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Old 06/21/07, 06:21 AM   #31
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i liked how you put in Cowboy Bebop...i never really payed any attention to it but it was creative in your story. nice work i cant wait to read more.
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Old 06/21/07, 06:57 AM   #32
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Okay, now its going some where.....to bad I don't watch Cowboy Bebop...
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Old 06/21/07, 07:08 AM   #33
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^i'm not alone!! lol

what other shows are you going to put into your story?
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Old 06/21/07, 08:02 AM   #34
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To be honest I really don't watch Cowboy Bebop either! I've only seen like 'key episodes' >_< but hopefully I'll do it justice

Oh, and the shows that are comming are basically all anime based so hopefully I'll strike one of yalls interests, and also there are two that don't deal with anime or disney at all, I thought about putting more of those "Free Lancers" in, but this story is long enough as it is! Also the disney worlds will make an appearance too ^-^
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Old 06/21/07, 08:29 AM   #35
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Well I still really enjoyed the last chapter, and I can't wait to hear what happens soon.
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Old 06/21/07, 04:10 PM   #36
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wow, good chapter
Is that short?!? my chapter aren't half that long...
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Old 06/22/07, 06:17 AM   #37
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....Well, on microsoft word it looked short XD!
Anywho I thank-you for yall's comments! Today I didn't have much to do, and I surprised myself by actually polishing all chapter 2! It's a doozy, so please grab some milk and a cookie, and enjoy, thanks ^-^
and this time, eh, I'm gonna apologixe if it's too long >_<


Disclaimer: Ah it cursing again, blah, blah, Edited like so -> **** blah, blah, only the"d" and "h" words are said, blah, blah

Ch. 2 Misfortune misses its target

"Is this the real life? Or is this just fantasy? Caught in a landslide–no escape from reality." - Queen "Bohemian Rhapsody”

“Why did he forget what he just went through? Was there a wrinkle when he crossed over?”

“No, something as traumatic as what he went through, he’d want those memories to be unlinked to him, however when he remembers them in his sleep, they will become a permanent part of him.”

“Poor kid. The other two, have they surfaced yet?”

“No, but the Deities have discovered that they are in an in-between realm.”

“And the Protection that their King managed to place, how long will its effect last?”

“I’m not sure, under the circumstances that he performed the Wish, a time limit was not given, so it is up to Deos’ design to sort it out.”

“Well, the important thing is that they’re safe-”

“Safe from what? That Protection saves them from Nefero, South Light, and Lady of Red, but it does nothing for the other dangers or the Riders for that matter.”

“This system is huge Seritouge, they will not be alone, they’re strong, and if the Riders rear their ugly heads, hiding them won’t be a problem, they can’t sense entities.”

“But Nefero can, and when the Protection wears off then they will be up against four adversaries that want them anything but alive.”

...

Memory, by memory, Sora remembered it all in his sustained sleep. The voices outside his head were only blurs as he internally recalled his ordeal.

"You found him where again?" asked Jet rubbing his eyes.

"(Sigh) Ed found him by the spot where the shooting star supposedly hit, in a small room, on a bed of sparkly feathers,” she repeated.

"That explains the twinkle trail," said Spike.

"You don't actually believe this boy rode in on a shooting star do you?" said Faye giving a ‘duh’ look.

"Well, lets look at the facts," said Spike sitting up, "Bebop has not docked in about a month, no way this boy could survive on this ship that long, without being seen, living on the scraps we throw away, if any, or the trash that’s in the ice hangers. Number two, no way he held onto any of our ships as we flew home from our recent escapade, and number three, he just so happened to appear after the shooting star came by."

Jet was still rubbing his eyes, "Well he can't have appeared from thin air," he mumbled.

"I still thinks he's an alien,” Ed grumbled.

"Hell, with that get-up he may be," said Faye peeking at Sora's top, "That kind of wardrobe comes from a galaxy far, far away."

"Well what are we gonna do with him?" Spike tossed.

