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#196 | | FanFic Slayer, K.Theorist
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Registered: Sep 2007 Location: I am human, no worries. I don't suck brain juice anyway, it's too juicy. Posts: 1,173 | Re: K.h.a The 'Tool of Destiny'. Simply terrible. You actually put my favourite character Kairi in such a position? Man... The killing of King Mickey was bad enough already...
Still, it's your story, you choice... And you're getting me confused with so many different anime characters, try not use all of them, very very confusing... | |
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December 14th, 2007, 06:33 PM
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#197 | | haruhi isn't amused
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Registered: Mar 2007 Posts: 8,291 | Re: K.h.a The use of alot of anime characters is what keeps the story interesting instead of it just being about 1 main character.
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December 15th, 2007, 10:02 AM
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#198 | | Enigmatic Soldier
Silent Avera is online now Registered: Apr 2006 Location: I live where all artists are trying to dicipline themselves - HELL! Age: 21 Posts: 939 | Re: K.h.a Quote:
Originally Posted by Xuan The 'Tool of Destiny'. Simply terrible. You actually put my favourite character Kairi in such a position? Man... The killing of King Mickey was bad enough already...
Still, it's your story, you choice... And you're getting me confused with so many different anime characters, try not use all of them, very very confusing... | Well my story is pretty heavy I guess >_< I don't like putting characters in situations they can just walk out of...I'm gonna make 'em work for it; hard.
But thank-you for reading it and giving your opinion :D I'll try to make it less confusing, (Oh I must stop my skipping around!) but yeah I do use a WHOLE lot of characters and it follows 3 people instead of one. Even so there's always a light at the end of my twisted tunnel, no matter how long and terrible it is >>;
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December 15th, 2007, 03:16 PM
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#199 | | haruhi isn't amused
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Registered: Mar 2007 Posts: 8,291 | Re: K.h.a None of your chapters are bad in any way, shape, or form to me that's what keeps them interesting.
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December 16th, 2007, 04:06 AM
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#200 | | Enigmatic Soldier
Silent Avera is online now Registered: Apr 2006 Location: I live where all artists are trying to dicipline themselves - HELL! Age: 21 Posts: 939 | Re: K.h.a Aww, thanks Haku :'D
All comments appreciated ^-^
Okay! To help things become less confusing for some, I’m gonna post recaps for each chapter when it follows two sets at once – so this should help….Okay what I said before in a post that this story follows 3 people – it MAINLY follows three people….>>; - - okay moving on! Shadow’s Path (following Avera, Shonen Bat/Little Slugger, Sephiroth, and Her – I can’t wait to reveal her! ^_^) Dawn’s Path (following Kairi) Twilight’s Path (following Sora) Midnight’s Path (following Riku) Evils’ Path (following the Riders, Nefero, Lady of Red, and South Light) Stars’ Path (following Donald and Goofy)….That should cover it. Paths recapped for each chapter will be in accordance to what the chapter is…gonna be about - And I’m going back in this behemoth and adding these for new readers if anymore would like to come along O_O
Now lets begin ^_^ (P.S: Next week is the Holiday chapter :D)
Previously on: Shadow’s Path: “Little Slugger and Avera wait for Sephiroth to return. To pass the time Avera tells the story of the Sovereign Royalty’s execution by the Riders for betraying natural order. When Sephiroth finally does return, he relays to Shonen that he no longer needs his services and will be transferred to Avera, and then from Avera to a new master – much to Little Slugger’s dismay” – Seritouge Twilight’s Path: “(*Sigh*) Sora, after learning the cold truth from Genkai about King Mickey, went and shut himself up on a balcony of the Lookout Tower while the others bashed Genkai about her delivery. Spike went out on the balcony after Sora, and got him to start talking. I think it did Sora some good, they had a good talk, and Sora has some stability back in him, though he needs to take care of his emotions just a bit better. The others were listening in on the conversation and have developed a deeper respect for the young Master. He is still growing after all, but I wish he would grow just a bit faster…” – Euphoria
Ch.16 Off We Go Universal World: Tumble-Stop – En Route
"I may not have gone where I intended to go, but I think I have ended up where I intended to be” – Douglas Adams Shadow Path
“So who are you going to dump me on you two winged two timer?” Little Slugger spat following Avera through Tumble-Stop, “And why are we back here anyway? Isn’t this where that Keyblade Master is?”
“I’m not dumping you on anybody, you are going to offer your services to someone who is need of them,” said Avera.
