Twilight's Destiny.

[Haku]

Much much better from the prevous installment, but like FF said there were a few typos but other than that it wasn't anything major.

[blendedhearts]

better but your still leaving things out. it's pretty much the same thing, only with a bit more detail. try to make it more of a story instead of just some dream of Sora's bothering him out of nowhere. but hey, if you want to keep it like this, feel free to do so. there's nothing i can do to stop you. either way, i'll keep reading.

[Ban Mido]

Definate improvement. And don't worry. You can still get better. People say that I was a great writer when I started, and I still see myself improveing.

And would you believe that Beginning of Destiny is my very first fic"?

[Hybrid~Fusion]

Originally Posted by Allstargamer

Definate improvement. And don't worry. You can still get better. People say that I was a great writer when I started, and I still see myself improveing.

And would you believe that Beginning of Destiny is my very first fic"?

You gotta be kidding me. It is one of the best fics I ever read, and you say it was your first one?

Oh, It is my first fic related to KH, so that might be the motive that it isn't still that good.Ah, almost forgot, Chapter Two might come today.

[Nelo Angelo]

hmm...definetly an improvement. your getting there. keep at it, read around and listen to the advice my friend. that is how i got better, but i still have much to learn, keep at it.
i have to get started on my next chap soon too.

[Hybrid~Fusion]

Well, as promised, the Second Chapter:

Chapter 2: Strange Dreams - Part 2
Some days later, Sora was with Kairi and Riku.
"Sora! Sora! You haven't listened nothing, have you?" Said Kairi, a little bit angry with him.

"Sorry. I was a little lost on my thoughts." - Said Sora, with embarrassment.-"But I could not help it. Those dreams are coming every day. What Roxas wants to mean 'your king might know something'?"

"Roxas said 'king'? With what exactly you were dreaming of?" Said Riku, thinking that Sora had become crazy.

"Yes.' Your king Might know sometinhg.' But why did he say your King? I mean, what does the King have with this?"


But then, something interrupted them. There was a man on a seadrift. Riku swimmed to the plank where the man was grabbing hold of, and brought him to shore. A few minutes later, he woke up.

"Uh…Ah…Wha…Where am I?" - Asked the man, that appeared to have around 20 years and red spiky hair; he had some small tattoos below his eyes, and was wearing a black shirt and a torn white short.

"You're in the Destiny Islands. Are you okay?" - Said Kairi, wanting to know what exactly happened. The man said that he was all right. Then Kairi asked "Who are you and what happened to you?"

"I'm Ale. I don't know what exactly happened to me. In fact, I don't remember anything about me." - Said Ale. He had a strange amnesia, as he could only remember his name.

"Well, we can help you. But first, you will need new clothes. You just can't walk like this. Oh, I almost forgot. I'm Sora, this is Kairi and that one is Riku." - Said Sora, trying to be the most friendly possible.

"Wait! Did you just say Sora?" - Asked Ale, surprised.

"Y-Yeah."- Said Sora, even more surprised than Ale.

"This name is so familiar, although I never met someone with the same name before. Wait! It is coming back! Hum… ah, his name was Roxas!" - Said ale, that didn't expect the reaction of the three friends.

"Roxas? How do you know him?" - Asked Sora, wanting to have more information, only to find out that the man only knew the name."Aw… It's okay. If you remember, please tell us. "

They got new clothes for Ale later. He was wearing a white sleeveless T-Shirt with an open black sleeveless jacket, and blue jeans. So, the sunset started. The light was fading, and as the sun was leaving, Sora took Ale and the other took their ways. And, while they were going to Sora's house, Ale Asked:



"Hey, Sora… are you sure we haven't met before?" - Asked Ale, with a smile on his face, trying to remember something that he had forgotten a long time ago

"Yeah… but I can't remember when or how. That's strange." - And Sora went home with Ale, thinking about Ale's strange connections with Roxas and his own connection with Ale.


Author's Notes: Is Ale Familiar to you? Chapter Three is coming on Thursday or on Friday.

[blendedhearts]

it's Axel, in a full form. it's still a bit random and some things the characters say, i can't make heads or tails of. but thats just something to work on, just keep trying.

[Hybrid~Fusion]

Originally Posted by blendedhearts

some things the characters say, i can't make heads or tails of.

Could you be more specific?

[blendedhearts]

Originally Posted by Hybrid~Fusion

Well, as promised, the Second Chapter:

Chapter 2: Strange Dreams - Part 2
Some days later, Sora was with Kairi and Riku.
"Sora! Sora! You haven't listened nothing, have you?" Said Kairi, a little bit angry with him.

"Sorry. I was a little lost on my thoughts." - Said Sora, with embarrassment.-"But I could not help it. Those dreams are coming every day. What Roxas wants to mean 'your king might know something'?"

"Roxas said 'king'? With what exactly you were dreaming of?" Said Riku, thinking that Sora had become crazy.

"Yes.' Your king Might know sometinhg.' But why did he say your King? I mean, what does the King have with this?"

i made the parts that confused me bold. it just sounds weird.

[Maverick E.S]

Niiiiice the first part of it really got me i can;t wait for the next part

[Nelo Angelo]

hmm not bad, not bad at all. i shall eagerly await the next chapter.

