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Old May 23rd, 2007, 06:47 PM   #16
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Thanks for the reviews, kids.
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Chapter 3= coming later.
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Old May 24th, 2007, 03:43 AM   #17
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Very good! I like it, its one the best I've ever seen. There could be a little more description but, not much. I wish I could get mine like this, and also could you read mine, Lost Hearts?(link in sig)

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Old May 26th, 2007, 12:18 AM   #18
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Yes, I know this chapter lacked descriptions.

But i'll make up for it next chapter.

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Old May 29th, 2007, 08:43 PM   #19
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Well, since I have nothing else to do.

Chapter 3 (part 1)

“Annette! Annette! Annette! Where are you?”

I ran through the front door screaming for Annette to tell her what happened.

I raced up three flights of stairs. I could not fly because I know my wings would inevitably break something of value to Annette’s family, like a fragile vase or ancient tapestry.

I reached the door to her room and began banging on the door so much force, the paintings that hung on the wall shook.

“What,” Annette screeched when she answered my loud calls.

“Kian said you needed me,” I said calmly.

Annette looked down the hall then pulled me into her room, slamming the door behind me.

“You wanna know what that stupid jerk face Finian said about me,” she hissed through her teeth. Finian was a boy Annette had the biggest crush on, but he went and broke her heart when he said he did not feel like dating her.

“Oh please share. And don’t leave anything out,” I said as I made myself comfortable by sitting on her bed in anticipation of her merciless anger.

“Mind if I use some colorful language,” she asked.

I shook my head.

“Well, that crazy son of a bitch Finian was talking to Arianna when he asked ‘How long do you think Annette and Dante are going to last?’ I want to kill him, Sophia! That low lying bastard needs to be buried alive.”

“I think we should shove his face in a blender and make him drink what we made with his face,” I said. My stomach churned at the gruesome thought.

“What makes him think he can go around saying shit like that?”

“I don’t know.” It decided it was best to let Annette vent her anger before I offer my advice. It was much easier to get through to her when she wasn’t fuming over some boy.

“Why can’t he just let me and Dante have some happiness?”

“Because he’s jealous,” I yawned.

Annette didn’t seem to hear me. Once she started muttering to herself, I felt it was time to leave her alone.

I walked out of her room and down the hallway. I reached above my head and stretched my arms when I heard a loud grumbling coming from my empty stomach. That gelato did not satisfy my hunger for long.

I started toward the stairs when I spotted my cat, Kitty, hiding behind a life-sized marble statue of what seemed to be one of Annette’s distant cousins.

“Are you hiding from Natasha or Klaus?” I knelt down and held out my arms. I stood up once she was nestled in the safety of my embrace.

“Let’s go get some food and annoy Klaus.” Kitty meowed softly and licked my collar bone.

I burst through the kitchen door and set Kitty on the floor.

“Can you make anymore noise,” Millie asked from the table.

“Yeah probably,” I laughed. I looked at the fridge to find Klaus crouched down with one hand holding a small light bulb and the other one scratching his head.

“What are you doing,” I asked slowly.

Klaus sighed. “I'm trying to change the light bulb in the fridge. I’m tired of having to blindly look for my food and when I do find something, it’s not what I wanted!” Klaus threw his free hand up and accidentally punched the fridge.

“Well, once you figure it out, tell me,” I said even though I haven’t given the burned out light bulb much thought.

“Sure…”

I reached over his head and grabbed the milk. I pulled out a spoon, a bowl, and poured myself some Lucky Charms. I sat down next to Millie and watched Klaus attempt to fix something rather than break something.

“What was Annette so upset about,” Millie asked me.

“Something Finian said,” I managed to say through a mouthful of cereal. “She was so mad, she quit listening to me and started talking to herself.

“You should have seen her when she came home. Now that was scary,” Klaus called from the depths of the refrigerator. He sat up and continued. “All I did was say a nice hello and she exploded on me saying I was bothering her.” After saying this, he returned to his daunting task.

“She’ll calm down soon,” I said with a smile.

“I hope so. At any rate, I’d hate to be her victim tonight,” Millie said.

“That reminds me, is anyone staying home with me tonight?”

“Kian is, I think,” Klaus stated as he stood up and looked at his accomplishment. “Look! I fixed it!” He jumped up and down in excitement.

At that precise moment, Kian, Annette, and Lena walked into the kitchen to see Klaus hopping around like a little kid who had just found out that Christmas would be coming early.

“No way. He fixed something?” Kian looked astonished and gaped at his twin in disbelief.

“That’s his one accomplishment for this lifetime,” Lena smiled.

“Nice going, Klaus.” Annette plopped herself down in a chair and glared at everyone. She was still in a very sour mood.

I turned toward Kian and asked, “Are you staying home tonight?”

“Sure am. And you’re staying too, I presume.”