“Unwillingly!” yelled Little Slugger, “My sole purpose in life was to bring peace to those who were pushed into a corner before Sephiroth defeated me and created my bondage.”
“You mean murder those who were stressed? Ah yes now I remember,” said Avera.
“And let me tell you this, those people were damn happy to get out of here,” said Shonen darkly, raising his bat… “Human will is so weak. You can still see some of the stains if you look close enough.”
“Well, I’m not surprised that someone who preyed on defenseless people that were emotionally distressed to have been defeated with one sword slash.”
“OH SHUT UP!” Little Slugger bit his bat in anger.
Avera smiled, “Did Sephiroth even make a full slash?” –
“SHUT UP!–”
Avera stopped short and Little Slugger stopped on the toes of his skates right behind him.
“I know the contract Sephiroth made for you states that those you are bound to must defeat you unless transferred by word of mouth and your pledge,” said Avera.
“Yeah, and I only said my pledge to you ‘cause Sephy was there,” said Little Slugger swaying.
“Shonen, I am going to give you a chance at your freedom.”
Little Slugger froze, and his eyes grew very wide.
“I won’t transfer you by word of mouth and hold my blade to your throat and force from you your pledge. It will be done the old way, in order for your new bond to be official, your new Master must defeat you. There is only one catch. You are going to want to be of help to him.” “Why?!”
Avera turned and faced him. “Because he will help you find your mother.”
…………………………… Twilight’s Path
“Everyone’s off and getting packed,” said Sora lying on the lounge couch of the first floor.
“Great,” replied Bulma, “I better get back upstairs then for Jet.” Spike and Faye, who had no need to pack, sat on some chairs they dragged over. Ed was sitting on the ground in front of Sora petting his hair, and Ein was dozing off next to her.
“Welp, looks like in about a couple of minutes, we’ll be leaving,” yawned Spike.
“Yep,” added Faye.
“You sound so enthusiastic,” said Genkai approaching from the stairs with a bag over her shoulder, “Young Master, are you finished crying?”
Ed growled at her but Sora replied with a stagnant, “Yes.”
“Don’t sound so flat, at least you rebounded and decided to start your journey here.”
*Like your tone is any better,* Sora thought sitting up.
“Many people have given up hope in this system, they’ve just plain turned into cowards with their tails between their legs,” said Genkai, “Scared of the attacks of the Heartless, scared of the hauntings of the Nobodies, and the death that Nefero, the Riders, South Light and Lady of Red bring with them wherever they venture.” Faye rocked in her seat. “As long as this system has been under the threat of being wiped of the face of existence, I haven’t seen Tumble-Stop buzz around with life in a while. Your presence is starting to look like a great motivation to fight back.”
“I think those were the people running from the Two-Face,” said Spike.
“Motivation is motivation,” said Genkai.
“Well, I’m sure there are other people out there who would want to help out,” said Sora, “We just have to find them.”
Genkai threw him a smirk, “Sure why not, there are some worlds with potential to fight back, but they’re needed to help the stability of this system; you’ve pretty much met all of them from Tumble-Stop; I have been here for five years” –
“Wait, five years?” Sora interrupted.
“Yes, Goku’s been here three, so have the sailor girls, Yugi and Ash have been here two years, and Vincent, I think he’s been here seven –“
“SEVEN YEARS?!” yelled Sora. *That long?! No way, this nightmare has been going that –?*
“Seven years ago was when it all began, for this system,” said Genkai. “This is a pretty big system; it takes a while before the Emotionless can reach its corners, especially, when our Masters were here to fight them away.”
Vincent entered the room, his presence commanded all attention and before Sora could speak, he got straight to the point with Sora, “You’ll be starting with the Kitzserubie Star, since there’s only one world left, and it’s on the brink of merging. Basically it’s an ify mission from the start, since merger worlds can be very unpredictable. If you can put a lock on it to freeze it’s current state, good, but watch yourself, the worst that can happen is that it merges, and if you’re on it, who knows where you’ll get taken since you’re not a native of the world, so get off if the skies turn an instant black, and the ground turns to a cloudy darkness.”
Sora was still developing an opinion of Vincent, and so far, Vincent looked to be a person who had been through quite a lot.
“Sora, stand up.” Sora did as Vincent said. “Here, let me see if you’ve learned at least one new ability while within this system. Hold out your hand.” Sora did, and Vincent placed his hand about an inch above Sora’s – a blade shot out from it and Sora just as quickly retracted his hand –
“Hey, what are you –?!”