Sora’s bracelet caught Faye’s attention and she held up his limp arm to read it -

"I bet you could get your Lovshiel soap with that," Spike huffed.

"Shut it, I’m not gonna steal it, (*tug*) it won’t come off any way, ooh, we have a name -"

"Mh?"

-"looks like this kid's name is Sora," said Faye setting down his arm, "With jewelry like this he probably comes from a high rise place, perhaps he's a missing child; people offer big rewards for kids."

"Ed, do a search on missing kids named Sora," said Jet.

"Okay search programs, workity the work works!"

"I dunno, looks more like a run-a-way to me," said Spike, he noticed a tear run down the side of Sora's face. "Look at all these cuts and scrapes on his arms and legs, obviously this kid was trying to get away from something." Ed stayed silent of the dragging ordeal, and typed away hiding her guilty look.

"Either way, if he has a price, he's going back," said Faye.

"Ding!"

"What do you have?" Everyone crowded around as Ed scrolled down with none of the pictures matching Sora's face.

"Mmmmh, do a search on bounties for people named Sora." Again the search turned up empty.

"Well at least he's clean as a bell," said Jet.

"So, what should we do with him?" asked Faye.

Ed jumped up, "Can we keep him?!"

"Keep him?"

"He's not a pet Ed," said Spike.

"But wait a minute, we still don't know how he got on board," said Jet rubbing his eyes, then he chuckled, "and I'm not the type for adopting aliens."

"Whelp, he's here now, whose know and who cares how he got on board," said Spike, "but that’s still somethin' though, Ed finding him on a blanket of feathers..." The silence was broken by Sora waking up. "Hey there.”

Sora's memory was caught up to speed and he absorbed all around him, *Have I been sent to another place like Traverse Town?* Sora rubbed his eyes....."Where am I?"

"You are aboard the S.S. Bebop, one of finest ships sailing through out the wide intervals of space," said Jet.

"I'm sure 'the Bebop' would have sufficed Jet," Spike muttered lazily.

"Where are you from little one?" said Faye all motherly; Spike turned away his head away in silent laughter.

"I'm from Destiny Islands," said Sora as he forced himself up, "Have yall ever heard of them?"

Spike, Jet, Faye, and Ed looked at one another,

“Is that some sort of beach resort?” asked Faye.

"What planet is that from exactly?" asked Jet.

"Planet?"

"What world are you from? Mars, Venus, Earth?"

"I'm from Destiny Islands; that is my world."…

First Impression complete: Sheltered.

Jet looked Sora right in the eye and asked slowly, "How did you get here?”

"I, I'm not sure, the last thing I remember is being carried away from -," Sora's voice faded a little, "from my friends, who were lying on the ground." He looked down. Jet and Faye narrowed their train of thought as Spike took a more open position. Ed scooted up by Sora and laid her head in his lap like a puppy,

"Are your friends okay?" she asked.

"I don't know," Sora's voice broke, "I couldn’t, no matter how hard I tried, call out to them, they were just lying so still.”

"Maybe they were sleeping,” said Ed, “When I dragged you here, you were very, very tired.”

*So it was you.*

“Um, you have any relatives or something we can contact from your home?” asked Jet.

“My home’s gone too,” said Sora.

"What happened to it?"

Sora swallowed, "It was swallowed up, by darkness. It was completely engulfed in flames...from these guys on wild steeds, a black horse, a red bull, a blue wildebeest, and a green stag."

"…So, you’re saying your whole neighborhood got trashed by four people on horseback?” asked Jet.

“Only one was a horse,” said Sora, “And it was my whole world that got destroyed.”

“The entire planet?” blurted Faye.

“So you indefinitely have no home to return to,” stated Spike. Sora nodded,

“Just like before –”

“Wait, so this has happened more than once?” asked Jet, “Your home, world, getting destroyed, by the same people?”

