Infinity

[sand_san]

H-HEY!!!!!:scared: That robot from story 1 chapter 2!! I recognize that one!!! you took my novel's character!!!!!!!!!!!! hey you back stabbing me brother!!:cursing:
But that's not a big problem... next time tell me 'kay?
And the story... well time by time I was getting understanding it nice story there!!

[Ban Mido]

uh sand, these stories have been posted before yours, so unless you have proof that you had created the character first, you would be techniqually copying off of him. Or it just might be a coincidence.

[sand_san]

Okay... but he has come to my house and see my novel and .... (you know he actualy my real cousin! he also the one that told me about KH Insider)
Well but i've said its okay 'cause it didn't exactly the same except the hitting head things only and mine it was to get her (and my robot was fem) mother board find things in her floppy disc (You know place to keep a computer's memory, and mine has three body evolution (hehe s-e-c-r-e-t).
But thanks for the knowledge.

[Ban Mido]

Oh, okay. Never mind then.

[rockman]

gahahahahahahahahahaha you know i'd never backstab you btw where the 'ell ya got that avatar?didn't i send one to you?ah?!shouldn't i studying right know for the mid-test?!hell i just learn later so i can focuse more.....how's your fic?don't forget to update a week once or you'll hard to find it

[rockman]

whahahahahaha!i'm free from mid test!now back to the story i left

[rockman]

Story 1
Chapter 4 : Is he really a keyblade wielder?

At rebecca city jail......
Miller sing a song*......oh.......my lady......my soul mate......where are you.....*sob*
Kaito try unlock the jail door*ugh!almost there!
Alex gaze at the sky*.......
mean while,Sora and friends are in the outer space of rebecca city
Sora read a map*duh.....hmm.....ahah....
Riku :stop doing that tell me where the next world is
Sora :yeah!i just trying to do that....but....
Riku :but?
Sora :uhh this map is some kinda hard to read....
Kairi look at the map and then laugh*sora do you know to read a map?
Sora :uhh i forgot
Riku :GREAT!
Sora giggle* sorry
Kairi :...well then i just read the map
Riku :....that's good
Sora :so....what do i do?
Kairi h can you check that world?we need to restock our food
Sora kay!a little journey can make me feel better!
Riku :yeah and don't do anything stupid!or we will get to a problem
Sora :i will *go to the mini gummy ship*
Kairi h and don't waste our money!
Sora launch the mini gummy ship*
Riku :he has left isn't he?
Kairi :yup i hope he not waste our money
At the mini gummy ship,suddenly a hologram of chip and dale appeared
Chip :hey sora!
Sora h!the new communicator is working?
Dale :yup!and the hologram even colorful!
Sora :yeah i can see that
Chip :by the way where are you heading to?
Sora :umm some world called Rebecca city
Dale :REBECCA CITY?!
Sora :yeah why?
Chip :THAT'S THE HOLY LAND FOR MECHANIC AND ENGINEER!
Sora h so?
Dale :can you do us a favor Sora?
Sora :well as long as it not cost any money
chip :can you get the "blue sky metal ore" from master Vivis?
Sora :umm your teacher?
chip :yeah some kind of
Dale :he's the one who taught us to be like this!
Sora look at the clear field*oh i found a landing zone!
Chip h but you just have to get it
Dale :just say it was our request for our birthday
Sora kay!
at the field,a goggled-guy carrying a sniper gun stand there
Goggled-guy(G.G) :hmm....ah there it is *load the gun and then shoot to mini gummy ship*
BANG!BANG!BANG!hit the mini gummy ship
Sora :WOA!*shaking because of the shoot*
G.G :heh wish you luck
at rebecca city jail
Miller crying*where is my hot chick?my soulmate
Alex :uhh i think Miller got crazy here
Kaito :!!!!!hehehe it's here
Alex :what's here?
Sora shot down and head to rebecca city jail*UWAAAAA
Kaito :hurry
Sora :GAAAAAAH!
Kaito :hey miller!a hot chick outside the window!
Miller :WHAT?!*become cheerful then rush to the window*wait for me!hot chick!my soulmate!
Alex :is that what we call tricking somebody?
Kaito :NOW!
then the mini gummy ship hit the jail window and Miller
Miller ;UAGH!*thrown and then fainted*
Alex :is he.....dead?
Kaito h we'll miss him
Sora come out from the mini gummy ship*ugh i think i hit some thing
Kaito :hey alex!carry miller!
Alex kay!come on Miller!*carry Miller out from the hole*
Miller h...i love you my beautiful lobster*bite Alex hand*
Alex :OUCH!
Kaito :and you!
Sora :me?
Kaito :yes you come with me!
Sora :why?
Kaito :cuz you just helped us to jail break!
Sora :uh-oh
Alex :WE'LL MEET AT THE PARK!
Kaito :OKAY!now come on!
Sora :uhh okay(gee Riku will be mad)
then Kaito and Sora flee.....at the Moon shine bar....
Sora :uhh aren't we supposed to meet at the park?
Kaito :yeah but i'm going to take one more ally
Sora :who?
Kaito :the one who shot you down
Sora :WHAT?!
G.G :to make you meet kaito
Sora :!!!!
Kaito :yo matt!
Matt :shut up
Sora :.......
Kaito :so how's she?
Matt :fine
Kaito :i see
Sora see the police out of the window*DAMN!THE POLICE!
Matt :yeah i know
Kaito :luckily no one at the bar now
Matt :yeah *draw a gun with a blade on it's edge*
Kaito :hehehe*draw a black sword*
Sora :do we have to fight?
Kaito :yeah
Sora h god *draw the keyblade*
Matt :!!!!
Kaito :that's!
Sora :what?
then a guy with a keyblade come trhough the window
??? :YOU CRIMINAL SHALL HAVE A DIVINE PUNISHMENT FROM MY KEYBLADE!THE DIVORCE KEYBLADE!!!
Matt :what a lame name
??? :S-SHUT UP!
Kaito :totally
Sora :COULD YOU GUYS BE MORE SERIOUS?!
Kaito :maybe
??? :......
Matt :.....he's alone
Sora :!!!!
Kaito :so....you're a captain level huh?
???? :YOU COULD SAY SO!I AM SIKOKU WILL PUNISH YOU UNTILL YOU GET DIVORCE!
Matt :prepare for battle!
Kaito :are you ready spiky!?
Sora :S-SPIKY?
Sikoku :HERE I COME!

