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Old 04/17/08, 10:46 PM   #181
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hehe, you're the Princess of cliffhangers^^ nice chapters!
'Princess of cliffhangers'...i like it! ^^ lol
Sorry i haven't posted another chappie in a while. I've been BUSY.
Anyways, here's thenext chappie...in just a sec. I forgot which one is next!
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Old 04/17/08, 10:57 PM   #182
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Ok, so next chappie is here!
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Chappie 43

“Wait! I’m coming with you!” Kiari yelled after Anna and Melanie, who were now out the doors. She grabbed Sora’s hand and ran after them. “Wait. Some one needs to stay here. Shadow’s coming back, and what if Riku comes back when we’re gone?” Anna said after she turned around to face Sora and Kiari. “Anna and I have to go, of course. So it’s either one of you two. You choose.” Melanie pointed a delicate finger at Sora and Kiari. Sora looked at Kiari. “I don’t want to get stuck alone again.” Kiari said quietly.

Sora didn’t want to leave her alone, either. He didn’t even want to leave her at all. “I think we’ll be okay if we go alone. You two stay here, okay?” Anna said, seeing their reluctance to parting again. “Okay. Be careful, though. If something happens to you, Riku’s gonna kill me.” Sora looked at Anna. “Then I won’t let anything happen.” She smiled. Melanie started walking down the hall, and Anna ran after her.

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“So how are we supposed to do this?” Anna and Melanie stood on a balcony, looking at Kingdom Hearts. All around them, everything looked old, broken down, and dirty. “What’s your most powerful attack using your light?” Melanie asked in reply. “I have no clue.” Anna sighed. “Just think about what you want to do. You want to get rid of the darkness in Kingdom Hearts. Think about light; your light. The light within your heart; use it as a weapon. It’s easy, I promise.” Melanie held out her hand, and in it, her keyblade appeared. Anna did the same, and she grasped the handle firmly, nervous about what was going to happen next.

“Alright, like I said, this is really easy. Just let the light out of your heart.” Melanie closed her eyes, and she started to glow. Not a bright glow, but a dark glow. Anna closed her eyes and thought about freeing Kingdom Hearts; about forcing the darkness out of it. She felt herself rising slowly, but she didn’t open her eyes. She thought her hardest about releasing the light in her heart. She pointed her keyblade towards Kingdom Hearts and opened her eyes. She saw that her keyblade was glowing brightly, and she noticed that she was glowing just as bright as her keyblade.

“On the count of three, shoot at it.” Melanie said with an emotionless voice. Anna looked over to find that Melanie was about fifteen feet off the ground, and Anna realized that she was just as high off the ground as well. Melanie’s eyes were glowing dark purple, but somehow, they were still bright as ever. She was glowing dark purple and black, and she had large dark purple angel wings. The wings kind of let off a glow, but Anna guessed that it was just because Melanie herself was glowing. Melanie looked at Anna and smiled. She motioned for Anna to look at herself. Anna looked down at herself to see she was glowing too; it was the same kind of glow she had before when she used her light. But this time it was much, much brighter. She thought she saw something white out of the corner of her eye, and she turned her head to see what it was. Anna stared at what she saw. She saw part of a large angel wing, and it was coming from her back. She looked to her other side to see another wing. She smiled like a happy little kid, and then remembered she had to keep focusing on the task at hand.

“Anna, I need to tell you something before we do this.” Anna looked at Melanie. “You have to be really careful when you release your light. You have to figure out how much darkness is in Kingdom Hearts, and then you have to use the same amount of light to force it out. If you use too much light, the balance in Kingdom Hearts will get messed up.” Anna nodded and looked back at Kingdom Hearts. “Ready?” Melanie asked as she looked back at Kingdom Hearts, also. “Yea.” They both held their keyblades up to Kingdom Hearts and when Melanie said “Now”, Melanie shot her darkness, and Anna shot her light.

Anna watched in amazement as Kingdom Hearts started to glow. Then, suddenly, she saw light and darkness shoot out of it at the same time. The darkness and light disappeared, and Kingdom Hearts looked normal again.