“No the first time it was by the heartless, (“heartless?”) this time it was like it was sucked from the inside out by a giant vortex of fire that these, riders, burst out of –”

- “Say what?” -

- “then the fire intensified as they galloped across it, and then it vanished without a trace!” Ooh, Sora got his temper back, “Whenever I find them–all of them that’s responsible for this–(Sora held out his hand to call his blade)–I’m gonna–”

"Slow down there tiger, you can barely stand,” said Jet, “I’m gonna go see if we have any thing for those cuts of yours, and possibly that bump on your head.”

Sora felt his head, “I don’t have a bump.”…

Putting all other details aside, "These guys wouldn't happen to have a bounty on thier heads would they?" Faye asked.

"A bounty?"-

"YEEEE HAAAAAW! It's time for another episode of Big Shot with Punch and Judy!"

"Nyeah, just watch this," said Spike, and he pointed Sora to their television screen.

"Welcome yall to the Big Shot all you muscle miscreants!" said a very pretty cowgirl (Sora gulped), "Hope yall are ready for a doozy this week, 'cause we have our highest bounty yet on Big Shot!"

"That's right!” said cowboy, “These next few blokes have just made breaking news–they are all wanted dead for their crimes imposed by completely destroying the metropolis of Venus, yes, you heard me correctly, completely destroying it, it is gone–take a look at these live pictures!"

"My god," Faye breathed at the desolate images of the metropolis of Venus. What were once tall firm structures were now but the crumble of sand in a child's palm…–a bright fiery light suddenly burst out of no-where, and the feed to the shot was cut–

"What? Hey, we lost our feed?" asked Punch to off-screen personnel, "Huh? What?! It's gone? What do you mean Venus is gone? The whole damn planet?!"

"Just like my world," Sora whispered. Spike's hand went to the side of his face as he watched.

"Anywhoooo," said Judy as Punch went into a panic–

-" I gots cousins in the rural -!

“We interrupt this program to bring you a special report from CBC News Live.”

“Wow, Big Shot actually got the jump on the news for once,” said Spike, but Faye shushed him, “Don’t shush me.”

“Breaking news today of a terrible tragedy befallen the planet of Venus; what can only be described as several seismic explosions erupting from the heart of the world itself.”

“Damn.”

“What in the world could’ve caused that?” asked Faye.

“We are now going to our affiliate in Alva city with CBC’s Chris Riley.”

A female reporter appeared on screen. “Mark, as you can now see in the sky, that bright flashing star is all that remains of the planet once known as Venus. So far as now, we can only speculate on what could’ve caused such destruction.”

“Are there rumors Chris of people saying that before Venus exploded, there was a strange flash of light?”

“Yes, spectators here from Alva City say that they actually noticed several faint flashed of light before noticing Venus’ explosion in the sky. Given that we, here in Alva City on the planet of Mars could see such a spectacle all the way from Venus can only imply on how atrocious the true explosion was.”

Sora’s eyes widened as the reporters talked their speculation back and forth.

“Sad news day to report from your Cosmic Broadcasting Community,” stated Mark. “Is there any word from the government of Mars about a possible search and rescue operation?”

“Pssh, nothing could’ve survived that!” blurted Faye.

“I did,” said Sora weakly. Spike, Faye, and Ed turned to him.

“Hold on, Chris, I’m getting word in on images that are just now being received from our affiliates in Venus, these are quite possibly the last images of Venus we will ever see.” What flashed on the screen were still shots of a person dressed in a black velvet robe riding a raging black horse–

"Hey! That’s one of the riders that destroyed my world!" yelled Sora. The screen shots flashed stills of the horse with its rider running with fire all around it, stagnantly followed by a green stag with its rider dressed in a green hooded robe, then a blue wildebeest, and finally a red bull with their riders wearing the same color robes; the riders hoods covered their eyes, but not their maniacal smiles… The male reporter Mark, cleared his throat,

“Once again, we can only speculate what any of these images mean.”

“Ooooooooh,” cooed Ed forebodingly (she had turned to her computer as the others were fixed on the television), “Looky!” Everyone turned to her monitor which displayed a biblical picture of four skeletons riding raging skeletal horses with fire for flesh, “Look at the similarities,” said Ed, “Those scary guys on the t.v. are like the four horsemen of the apocalypse no?”