“Good, your starting to learn sense*. You felt my intentions didn’t you? But only since I was close by. Soon you will be able to sense presences and how much fight or life they have left in them. This will probably be one of your most helpful abilities. Sharpen it well.”
“Alright, the ship has been outfitted!” called Bulma from above.
“How’d ya do that?” asked Spike.
“Tsk, never question a mechanic and her work, when yall get aboard the ship, you’ll notice the upgrades,” said Bulma proudly, “like instant retrieval of yall’s cruisers,(“So that’s why you said we didn’t need to go move them,” muttered Spike) though I have to hand it to Jet’s ship (who also appeared overhead) it’s the most compatible ship for the upgrades I’ve ever seen, it absorbed them without question.”
“Unfortunately,” muttered Jet.
“Hey you were the one that volunteered it,” Spike called back –
“No it was you, and you Faye you back stabber, I thought we were on the same page about back –
“I changed my mind,” said Faye simply.
“Well **** Jet we’re getting free upgrades and food, I thought you’d be happy. I haven’t had beef in sooo long,” said Spike.
“What are you guys talking about?” asked Bulma, “Is there some dispute about –” But before she could finish, the sliding door opened and Goku walked in with a backpack,
“The others are right behind me,” said Goku, “Where are we off too?”
“Ash’s world,” said Bulma, “It’s on its last leg so tell the others to get a move on! Come on we’re heading to the Deck Station, the little white building next door.” Sora leapt up,
“Let’s go!” and everyone departed for the Deck Station.
Through the open doors of the one story Deck Station, laid a large circular glass floor, and across from it, an operating booth to which Bulma, Amy, Rei, Mina, and Lita trotted over; Serena with a blue gym bag, would be the only Sailor Scout to accompany Sora, for the other girls were now needed more than ever as helping hands. Bulma put on some headphones as the other girls took up their stations in the booth, “GET ON” – Everyone’s hands shot to their ears, “OH,” Bulma opened up the monitor screen and turned down the volume, “Better?” Goku gave the thumbs up. “Okay everyone get on the glass floor.” Sora stepped on the glass reflection, watching himself walk to the center; Vincent stayed where he was by the door.
“Let’s hope our heads don’t go one way and our tails another,” muttered Genkai, “That was quite a fiasco.”
Sora gulped.
“We fixed that problem,” said Bulma over the speaker, “Okay everyone give me the ‘okay’ by saying you are ready, Sora stand as still as you can okay? – Alright let me know!”
“Ready!” said Sora.
“Ready,” said Goku.
“Ready,” said Ash (squeezing poor Pikachu).
“Ready,” said Serena.
“Ready,” squeaked Yugi (eyes tightly shut while grasping his backpack and the puzzle).
“We’re good,” said Spike on Jet and Faye’s behalf.
“Ready,” said Genkai.
“Okay, take care and GOOD LUCK!” yelled Bulma - she pressed the button – And in a seeping light that traveled through the glass overhead to the sky above, they were gone. Vincent and the others looked up through the overhead as the light specked out in a faint crack of thunder.
ZOMG! We're finally gonna go to worlds! Yay! ^0^
Euphoria: Before we continue traveling through the Anime System, I would like to share with yall some special stories for the season; three tales about realizing some of the deeper things in life.
Comment and Rate please ^_^
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December 16th, 2007, 04:55 AM
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#201 | | haruhi isn't amused
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Registered: Mar 2007 Posts: 8,291 | Re: K.h.a Awesome update, Goku = awesomeness.
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December 23rd, 2007, 12:30 AM
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#202 | | Enigmatic Soldier
Silent Avera is online now Registered: Apr 2006 Location: I live where all artists are trying to dicipline themselves - HELL! Age: 21 Posts: 939 | Re: K.h.a ^_^ Thanks Haku
Okay, here's a little break in the story, er, not really I guess, this chappie gives more to some characteraintroduced earlier in the monster chapter 6, 6.3 to be precise and there are three more anime peeps to look forward too, I won't post links yet for 'em, but they'll come around soon enough >>;
Also the several stories turned into on giant one >_< Enjoy! Happy Holidays from Texas!!! ^0^
Disclaimer: I put a christmas song that I don't own in here *gasp*
16.5 Angels in Flight
“Over the ground lies a mantil of white
A heaven of diamonds shine down through the night
Two hearts are thrilling in spite of the chilling weather
Love knows no season, love knows no clime
Romance can blossom any old time
Here in the open, we're walking and hopin' together,” –Vera Lynn, Walking in a Winter Wonderland A long while back in Tokieo Town….before so many hearts succumbed to ice…Angels were having fun.
