures.

I'll type up a weird dream i had about a midnight run in with Dr.Banxon that Riax had

Originally Posted by gene chaos

wow that idea sounds really hot. KF ur is excellent

*grins like a psyco*

heh...

Axel

heh

fire

OMGWTFBBQ

*Runs into fire with Neko*

Neko: AXEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

PPK: HOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOTTTTTTTTTTTT AXELLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL LLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL *faints*

Originally Posted by Knightflare

Did I just shat myself a little bit? :[


Oooh. New stuff for the Spin-Off, characters, mainly.

Zixan and Xodyc were exiled from a Mid - High Classed Biker Gang who were associated with the O13's. After being Exiled, they helped Xana out after Rex had parted ways with her after their own removal from the O13's.

Zixan is a natural power house and is a crazy hand to hand fighter.

Xodyc is an amazing swordsman, who doesn't like letting guns solving his battles, unless he absolutely HAS to. Think Goemon from Lupin III or Virgil from DMC.

Doctor Banxon is an incredible surgeon and scientist who was fired from his job after being introduced to drugs which he started to abuse. After being fired, he went crazy and made his own drugs for his personal pleasure. This results in his lack of his "eyes", so he wears shades all the time. Some of the drugs he makes are actually helpful and harmless. One of them is a drug that totally enhances someone's adrenaline and brain power and keeps it on "overdrive" until it wears out. But constant use of this drug is unhealthy.

Rex, who is good friends with the Doctor, is actually addicted to this drug, as well as Ecstasy. That's why Rex is a great fighter physically and mentally. He begins to quit after Kaarix and Lorixssa come into the story. Even without the drug, he's still a great fighter. 22 years of "Tricking" (the city's most popular "martial arts") and Street Fighting, as well as killing and gang experience, has made Rex sorta like a one-man army, or at least, one man gang or something.

He's 30, btw.

Kaarix is one of Rex's Dancers at a Club he usually performs at called "Club Vice 'e Virtue". She used to be associated with the O13's, but departed with them after an event that caused her to lose her job in one of the clubs managed by the O13's. During an attack at Rex's club (which happens DURING the story), she showed incredible Capoeira skills against some of the O13's Lower Ranked Thugs. Rex thought she was useful to the Exiled (who was slowly gaining shape) and took her in. They slowly fall in love with eachother throughout the story.

Lorixssa is Rex's best friend who he hasn't seen in 18 years. After an attack at their country-sided village by Rex's very own brother who went insane after realizing the joy of killing, Lorixssa escaped to the city miles away. Rex wasn't so lucky. The O13's found him and took him in and trained him until he found a rank alongside the rest of them. Lorixssa actually joined a gang called "D & S" who are actually Law Enforcers disguisd as a gang. Police are present in this story. A totally huge annoyance to the gangs around the City. After Rex and Lorixssa reunite, drama happens. You'll see.

I'm actually wondering if I can get the permission to have Lorixssa and Kaarix be bisexual... This way, the events AFTER the story would work out because I got stuff planned out for some of that stuff.

I'm also thinking of a sequel for this spin-off. With all the characters that everyone made for the original Exiled 2. CYBERNETICS ARE INTRODUCED AFTER THE FIRST STORY, which could help the ending leading to the sequel.

The characters in this spin-off will use ACTUAL weapons in real life. Like Berettas.

Whoever has an "X" in there name are considered to be in a gang, it's like a gang oath thing.

-FUN FACT:-
Rex's original name is actually Terry Teranes.
As a child, he was made fun of because of his last name. Being called "Terry Tyrannosaurus Rex".

dude.

Some of that shit is just plain wrong

Originally Posted by Mastermind

Wow you're really thinking this through. It sounds very interesting, KF.

Of course thinking stuff throught gets praise from you.

well i just spen a week on Riax

Originally Posted by Axel Owns

lawlz whatever KF, you just want teh lesbian hawtness XD

i'm loving your ideas, except for the fact that charxai's not in them *goes off in a corner*

and OB, i think we should RP stuff out. its a good idea, though i doubt people will get into it.

lol

i think somebody's self absorbed

heh

Originally Posted by OogieBoogie

I really like that idea KF.

I have an idea for the Jynx character, however...
To make him more realistic and sort of the first step towards cybernetics in the story, He'll of been found by Org13 as a child after his family is killed by the ruthless gang defends as best he can but he's only a child and is shot (well grazed) in the face, which is why he has the scar. Left for dead he is essentially homeless and spends all of his time fighting in the streets to survive. Hunting his own food, fashioning his own weapons, and beating up those who attempt to steal any of these things from him.