“The Mars government has just issued a reward for any information leading to the conclusion of today’s tragedy,” said Mark. “They have also issued a reward along with collaboration from several local planetary governments for the capture of those that we have just displayed on screen, one billion -"

"Holy ****!" -

-"woolongs.”

“Why did they issue a reward for them?” asked Sora, “Are there people that can stop them here?”

“I doubt it,” said Spike, “If those people can detonate an entire planet, ****, the militaries probably already know that they can’t do much, and that’s why they stuck up such a reward for anyone else who could risk their lives to try and catch these guys until they figure out a plan.”

“Can they?”

“Wow, you really aren’t from around here are ya?”

Jet walked in the room with a box of band aids, “Here let’s see if we can patch up some of those cuts…Hey, what’s that?”

“The four horsemen of the apocalypse that made Sora’s world go bye-bye!” piped Ed.

“What?”

“Jet,” said Spike in a dead tone, and he and Faye gave Jet a quick rundown of what they knew backed by the continuing coverage of the disaster.

“So, Venus is gone,” stated Jet in a hollow tone.

“The end is coming! All our sins will be washed away in the fires of hell!” screamed a freaked person as he ran by Chris, nearly knocking her down.

“Again,” Chris stated as she recovered herself, “The authorities have stated for the public to not panic–” but no sooner had she said that, a bright light began to flash all around her!

“Chris, what’s going on?”

“Mark! It appears–AHH!” Chris shielded herself from the light as the camera man became unstable, his camera focusing in and out as people began to run from a tide of fire–!

The feed was cut. Mark was shown as speechless; then the television, Ed’s computer, everything electronic, died, leaving everyone to begin to float with the ship’s gravity generators dead….

A low rumbling sound started to shake the ship which grew exponentially–!

“Oh god!” screamed Faye, “We’re by–!”

“How close are we to Mars?!” yelled Spike.

“Close enough!” Jet yelled back.

The metallic hold of the ship moaned and bellowed as an unknown force slammed it with blow after blow after blow–Ein barked frantically and Sora felt Ed grope and latch on to him in the suspended darkness–“HANG ON!”

It stopped. The rumble subsided, the engines spit, the lights flickered back on and everyone dropped (“OW!”) in the mess of the living room with the gravity generators humming back to normalcy.

“Ouchies,” Ed moaned rolling over Sora.

Faye luckily landed on her blankets, while Spike landed partially on a stool.
Jet tumbled over on his back, “Hot, damn,” he cursed as he pushed himself up.

“Did anything break?” asked Faye.

*My back,* Sora wanted to say.

Ed gave a wail as she saw her computer lopsided (but amazingly in one piece) and scrambled over Sora to turn it on.

“Alright, let’s look at the positives,” announced Spike dusting himself, “number one, we didn’t die, ah…that’s about it.”

“The ship did not succumb to any major injuries, I hope,” muttered Jet as he stood up, “Okay, I’m putting’

Bebop on a course as far away from this mess as possible, I don’t know what’s going on, but it won’t catch up to us,” and Jet walked off. The stillness in his wake was like ringing silence.

Sora felt so close, and so far from thier silence.

Ed revived her computer which spit out an international emergency broadcast warning that over-ran her internet connection. The monotone signal synchronized with the silence, and Ed turned off her computer. “Sora, what’s going on?” asked Ed turning around.

“I-I’m not sure Ed.”……..

Spike turned to Sora, "Looks like we've met at a good time.” He stood up, "You’ll be traveling with us now; welcome to the crew Sora," Spike stretched, "I'm sure Ed can hook you up with a place to sleep." Spike left the room.

"One billion woo-longs, and it's on the ‘four horsemen of the apocalypse’," mumbled Faye in a quiet tone, "That would be the billion dollar bounty," She left the room too. It was just Sora, Ed, and Ein now.

