The Exiled

[Mastermind]

Originally Posted by Ojike

The fact that we don't have Ansem reports is WHY we have do do it differently. You missed my point completely. :<

AO- Is it necessary to make this so long? >.> Keep in mind, writers, that we gotta draw all this stuff. It's best to keep the lengths of the chapters relatively even. And preferably not so long that one fight feels like an anthology.

Well, I just inserted his 3 parts into Microsoft word and it's a little over 2 pages long. Mine covers about 4pages. When drawing out a scene you don't have to write as many descriptors because they're seen and not told. That's why the fights will be lenghty in comparison to a drawing.

[The Lionheart]

Originally Posted by OogieBoogie

I don't know why but it's my personal opinion that it just seems like you're rushing this fight. There is not real contact or substance, just occasional words and a slash here and there and it's on to the next phase of battle.
Maybe it's just me but that's how i feel about it. It's like Marluxia isn't offering any sort of fight at all, there's not really a showing of his abilities.

Again that's just how i see it. When it comes down to it, it's your fight and you do what you want with it.

Originally Posted by Ojike

AO- Is it necessary to make this so long? >.> Keep in mind, writers, that we gotta draw all this stuff. It's best to keep the lengths of the chapters relatively even. And preferably not so long that one fight feels like an anthology.

>.<

Originally Posted by Mastermind

Well, I just inserted his 3 parts into Microsoft word and it's a little over 2 pages long. Mine covers about 4pages. When drawing out a scene you don't have to write as many descriptors because they're seen and not told. That's why the fights will be lenghty in comparison to a drawing.

i agree with MM on this one, I have a lot of descriptors in mine, so drawing it won't be too lengthy. The only reason the fight is so long is because i tried to incorporate all of marluxia's abilities, and he has a lot.

[Xodyc]

I would like to say I have begun writing my fight. hopefully it won't be too long but hopefully it won't be too short.

[Ojike]

Too short is worse than too long. I'm not really complaining about the length. I just want you to keep in mind that drawing the scenes out is not an easy task. Drawing the same characters over and over again can become both tedious and boring.

[Mastermind]

Originally Posted by Ojike

Too short is worse than too long. I'm not really complaining about the length. I just want you to keep in mind that drawing the scenes out is not an easy task. Drawing the same characters over and over again can become both tedious and boring.

Ah, I see where you're coming from. Though, I do agree, a longer fight is way better than a shorter fight and I think it's safe to assume that these fights will average out to 2- 4 pages each, depending on the fighter.

[Dawning Twilight]

Originally Posted by Axel Owns

damn, you guys are on the ball. I'm still writing =(

and to the first chapter, i say ni! (for all you monty python fans out there)

i am too.

Originally Posted by Mastermind

Congrats on finishing the fight. I just finished the Zixan vs. Saix fight. All I have to do is edit it.

Lol nope i still have yet to finished my last post was a bit odd.

Originally Posted by Mastermind

Ah, I see where you're coming from. Though, I do agree, a longer fight is way better than a shorter fight and I think it's safe to assume that these fights will average out to 2- 4 pages each, depending on the fighter.

oh crap my fight is already like 9 pages i think... >.>











well i wrote part 1 up it may need editing but i'm pretty confident it did well.





Salix and Xishn vs. Vexen Part 1


So many battles had already started. How many more would ensue? The plan had been unleashed and so accordingly the Organization had launched an offensive to destroy the Exiled. At least that’s the information that Salix had gathered. Who would he come across? Or would he even come across anyone at all? It would be “fun” as Xishn would have put it. Especially considering the current situation. Not that it mattered to Salix either way.

All that mattered to Salix was that the time during the battles would prove vital for information gathering. Especially with the Organization fighting the Exiled. The stronghold of the Organization that normally had an unbreakable guard would be greatly weakened and that would prove fatal in the end result. However using a Corridor of Darkness to get inside the castle was still out of the question as “greatly weakened” and “completely destroyed” were two completely different things.

