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| Court Mage Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Castle Oblivion Age: 15
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Rep Power: 0 ![]() | I'm new here and I was thinking well , it would be good to try and write a fanfic yeah so i decided to start off with the title . Busy with work so this could take awhile . Hope all can give me their comments . Now time to brainstorm :toungesmile: |
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| Court Mage Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Castle Oblivion Age: 15
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Rep Power: 0 ![]() | Here goes nothing , *P.S this is a dialogue between 2 parties Prologue The boy laid motionlessly sprawled across the floor . He had the look of any typical 15-year old , but there was something special about him that cannot be explained in manners of words . To put it simply , he was special . "Oh , looks like we got ourselves a visitor ." "Wat the --- , there's no pulse , but he is still breathing and very much alive , even though his body is disintegrating . It's like ... it's like he is able to live ......without a HEART ......" "So he is just like us isn't he? " "Pretty much." "So we have to retry that ?" "We don't have another choice , we have to try it." The man grasps at his blade with shaky hands as he felt sweat trickle down his cheeks . He hadn't try it since he saved Kage with it . He waved his blade at the chest of the white-haired youth . With voice loud as thunder , he turned the blade like a key in a lock and shouted .... "Reincarnation of the soul , UNSEAL AND REBIRTH!" Last edited by SoraOblivion93; 02/26/07 at 04:36 AM. |
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| Warrior of Darkness Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: somewhere everyone could not reach if he don't know it
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Rep Power: 0 ![]() | agh i still not get the main idea is the one doing that sora?perhaps the next chapter can explain me |
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| Court Mage Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Castle Oblivion Age: 15
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Rep Power: 0 ![]() | Here’s the first actual chapter , Chapter 1 : 3 months after the climatic finish of Organisation XIII Destiny Islands The island breeze blew gently against the trees as they rustle and sway in the wind . The islands have not look better since its destruction two years back . Up in the trees , a girl sketches this wonderful scenery with her pencil , elaborating the details of the beauty of Destiny Islands . “Hey , Kairi , whatcha doing up there ?” Wakka called at her as she went off the beach while his friends , Tidus and Selphie continues their game of Blitz . “Nothing really , just sketching the beach ,” Kairi gave a slight smile and continued , “It‘s just that I feel I have not been able to enjoy this scenery this much ever .” Wakka gave a grin and went back to the game . Kairi look into the distance , pondering over what her friends were doing now --- Leon , Yuffie , Aerith and all the friends that Sora has introduced her to --- and how their lives were . Sora had not changed much after the months . He was the same old cheerful Sora , spiky hair and courageous with a strong sense of friendship . But Sora wasn’t feeling himself lately , something was troubling him . His blade was reacting weirdly recently . It would just appear out of nowhere even if he didn’t summon it . “Something is wrong , I‘m sure of it ,” he thought , “The letter and now this , something‘s brewing and I got to stop it .” His friends wouldn’t believe him , since they all heard how he had taken down the darkness not once but twice . “Call me skeptical , but I tell you , something is brewing up .” After much time , his friends had grew tired of it , thinking that the saving the world thing must have rushed up to his head , and usually just mock his vision . The only ones who ever took time to listen was Riku and Kairi . They were the only ones with the key blades and of course they listened and observed the reaction of their own in case Sora was right . And it seems that chances of this happening was getting more higher , Riku’s blade teleported into his hand out of nowhere that day when he neared the Secret Place . And the occurrence of Sora’s blade reacting in a weird manner were more recent then ever . By then , they should have known , something was very wrong …… Meanwhile Unknown Location “Where am I ?” the boy put a hand to his face , as though he was wondering if he was reality . His hand hit a cold surface and he felt hollow . It was as if he was merely a soul , inside a mere shell to serve as his body . He took a moment to scan his environment . The room he was in was very well furnished , a reading table , a wall mirror , a cabinet and even a wastepaper basket . If he could give a guess where he was , he would undoubtedly say he was in a hotel suite . But he wasn’t interested of where he was in , but more of who he was . He didn’t feel human , and upon spotting the mirror , he made a dash for it . His head was spinning , his neck was aching and his steps gave off a very hollow sounds . Clang clang clang …… Finally , with much effort he got to the mirror . He look into the mirror and immediately he freeze . His jaw drop down in absolute disbelief but there is if you think he still had a jaw … End of chapter 1 Please give any comments or criticism so I can improve since this is my first fan fic . Thanks in advance . Last edited by SoraOblivion93; 02/26/07 at 02:40 PM. |
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| Warrior of Darkness Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: The World That Never Was Age: 16