“Do you remember what I got for her?! – Hey! Dendjue! What was it?!”
“Ugth, if you can’t even remember what you got for her, then there is no hope for you.”
Ragiel threw a watted up shirt at Dendjue, “Look are you gonna help me find her present or not?!”
Dendjue caught the shirt, “Dude, I’m gonna tell you again, the gift doesn’t matter, it’s you she wants. Just wrap yourself up, I’ll even help.”
Ragiel wrestled into his coat and tied his scarf around his neck so tight that he nearly choked himself; he stormed passed Dendjue who rolled his eyes, threw the shirt in a heap, and followed Ragiel out.
It was snowing lightly. For Universal Worlds, the seasons were a summary of the year in a System, and it was winter once again. Holidays were carried out in accordance to those who had them to celebrate, once a year with the season, just like it was done back on the home worlds. There wasn’t that a big a difference really…It still got cold, it snowed, and there were decorations of every age and beauty that made Tokieo Town shine with ever more brilliance aside from it’s radiant neon signs. The P.A. system that ran throughout the Town played the season’s music, kids were making snowmen in front of their living quarters, and the bakery shop called The Dots Alot had just finished making another batch of ginger bread houses that replaced their usual display of sweets for every taste; the scent was heaven to anyone who walked by.
Ragiel puffed his red bangs from his face as the wind continued to mess with them. His hair reached down to his ears in a wild thorny fashion tamed by only the strongest of hair gels. His eyes were an aqua-marine blue with a tinge of green, of which the Sailor Scouts had continually teased him about and nick-named him Mickey-Blue eyes. He had on black jeans stitched with tons of zippers rimed with white, and a plain pale t-shirt with stitches of leather slits.
Dendjue’s even length dark, dark blue hair blew respectively with the wind. He had one bang that looked like a prominent feather sticking up, but it naturally flowed backwards. His hair was spiky too, but in a much more reserved fashion as opposed to Ragiel’s hair style. He wore a tight polo shirt with a medium dark purple overcoat that blew gracefully in the wind like his hair.
“You bought the gift at the Lunar Café right?” asked Dendjue.
“Yeah,” said Ragiel like a tough kitten.
“That’s where we are headed then right?”
“Yeah.”
“Then we’re going the wrong way” – “ Are you purposely messing with me?!”
“No.” *Yes.*
Last Christmas by WHAM was playing (listen to it here YouTube - Last Christmas) in the Lunar Café which was nearly littered from end to end with tattered wrappings and bows. Lorenia was sitting at the bar drinking a peppermint and chocolate shake conversing with Lita (who was currently running the place with the other Scouts and Bulma; it was slow day, so the rest were sitting a table and chit-chatting.) “Whew! Those little ones just get rowdier every time!” Lorenia happily exhaled taking off her justly fitting pink jacket (revealing a lean physic).
“No kidding,” smiled Lita making another shake, “I don’t know how you and Yugi can have so much patience with them.”
“It helps with him around, I’m so glad you decided to come with me this time from Tumble-Stop,” Lorenia smiled turning to Yugi – he promptly blushed and adjusted himself in his seat next to Lorenia. She pulled out a green rubber band (that matched her clean light green eyes) and tied back her long bright blonde hair. She was wearing a simple white blouse and a laced pink skirt.
“Here you go Yugi,” and Lita handed him a vanilla shake. The café door opened, a little bell chimed, and in from the cold walked Goku along with three other people, a woman with eye’s similar to Goku’s, her black hair pinned up, wearing an outfit similar to a kimono in a two piece dress. As for the other two, one was a relatively short boy with yellow eyes and hair tied back in a short thick braid leaving his bangs to portrait his face, he wore black pants, shoes and jacket lined with white along with a red thin wool short overcoat with an odd symbol on the back; and the last person, was completely covered in a powerful armor (that sounded like it clankered around like cans) with a sharp mouth and almost hidden eyes glowing with red and white (he was about the same height as Goku, if not taller).
“Oh hey you guys; how was the trip to Tumble-Stop Edward?” asked Bulma, noticing his pale complexion.
“Awful,” replied the short blonde boy holding his stomach.