“Yep, Dakirai said he’d come over later tonight, too.” I smiled.

Annette shot me a look as if to say, "I'm going to murder you and your kids.".

“It’ll only be a short visit,” I added quickly.

She turned away and scowled at the floor.

Everyone was silent until Kitty let out a fierce yowl of hunger. Klaus and Kian both jumped and whirled around.

“You let that thing in here,” Klaus snarled. Klaus and Kian loathed all cats, not just Kitty.

“Why yes I did and you two will do nothing about it,” I said in a snide voice. I walked past them and poured Kitty her food.

“And if you do anything to hurt Kitty, I will tell your mother.”

Klaus’s eyes bugged out and Kian’s jaw dropped.

“You wouldn’t,” Kian said in a horrified whisper.

I nodded and smirked at them. The only person they were really afraid of was their mother.

“Oh she would,” Klaus said while looking warily at Kitty.

I moved in front of them and put my hands on my hips. I heard Lena and Millie snicker behind me. I didn’t hear Annette, but I was sure she cracked a small smile.

Klaus looked at his imaginary watch and said, “Look at the time. I better head up to the roof now.” Klaus sprinted out of the kitchen.

“We might as well go, too,” Lena said, following Klaus.

“We will see you kids way later,” Millie said as she waved good-bye.

Annette merely stalked away without looking at me or Kian.

“She’ll be fine,” he reassured me.

I shrugged and put my bowl and spoon in the dishwasher.

“Wanna go watch some TV?” Kian took a few steps toward the door to the family room.

“Sure.” I had nothing else to do except await Dakirai’s arrival.

We shuffled into the next room and flopped down onto the sleek leather couch. Kian turned on the big screen TV and immediately immersed himself in a rerun of Jeopardy!.

I, however, was not inclined to watch a game show. I looked out the nearest window. The stars twinkled brightly and the moon glowed with gaudy ambition. Although I was not on the hunt for blood, I could not ignore the need to prowl the night.

“Let’s go to a club, Kian,” I suggested.

“Aren’t you going to wait for that one kid,” he replied, eyes glued to the TV screen.

“We’ll be back before he gets here,” I convinced myself.

Kian shut off the television and rose from the sofa. “If he comes here and we aren’t back and he’s upset, it’s your fault,” he said, pointing a finger at me.

I exhaled sharply through my nose and jumped up.

“I’m going to change. Meet you here in 15 minutes? “

Kian nodded and lowered himself into and armchair and picked up his guitar and played a slow melody.

I turned away and hurried to my room.


x.x.x.x.x.x.x.x.x.x.

Chapter 3 is going to be long, but here's the first part.
Tell me what you think :D

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Old May 29th, 2007, 10:40 PM   #20
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Once again Texy I am loving this story mucho.

I like this sentence:
Annette shot me a look as if to say, "I'm going to murder you and your kids.".

And this one: The stars twinkled brightly and the moon glowed with gaudy ambition.

Can't wait for more!!!
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Old May 30th, 2007, 09:34 PM   #21
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I knew you would like those sentences :D
Please review, people.
It's really appreciated.
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Old May 30th, 2007, 11:36 PM   #22
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hehe funny kitty and i love the part where klaus is chainging the frige light bulb verry funny kepp it coming
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Old June 1st, 2007, 02:51 AM   #23
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Why thank you :D
And I'll try and finish the chapter soon and I'll post it.
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Old June 2nd, 2007, 05:35 PM   #24
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On your next chapter i think you should really use a big 'bang' to start off the real plot of the story and what the goal is in it. Great update!
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Old June 2nd, 2007, 07:28 PM   #25
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Great chapter you really know how to make the story interesting,can't wait for the next edition.
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Old June 5th, 2007, 02:08 AM   #26
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Chapter 3 (Part 2)

I turned away and hurried to my room.

Once there, I rummaged through my closet, looking for my favorite dress. I smiled to myself when I felt the smooth satin brush against my fingers.

I pulled it out of the dark abyss that was my closet and slipped it on.

The black satin seemed to make my fair skin glow and the gold trim around the strapless top trickled down the front of the dress like water and ended at my waist. The backless dress was held together by a string that laced up to form diamonds up the length of my back.

I slid the hair bands that held my braids in place out and unraveled my thick hair, letting the soft waves fall around my shoulders.

As I lined my eyes with black liner, someone barged into my room.

“I’m going with you guys,” Annette fumed. She snapped the door shut and stomped down the hall and slammed her door shut a few moments after.

With one last look at myself in the mirror, I proceeded down the main staircase to see Kian sitting by the front entrance scribbling a note to Klaus, Lena, and Millie, letting them know where we were going.

“Annette’s coming,” I announced as I searched for my boots. “Have you seen my boots anywhere?”

“What do they look like?”

“They’re black, they come up to my knees, and they’re kinda like the boots death metal kids would wear, only more girly,” I said.