That feeling of misplacement that tingled Sora’s insides gave one last surge, then subsided, now, he felt a kind of connection, one he wished he had under different measures. Ed rubbed her eyes, "This day sucks," she spat and got up, "Come on Sora, lets go find you a spot."

"Okay," Sora got up and followed Ed and Ein down the ship's corridors as Ed peeked into different rooms for a cozy spot.

Despite all the misfortune, all the terror, and bad luck, and ill will Sora had been through in a twenty-four hour time frame, he struck up a conversation with Ed on what Bebop could do, a little bit of its history, a little about Spike, Jet, and Faye, Ed's hobbies and favorite things to do, what Ein could do, and what he likes to eat, and lick, and then the tables turned to Sora who explained just exactly where he was from, his hobbies, what he liked to do, and he talked about Riku and Kairi as well. He showed Ed his bracelet, and, remembered what it meant, what Avera had said to him about–

"Sora?"

Sora looked to Ed, "Oh, huh?"

"What does it say on the inside again?"

"Sora, Riku, Kairi; together." Ein barked. Ed cocked her head, and swung open a wooden door to a moderate room,

"Huh, it looks like this room was made out to someone already," said Ed as she stepped inside, Sora followed behind. The room...no way, it couldn't have been...the room looked almost exactly like his old room...from two years ago on Destiny Islands...there was a window to the stars and everything...On the bed, lay a single solitary feather. "Okay this will be your room," declared Ed, "Ed will be right back," and she dashed out the room with Ein. Sora slowly walked around his room, really his room...On a little table, he picked up a picture frame and his throat caught; it was a picture of him, Riku, and Kairi, from way back…Sora felt at peace, * 'In this moment, I want yall to think of something very special' *...... Hopefully, wherever his friends are right now, Sora prayed with all his might that they were safe. Ed came back with a bunch of pillows and blankets, "Can Ed stay with you tonight?"

"Sure, you can take the bed; I'll make another bed with those pillows and blankets." Ed bounced up on Sora's bed, Ein leapt up as well, and Sora made his bed down below, but with all the pillows and blankets, he was almost level with his bed. Sora was reminiscing on all that had happened when–

"Sora?" came Ed's voice, "Are you an alien?"

Sora smiled, "No Ed, I'm not an alien."

"Okay then, when I found you, you had a lot of feathers around you, are you an angel?"

Sora thought of Avera, "Nope, I'm not an angel."

"Okay then what are you?"

Sora sat up, and Ed watched, as Sora extended his arm with the keyblade appearing in his hand…but something was wrong–i-it was see-through!

"Cool!"

"Huh? W-what’s, wrong with my keyblade?!” Sora said flabbergasted, but despite Sora’s plight, Ein gave a happy bark and licked Sora's face.

“You call it a keyblade?” asked Ed all excited, “That’s so cool! Are you like a secret fifth horseman of the–?”

“No, uh, Ein! Down boy, this, keyblade, my–keyblade which is not, supposed to look like this, s-signifies that I’m a Keyblade Master.”

….Doesn’t it?

"Wow," Ed sighed as she put her hand through the blade. Sora desperately searched within himself on why his keyblade was as it was. “Don’t worry,” piped Ed; Sora looked at her, “You’re pretty tired aren’t you? Maybe when you get some sleep, it’ll be, um, solid.” Ed gave her hand another wave through the blade; then she plopped right down, "Okay, now I can go to sleep."

"Why?" asked Sora recalling his transparent blade.

"Because (yawwwwwn) you’re here," and Ed was sound asleep. Sora scratched his head,

*Does she know about the Keyblade Masters? Well, I guess, some people should in this system…Wherever that maybe.* Ein gave Sora one last lick, then curled up besides Ed. Sora wiped his face, then laid himself down…However, that unsettling feeling made a violent return, and refused Sora to sleep for a good while… His keyblade, was sleep all he really needed?