It would have been reckless to go alone to the Organization’s stronghold so Salix had brought Xishn along with him. Had he brought Lonex things could have become messy and a bit loud and that was not acceptable for a stealth mission. Xaneth was far too inexperienced and at the current moment Selvix was unavailable so Xishn was the best choice. Salix had decided to enter the world of the Organization’s stronghold through a portal that he had discovered on another world. This portal had been on a world called Twilight Town.

Slowly Salix walked through the basement as he approached a large teleportation type mission. That would bring him to the first step on his way to his true destination. Standing on top of the machine Xishn followed as the machine began to glow a bit and came to life as it teleported them to a parallel area. It looked exactly like the area they had been at with some minor changes in detail that Salix immediately picked up on.

"Hey old man what’s up with this place,” Xishn asked.

“It was created by a man named Ansem the Wise. As you can see it was made for the sole purpose of putting people into an unconscious state for hibernation,” Salix explained.

“Why would anyone want to do that,” Xishn asked.

“Indeed. However it would help if there were some added power or reason to do such other than to sleep,” Salix said. “The Keyblade wielder had such reasons.”

“You mean that witch with the memory abilities,” Xishn asked.

“Yes, Namine had rearranged his memories in another castle and this is where she put them back together while the wielder of the Keyblade slept,” Salix said as he walked off of the platform and continued to another part of the room as Xishn followed him. “We have very little time if we want to complete the mission.”

Slowly Salix and Xishn walked into the next room as the portal to the World that Never Was began to glow a bright black and green all the while spiraling slowly in a clockwise motion. As Salix approached the portal several Nobodies suddenly appeared and shot forth at him. However they were low class and easily blocked as Xishn summoned his mirrors and surrounded Salix. Moments later the mirrors were removed and the low class Nobodies were gone. Slowly Xishn walked forward to meet Salix an eager look on his face.

There was no doubt that it had been summoned up by the sudden attack from the Nobodies. Salix listened not hearing any movements he walked closer towards the portal.

“It appears someone doesn’t like the idea of us approaching the Organization’s stronghold. Let’s continue,” Salix said.

“I just hope this will be fun,” Xishn said as he followed Salix through the portal.

[Mastermind]

Originally Posted by Dawning Twilight

i am too.

Lol nope i still have yet to finished my last post was a bit odd.

oh crap my fight is already like 9 pages i think... >.>











well i wrote part 1 up it may need editing but i'm pretty confident it did well.





Salix and Xishn vs. Vexen Part 1


So many battles had already started. How many more would ensue? The plan had been unleashed and so accordingly the Organization had launched an offensive to destroy the Exiled. At least that’s the information that Salix had gathered. Who would he come across? Or would he even come across anyone at all? It would be “fun” as Xishn would have put it. Especially considering the current situation. Not that it mattered to Salix either way.

All that mattered to Salix was that the time during the battles would prove vital for information gathering. Especially with the Organization fighting the Exiled. The stronghold of the Organization that normally had an unbreakable guard would be greatly weakened and that would prove fatal in the end result. However using a Corridor of Darkness to get inside the castle was still out of the question as “greatly weakened” and “completely destroyed” were two completely different things.

It would have been reckless to go alone to the Organization’s stronghold so Salix had brought Xishn along with him. Had he brought Lonex things could have become messy and a bit loud and that was not acceptable for a stealth mission. Xaneth was far too inexperienced and at the current moment Selvix was unavailable so Xishn was the best choice. Salix had decided to enter the world of the Organization’s stronghold through a portal that he had discovered on another world. This portal had been on a world called Twilight Town.

Slowly Salix walked through the basement as he approached a large teleportation type mission. That would bring him to the first step on his way to his true destination. Standing on top of the machine Xishn followed as the machine began to glow a bit and came to life as it teleported them to a parallel area. It looked exactly like the area they had been at with some minor changes in detail that Salix immediately picked up on.

