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Old 10/24/07, 08:11 PM   #61
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I'm patiently waiting too!
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Old 10/24/07, 08:22 PM   #62
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thanks LS. i think im done so here it is. hope you guys like it. i gave it my all. hehe..

Chapter 9

“Wake up Neloangelo. It is time.” Mitsunare woke Nelo at the crack of dawn for the training session. Nelo’s head was spinning and his body ached. The encounter with Bijomaru’s men the day before took a lot out of him.
Nelo looked at Mitsunare and saw that he wore nothing but jet black baggy samurai trousers and his sandals. He had a muscular body but there were scars over.

“War wounds Neloangelo,” he said at a gaping Nelo. “I have fought in many battles and fought many opponents. These are battle scars. I’m sure you’ve got some too. Come on get ready and meet me outside.”

The morning sun blazed like a ball of fury. But the calm winds blew from beneath the ocean below making for a perfect weather.
Nelo stood in the middle of the grassy plains in front of Mitsunare's little home. He wasn’t wearing his cloak just his black leather tank top like vest and black leather like pants. Then Mitsunare appeared with an assortment of weapons.

“Woooow, look boss at all the weapons. He’s going to teach you all of those styles?

Amazing,” said a shocked Mogi.

“Hmm…so, what weapon am I going to be using,” said Nelo eyeing a beautiful dragon headed spear.

“These,” smirked Mitsunare throwing a pair of egg cups at Nelo.

“These?” said a bemused Nelo.

“Yes.”

“You’re kidding me right. What about that spear, I figure I can handle that.”

“You will handle what I tell you. Now show, me your ability.” Then Mitsunare selected the golden dragon headed spear.

“Hmm…The Sky Scorcher. This brings back some memories I’d rather forget.

***

In the castle the men were still celebrating. Bijomaru now started to get angry and blood boiled inside him. Neloangelo was still alive.
Suddenly he got up and the whole room fell silent. They all stopped feasting and bowed at their master.
Bijomaru glared at them all, examining them all slowly with his flaming red eyes. His face had a cold, intense look.

“All of you dine and drink pleased with your victory over meaningless villages, take pleasure from defeating unarmed civilians. But what has that accomplished, my enemies still walk this earth! You have failed!

The men remained silent and a lot of them were scared stiff.

“Earlier tonight,” Bijomaru said in a fuming voice, “fifty of you imbeciles fought one lone warrior in the middle of a forest. Fifty of you against one man and you could not kill him. You come back saying the archers attacked so you fled for your lives! COWARDS!!”

Bijomaru’s rage could be felt by all, they feared for their lives. He knew very well that they had no chance against Neloangelo, the man who had defeated him, but he wanted to take out all his rage on them nevertheless.

“You must be punished. Ghoda!” he turned his general Ghoda.

Ghoda drew a dark misty black curtain from behind the throne of Bijomaru. Around twenty of his men were hanging half dead of nooses. It was the remaining soldiers who fled from the forest.
Their bodies were broken, beaten, blooded and some were beaten up so bad they longer looked human. They all were miraculously alive though.

“Ghoda! Show them what we do to cowards.”

The behemoth man took off his cloak and chest plate. His ferocious looking muscular body made some of the men gasp. He put down his sword and the headband that was still in his hand. He cracked his fists together and got into his God Fist stance.

“RARGHH!” with a mighty swing of his fist he crushed the skull of the first man. He gave a thunderous shoulder barge to the next breaking his ribs in two. The man gave an unearthly scream that struck the blood cold of the watching army.
He gave two huge blows to the abdomen of another two then a furious spinning back kick to another sending him flying into the back wall so fast that his head remained hanging on the noose. Blood oozed down from his neck.

The other men on the nooses begged and pleaded for their lives.
Ghoda’s face remained motionless. His eyes stared coldly at them. Though they were his men he knew he had to kill them or he would be dead.

With a mighty roar he unleashed wave after wave thunderous blows to each men. Elbows, knees, headbutts and shoulder barges crushed them all in one blow. The screams were at breaking point. All the men watched in fear as the saw blood and bones flying past their faces.

“Enough!”

Bijomaru then walked towards his throne. He picked up his blade and unsheathed it slowly. As he did so, the singing of the metal made the entire men shiver and the hairs on the back of their head stood.

He paced slowly towards the remaining men.

“You have served me well, but I detest cowards.” With that said, with amazing speed, he slashed all of them across the neck in a split second. He stood silently with his eyes closed, and his blade held high to his side. Blood dripped from its tip. The men watched in a fearful awe. He sheathed his blade leisurely, as soon as the hilt of the blade met the end of the sheath the heads of the men fell to the ground with a thud, blood poured out their necks.

“Bury their bodies.”

Ghoda called a few of the knights and they picked up the remaining pieces.

Bijomaru turned to the knights and spoke, “The man they ran away from…his name is Neloangelo. Remember that name, remember his cape. They call him the Crimson Warrior.”

As soon as he said that, the men started murmuring to each other. “The Crimson Warrior? Was he not the one that defeated our master? He’s still alive?”

“Silence! Yes The Crimson Warrior still lives. For ten years he has walked this earth and in my absence you have done nothing! But…you weren’t to know some of you might say. You thought he was dead…hmm…so did I. but now I am back and this time I will kill him for good.”
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Old 10/24/07, 08:30 PM   #63
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Nice, it's very good! That Bojimaru is scary, I can't wait for the next!

And you changed you sig! I like it!
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Old 10/24/07, 08:40 PM   #64
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thanks LS. glad you liked it.
ye thought it was time for a change of sig and avvy.
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Old 10/24/07, 09:10 PM   #65
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It was really good nelo, i can tell u really put thought into it ^^
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Old 10/24/07, 09:17 PM   #66
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thanks raye. that means a lot
i cant wait for your one.
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Old 10/24/07, 09:22 PM   #67
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i actually had a dream about good chapters last night! i gotta write them down......
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Old 10/24/07, 09:24 PM   #68
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Great as always Nelo, good job.
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Old 10/24/07, 09:24 PM   #69
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really? woah taht means we're gonna get some pretty good chapers.
nice.

thanks man haku. appreciate it. sorry bout the wait too.
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Old 10/24/07, 09:26 PM   #70
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yup! i dont want to tell yet its a "secret"........
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Old 10/24/07, 09:35 PM   #71
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aw cmon tell me. heheh ok ill wait.
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Old 10/24/07, 09:47 PM   #72
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yes wait! it will make u fall out ur chair! lol
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Old 10/24/07, 09:55 PM   #73
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O.O gotta see taht then. hehehehe......
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Old 10/24/07, 09:57 PM   #74
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lol yea its really good, but this is ur fanfic not mine ^^
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Old 11/14/07, 02:42 PM   #75
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apologies for no new update yet. im workin on it as we speak.
been quite busy with stuff. thanks guys for bein patient.
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