“I liked it brother,” teased the person in armor; though he looked gruff, this person’s voice was relatively very young and kind.
“Oh yeah, well you can’t get air sick Alphonse.”
“Don’t worry, it’ll pass soon,” said the woman by Goku.
“I’m sure it will Mrs. Chi-chi,” grumbled Edward as he crunched over the wrappings and took a seat along with Alphonse.
“Well, it looks like yall had a good gift turnout this year, do yall need help cleaning up?” asked Chi-chi as she and Goku took a seat by the Scouts and Bulma.
“Most definitely,” said Raye stretching, “We’re just resting in the aftermath.”
Lorenia finished off her shake then put back on her pink jacket, “I’ll be back in a bit Yugi, wait for me here okay?”
“Where are you going?”
“To check to see if any mail has come yet from Santa,” Lorenia smiled. Yugi just gave a blink as Lorenia waved goodbye to everyone and walked out the café with the bell’s chime.
Lorenia wasn’t gone a second before gossip blew its cap, “Hey did yall see the gift that Ragiel got for her?” said Serena.
“Yep, and I told you he would pick that one eventually,” said Mina, she suddenly turned all romantic, “You could just see it in his face that when he looked at it he thought of her.” All the girls began to giggle. Brring-ring!
“Speak of the devil,” said Raye as Ragiel and Dendjue walked in.
“Guys you just missed Lorenia,” said Bulma.
“Did we now?” asked Dendjue; Ragiel’s heart began to race.
“Yep.”
“She just left?”
“Yep.”
“So she couldn’t have gone far?”
“Yep.”
Dendjue with the reflexes of a cat quickly snatched up a sticky pink bow off of a piece of tattered wrapping, smashed it on Ragiel’s forehead (“OW!”) and pushed him out in the square, “DENDJUE!!!” But the café door was locked - Ragiel ran to the windows, but Bulma happily stuck her tongue out and closed the blinds.
Ragiel thought of a few good choice words to yell in the cracks of the windows, but upon hearing, “Ragiel?” he froze like a deer in headlights, and like a wooden puppet jerked by the string, he spun around to Lorenia’s wondering green eyes.
“Ah, ah – I” –
“I thought you were with Dendjue? Weren’t yall doing some shopping?”
“I f-f-f-, eh, p-p-p-p-p-“…..
“Good grief this happens every time he is just absolutely smitten of her,” mumbled Dendjue watching threw a sliver in the blinds. It was no secret that Ragiel and Lorenia loved each other, but to catch that moment that sealed the deal, well…
“I think it’s cute he does that,” giggled Lita watching above through the same sliver.
“Do you think they’re finally gonna kiss?” asked Mina all bubbly, secretly picking up the blinds from the bottom.
“Oh they’re walking over to the fountain now!” piped Yugi; it wasn’t long before everyone was watching in their own covert way.
“And they’re holding hands!” squeaked Serena.
“That’s a preemptive strike,” said Bulma, “She’s setting up the situation, now he needs to deliver!”
“He’s doomed,” said Dendjue, and Edward together.
“Oh have hope for him,” said Chi-chi, “Look, they’re sitting down now by the fountain.”
“Come on Ragiel, you can do this!” cheered Raye.
“Um, Ragiel…?” Lorenia squinted at Ragiel’s forehead and noticed past his bangs –
“Hey, she’s laughing at him!” yelled Edward.
“No brother, look closer,” said Alphonse as Lorenia lifted up Ragiel’s bangs, “There’s a pink bow on his forehead!”
“How in the world did that get on there?” asked Amy….Dendjue hid his sly kitten smile.
Lorenia’s hand slid to the side of Ragiel’s face, Ragiel picked up his hand and also stroked the side of Lorenia’s face – “Zoh my god! This is it!!” squealed Serena as every girl went starry eyed, and every boy blushed.
“Can you believe they’re watching us?” whispered Lorenia secretly, her other hand, hidden, grasping the bow and clump of snow, “Don’t you think we deserve a little privacy?”
Ragiel gave one final swallow to control his unbridled emotions for Lorenia, “This is why I love you,” he managed to say. Lorenia gave a smile that could have melted the entire square. Ragiel scooted closer… “What’s the plan?”
“Together on three,” Lorenia whispered sweetly as she leaned in, as Ragiel leaned in –
The girls were so pressed onto the windows that the boys below face’s almost became one with the glass – Lorenia’s and Ragiel’s eyes closed, their lips were getting ever closer, their heads were tilted, then – phew – SPLOOSH! – “WAAA!!!”
