A Little Taste of Life

[Anonymous]

Originally Posted by Rixon

Nice work.............................................. .........................

Okay.............................................. .........................

Hmm... I still would like a few more reviews....
It helps me improve the next chapter, so seriously guys, look long and hard to try and find my flaws! lol

[Taokitty]

ANONYMOUS!!!! =D

*Glomps*

It's been quite awhile, neh? How've ya been? Where'd ya go? Watcha writing? Watcha doing? =P

Scuse me. ^^;;; <Nocternal questions above, if you'd like to answer them, go ahead, if it doesn't seem too intrusive. ^^;;;>

I'm a little hyper, which is rather surprising seeing I didn't even eat rice today... But anyway, it's just so good to see you again (Hypertheticly speaking) and I'm glad you got your fic up and running!

And I got critism! GASP!

As usual, your story is wonderful. Though, it seems to be missing a slight element you held in your last fics, that seemed to get one more thinking, or trying to get into the character's head a little somehow... It seems different, wether for better or worse, up to you. ^-^

Though, I think you should add more of a point of view, seeing it just seems more like actions to me, a little chalky somehow. That could use improvement in that way. What's Sora thinking currently? What about Kairi? You probably could of added some more sentences, like about how Riku visits them every now and again, you could make him worry about his friend a little more, or something to that extent before wondering to the thought of his time with Kairi.

Sorry it's not much of critism! Tie shall try my best to add some more when I read more! >D

It's bugging me though... Seeing for either your first or second, I recall that you told us that the storyline or twist you had went exactly against what Kingdom Hearts stood/ was for, and I think I figured it out once... Sadly I forgot though... Sorry, just wanted to get that off of my chest. ^-^;;;

Sorry, I'm acting a little selfish today, you can just read the bolded part if you'd like, I probably shouldn't be talking so much... Sorry again. ><

It's just so nice to talk again, which is why it's selfish. ^^;;;

[Anonymous]

TAOKITTY!!!!!!
what a happy reunion!!!!

Now if only masamune was here....
Well thank you for the criticism (wow... that usually sounds like a bad thing lol), but I have only a slight idea of what you mean.... o.O
If you mean how I used to give you an idea of what was to come, well...
I dunno. I like doing that, but I always feel like I give too much away.
So.... maybe.

ANyway, yea, I've been good, and I've been writing for myself for the most part....
Boy I missed talking to you! It's good to be back!

Okay, back to the fic:
Chapter 2 is being worked on, and its sorta the real beginning of the story. (HAPPY TAO????)

[Taokitty]

YUSH! WE SHOULD DRAG MASAMUNE HERE! >D

>< Sorry, I usually confuse people I see still. ^-^

What I meant was how you wrote it (Not about when you'd give us hints... Though, that's always fun to receive ), it seemed like a little more of what Sora or Kairi was thinking could of been added into it, though, that's just me. ^^;;;

Well, that's what I meant to say for the bolded part anyway.=P
Though, with my 'superior' ability, it's probable it still doesn't make any sense! ><

xD I think I can understand by what you mean. ^-^
I remember when I was writing a story once, I didn't say anything except maybe,"She's going to be surprised," or something very vague like that, and fear the people would find out the whole entire storyline from it. o.o

Same here! ^-^
I'm glad you've been fine, how do you like your fic so far by the way? Sorry, curiosity has grabbed a hold of me...

xD YAY! I can't wait! xD

[Anonymous]

Okay, I get ya.
Well, chapter 2's been started, and its coming along well. I think you'll find it interesting, but then again, you still have no idea what's going on.

Well, I'll probably get it up tomorrow or Monday.

[Taokitty]

I have as much of an idea as everyone else, depending if one would prefer to use their imagination. ^-^

I have an idea what's going on. ><

Can't wait! =D

[Anonymous]

...I'm really sorry!!!

I haven't had anytime to write anything with all my school work and sport so....
Chapter 2 isn't finished yet T_T

Umm... I started it last weekend, and I'm GOING TO finish it this weekend.
Again, I'm sorry I let this die....

[Gullwing Yunie]

It's ok xD
Well I can't wait for it! Or maybe I can...

[**Oathkeeper**]

I just started to read this fanfic and so far i like it! What i like most is how you potrayed the characters just as they would in the game so please continue to do that!

[Anonymous]

Chapter 2: Beginning of Another End

The next day, Kairi and Sora spent the mid-morning sparring with one another. Since they had returned from the Organization’s castle, Kairi had convinced Sora and Riku to give her lessons in fighting, and to both of their astonishment, Kairi had picked up the art surprisingly fast. In the three months she had trained, Kairi managed to disarm both Sora and Riku once each. Kairi had almost mastered the usage of her weapons, two sleek curved blades that could be attached at the hilt to be used as a double ended blade. The blades were the size of an average sword, but were an azure color with her good luck charm attached to the hilt of her right blade.

