KHInsider.com Forums > Creative Corner > Creative Writing > Fanfiction » Lost Hearts

Login to remove all ads!
Reply
 
Thread Tools Display Modes
Old 06/23/07, 09:51 AM   #151
ドットハック ルーツ
Join Date: Mar 2007
Location: Tokyo, Japan
Age: 19
Posts: 10,116
Rep Power: 18 Haku is kind of a big deal.Haku is kind of a big deal.Haku is kind of a big deal.Haku is kind of a big deal.Haku is kind of a big deal.Haku is kind of a big deal.
Default Re: Lost Hearts

Yeah the new pirate addition really added a nice twist to the story xD.
Haku is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06/23/07, 11:03 PM   #152
Screw that action
Join Date: May 2006
Location: In a movie theater no where near you
Age: 15
Posts: 2,100
Rep Power: 5 Shadowysights is mediocrity at its finest.
Default Re: Lost Hearts

Thanks for the good comments, the next chapter should be up later today or tommorrow.
Shadowysights is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06/23/07, 11:26 PM   #153
Love Jejung <3
Join Date: Oct 2006
Location: In front of my comp XD
Age: 17
Posts: 2,327
Rep Power: 8 Ultima Star is quite favorable.Ultima Star is quite favorable.Ultima Star is quite favorable.Ultima Star is quite favorable.
Default Re: Lost Hearts

^^ nice! I like it, I want to read the next part too^^
Ultima Star is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06/25/07, 01:12 AM   #154
Screw that action
Join Date: May 2006
Location: In a movie theater no where near you
Age: 15
Posts: 2,100
Rep Power: 5 Shadowysights is mediocrity at its finest.
Default Re: Lost Hearts

Chapter 14:

Finding out the rest


Roas awoke on the bottom bunk of a bed in a brown wooden room. The bed creaked as he started off of it; he sat up on the bed “Where am I?” He moaned drowsily as he stood up. Roas lifted his up his arms and began to stretch. “Now….how do I get out of here…..and were are my friends? I’m tried of having to find them.” He said starting to get irritated. “Now let’s see….” He mumbled to himself walking over to the wall. “If there’s a way to get me in, there’s way out.”

“It’s over there.” Someone said, lightly; from seemingly nowhere.

Roas twisted back around to see who it was “Who was that?” he almost yelled; only seeing a tiny little red light.

“Me…..come closer.” It said whatever it was.

Roas started back over to the bed where the light shined “What are you?”

“I’m a fairy….my name is Tinker bell.” She greeted

“But isn’t Tinker bell green?” Roas asked, remembering peter pan from a book he think he read or saw; something like that.

“Well….I’m imitating her….my real names is Kairi.”

“Hello, Kairi; okay so where did you point to?” Roas asked hurriedly

“That’s rude.”

“What? How?” Roas asked, scratching his head quickly as he went along.

“I told you my name; tell me yours.” Kairi stated

“Roas.”

“Oh okay….Hi Roas.” Kairi said with a big smile on her face.

“Okay….where did you point to again?” Roas asked impatiently

“Over there to the right; why are you in such a hurry? You’re not going to be able to get off of this ship.” Kairi mentioned nonchalantly.


“Ship? As in boat?” Roas asked

“Yeah….one of the biggest.” Kairi said while she started float down on to the bed.


“Okay, um….I think I’ll just stay in here for a while….” Roas said as he slouched back down.

“What’s wrong?” Kairi asked, flying over to him, little sparkles flowing behind her. “You don’t like water?”

“No…I hate water, and I get sea sick easily.” Roas grunted as she flew over to his face and rested on his nose.

“But in this world, you can fly using my pixie dust.” Kairi mentioned, looking as if she was going to fall asleep.

“But I don’t like heights…”

“Don’t you like anything? It’s your only way off this ship, unless you plan on walking the plank soon…” She faintly added with a smirk on her face.

“Why am I going off the plank!?” Roas yelled, not caring who might of heard him outside.

“Calm down…..why are you in this room?” Kairi gently asked flying off his nose. “You could of busted my ear drums what’s wrong with you?” She groaned to herself holding her ears.

