Ties That Bond

Ties That Bond (rewrite of The Dark and Separation)

*************************Prologue***************** **********
James was trying to run home without getting too wet in the process. His shorts and shirt did little to shelter him from the rain, and he had forgotten his coat at home earlier that day. “It’s a good thing I live close to the school, isn’t it?” he said to no one in particular. He sat down in relief as he sat on his front porch.

When he let himself in he saw that the living room was just the way he had left it. Here his father was without a job, and instead of trying to keep the house he and his son occupied he just went down to the local bar all day.

With a reluctant sigh James bent down and scooped up all the random items strewn around the room. There wasn’t that much there, but that only fueled James’ contempt for his father. Why the slob couldn’t clean up his own garbage made no sense, especially when it was his own mess.

After he had finished his chores he switched on the t.v. to watch his favorite show. It was right in the middle of a commercial when a ‘special broadcast’ interrupted it. “Aw, man, that was my favorite commercial too.” James was just about to switch off the t.v. when he saw what they were broadcasting.

The news anchor was saying something about ‘scientific anomalies’ when it cut to a picture of something that resembled a snow-white tiny monkey mixed with a dog. It had four appendages and walked like a dog, but the face was a simple point without any eyes, ears, or mouth.

It switched to footage of the small creatures attacking a group of people, and then several new ones appearing while the people had vanished. There was no trace of the victims, and the creatures seemed to band together and keep advancing through the city. They passed right through objects like cars, but then they attacked the people inside.

“What are those things?” James said to himself, and at the same moment he heard screams from outside. He jumped across the room and threw his front door open to see what was going on.

People down the street were fleeing from things that looked like the creatures on the news broadcast, except these were pure black and seemed to be more natural looking, aside from the pure darkness that seemed to steam from these things.

When they caught up to the running people they too made their victims disappear and create more of them in the process. The other citizens ran faster after seeing this phenomenon, but it did them little good. James retreated into his house for a moment to grab some of his most cherished objects, as well as his coat. If he was going to die running, he was going to do it dry and with the things he held dear to him.

Among the objects he gathered there was: his mp3 player, a photo of his girlfriend and friends, and the small knife that he had received from his grandfather. It had a shining blade mounted on a pure silver handle. The blade was razor sharp, and early on James had cut himself with it by accident when he played games with it.

Deciding that this was enough, James ran out the front door up the street. His friends were all up at the school because of sports, so he headed there to try and at least die with them, if they didn’t manage to survive. As he risked a glance behind his shoulder he saw that the creatures were gaining, fast!

As his speed increased he rounded the corner up to the school and prepared to go all-out on this final stretch of the race. He was only ten yards from the building when another group of creatures ahead turned to face him! He altered his direction slightly to avoid this unpleasant surprise.

When James jumped the last few feet to the door he spun and slammed his foot out, kicking the door open. He continued to run down the hallway towards the gym, knowing that this is where the sports teams would be on a rainy day like this one. The doors were wide open, allowing James a clear view of the inside.

Nobody was there. As James looked up at the clock with dread, he saw that it was three twenty-five. The buses, and his friends, had left ten minutes ago. As he walked to the center of the gym, he saw some of the creatures passing through the walls. Within no time he was surrounded, and the creatures began to draw nearer when suddenly, they stopped, almost as if they were hearing something. After this moment of still passed, they began their unrelenting march once more.

Resolving to at least try to fight, James drew the knife from its sheath by his pocket and held it before him. As he watched it split into two pieces, right down the middle. “Never seen that happen before. Must be a hidden catch or something” he said.

As he held the blades before him the creatures leaped at him from all angles. Suddenly there was a flash of light that seemed to blind the creatures. When they descended upon the area where he had been, they met nothing.

[End Chapter]


A book I am writing, I thought I could share the first few chapters with you guys.

Note- I am looking for someone to write this WITH, but they have to be online for the next week EST-5:00 to 7:00. Note that I fully intend to take this to publishers, so whoever does this with me can't go and post the whole book on KHI. Thanx.

Hey need help with anothercharacter(naming him). I'm thinking

Jared
Thomas

or

David

what do you guys think?

[sora_luver]

wow that's really good... you should totally keep writing!!! and I like the name Jared best

alright, thanks.

Gotta find somebody interested inn writing it with me though, it's alot of work.

I think I was gonna use Jared too, because it is equivalent with James (five letters, same nuberof vowels and consanants, starts with J,etc.) That will come into play later on in the story.

[snowdog]

Hey, I've read this before, but I didn't comment. n_n; Sorry, that's not like me...

Anyway, I liked it. But the description could do a little bit of work, and it's very, very fast-paced. But if that's what you're aiming for, then that's okay.