"Hey old man what’s up with this place,” Xishn asked.

“It was created by a man named Ansem the Wise. As you can see it was made for the sole purpose of putting people into an unconscious state for hibernation,” Salix explained.

“Why would anyone want to do that,” Xishn asked.

“Indeed. However it would help if there were some added power or reason to do such other than to sleep,” Salix said. “The Keyblade wielder had such reasons.”

“You mean that witch with the memory abilities,” Xishn asked.

“Yes, Namine had rearranged his memories in another castle and this is where she put them back together while the wielder of the Keyblade slept,” Salix said as he walked off of the platform and continued to another part of the room as Xishn followed him. “We have very little time if we want to complete the mission.”

Slowly Salix and Xishn walked into the next room as the portal to the World that Never Was began to glow a bright black and green all the while spiraling slowly in a clockwise motion. As Salix approached the portal several Nobodies suddenly appeared and shot forth at him. However they were low class and easily blocked as Xishn summoned his mirrors and surrounded Salix. Moments later the mirrors were removed and the low class Nobodies were gone. Slowly Xishn walked forward to meet Salix an eager look on his face.

There was no doubt that it had been summoned up by the sudden attack from the Nobodies. Salix listened not hearing any movements he walked closer towards the portal.

“It appears someone doesn’t like the idea of us approaching the Organization’s stronghold. Let’s continue,” Salix said.

“I just hope this will be fun,” Xishn said as he followed Salix through the portal.

I thought Org. 13 came after us, not the other way around...

Nevertheless, good intro.

[Dawning Twilight]

i thought that it could be both ways? i heard yoyo and OB discussing it and i thought that they said it could be eitherway ><;;; i'll change it if i need to. thanks for reading it though MM. much appreciated.

[The Lionheart]

great part i DT.

And i also think that org xiii is supposed to attack us, i've just been way too lazy change it Dx

part iv of the charxai/marluxia fight is almost done. I just have to type it up and change a few things around

[DrBanxon]

Originally Posted by Ojike

The fact that we don't have Ansem reports is WHY we have do do it differently. You missed my point completely. :<

AO- Is it necessary to make this so long? >.> Keep in mind, writers, that we gotta draw all this stuff. It's best to keep the lengths of the chapters relatively even. And preferably not so long that one fight feels like an anthology.

Whoa whoa wait, excuse me?
Now I gotta make my battle less cool cause you gotta draw it (which, bu the way we do things, won't happen for another 2 years :/)?
How about I make it as epic and cool and long as I want, and you dumb it down when you do draw it, keeping the most important parts.
I won't be held down by the man >:[

[Ojike]

How about I just not work on it at all? :0 And who says epic and cool has to equal ridiculously long?

Whatever. I doubt the manga version will even happen.

[╬ProperArtist╬]

shit why are you people fighting?

Stop acting like children, seriously. We do not need this bullshit.
Figures as soon as things start going right someone wants to start shit and start saying stuff

[Dawning Twilight]

...eh? what's with all this nonsense and fighting?

AO - thanks a lot. glad it was enjoyed. ^_^

OB - do the Exiled have to be found by the Org. members?

[╬ProperArtist╬]

I mean it would make more sense. Seeing as Xemnas beat the hell out of Jynx as the first blow, as a sign of things to come. So it would make sense that they attack. I mean how would Salix even know where Vexen is?

Vexen doesn't even hang out in Betix in Between

[Dawning Twilight]

Originally Posted by OogieBoogie

I mean it would make more sense. Seeing as Xemnas beat the hell out of Jynx as the first blow, as a sign of things to come. So it would make sense that they attack. I mean how would Salix even know where Vexen is?

Vexen doesn't even hang out in Betix in Between

he‘s not hanging out there as you‘ll see tomorrow when i post up part 2. Salix doesn‘t know who he‘ll be fighting yet.