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Rep Power: 0 ![]() | ooooo! i think i'll find this good if you upsate soon!!!! |
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| Ruler of Darkness Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: The Dark Realm Age: 15
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Rep Power: 2 ![]() | Crap u wrote this and didn't tell me?? Wad kinda fren are u???? lol but great story... i noe who the boy is liao... later check wif u... :thumbsup: |
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| Court Mage Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Castle Oblivion Age: 15
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Rep Power: 0 ![]() | I was pretty much free today so i decided to release the 2nd chapter . Chapter 2 : Revelation Unknown Location The boy sunk to his knees in disbelief . "No...no , this can't be . Who am I?" Standing in front of the mirror , a towering suit of armor stood , looking totally out of place with the environment . The boy had lost his physical self and now he is nothing but mere emptiness sealed within a gigantic suit of armor . None his features were reflected in his new physical being . It was as if he was a totally brand new person . Even he himself felt as if he had lost all sense of identity . He felt a deep sense of emptiness . Raising his fist in anger , he landed a solid blow on the mirror , leaving thousands and thousands of mirror shards to fly and scatter acroos the room . "Who am I ? What have I become ?" the boy muttered under his breath . Within his mind , question floated around like balloons waiting to be popped by the answers waiting to be revealed . He just couldn't accept what he had become , so much that he began to question his very own existence . Just then , out of the corner , a dark figure appears . "Who's there ?" the boy asked , waving his hand out to summon his keyblade . It appears that he was one of the chosen few . "Hey, hey chill. That keyblade can do some serious damage . And besides I come in peace . " the figure said in a feminine tone , suggesting that she was a lady . She was dressed also in an elaborated armor as that of the boy . "Nice to see that you're awake ," she continued , "I'm Kage. We found you lying around so , yeah ... here you are. " The boy took a moment to supress his inner anger , and gather up all his queries into one brief question , "But what about this ?", he asked while rapping against the steel and cold chestplate of his armor . For a moment , Kage was dumbfounded as if sticken by guilt , then she finally controlled her emotions and reply apologetically , "We had no choice . By the time you arrived through that gate , your body was already disintergrating . If we hadn't seal your soul into this armor , we would have lost you . I'm real sorry 'bout it . " The boy took a moment to absorbed in this mass influx of information , his brain working hard to fix up this jigsaw . He stood there silent for a few seconds , solving each and every one of his questions with great care . A blurry of expressions flashed across his face(that is if his face was still there) . Kage looked upon the boy with worrying eyes beneath the suit , she finally gathered up the courage to ask , "So , are you alright now?" The boy briefly nodded . "Oh yeah , I got to bring you to meet him , so first thing first , the formalities. Hi , my name is Kage and yours is ?" she said with great affection , holding out her hand in the form of a handshake . The boy pondered for a moment , taking the time to let his memories resurface . He accepted the handshake and reply , "Oh , Kage , nice name . You can call me Riku ." *************** End of chapter 2 I'm hoping more people can at least give me some criticism or comments , so i can improve :thumbsup: Thx alot to any one who reads this chapter |
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| Warrior of Darkness Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: The World That Never Was Age: 16
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Rep Power: 0 ![]() | _O: wtF!Riku!what did you do to him?...this means updation nation! |
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| Court Mage Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Castle Oblivion Age: 15
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Rep Power: 0 ![]() | Lolx don't want to leak out too many things but that's not the real Riku ... |
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| Ruler of Darkness Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: The Dark Realm Age: 15
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Rep Power: 2 ![]() | haha... its not... i noe who he is and wad he can do... but make it longer god-damnit... [spoiler] Its.... someone who's name starts with K[/spoiler] |
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| Court Mage Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Castle Oblivion Age: 15
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Rep Power: 0 ![]() | Nah, no K for this guy ... besides , I went to research into some nobodies' names and found out tt onli members of Organisation XIII get the anagram with X in their name so ... no Kixur or Kurix here lolx P.S busy wif test now so chapter will come later |
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| Ruler of Darkness Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: The Dark Realm Age: 15
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Rep Power: 2 ![]() | no k?? lol... haha but at least give him a better name than last time |
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| perfectFIT// | Great story! Please update soon ![]() |