“I don’t know….I just woke up here.”

“This may be a dream…”Kairi suggested “But that doesn’t matter now, you have to get off this ship.”

“How?”


“I already told you, my pixie dust, I’ll give you some when we get outside.”

“Okay.” Roas ended

Roas finally pushed open the wall to see an open hall way; him and tinker bell crept out, but there seemed no reason to, there was no one there. They started to move more casually as they saw a latter that headed strait up. Roas climbed up, Kairi following, and at the top was a boy dressed in green, like an elf.

“Hey tink!” The boy yelled as he spun around

“Stop calling me that!” Kairi yelled

“Okay…did you give that boy some pixie dust already?” He asked

“No… but I’ll give it to him.” She said calming down.

“Okay....oh yeah….I’m Sora.” Sora said starting over to them; but every step he took, Roas took a step back. “What are you doing?”

“Staying away from you.” Roas had stated, getting ready to move back again. “You look like some kind of child molester.”

“But I’m not.” Sora responded, looking a little more serious.

“I don’t trust you.” Roas said as Sora walked over. “Stay away from me.”

Sora grabbed Roas by the arm and yelled. “Stop screwing around!”

“Ahh! Let me go! I don’t want a popsicle!” Roas yelled, as Sora shoved him to the side, making him hit the wall of the hall way.

“Just know that I’m controlling your dream and that you should move on and come back later.” Sora almost yelled

“Uhh, okay.” Roas stammered

“Okay….now wake up!” Sora yelled as everything to Roas seemed to disappear.

The next thing he saw was Lilla leaning over him inside of the gummi ship. She lightly asked. “Have a nice nap? What happened?”

“Huh? A boy named Sora told me he was controlling our dreams and to move on to the next planet.” Roas stated.

“I figured that, no point and visiting a planet that haunted us. I guess were supposed to come back later.” Lilla added

“To the next world then…” Range ended.
-----------------------------
Please comment.
Shadowysights is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06/25/07, 01:34 AM   #155
raise your hands together
Join Date: Mar 2007
Location: Running and not looking back
Age: 17
Posts: 2,760
Rep Power: 6 Angelsinflight is a jewel in the rough.Angelsinflight is a jewel in the rough.Angelsinflight is a jewel in the rough.
Default Re: Lost Hearts

Quote:
Originally Posted by acein12 View Post

“Staying away from you.” Roas had stated, getting ready to move back again. “You look like some kind of child molester.”

“But I’m not.” Sora responded, looking a little more serious.

“I don’t trust you.” Roas said as Sora walked over. “Stay away from me.”

Sora grabbed Roas by the arm and yelled. “Stop screwing around!”

“Ahh! Let me go! I don’t want a popsicle!” Roas yelled, as Sora shoved him to the side, making him hit the wall of the hall way.
LMAO that was hilarious!

excelent chappie acein! glad you used my idea! ^^
Angelsinflight is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06/25/07, 01:48 AM   #156
ドットハック ルーツ
Join Date: Mar 2007
Location: Tokyo, Japan
Age: 19
Posts: 10,116
Rep Power: 18 Haku is kind of a big deal.Haku is kind of a big deal.Haku is kind of a big deal.Haku is kind of a big deal.Haku is kind of a big deal.Haku is kind of a big deal.
Default Re: Lost Hearts

Excellent chapter it really turned out well with Angelsinflight's idea xD.
Haku is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06/25/07, 01:55 AM   #157
Screw that action
Join Date: May 2006
Location: In a movie theater no where near you
Age: 15
Posts: 2,100
Rep Power: 5 Shadowysights is mediocrity at its finest.
Default Re: Lost Hearts

Thanks Angelsinflight and Haku. Thanks for the idea Angelsinflight XD
Shadowysights is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06/25/07, 02:43 AM   #158
Ruler of Light
Join Date: Apr 2006
Location: I live where all artists are trying to dicipline themselves - HELL!
Age: 20
Posts: 601
Rep Power: 3 Silent Avera is at an unknown quantity at this point.
Default Re: Lost Hearts

Kairi as Tinkerbell, now that is too cute! So it's Sora whose been controlling thier dreams! Well I can't sick Mecho on him, anywho great chapter! I wonder why Sora has been controlling thier dreams...
(Gasp) Is he trapped somewhere?!
Patiently waiting for the next chapter ^_^
Silent Avera is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06/25/07, 03:24 AM   #159
Screw that action
Join Date: May 2006
Location: In a movie theater no where near you
Age: 15
Posts: 2,100
Rep Power: 5 Shadowysights is mediocrity at its finest.
Default Re: Lost Hearts

You'll find out soon enough....but it shouldn't be long before I make the next chapter.