“Is it over? Do you think it worked?” Anna turned around to face Melanie as she asked, but she didn’t see her. She suddenly heard a thump, and looked down. Melanie was lying on the floor, motionless.
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Old 04/17/08, 11:04 PM   #183
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Another dramatic event lol, wonder what actually happened to cause Melanie to faint so once again you've stuck us with a cliffhanger but nevertheless well done.
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Old 04/18/08, 02:32 AM   #184
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Another cliffy... They should call you the 'Princess of Cliffhangers'
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Old 04/18/08, 08:16 PM   #185
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Maybe they should call me that, KH Fanatic. Idk who 'they' are, though! lol Here's the next chappie - enjoy! I should have the next one up on Monday.

Chappie 44

“Melanie!” Anna dropped to the ground beside Melanie and looked at her. She wasn’t hurt, but she wasn’t awake. “Melanie, wake up! Melanie, come on, you have to wake up!” However, Melanie couldn’t hear her. Melanie’s wings disappeared and she stopped glowing. Her keyblade had already vanished. Anna grabbed her wrist and checked her pulse. It was low.

“Just lock it! I’ll be fine; I can get out!” Anna looked around. She heard someone yelling farther off. She looked back at Melanie and tried to figure out what to do. “Maybe I can open a portal again.” She thought out loud. She stood up and walked a few steps away from Melanie. She closed her eyes and held out her hand. She thought about the room in Maleficent’s castle, and she opened her eyes to see a portal.

Anna quickly walked back over to Melanie and tried to somehow pick her up. That didn’t work out very well, so Anna had to drag Melanie through the portal. When Anna got inside the portal, she laid Melanie back on the floor and looked around. Sora and Kiari weren’t there. “Nothing like this ever goes as planned.” She sighed.

She got out her keyblade and tried to help Melanie by using Curaga on her a few times, but it didn’t seem to help a lot. Anna sat down and let her keyblade disappear. She didn’t know what to do. “Anna! What’s wrong with Melanie?” Sora and Kiari ran through the doors. “I don’t know. Her heartbeat’s really slow, and I already did Curaga a few times.” Anna looked up at them. “Could you guys watch her? I need to go back to The World that Never Was. I heard someone else there.” Sora and Kiari exchanged glances of surprise. “Okay. If you’re sure you heard someone.” Sora said as he bent down beside Melanie. “Be right back.” Anna turned around, opened a portal, and walked in.

“Why did she have wings? Did you see them too? She had angel wings, and she was glowing again.” Kiari said, as she looked at the spot the portal had just been. “I wasn’t really paying any attention.” Sora said as he looked up. “Well, I wasn’t imagining. Where do you think Riku is?” Sora thought about the question Kiari asked. “I don’t know.”

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“You could’ve ruled over Kingdom Hearts someday. You could’ve been like a son to me. You had so much potential. Why did you waste it all?”

Anna walked slowly down the walkway. She heard what she was positive to be Maleficent’s voice, and the clanking of weapons. “I still have potential; just not the kind you have in mind. And why the heck would I want to be your son?” Anna knew that was Riku. She ran to where she heard the voices come from.

“So your friend has come to share your fate?” Maleficent smiled wickedly as she pushed Riku’s keyblade off of her staff. Riku shot ice at her and jerked around. A dew yards back stood Anna, keyblade in hand. “What are you doing here?!” Riku looked as if he were almost scared. He feared Anna would get hurt, and this is the last place he wanted her to be.
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Old 04/18/08, 08:21 PM   #186
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Ok that was SUPER short, so i'll post the next one up, since it's short, too. Hope you like it!

Chappie 45

“What do you think i'm doing here?!” Anna said as she ran up beside him and stood in her fighting stance. By this time, Maleficent was about to use magic against Riku, but she stopped when she saw Anna get into her fighting stance. “Foolish children. You will both die together!” Maleficent cackled. The tip of her staff started to glow, and it produced a small ball of dark magic. She shot it at Anna, but Anna easily deflected it. Riku took the chance to attack and used it. He charged at Maleficent with the most speed Anna had ever seen out of him. In two seconds, Maleficent and Riku were back in their brawl, and Anna could do nothing but watch. She would get in Riku’s way, or she would accidentally hit him, so she stayed put.

About seven minutes later, Maleficent turned into her dragon form. Anna watched with wide eyes. Riku, however, didn’t stop at all. He kept attacking relentlessly, and after awhile, Maleficent started to wear down. She turned back to her normal form, but kept fighting. Riku would have been exhausted by now, but his adrenaline was so high that he didn’t get tired. He was out of breath most of the time, but didn’t stop.