Two battle snowballs slammed into the window – and Ragiel and Lorenia, upon hearing the breakings, shatterings, screams, and wails of chaos and pain of falling and landing bodies, breaking furniture and glass all obscured by the blinds of the window, took the moment that was finally private, embraced each other, and kissed; Lorenia sticking the bow back on Ragiel’s forehead.
Comment and Rate please ^_^ Hope everyone gets what they wanted, Santa delivered early a 3.5 out of 4.0 average for me this semester! Whoooo! ^0^.....Can't wait for next one...X_X
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December 23rd, 2007, 12:37 AM
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#203 | | |†|エリイ|†| Azixel
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Registered: Jun 2007 Location: Wherever you are not Age: 17 Posts: 1,721 | Re: K.h.a I just started reading this fic,took me a long time tho,but i have to say that it ROCKS!!
I forgot that you were making a fan-fic too,stupid me.
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December 23rd, 2007, 12:57 AM
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#204 | | haruhi isn't amused
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Registered: Mar 2007 Posts: 8,291 | Re: K.h.a Yep you really have been missing out on alot of intense action Eliza, but about the story aww Goku and Chi-Chi still side by side after all this time.
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December 23rd, 2007, 07:12 PM
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#205 | | Enigmatic Soldier
Silent Avera is online now Registered: Apr 2006 Location: I live where all artists are trying to dicipline themselves - HELL! Age: 21 Posts: 939 | Re: K.h.a Aww thankies Eliza, and I'm glad you read it all the way through ^_^ - I know it's very, very long , but it's gonna end next year *tear* far into the year though >>; also I only update like once a week...phooey, but I'm glad you've hopped aboard! Choo-choo! :D Thank-you!
And yeah Haku, I'm not so heartless to break up Chi-chi and Goku in my story...although I put a whole bunch of other characters through...alot >_<
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December 23rd, 2007, 07:19 PM
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#206 | | haruhi isn't amused
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Registered: Mar 2007 Posts: 8,291 | Re: K.h.a Lol there isn't anything wrong with that, it sure did keep the story interesting since I just about know all of the characters in the chapters anyway.
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December 30th, 2007, 05:58 AM
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#207 | | Enigmatic Soldier
Silent Avera is online now Registered: Apr 2006 Location: I live where all artists are trying to dicipline themselves - HELL! Age: 21 Posts: 939 | Re: K.h.a Ah, thankies for teh comments ^_^ Er, this chappie is a little long - sorry! But I just wanted to get somethings on the ground, anywho - here it is! ^_^
Previously on: Stars' Path: "Donald had awakened in a strange new land only to be nearly chopped in half by a mysterious weapon that sliced the trees and dropped and large head in front of him! He ran, but didn't get far, and then the poor thing passed out. Luckily he met up with the heroes of that world soon after" - Aurocile Twilight's Path: Sora has gotten over his down time, and rejoined with all the others in the bottem level of the Lookout Tower, good for him. He also learned that the problems of this system have been going on for alot longer than realized - 7 years - and even longer for the rest of the chaos. Vincent has given Sora the start for his journey: to travel to the Kanto world and lock it in a freze state. I just hope the ride there won't be too bumpy" - Euphoria
Ch.17 Warphole Jumping
En Route – Kitzserubie Star: Kanto
“This is not gonna rip my feelings out is it?” – Tori from Mythbusters Stars' Path “The night sky is as big as the mind will allow it, and to travel through a sky with no boundaries, means the mind that cradled it, is without precincts.”
“Wow, where did you hear that Donald?” asked Kagome looking at the night sky; Shippo looked up too.
“I read it from one of the King’s notes,” replied Donald, “My king always kept a log of important rules and people.”
“What was your King like?” asked Songo as Miroku put on some more wood for the fire.
“He is very kind,” sighed Donald, “But I know he’s okay, somewhere out there, he’s okay, ‘cause Sora, Riku, and Kairi are out there to look for him, and everyone else.”
Inuyasha, who was leaning against a tree, flicked his ears at Donald’s talk, “Well if your King is so great, why doesn’t he go and look for yall? That seems like something a king should do.”
“I’m sure he would if he could,” defended Donald, “But he’s probably busy meeting with the Royalties of this system and trying to sort out this mess.”