Spike walked down the corridor where Sora's room was, shirt off, towel over his shoulder, back from a hard workout of practicing his martial arts, the Jeet Kune Do style. He stretched his back as he walked and noticed, a wooden door, was open down the hall. Curious to know if he hadn’t worked himself into a delusion, he walked up to the door, and in that fleeting moment as he entered the dull light through the window, he stumbled across a ray of light on the floor, and caught himself on the door which creaked on its hinges. Spike moved it back and forth, yes, it was attached. He looked inside the room and rubbed his eyes. Since when was the gritty ship Bebop home to a child's room with wooden floors, and walls? And a window?

He spotted Ed asleep on Sora's bed and Sora asleep on the blankets and pillows with Ein in between them.*The kid's a gentleman.*...."Oh boy," he stretched," I think I'm gonna go to bed too now," and he continued down the hall. Spike was not a man to let the strange hold him down for too long–so what if a strange boy appeared on thier ship and is now sleeping in a room with Ed that can't possibly have been part of Bebop's original blueprints? So what if there are wild riders running about? Well what did leave a thorn in Spike's side was that Mars was more than likely nothing but a crater in the sky now, and–bonk. Spike had walked into a wall, *Where the hell did this come from?!* He scratched his head, looked behind him, yes; the wooden door was still there. Spike huffed and turned the corner down to a hub of a room to sleep.

Jet had turned to his little pet bonsai trees, and began to trim them, just a wee little bit too much. In the end really, where could they run?

Faye had gone to bed, or so she told herself over and over and over. She threw her pillow over her head, “I feel like I’ve been up for like a day, but I still can’t fall asleep.” Faye fidgeted. “I wonder, what’s going on out there.” Faye rolled on her back. *I feel so strange…* “Go to sleep me, everything will be fine. I will wake up in my bed. Nothing’s gonna happen when I’m asleep, good night.”

“Good night!” Spike singed back from the other room.

“Ugh, jack***,” Faye spat for having been listened upon. The tension within her died, she pulled up her blanket, and was finally able to lull off to sleep.

….

“(*Sigh*) I wanna go seep, seep.”

“I wanna go seep seep too – but you don’t see me complaining!”

“You don’t need sleep, you’re the guise of an Upper Conscience, you exist without fatigue, the form of a purpose. I, on the other hand, something alive, needs sleep.”

“Oh yeah? How can something be alive that doesn’t bleed? How can something be alive with only half a–”

“Okay that’s hitting below the belt you bleach witch.”

“Limp liver!”

“Corpse sucker!”

“Quiet! Both of you get back to your missions–yall can sleep when we’ve collected some more Masters.”

“Yes madam.”

...

On a plain of unseen ground, the riders and thier steeds stood watching the last light of Mars dissapear. Equos, the Black Horse, huffed an agitated flame... They felt thier quarry had escaped somehow.





0_o Wow, this chapter was longer than I thought, okay, was this too much to post in one sitting? If so, then I'll break up chapters that are of this length
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Old 06/22/07, 06:50 AM   #38
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Wow that was a extremely long chapter I thought I was reading a book for a moment but I still enjoyed it xD.
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Old 06/22/07, 06:55 AM   #39
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>_< I'll shorten the others! But I'm glad ya liked it ^_^
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it's a little long, yeah, but I don't mind!
As long as it's good, and it really is!
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Old 06/22/07, 08:20 PM   #41
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it was long but really good. nice work Silent!
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Yeah post the new chapter really soon xD.
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Old 06/22/07, 09:01 PM   #43
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Thats so long, I got lost almost, this would make a good book, good job.

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Old 06/22/07, 10:14 PM   #44
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Oh, thank-yall so much! ^_^ One day I would like to be a writer, and write novels and whatnot ^_^

The next chapter won't nearly be so long, nope!
But I can't post it until Monday - wah! I'm away from my computer, and I forgot to transfer the files...
Anywho, that really does mean alot to me saying this could be like a book ^_^
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Old 06/22/07, 10:22 PM   #45
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its okay Silent take your time writing it. and thats really cool that you want to be a writer. you have great talent
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