“Laundry room, next to the dryer,” Kian said shortly without looking up.

“Thanks.” I found my boots in the exact place Kian said they would be. I stepped into them and walked back to the entrance hall.

Annette came down the stairs, mumbling out loud as if Kian and I weren’t there.

“Are you feeling any better,” I asked softly.

“Yes, a bit. I tore the girl limb from limb before taking her blood.”

I understood what she meant perfectly. “You need to get your mind off him. Besides, Dante is much better looking in my opinion.”

A flicker of a smile flashed across her face and she stepped out into the cloudless night. Kian looked apprehensive and kept his distance from Annette.

I followed them outside and looked around. Not a soul in sight. My wings tingled with adrenaline.

“We’re going to make sure you have a good time tonight, Annette,” I assured her while glaring at Kian, making sure he goes along with me.

“Just don’t get your feathers all ruffled,” he said.

Kian looked ahead and spotted a small cluster of pretty, whispering girls. I watched Kian. His ebony hair turned sapphire under the glowing moon and his midnight blue wings fluttered quietly.

“Watch this,” he said to me, walking faster at the same time.

I followed the handsome strigoi with my eyes as he sauntered confidently over to the girls. I could see that only one of the girls was a strigoi for she had wings, but since humans cannot see our wings, the others did not notice a single difference.

“Wow, whatever he’s saying, its working. Just look at them, all giddy and whatnot from one pretty boy just uttering a phrase of desire,” Annette scoffed. “He’ll probably bring them all home tonight.”

“I strongly disagree. Klaus is the one who brings home a crowd of fan girls. Kian will only bring one home.”

“Let’s place a bet!” Annette exclaimed. “I bet Kian will bring home more girls than Klaus, but only on this night.”

“Alright, I’ll go against that and say that Klaus will bring home more girls. Whoever loses has to tell both boys what we bet on and the loser has to clean all the rooms in the house,” I replied, we shook on it, and linked arms and continued on our way, overtaking Kian and the fan girls.

We heard the music coming from the only club in Venice that was decent enough for a good crowd of humans and strigoi alike. Annette and I managed to talk our way past the bouncer and I observed the mass of people dancing, drinking, and gambling. I led Annette over to the bar and sat her down while I flagged down the bartender.

“It’s been a while, Sophia. Having a string a good boys are you?” Tura flipped back her blonde hair and set two glasses of Italian soda spiked with rum in front of me and Annette.

“How would you know,” I asked, taking a sip.

“Well, you’re not coming in here with bruises and you’re not in tears. But it looks like Annette needs some T.L.C. “

I saw to my surprise that Annette had gulped down her soothing beverage and was waving her glass around, asking for more.

“I’d go a little slower if I were you, dear,” Tura said, refilling Annette’s glass and hurrying away to tend to someone else’s order.

A loud cheer erupted from the far side of the club and I craned my around so I could see what the excitement was all about. Klaus and Kian had just made a grand entrance by dragging in the bouncer with them, insisting that he join in a game of Russian roulette with them. A large clique of loose women followed the twins into the club and draped themselves all over the rowdy boys.

Lena and Millie squeezed into the crowded room and waved to me. They pushed their way over to the bar and Millie shouted over the noise, “Klaus left us.”

“I can see that,” I said loudly, looking at the boys.

“You’re not going to throw us out, are you?” Lena asked.

“Of course not,” I exclaimed. “You two stay as long as you need to.”

Millie was so grateful, she threw her arms around my neck and pulled me into a neck-breaking hug.

“I’d hug you too, but I’m not real big on hugging,” Lena explained.

Millie backed away and the two runaways bolted to the dance floor and instantly became the center of attention.

“Soapy, I think I had too many drinks,” a voice slurred in my ear.

“I agree. Can you make sure nothing happens to her, Tura? She’s had a rough day.”

“No problem, dear.” Tura pulled Annette to her feet and led her to a chair behind the bar. “She’ll be just dandy here.”

I swayed slightly on my stool. I wasn’t paying attention to how much I had been drinking since I got here, but I better stop soon before something happens.

“Surprise, surprise. Fancy seeing you here,” someone whispered behind me. I knew that voice, but it’s not who I wanted it to be. His voice, rough and unwelcoming; his touch, cold and bitter.

I hated this man.

x.x.x.x.x.x.x.x.x.

Ok, so there is a point to this story and I will get to it.

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Old June 5th, 2007, 02:20 AM   #27
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i love it as usual Texy =) the details and everything are just lovely. i can wait to see where its going next!

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Old June 5th, 2007, 02:28 AM   #28
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Another awesome and great chapter, great sidenote details as well can't wait for the next one!
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yay chapter3part2 you rock.............wait no texkia you rock love it
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Very Good chapter! You really left a great cliff hanger this time! Keep up the great writing!
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