“That’s right, you said that we’re really a part of a bigger galaxy called a system and that within these systems are stars that house worlds,” said Songo, “I have trouble believing that.”
“Most people would,” said Donald, “It’s supposed to be kept a secret by all of the Royalties and I was of the people that helped protect it.”
“Way to go,” mumbled Inuyasha.
……………………………………………….. Twilight's Path
Sora never closed his eyes, but as if he blinked, the scenery changed with a mild tingly sensation through out his body, but something was off, his hair was touching the ceiling – WUMP –
“OW!” Everyone landed on the floor of the living room with Spike having the pleasure of landing on a table, Ash on his face, and Serena on the couch.
“Okay so she was just a little off positioning it,” muttered Jet sitting up.
“Wow this is your ship?,” asked Yugi looking around.
“Yep – *cough* Well I’m gonna go call Bulma on how we’re gonna reach the Kitzserubie Star in five minutes, it’s a long ways off, so Bulma said were gonna go through a Warphole, er several of them,” said Jet.
“Warphole jumping,” said Goku, “It’s not for the faint of heart.”
“Or stomach,” added Ash; Yugi and Serena cringed a little.
“What’s wrong?” asked Sora.
“Nothing,” said Genkai simply, “Jet, before you call Bulma, give me a brief tour of the ship, I want to check something out.”
“Sure,” and Jet led Genkai away.
Serena pushed herself up and noticed a light shinning down a hallway right in front of her, “Hey, what’s that room?”
Spike looked up, “Heh, I’ve never noticed it before, it’s probably another one that’s magically appeared.”
“Appeared?”
“Yeah,” said Spike, “Bebop has been doing some weird things lately, go see.”
Serena walked over and – “OH MY GOD IT”S MY ROOM!”
“Toldja,” said Spike.
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“Alright, here’s another room that, Bebop’s pre-made,” said Spike opening a wooden door to what was a fairly simple room with a desk with books, a bed to the left, and a window which let starlight shade through over the desk. Yugi peeked out behind Spike, then, slowly walked beside him in a kind of stupor; Spike lifted his arm so Yugi wouldn’t bump into it. “Is this your room?” asked Spike, but Yugi didn’t reply; he just let his bag slip from his grasp. “Guess that’s a yes,” mumbled Spike,
“Spike! Everyone’s found their rooms!” shouted Sora trotting up with Ed and Ein.
“Good, let’s get back to the big room them; come on Yugi.”
Ed took Yugi’s hand and gently pulled him away, “That’s pretty cool huh?” asked Ed.
“Yeah,” Yugi squeaked.
Arriving in the living room, Faye greeted them with barely a nod as she read a magazine leaning back on the couch, her legs crossed in the air. Jet joined up with them, with Genkai behind him.
“Is everyone here experienced with Warphole jumping?” asked Genkai; Spike and Sora answered no. “Warphole jumping is a risky technique for reaching places that are quite a distance away, usually when traveling from system to system. It’s a technique only recently used since the Warpholes were only recently opened so there are some which haven’t been traced yet. The only reason we are going to use a Warphole instead of Hyper Travel is that is faster and the urgency to reach Kanto is great. We are only going to go through one, and it will boomerang us straight to the Kitzserubie Star and from there we will reach Kanto. Now, everyone to the deck,” said Genkai.
….
The deck was spacious enough, with the upgrades, this room in particular had a few changes.
“Were gonna Jump in here?” asked Yugi innocently.
“It’s in here, or you can bounce out there,” growled Jet, and he disabled the gravity generators leaving everyone to float.
Genkai turned to Sora and Spike, “They need to be turned off so the Warpholes won’t tear us apart.” Jet pulled up the Router Map which displayed the stream lines of the Warpholes and pointed to a blue swirl which was close to the bottom,
“That’s the one we’ll be shootin’ through right?”
“Yes,” said Genkai, “Don’t miss it,” she added in a deadly voice that sent chills down everyone’s spine...
“Okay, um, grab onto something,” said Jet as he began to move the ship.
“Open the jump point,” said Genkai. From the window, they saw two huge bolt fire from the ship and rip open a vortex.
“Okay, hold onto something,” said Jet again, and directed the ship slowly to the vortex which sounded like a monstrous wave approaching, eating up more and more of the window –
“Okay,” said Genkai talking over the roar, the ship began to shake, “As soon as we enter, we will be in a kind of tunnel, cut the ship to the left for the first blue light swirl.”
“Got it.”