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| Court Mage Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Castle Oblivion Age: 15
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Rep Power: 0 ![]() | Arrr... thank goodness the tests are over , and now it's time to party ... haha , well anyway here's chapter 3 , hope you guys like it .... Chapter 3 : Reunion Disney Castle Donald ran past the white hallway , perspiration trickling down his face like a waterfall . Things were bad ……real bad . The note must have something to do with it , he thought in his heart . Drenched within his thoughts , Donald had not notice Goofy coming the other way and the two clashed together into each other like bowling pins . “Whatcha in the hurry for?” Goofy asked , in his ever familiar accent . “No… time … talk … prophecy … note… Cornerstone…. Oblivion” Donald said , grasping for air . Never would he ever had thought his role as the court magician will work him as much as to dashed through 5 hallways just to talk to His Majesty . Before Goofy could clarify his doubts , Donald was off and running , faster than a speeding bullet . He turned at the corner , living Goofy in the dust . Knock knock. He went in through the door of the library where His Majesty was most of the time . Ever since the loss of his friend , Ansem , the King has been doing his homework , toiling day and night to try and comprehend the complications of a heart . Noticing the King in his chair reading , he pondered for a second if he would offend the King with his sudden intrusion . “Don‘t worry , I understand all this.. I will handle it …….” Mickey said in an ever calm voice , revealing a Keyblade from under his coat . He held out and his hand and shouted , “Soul of the key , grant me a path …” , then holding out his blade , “to The Room Of The Cornerstone …” Meanwhile… Radiant Garden The man stood high above on the castle , his red cape dancing in the wind . His bandanna was a shade of crimson red , a triple barreled revolver tugged by his side . He stood silent , glancing down on all the buzz in the town . The dramatic change to the town would have shocked anyone who knew of it before the Organisation attack on it . But just look at it , it had already negate the effects of that Heartless rampage , and now in place of the half-constructed town of before, a buzzing town stood . Shops and houses line the street , and people move around like ants . The town had this new glow to it . It was like a new spring of life had lifted this new town into a new spirit . The man jumped off the roof onto the ledge , his red cape trailing him at the back . His revolver shone brightly in the sun. The man had that look in his eyes , an hollowed emptiness , spiritless eyes . Well , well , where are you , my friend? I guess it's about time I settle the score with you , he muttered silently under his breath, Axel . Disney Castle “So it was you all along wasn‘t it ?” Mickey exclaimed , glancing up at the dark figure atop the Cornerstone. “Well , I see you haven‘t lost your edge there , Your Majesty ,” the cloaked man exclaimed , reaching his arm out to reveal a pink scythe. The room immediately filled with pink blossoms , floating around like raindrops . The King readied his blade , leaping in to the air to connect against his foe . But Marluxia was powerful then he thought , who immediately dodged the attack , “Too slow ” . Marluxia grabbed on to his scythe and sliced at the legs of Mickey , who backflipped to avoid the vicious attack . Blood splattered across the white floor . My ankle , the King muttered , damn that Marluxia . He limped forward and shouted , “Heal ,” his wound closed with extreme pace . Marluxia jumped into his air letting his scythe dissolve into a few thousand petals . “Good job , Your Majesty , but can you dodge this ?” Marluxia said , laughing , “Scatter , Thousands Petals” The King was dumbfounded by now… there was no way … Then out of nowhere , “Goofga” Goofy shouted , deflecting the thousand raining flowers . “Its time to see our work has come to , Goofy . MIRAGE!!!” Goofy immediately charged for Marluxia , using his shield to block against Marluxia’s onslaught . But out of the blue , “Blizzaga!” A blue energy ball appeared from behind the shield , hitting Marluxia square across the chest . The shot left him reeling , grabbing at his chest in agony . “Too slow , ” Mickey said as if mocking him , “Eat this !” Mickey pulled back his weapon and thrusted his weapon into his adversary . But the figure turned limp all of a sudden and all that was left was the black and sinister coat , which dropped to the floor like a rag . “Hahaha , foolish warrior of the Keyblade , did you truly think you could beat me ?” Marluxia exclaimed , his voice filled with mockery . “See ya around , Your Majesty…… ” The trio left in the room look at one another in disbelief . Somehow , someway the Organisation has crawled back from the dead and are on their tail . “Your Majesty ……” Donald asked , worried frowns across his face . Mickey took a moment to chuckle , although it really did not seem like the occasion to do so , “Not to worry , Donald . Prepare your gear . And inform Chip and Dale to prepare a ship . We are gotta throw a nice reunion party . ” End of chapter 3 Well , I'm hoping I have improved since my last entry . Any comments will be greatly appreciated. Thank you very much |
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| Warrior of Darkness Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: somewhere everyone could not reach if he don't know it
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Rep Power: 0 ![]() | WOOW WOOOT WOOT nice fic!!!i like to read the next chapter!!! |
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