Along with these new weapons, Kairi had also taken up a new look. She was now garbed in a pair of short, black jeans; a set of custom made, pink combat boots; and a simple form-fitting pink tank top. Kairi found she couldn’t maneuver all that well in a short skirt, and to Sora’s delight, she changed into a set of pants for once. After all, Tidus and Wakka had always paid a bit too much attention to Kairi’s lower half for Sora’s comfort. Kairi also had a small metallic case draped around her back to carry her blades.

The two continued sparring, and Kairi blocked Sora’s rushing assault by putting her swords in an X shape and then slashing down with both. Sora hopped back to dodge her slash, and dropped his wooden training sword laughing, “Okay, you’ve definitely gotten better!”

Kairi smirked, “Told ya so,” She fell down on the sand next to Sora and laughed. They sat together until about noon, watching the sky slowly darken as an armada of clouds covered the teal sky, and they only looked up when the first few drops of rain sprinkled their faces. Looking outward towards the main land, the sky was a purplish-black color. Kairi pointed out at the sea and exclaimed, “Look!” They were looking at a small wooden boat. After awhile, they realized it was Selphie in her regular yellow skirt piloting the boat, and they met her at the dock.

When they got closer, it was clear she was distressed. Panting, Selphie managed to stutter, “Heartless! On- on the main land! … Tidus and Wakka need help!” As Selphie tried to catch her breath, Sora put on a confident smile, “Hey Kairi, up for a challenge?”

Kairi smiled, and they set off to the main land together, weapons at the ready. Sora had abandoned the wooden sword and dawned his favorite blade, Bond of Flame, holding it at the ready. As they moved closer to the main island, they slowly made out a terrifying scene.

There was a giant, pulsating black orb hanging over the city, raining heartless down upon the defenseless settlement, and bathing it in darkness. When Kairi saw this, she almost broke down. How could this happen? Who was responsible for it? “I swear,” Kairi thought to herself, “Whoever’s doing this is gonna pay.”

Sora remained fairly calm. He rowed the boat pretty fast and was keeping an eye on the massive black pearl, but he was clearly disturbed by the sight. “Man Riku, you had to pick this weekend to go away, right?” The boat was rocked savagely by the howling winds, and the rain was relentlessly stinging their faces.

The sky had turned darker and darker as they moved closer towards the sphere, but the storm was not nearly large enough to be seen from any of the other large islands. Kairi and Sora sailed onwards, but Sora rowed noticeably slower. He seemed a bit hesitant, as if he was recalling all that had changed on the night of the last storm. When they finally reached the opposite shore, the person waiting for them at the dock was not exactly a person they had hoped to see again.

Standing perfectly still in the brutal winds was a witch draped in an elongated black cloak, dragging far behind her feet. It was tight around the edges of her pale face, and ended in two defined spikes at the top of her head. Lastly, she carried a walking staff topped with a green orb, and had a large troop of Defender heartless standing in her wake.

“You didn’t think I’d forgotten you, did you child?” chimed Maleficent.

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Well, I got it done!
It's meant to be one of those cheesy suspense momenty-thingys

The next chapter is in the works, and it marks the end of the Destiny Islands segment (I can't stand them :\ too dull)... so, yea...
I'm not saying anything else. (sorry Tao lol)

But, expect it within a week (I'm sorry, but I've got school, sports, and I got a new dog!! It's a lot!)

[**Oathkeeper**]

Yay it's Malificent! Wait, wheres Pete ?

[Haku]

I really like it because you have a very original writing style, can't wait for the next issue!

[Gullwing Yunie]

Great chapter! Really interesting XD

[Anonymous]

Originally Posted by **Oathkeeper**

Yay it's Malificent! Wait, wheres Pete ?

Let's say Maleficent "sent him on a little trip" :laugh:
I can't stand that fat oaf :\
(Let's make this clear, he won't be in this fanfic).

Anyway, thanks for all the positive comments (gee Tao, remember when I got absolutely NO comments? )

You know, I don't understand how my writing is different...
A couple of people have said that, but I can't get it....
Is it 'cause I write in a passive perspective? Because other people do that! (Not that I mind being called original!)

Oh, one last thing: I always doodle during school, and I did a few sketches for this story, but right now they'd be spoilers, so if you want to see them later, let me know!

[Taokitty]

No, I don't think so. It seems to be something else to your writing wise. It's probably because from what I know, it's been awhile since you've written anything (Unless there were certain assignments that required such literature) so that has probably changed how he'd usually write, and also you have more experience now with writing, so it could be taken as a good thing. ^-^

((xD Ah yes, I recall when there was no comments... Goldie actually got the permission to spam in the thread if I recall correctly! xD The only person I recall than just the three of us was that one random user who posted wrestling in your fic... o.O

We dicussed about that issue later. xD

It's so good seeing people here! ^0^ Your deserve it, damnit! >_o))

xD Originality is always of use. ^-^

o.o ... I'll be getting on you about those sketched the minute those spoilers will become suppisove only to those who haven't read it the second it's posted. <<.>>

Anyway, nice update! xD
You getta love those moments, it's always funny how such moments are called cliff hangers, I find it rather funny but anyway, nice. ^-^

Your talent has improved a bit from what I've seen. ^-^