sikoku charge into Kaito but kaito dodge it!then Matt shot to Sikoku but sikoku slash the bullet into two!then sora back stab him but sikoku dodge it and counter it!sora couldn't dodge it and got hit!Matt try to attack sikoku with melee attack but got kicked by sikoku!

Matt :huff....huff....he's a tough one
Sora :....ugh
Kaito :hang on!

Kaito aid sora with hi-potion!then matt slash sikoku but sikoku too late to dodge it and got hit!

Sora :yeah!keep it on!
Matt kay!
Kaito :surround him then attack him together!

everyone surrounding sikoku and then attack him!sikoku can't dodge it!it's a fatal HIT!

Sikoku :UAGH!*faint*
Sora :we did it!
Matt :phew...
Kaito ;no time to lose there maybe more coming this way
Sora kay
Matt :got it
then the three of them run toward the park

[Taokitty]

Hmm... Do you want me to give you constructive critism? I believe I may have a few points that may help you with this story, however, I ask for permission first in fear I may be too harsh for one. Please reply.

~Taokitty~

P.S. Try not to double or triple post, eh? I know you were doing so for ye had no readers to fill the spaces, but please remember to refrain from doing that, mkay?

=^_^=

[rockman]

oy you not read my signature?that could explain it!it's free to give any critic or tips!we accept it open hand!

[iloveyou502]

That chapter was alright, though the grammar's still a little sketchy. Is English your first language?

[rockman]

Story 1
Chapter 5 ivide into 2

Some where in an unknown lab
Scientist look at a big tube* hmmm....ahah
Armored guy get in the lab*so how was it?
Scientist :this nobody....it has a little memory has a little memory about someone
Armored guy :his friend?
Scientist :yes
Armored guy :...he's the last from the organization...
Scientist :i think his friend too
Armored guy :at least....we have to know....what we need to create a kingdom hearts
Scientist :yet it still need 2-3 week for recover...
Armored guy :i see...
Scientist :say...what will you do when you know how to make a kingdom hearts?
Armored guy :it's up to him....
Scientist :i see
Armored guy :i think he will make it
Scientist :why?
Armored guy :he lost his heart and soul
Scientist :didn't that make him a heartless nobody and soulles?
Armored guy :no he change his heart and soul with "his dark material"
Scientist :!!!!is he didn't know the consequences doing that?!
Armored guy :......
Scientist :....
Man in the tube :ugh....
Scientist :!!!!
Armored guy :can you speak?do you remember everything?
Man in the tube :y.....yes...
Armored guy :.........first.....what is your name?
Man in the tube : a....x......e.....axe.......l.....axel....

mean while, sora kaito and matt arrive at the park
Sora :so what will we do now?
Matt :stay on guard
Kaito :we still have to wait for Alex and Miller
Sora :wew glad to hear that
Kaito :hey we haven't introduce ourself aren't we?
Sora :yeah the name's sora
Kaito :sky?
Sora :no SORA
Kaito :what's the different?sora sky sora so sky ra ky r-
Sora kay okay i got it
Kaito :i'm kaito
Sora :thief?
Kaito :that's my side-job
Sora :......
Matt :someone's coming!
Kaito :!!!he!
Man in black approach kaito sora and matt*well well well a lost....or should i say a thing?
Sora :what?are you nuts?
Matt :wait..something is wrong
Man in black h you leveled up from thing to exist
Sora :why you!*can't move his hand*!!!!my...hand!
Man in black h you have an interesting thing
Sora :ugh!*try to move his hand*
Man in black :let's see *grab sora head*
Sora :UAGH!
Man in black :hold *pull sora head*
Sora :UAGH! STOP.....IT!!!
Man in black :ahh i get it *pull sora and then another head appear*
Matt :!!!
Kaito :......
Man in black pull Roxas out of sora*
Sora :!!!!!
Man in black trhow roxas into a tree*now stay there quietly
Sora :ugh....i can't hold....on*faint*
Man in black h is that make you tired?what a weak
Matt :WHO THE HELL ARE YOU?!
Man in black :me?i'm doctor hollowor-
Kaito :known as the creator
Dr. Hollow :AH!we met again....twilight!
Matt :what?
Kaito :......
to be continued

[rockman]

no secondary but i'm still looking for someone who want to teach me