Being a rash individual after 10 years he rushes the Org13 strong hold and demands to fight their leader, still young and brash he is of course beaten, however seeing his usefulness and ability to adapt quickly he is asked to join. He's really only used for the idea that he's quickly able to adapt to any situation, which can come in handy for most missions they have to go on. Knowing that he'll eventually turn on them for the purpose that they killed his family; Long story short he gets set up and the "cops/government" capture him and he's thrown in one of the worst prisons of the time.

He's tortured and beaten constantly, seeing as being as stuburn as we all know Jynx to be he tries fighting them back each and every time he see's an opening. Being used again he's forced to undergo a series of experiments, sorta like a Super Soldier.

Long story short he wakes up whilst they're experimenting on him and he escapes, whilst killing everyone in his wake (as just a flash of what he can do).

He's got a hit on his head seeing as he's technically a fugitive on the run from the government. Org13, after knowing of his still existence, want him dead as well for fear that he'll seek revenge on their leader. Not to mention every other person who knows of his existence and also of the bounty. The Exiled find out about his existence and recruit him into their crew, however not without resistance. (Rextanse takes care of that)

Just an idea of Jynx's new character bio

that's really xoolz

Originally Posted by Knightflare

I definately like this idea. It helps out.

That makes me want to work on this a little harder. Thank youuu.

Yeah, I hope it is interesting :]
I had influences from a prequel from my Aether story and GTA4. lolol
The prequel for my story is a lot more darker and deeper but still has gang violence in it. Lack of Police, Law Enforcement, and Freedom can make a place incredible dangerous, that's what the prequel for my story is kind of about. So I had the most of my influence from that. lol

Ruxel is definately in the story. Trust me on that one. ;D
Yeah, I forgot I was in charge of Kaarix. x3

Not really just the hotness. After the story, Rex takes Xana, Kaarix, and Lorixssa away from the dangerous city and out to the country, so they can live in peace while waiting for Jynx's return from his fight with Daxic. In the main story, Rextanse marries just Kaarix and Lorixssa is just there. In this spin-off, I think it'd be easy for Kaarix, Lorixssa, and Rex to just marry eachother. Or something like that...

But the hotness is like...50% of the reason, kinda.

And Charxai's role is coming... I still got more stuff to figure out and all that.

Does GTA4 have something to do with Grand Turismo?

Axelness?

Originally Posted by OogieBoogie

I think i want Jynx to die this time around. Meaning getting shot up or having his super soldier like abilities wearing off after so many times their being used. Considering he escaped before they finished testing and finalizing his design, there are bound to be flaws in his abilities. Seeing as it's realistic it would make more sense. However, I'd rather have him die with Xana being able to see him die, and it's peaceful. Like he dies of blood loss and exhaustion. Xana goes into a panic trying to keep him alive, she's freaking out and tells Dr. Banxon to help him but all he can do is give him something that'll numb the pain and he dies in her arms. [/center]

DX

SOLDIER?

*Hides behind Cloud then jumps into Kadaj's arms*

blood

no details there please

Why?

Abel's death - I barfed (on my bro though XD)

The Chain - You don't even want to know how sick this made me

Ichigo blood - nausiatedness

NO DETAILS ON BLOOD SPILLING! ANYONE WHO DOES HAS TO BE IN FRONT OF ME THE WHOLE TIME IM SICK SO THEY CN GET ALL BARFED ON!!!

............

I've had lotz of blood oozing out at the same time.

I passed out

for a few hours AFTER the blood and the smell of the blood was GONE

[Knightflare]

How long...
did it take you...
to quote all of those posts.

[pokepotterkhkids]

umm... about 5 minutes. Why?

[╬ProperArtist╬]

The spam...
Is really unnecessary...
Most of what you typed didn't even really need to be said...

:On a Side Note:

I'll work on Jynx's new character design for Knightflare's spin off

[pokepotterkhkids]

*hangs head* Sorry...

coolz

i'll get back to writing to David

[yoyoj06]

ATTENTION EVERYBODY

With the advice of Oogie Boogie, I have decided to take a month or so leave of absence. I will be back sometime after I graduate from high school on June 1st.

If KF's idea is taken seriously, all of you together will control Ruxel and what you want to happen.

I know I am being vague right now with my reasoning, but please understand. Thank you.