[Hybrid~Fusion]

(Can't believe that I got readers...)
Well, thanks for the comments. I think the advices worked.

[Maverick E.S]

(Can't believe that I got readers...)
Well, thanks for the comments. I think the advices worked.

lol thats what i said when mine were commented on

[Hybrid~Fusion]

Now, the third chapter.

Chapter 3: The forgotten one!

Ale wasn't feeling well. He was trying to remember the things that he had forgotten, but it still looked like that the more he tried to remember, the more he forgot. Then Sora came, wanting to know if Ale was ok.

"Hey, Ale, what's up?" - Said Sora, looking at the man's face, which showed frustration and sadness. "You know that you should not be like this."

"Sora, you really don't know what is to forget everything you know, to forget the ones you hold dear." - Said Ale, that didn't want to try more to remember at that time.

"But Ale, you didn't forget your friends. The memories of them are on your heart, sleeping. So, they will come to you at the right time. You don't have to worry. Come, Kairi and Riku are waiting for us." - Said Sora, leaving the room with a malicious smile on his face.

"What for?" - Asked Ale, with surprise, after all, they would they call him

"You and I have things to resolve. So, we're off to Twilight Town." - Said Sora, which already left his house.

"Twilight Town, huh? I think I remember that place." - Said Ale, more puzzled than he was before.

"Really? So let's go. The visit can be sure to bring you back memories." - Said Sora, glad to hear good news.

So, they caught up with their friends, and then Sora explained the situation. "We need to go to Twilight Town. There is a place there called 'The station of Serenity'. That place was where my dreams happened. Roxas told me that place was in Twilight Town. Besides, Ale said that he may remember the Town."

"Yeah, but, how are we getting there?" - Said Riku. "if you didn't notice, we don't have any means of going to any place right now."

But then, a ship floated over them. So, Chip and Dale landed the ship, the gummi ship that Sora and his friends once used to go to different worlds.

"Hey there!" - Said Chip, very happy, just like Dale. "Long time no see!"- said Dale. So, the two gummi ship mechanics said together: "Needin' something to go to other worlds?"

"I can't believe it." Said Riku.

"Hey, guys, how are Donald, Goofy and the King doing?" - said Sora, that didn't have any notice from them since the battle with Xemnas

"They're all right." - Said Chip. "But they miss you a lot." - Said Dale. "So, let's go to where you need to."

So, they headed off to Twilight Town. They landed at the Central Station. So, when Ale looked at the clock tower. Everything around him faded out, just like if he was dreaming.
Then, he saw a scene that might've come from his other memories.

Two guys in black coats were sitting on the clock tower. Eating their ice-cream, they were talking about the view. So, one of the guys, that looked like Ale, was telling the other, a blond boy, about the sun and the horizon. But, as he finished talking, Ale started to come back.

"Ale! Ale! Wake up!" - Said Sora, which thought that it was strange that Ale had passed out. Seeing that his friend was ok, he said "Don't give us a scare like that! You just passed out without any motive."

"Sorry. I did not want to do that." - Said Ale, with a face that said 'Oh, sorry. I couldn't help it'

"It's okay. You don't have to apologize." - Said Sora. "Are you all right?"

"Yes. And I had a dream. Two guys were sitting on the top of that tower. And one looked like he was me, but he wasn't me at the same time." - Said Ale, now feeling better.

"Okay. But now we need to see Hayner, Pence and Olette. They might know something about this Station of Serenity." But as Sora was walking, he felt something materializing on his pocket. Then he took it, and saw a picture of his friends from the town and Roxas
in front of the old mansion. So, he ran to the usual spot.

"Hey, guys, come here, Sora and his friends are back!" -Said Hayner, happy to see his friends again.

"Oh! You're back! It is so good to see you!" - Said Olette, now wearing a different outfit, a blue blouse, a white skirt and white and pink tennis.

"Hey Sora, how you doing? Where are Donald and Goofy?" - Asked Pence, noticing that Donald and Goofy weren't with Sora.

"Hi there. Donald and Goofy are at the King's Castle… that's why they didn't come. Hey, have you ever heard of a place called 'Station of Serenity?'" - Asked Sora, hoping to get a good answer, but the three friends made a signal with their heads meaning 'no' "And, you guys know who this one on this photo is?"

Then Sora showed them the photo. So, Olette said. "We don't know who this guy is. But still, he is kinda familiar for me." The other two said the same thing.

"Well, we're going around town asking people if they know anything about the station."
But as Sora was leaving, Hayner called him.

"Hey, Sora, who is that guy?" - Asked Hayner

"Oh, that's Ale. We found him yesterday on a seadrift." - Said Sora.

"He is so familiar. He looks a lot like the guy that kidnapped Kairi the last time you were here." - Said Hayner, that didn’t expect the reaction of Sora.

"Oh! Now that you've mentioned it, I see. Well, see you later!"

"See ya…"

Author's notes: This one was difficult to do. I almost ran out of ideas there. But, still, Sora is going to discover that the heart is more complex that than everyone thinks.

[Bumblebee]

Hmm... i think its pretty good actually... i could notice that you were starting to run out of ideas... even still, cant wait for chap 4!