Approaching the vortex was like approaching the drop off of a rollercoaster that sank into the eye of a hurricane – something in which you would rather travel tightly anchored somewhere and not suspended in mid-air hanging on to whatever was available –
“Here we go!” – PHEW! – The ship accelerated astronomically and Sora was sure his stomach was left at the back of the ship! Everything was traveling way too fast! WAY TOO FAST! To fast to take notice! A blue light shot by – !
“Wait – THAT WAS IT?!”
“THAT WAS IT!” screamed Ash.
“It’s alright!” yelled Genkai, “Well just be taking the scenic route then – Jet, keep this ship to the inner circles!” “Which would be –?!”
“THE BLUE ONES!” – phew….Jet missed the Warphole, and got the ship into the mercy of a torrential green Warphole that spun the ship like a top – no one could catch their orientation – phew – a purple Warphole – phew – a red Warphole – phew – a yellow Warphole – phew – a heliotrope Warphole –
“ARE YOU TAKING US THROUGH THE FRIKIN’ UNIVERSE?!” screamed Serena.
Genkai looked at the map which read an [Out of Area] signal – “Oh god were out of range!”
“But not by much right?!” yelled Faye.
“The range of our maps was to the farthest recorded system – the Assiah system which is supposedly 8 light years away!”
“LIGHT YEARS?!”
Sora’s entire body tinged with ice, he didn't even feel Ed latch onto him, *It can't be! It can’t! KAIRI! RIKU–!*
…………..
“Sora?”
“What is it Kairi?”
………….
“Sora?”
“What’s wrong Riku?”
…………….
BOOM. Something immense crashed into the ship with such force that their current speed was broken and everyone crashed into painful awkward positions – THWUMP. Sora felt the inner foundation of his body smash nearly flat as he was slammed up against a wall. Everything was going dark quick, and through the window before his vision gave out – he saw three huge magnificent wings flap idly by – all belonging to one side, all glowing and sparkling with brilliance….*Oh, it’s you….The creature, that caught me in my dream.*…..Sora passed out as his body once again began to float in air. “Yes my Master. I will never let you fall.”
FWUMP! Everyone limply fell to the ground as gravity took back hold within the ship…..Sora slowly opened his eyes…And everyone else followed one by one…There was no motion anymore, everything was all, and almost eerily, still. The lights were stable, the screen that showed the map now showed a status report for the ship saying that the gravity generators were back in full operation from the tweaks of the Warphole jumping. The report also showed that, that the hover engines had been automatically turned on. The second screen with the map silently blinked: Landing Successful. The report screen skipped to the side and showed a window which displayed the environment outside. Everyone for some mysterious reason had the tinglies usually felt after an advanced Cure* magic, but…Shock settled in. A third window overtook the report with the screen somewhat fuzzy for the distance between the transmission, -
“OH MY GOD ARE YALL ALRIGHT?! ARE YALL OKAY?!”
“Bulma?” cracked Goku’s voice from behind a chair; he pulled himself up and looked at her, her face stricken with every emotion of turmoil, tears streaming. “Yall were out of range! OUT OF RANGE! *SOB* But then, somehow, yall just appeared,” Bulma let her emotions off.
“Bulma, where, where are we?” asked Goku with the air of someone incredibly sleepy.
Bulma wiped her face, “*Sniff.* Eh, well yall made it, yep. Welcome, to Kanto.”
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#208 | | haruhi isn't amused
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Registered: Mar 2007 Posts: 8,291 | Re: K.h.a Yeah it was quite a long chapter, it was the longest of the entire story I think. But I can tell that you put alot of thought and effort into it and that's deserving of a reward.
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#209 | | FanFic Slayer, K.Theorist
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Registered: Sep 2007 Location: I am human, no worries. I don't suck brain juice anyway, it's too juicy. Posts: 1,173 | Re: K.h.a It gets more and more confusing with each chapter lol! Cause you put too much characters into it I lost track of what I should read. | |
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#210 | | Enigmatic Soldier
Silent Avera is online now Registered: Apr 2006 Location: I live where all artists are trying to dicipline themselves - HELL! Age: 21 Posts: 939 | Re: K.h.a T_T I'm sorry Xuan but I dunno what else I can do. This story does rely on some knowledge of anime characters and I left links a while back to find the ones that I talk about in my story, but thanks for reading it. I'm sorry that you're confused, but I like making my stories a maze...I dunno if that's a bad or a good thing >>;
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