Last edited by Shadowysights; 06/25/07 at 03:35 AM.
Shadowysights is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06/25/07, 03:44 AM   #160
raise your hands together
Join Date: Mar 2007
Location: Running and not looking back
Age: 17
Posts: 2,760
Rep Power: 6 Angelsinflight is a jewel in the rough.Angelsinflight is a jewel in the rough.Angelsinflight is a jewel in the rough.
Default Re: Lost Hearts

no prob w/ helping you out. i started reading it and i was like "omgz he actually used it!!?? awesomeness!" lol but its really cool how Sora's controlling their dreams.

if Sora's trapped *gasp* go save him!! lol
Angelsinflight is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06/25/07, 03:53 AM   #161
Screw that action
Join Date: May 2006
Location: In a movie theater no where near you
Age: 15
Posts: 2,100
Rep Power: 5 Shadowysights is mediocrity at its finest.
Default Re: Lost Hearts

Its was a good idea, thanks again. And if you're really desprate to know [Spoiler] Sora is not trapped [/spoiler]
Shadowysights is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06/25/07, 04:18 AM   #162
Organization Member
Join Date: May 2004
Location: Im in a box thats in my mind......sailing where ever i need to.......
Age: 17
Posts: 350
Rep Power: 5 Dark_Seraphim is at an unknown quantity at this point.
Send a message via AIM to Dark_Seraphim Send a message via MSN to Dark_Seraphim Send a message via Yahoo to Dark_Seraphim
Default Re: Lost Hearts

Not to bad^^ I can invision all this happening as though it were a movie playing in my head^^ you did a dam fine job man^^ come out with more of this I'd like to read it^^
Dark_Seraphim is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06/25/07, 04:18 AM   #163
raise your hands together
Join Date: Mar 2007
Location: Running and not looking back
Age: 17
Posts: 2,760
Rep Power: 6 Angelsinflight is a jewel in the rough.Angelsinflight is a jewel in the rough.Angelsinflight is a jewel in the rough.
Default Re: Lost Hearts

[Spoiler] Yay!!! Sora is Free!!!![/spoiler]

lol
Angelsinflight is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06/25/07, 04:21 AM   #164
Screw that action
Join Date: May 2006
Location: In a movie theater no where near you
Age: 15
Posts: 2,100
Rep Power: 5 Shadowysights is mediocrity at its finest.
Default Re: Lost Hearts

Quote:
Originally Posted by Dark_Seraphim View Post
Not to bad^^ I can invision all this happening as though it were a movie playing in my head^^ you did a dam fine job man^^ come out with more of this I'd like to read it^^
It gets better as you get farther through the story...and it will keep getting better.
Shadowysights is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 06/25/07, 04:31 AM   #165
Organization Member
Join Date: May 2004
Location: Im in a box thats in my mind......sailing where ever i need to.......
Age: 17
Posts: 350
Rep Power: 5 Dark_Seraphim is at an unknown quantity at this point.
Send a message via AIM to Dark_Seraphim Send a message via MSN to Dark_Seraphim Send a message via Yahoo to Dark_Seraphim
Default Re: Lost Hearts

WOOOOT XD when will the next chap come outO.o
Dark_Seraphim is offline   Reply With Quote
Reply

Thread Tools
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Trackbacks are Off
Pingbacks are Off
Refbacks are Off


All times are GMT +1. The time now is 10:32 AM.
Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.7.2
Copyright ©2000 - 2008, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.
Search Engine Friendly URLs by vBSEO 3.1.0