The Tale of a Villian - Page 2

**Haku** · July 18th, 2007, 10:15 PM

Another well thought out and put together chapter good job.

Ultima Star · July 19th, 2007, 03:10 AM

I tell you what...this rocks! I'm such a romantic...

it was so beautiful..tell me when you write the next chapter^^

iloveyou502 · July 19th, 2007, 04:02 AM

Thanks foreverkingdom. Your compliments havent gone unnoticed. You too, Haku, ansemjafar, lycian wolfe, and hikari 713. But Haku reads like EVERYBODY's fanfic. lol.

Ultima Star · July 19th, 2007, 04:33 AM

Glad to hear you read our comments^^ your story it's so beautiful..when are you posting the next chapter?

iloveyou502 · July 19th, 2007, 04:38 AM

Probably like tomorrow I already have it half written. That's another thing people I dont mind you badgering me about chapters its motivation if you ask me. [ Not like a whole bunch of people read this but still.] And if someone wouldn't mind posting after me so I dont double post tomorrow that would be nice.

Ultima Star · July 20th, 2007, 04:44 AM

Well I'm posting after you then, so that you don't double post^^ hope this helps^^

**Haku** · July 20th, 2007, 05:05 AM

I can't wait to see how the next chapter turns out xD.

**ansemjafar** · July 20th, 2007, 09:21 AM

That was a good chapter. I enjoyed it.

iloveyou502 · July 22nd, 2007, 11:29 PM

Sorry I haven't updated in a while. I just got the new Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows so I've been in my room for a while lol.
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Part Three

Despite Gabriel's criticisms I continued to spend time with Drea. I found out alot about her in the weeks following her little confession. It turns out she had always had feelings for me but she'd been afraid to tell me in fear of ruining our friendship. She confided in me that her parents were always either mean to her or just flat out ignored her and I was her only friend. That getting to play with me were the highlights of her life.
Her life. She said it not me.
It turns out that we even had the same dream. She too wanted to get out of Melrose Corpse. She wanted to escape the restrictions it had on women. She told me that she wanted to get out there and BE something.
At first when she started talking about marriage and love I would put her down gently. But soon, I don't know when it happened, but I stopped resisting and even embraced the idea of us being together. I found myself being overjoyed when when I saw her waiting for me after school. It was like I was going down in a pit of quick sand and I wasn't trying to stop it or even wanted it to stop.
Drea and I would spend hours talking by the pond. About a month and a half after it happend I told her about the woman in the forest.
She took my hand in hers. " It's probably just some crazy wandering around. Don't worry about it. Everybody eventually goes crazy living here."
I laughed, but that didn't soothe me. " She knew my name. "
" Anyone passing by could learn your name. She probably just heard your mother calling you into the cottage or something simple. Don't sweat it. "
" Yeah..." I agreed. That made me feel a little better.
She hopped up. " Come on let's get back before everyone gets suspicious. " She grabbed my hand and pulled me up.
In the yard in front of our cottages Gabe was tossing a ball around. He looked up when he saw me and Drea. He suddenly made a face as if experiencing an epiphany.
" Drea! Can I see you for a moment? "
She glanced at me a moment but all I did was glare at Gabe. Not this one you don't. I thought bitterly.
" Uh...sure. " She said in a shaky voice. I had told her all about how he'd "stolen" countless dates from me.
I gripped her arm. " Drea..."
" It's alright. You know you're the only one for me. " she squeezed my hand and walked over to Gabe.
He said something quietly that I couldn't hear. Drea said something back. He said something. It went on like that for a few moments, and eventually the encounter ended with Drea rolling her eyes and coming to kiss me goodbye before heading into her cottage. I rounded on Gabriel immediately.
" You better not have tried anything. " I said coldly.
" I didn't. I'm not sick like you going after a little girl. "
I crossed my arms over my chest and he went into the house. I soon followed.
I tried and tried to ask Drea what they had been talking about but she wouldn't tell me. Eventually I gave up deciding that it didn't matter.
For the next three weeks or so everything was fine and normal. But then, everything changed.....

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Okay honestly I thought that part was boring but you can be the judge of that. I just had to give some background to the relationship.

Ultima Star · July 22nd, 2007, 11:52 PM

First Comment!!
Well it was beautiful as always I like how is the relationship between Drea and CAssidy..I like how Cassidy acts^^
It's just so beautiful

lightdark · July 23rd, 2007, 12:52 AM

Interesting story, I noticed some spelling mistakes but other than that it was pretty good.

Hikari713 · July 23rd, 2007, 02:22 AM

YAY YAY YAY great job i absolutely love it and that was not boring and as my awesome buddy foreverkingdom put it: "It's just so beautiful

"

Ultima Star · July 23rd, 2007, 02:33 AM

XD lol..but indeed..it's reall beautiful

**ansemjafar** · July 23rd, 2007, 01:40 PM

I enjjoyed the chapter. I wonder what the two of them talked about.