<3

alright, I kindof did make the first chapter really fast, but the otherchapter is slower (notice I said chapte, not chapters)

In the second chapter I actually break it into sections, each as long as the first chapter.

Or I DID, but my computer erased it.I'll have to type it all over again.

[sora_luver]

can't wait... sorry that it got erased

okay, here is where I enter vague territory, and I begin to lose track. I think that there are too many KH parallels, so help is appreciated.



When James could finally see again, he noticed that he was in a large courtyard, where everything seemed to be made of pure white marble. In the center of the courtyard was a large statue that appeared to be made of amber. As James began to walk towards it, a light came down directly from the sky.

A figure now stood between James and the statue, and the figure was leaning on a large silver staff. He had the hood on his white robes over his head, but the basic shape showed that he was male. He took a single step towards James, and James backpedaled and brought his knives up to defend himself. The figure seemed amused at this, and held out a pale hand.

"I only want to take a walk with you. Is that okay?" The voice was soft, but seemed to carry authority.

When James continued to hold his knives up, the figure withdrew his hand. With a nod of his head, the courtyard began to swirl and fade around them. A chilling light emanated from the stranger at this point, and James thought he could feel his heart and soul freezing. The only thing that kept him conscious was his grip on the knives, from which his hands grew warm.

After what seemed like a century of this, James saw the environment begin to settle down into a beautiful dark cave. A pool of pearl colored water was rippling gently, and James could have sworn that he saw his friend Jared in the depths.

The stranger reached forward and stuck his hand in the water, and instead of making ripples as it should have, the water became absolutely still. In the center a picture of Jared was definitely there, and James held his hand out to the water.

"Listen. Watch." was all that the stranger said.

As James did what he was told, he saw that Jared was in danger. He was using a metal rod to protect himself from a man attacking him with a sword. The man had pure black hair, and seemed to use his weapon effortlessly. When he struck Jared with the flat of his blade the teen fell to his knees, and the man held his sword above his head for the finishing blow.

When James saw this he ran forward and jumped into the pool to save his friend.

The stranger smiled.






NOTE- Not all of chapter one, just the first section. Any questions will be explained.

[sora_luver]

I wonder who the stranger is... I have no clue if he's good or bad, but I'm hoping he's good, concidering if he isn't James just fell into a big trap..... great chapter!!! :thumbsup: I can't wait for the next!!!

The Stranger is... an enigma at this point. Let's say that he is both good and bad.

Or to put it simply, he doesn't care what happens to anyone but James.

[ansemjafar]

This is pretty good. Not bad at all. Why did you choose James as the main character name? lol. That is my actual name.

James is my middle name. It is also pretty common' I'm trying to show that he is an everyday kid, and show that he won't be changed. This story is about friendship, not magic or swords or sex. James is also the name of my best friend.

So, there are tons of reasons.

[ansemjafar]

that is cool. I shall continue to read this.

UPDATE-

When James touched the shimmering pool, it seemed that he vanished without trace. The stranger turned around and walked to the mouth of the dark cave, all the while smiling. When he left the pool lost its light, and was nothing but a normal pool.

James showed up right next to Jared, and he instictively brought up his hand to defend his friend. Instead of rasing a knife, he barely recognized that he was now holding a silver sword with gold inlay. It was a longsword, and it felt surprisingly light in his hand. The other knife was gone, but James didn't have time to wonder what had happened.

The enemy's sword was abruptly stopped, and a look of shock crossed his face. Apparently, he has thought that this would be an easy kill. He quickly recovered by lifting his sword and swinging it to James' back, thinking that this would work. Instead James blocked this attack too, and retaliated with a slash to the enemy's stomach. When the blade connected, it seemed that the enemy imploded, and the only trace left was the sword.

"Well, I guess it's a good thing I showed up" James said to Jared. His friend was simply speechless. "Are you all right?" James asked.

Jared just looked up at him, and was breathing heavily. James understood that after something like that Jared wouldn't want to talk, so he examined his new weapon.

It was an extremely light sword, but James somehow KNEW that the blade wouldn't snap. The hilt was extremely ornate, and covered James' hand from any oncoming strikes. Just when he was wondering where he would put this beautiful weapon, arcs of light surrounded the weapon and it seemed that James absorbed the weapon.

When Jared saw this he passed out cold, and James sighed. He grabbed Jared and began to drag him away when he remembered the enemy's sword laying on the pavement. He turned around and grabbed it, and then resumed dragging Jared off to somewhere inside.

End of section two.

Had to add the humor of Jared in there. He will grow to be more serious.

[I]

Ah, I am commenting! I like it, and it definitely seems to be quite fast paced (my mind = woah) And you are right : quite a lot of KH parallels in there, but it is still interesting. I'd like to see what comes of it