Maleficent fell to knees as she gasped for air. Riku pointed his keyblade to her and ran full speed at her. He shoved his keyblade through her body, and Maleficent was completely still. Her eyes opened widely and she stopped breathing for a moment. Then she managed to take some breaths before pulling Riku’s keyblade from her body. Maleficent tried to stand up, but she couldn’t. Riku stepped back some and stood still. Anna stood too, just like she had been doing since she saw them. Then Anna turned around when she thought she heard something farther off behind her. It sounded like people running their way.

Suddenly, Maleficent found strength what little strength was left in her. She used that small amount of strength to trust her staff towards Anna like it was a spear, and this spear was thrown with the intention to kill. “No!” Riku yelled as he ran towards Anna. Anna turned around when she heard him, but all she saw was Riku diving in front of her. Riku fell to the ground slid a few yards. Anna’s eyes burned with anger as she saw Riku on the ground. Anna quickly shot a blast of light at Maleficent, and Maleficent collapsed on the ground, then Anna ran over to Riku and knelt down. Riku was on his stomach, but she didn’t dare turn him over. When he had fell on the ground, the staff had pushed though his body, and now it stuck out of his back.

“Riku! Riku, I’ll get you some help, okay?” Anna felt hot tears roll down her face. Riku didn’t reply. She looked at where the staff surfaced from his body. Blood now covered most of his back, and the blood was still running from the wound. Anna used Curaga on him a few times, but it didn’t help at all, not that she could see. Anna opened a portal back to Maleficent’s castle, and slowly drug Riku through.

When she finally got through the portal, she didn’t even say a word to Sora or Kiari. She just fell down to Riku’s side and checked his heartbeat. It was pretty low. “What happened?!” Sora asked, his mouth gaping. “Sora, use Curaga, now.” Kiari suddenly said. Sora whipped out his keyblade and used Curaga on Riku a few times. “As soon as you can do it again, use it on him.” Kiari instructed. “Melanie’s still unconscious, so she can’t heal him. We’re going to do the best we can for Riku, okay, Anna?” Kiari knelt down beside Anna. Kiari saw tears fall from Anna’s face onto Riku. Anna was awkwardly hugging Riku, trying not to touch the staff protruding from his body. “Sora, how do you do Curaga? Teach me.” Kiari stood up and got her keyblade out. “Well, you just…” Sora went on explaining how to use the magic. Anna tried to think of something that would help Riku. She couldn’t do Curaga again, not yet. Melanie couldn’t heal him because she was unconscious. Ann couldn’t think of anything at all. She couldn’t do anything to help him or Melanie. None of them could do anything.
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Great chappies! I loved them both! So much suspence, and another cliffy!



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Yeah, idk who 'they' are either. Just think of 'they' as anybody :toungesmile:

Edit: Princess of KH, I wanted to know when you think you will be posting the pics of Anna and stuffs.

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Old 04/19/08, 11:56 PM   #188
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Very well done, oh Princess of Cliffhangers!
Now I'm part of 'they', aren't I? For some reason, I don't like that... It sounds so unpersonal...
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For some reason, I don't like that... It sounds so unpersonal...

Hmm... We should all make up some kind of nickname then, eh? I actually like 'they' better than a lot of other nicknames I've heard :unsure:
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Old 04/21/08, 11:28 PM   #190
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ughhh im so mad i didnt get read those chappie's yet but that was beautiful
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Old 04/21/08, 11:34 PM   #191
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ughhh im so mad i didnt get read those chappie's yet but that was beautiful
Lol, I read the chappies not long after the 'Princess of cliffhangers' posted them. They were amazing. I'm anxiously waiting for the next chappie.
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Old 04/22/08, 12:13 AM   #192
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Lol yeah that's going to be your new nickname since just about all of your chapters nowadays have been cliffhangers but they all add a wonderful twist to the next installment, which is what makes them more exciting XD.

But your previous two chapters have been two more excellent new editions keep up the excellent work.
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Old 04/22/08, 05:34 PM   #193
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I'm working on the pics of Anna, & i'm also going to put up a pic of Melanie, too. I'm almost done with Melanie's pic, & i'm about halfway done w/ Anna's pic. I just don't have a ton of time to work on them. But i will get them done...eventually lol.

If you guys need a general name, why don't you just call yourselves something like "Destiny's Fate readers"? Idk but idc, either.
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Coolness, I can't wait to see the pics!

Waiting for next chappie... Waiting... Waiting... Ah! I can't wait for the next chappie! I'm gonna make me some ramen
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I thought i put up the chappie...hmm, guess it didn't work! Ok, well, here it is!