**Haku** · July 23rd, 2007, 02:09 PM

Awesome chapter update soon xD.

July 19th, 2007, 04:02 AM	#18
iloveyou502 Ruler of Light Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Battling my inner demons....and winning thank you very much, sir. Age: 16 Posts: 554 Rep Power: 3 Level: EXP:	Re: The Tale of a Villian Thanks foreverkingdom. Your compliments havent gone unnoticed. You too, Haku, ansemjafar, lycian wolfe, and hikari 713. But Haku reads like EVERYBODY's fanfic. lol.

July 19th, 2007, 04:38 AM	#20
iloveyou502 Ruler of Light Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Battling my inner demons....and winning thank you very much, sir. Age: 16 Posts: 554 Rep Power: 3 Level: EXP:	Re: The Tale of a Villian Probably like tomorrow I already have it half written. That's another thing people I dont mind you badgering me about chapters its motivation if you ask me. [ Not like a whole bunch of people read this but still.] And if someone wouldn't mind posting after me so I dont double post tomorrow that would be nice.

July 22nd, 2007, 11:29 PM	#24
iloveyou502 Ruler of Light Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Battling my inner demons....and winning thank you very much, sir. Age: 16 Posts: 554 Rep Power: 3 Level: EXP:	Re: The Tale of a Villian Sorry I haven't updated in a while. I just got the new Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows so I've been in my room for a while lol. _____________________________________________________________________________________ Part Three Despite Gabriel's criticisms I continued to spend time with Drea. I found out alot about her in the weeks following her little confession. It turns out she had always had feelings for me but she'd been afraid to tell me in fear of ruining our friendship. She confided in me that her parents were always either mean to her or just flat out ignored her and I was her only friend. That getting to play with me were the highlights of her life. Her life. She said it not me. It turns out that we even had the same dream. She too wanted to get out of Melrose Corpse. She wanted to escape the restrictions it had on women. She told me that she wanted to get out there and BE something. At first when she started talking about marriage and love I would put her down gently. But soon, I don't know when it happened, but I stopped resisting and even embraced the idea of us being together. I found myself being overjoyed when when I saw her waiting for me after school. It was like I was going down in a pit of quick sand and I wasn't trying to stop it or even wanted it to stop. Drea and I would spend hours talking by the pond. About a month and a half after it happend I told her about the woman in the forest. She took my hand in hers. " It's probably just some crazy wandering around. Don't worry about it. Everybody eventually goes crazy living here." I laughed, but that didn't soothe me. " She knew my name. " " Anyone passing by could learn your name. She probably just heard your mother calling you into the cottage or something simple. Don't sweat it. " " Yeah..." I agreed. That made me feel a little better. She hopped up. " Come on let's get back before everyone gets suspicious. " She grabbed my hand and pulled me up. In the yard in front of our cottages Gabe was tossing a ball around. He looked up when he saw me and Drea. He suddenly made a face as if experiencing an epiphany. " Drea! Can I see you for a moment? " She glanced at me a moment but all I did was glare at Gabe. Not this one you don't. I thought bitterly. " Uh...sure. " She said in a shaky voice. I had told her all about how he'd "stolen" countless dates from me. I gripped her arm. " Drea..." " It's alright. You know you're the only one for me. " she squeezed my hand and walked over to Gabe. He said something quietly that I couldn't hear. Drea said something back. He said something. It went on like that for a few moments, and eventually the encounter ended with Drea rolling her eyes and coming to kiss me goodbye before heading into her cottage. I rounded on Gabriel immediately. " You better not have tried anything. " I said coldly. " I didn't. I'm not sick like you going after a little girl. " I crossed my arms over my chest and he went into the house. I soon followed. I tried and tried to ask Drea what they had been talking about but she wouldn't tell me. Eventually I gave up deciding that it didn't matter. For the next three weeks or so everything was fine and normal. But then, everything changed..... _____________________________________________________________________________________ Okay honestly I thought that part was boring but you can be the judge of that. I just had to give some background to the relationship. Last edited by iloveyou502; July 23rd, 2007 at 11:17 PM.

July 23rd, 2007, 12:52 AM	#26
lightdark Member Join Date: May 2007 Age: 20 Posts: 105 Rep Power: 3 Level: EXP:	Re: The Tale of a Villian Interesting story, I noticed some spelling mistakes but other than that it was pretty good.

July 23rd, 2007, 02:22 AM	#27
Hikari713 Organization Member Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: Hiding. Who ever finds me first gets a cookie! Age: 17 Posts: 381 Rep Power: 3 Level: EXP:	Re: The Tale of a Villian YAY YAY YAY great job i absolutely love it and that was not boring and as my awesome buddy foreverkingdom put it: "It's just so beautiful"

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