Chapter 46

“Where’s Melanie?” Everyone turned around to see who broke the silence. A man with spiky, flaming red hair ran through the doors, breathing heavily. “I don’t have time to explain why I’m here, and you don’t have time to listen. Where is she?”

“She’s right here, but she’s.... sorta, dying.” Kairi was the only one who could find the voice to answer. Sora was too shocked at Axel’s being there, and Anna was still trying not to cry.

“Why are you here?” This time, Axel turned around to see Shadow standing in the doorway. “Melanie’s dying. Why do you think I’m here?” Shadow’s eyes started to show anger, and he stared at Axel for a moment. “Do either of you know how to heal her at all? Her or Riku?” Kairi asked them quickly. “No.” Axel replied. Shadow shook his head.

“Let me take her with me.” Axel turned around and walked over to Melanie. “Never.” Shadow stood still. Sora and Kiari’s eyes widened as they saw Axel turn from calm to angry. “This isn’t about us! It has nothing to do with us! This is Melanie we’re talking about! She’s your sister; you don’t want to watch her die, do you?! You can kill me later, just let me take her to get her some help! She’ll die we don’t do something!” Axel yelled.

Hearing Axel yell made Anna look up. She saw Sora and Kairi staring at Axel, who was glaring at Shadow. Shadow looked at him with emotionless eyes. “Go. Now.”

Axel knelt down and picked Melanie up carefully. He stood up slowly and opened a portal. “Somebody get Riku and come with me. He won’t make it much longer either.” Anna looked back down at Riku. The wound had turned black, and the blackness was slowly spreading out from where the staff was. “Where are you going?” Anna sat up straight. “Traverse Town; the hospital.” Anna nodded. She turned her head and held out her hand. A portal opened a few feet away. When Axel saw that she could get Riku there through her portal, he walked through his portal, holding Melanie in his arms.

Sora ran over to Anna and knelt down beside Riku. He awkwardly manages to Pick Riku up. Kairi walked over and helped Anna up. “He’ll be okay.” Kairi whispered to Anna as they turned around to the portal.

“You coming?” Sora asked Shadow over his shoulder. “No. Just promise me you’ll do something for me.” “Sure.” Sora replied. “Tell Melanie I’m sorry for everything. Tell her to stay out of trouble. And tell Axel that he was right about everything.” And with that, Shadow walked out the doors. “Axel’s waiting for us. Let’s go.” Kairi said as she walked through the portal. Sora walked in after her, and Anna walked beside him, gently holding Riku’s limp hand.

When they walked into Traverse Town, they found themselves standing in front of a large hospital. “Where’s Axel?” Sora asked as he looked around. Axel wasn’t there. There were lots of people walking around them, but no Axel. “He’s inside, probably.” Anna said as she walked towards the hospital entrance. Sora followed closely so Anna could keep a hold on Riku’s hand, and Kairi walked in after them.
When they got inside, they quickly made their way to the front desk. They had to weave in and out of the constant flow of people walking around them. “Hello, how may I help – oh my, I’ll call the ER right away.” An elderly woman they guessed to be the secretary sat behind the desk. She reached for the phone as soon as she saw Riku’s condition, but Sora told her not to worry about him. “He needs to be worried about; look at him! He has a spear through his body! How long ago was he wounded?” The woman was extremely concerned, even more so now that she noticed there wasn’t an adult with them. “He’s gonna be fine; really. We just need to know if you’ve seen a guy with red hair carrying a girl with long black hair recently.”

The woman looked at him strangely. “Yes, I have. But the boy you’re holding needs help now. I can get him some help.” Sora sighed. This lady was taking up precious time. “Ma’am, our friend, the man with the red hair; he’s expecting us. He’s going to help us.”

The woman sighed. “Alright, then. Just go find him; he said he was going to the healing wing. He also said if some kids came looking for him, to say that he was going to room 567A.” She said again and told them to hurry. Then she went back to her work.

“If we get somewhere where people won’t see us, I can open a portal to wherever that room is.” Anna whispered. Sora and Kairi nodded and they walked into the closest elevator. When they all got inside, Anna opened a portal as fast as she could and they all walked through. When they got to the other side, they found themselves facing a door. They looked down the long hallway and saw that there was no one there to have seen them appear. Kairi opened the door in front of her, guessing it was the room Axel was in.
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