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Old 02/14/07, 05:06 AM   #1
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This is not only my first time writing a fan-fic, but also my first time writing an actual story, so pardon me if it is not that good. I add here, that grammar is not my subject, I have a mild level of it, but not alot. I ask you the readers to excuse me, as for this is a challenge to myself so that I may improve both my writing, and grammar skills. Now I ask also, that you do not shout 'GTFO's' at me for creating a FanFic, depicting several charachters from the Kingdom Hearts series, in a gay manner. The purpose of this is for a laugh, and the fact that my grammar and writing skills needs both testing and improvement. Now Enjoy! <3

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Chapter 1: Feeling Fine in the Sunshine

The warming sun shone brightly as they both held each other, grasped in each other's arms tightly. When Sora decided to speak to Riku, he did it in a soft, almost 'kiddish' manner. He told him 'Riku, you know I love you, but...... I'm not sure I wish to advocate it, you know, the fact that I might be gay.' Riku acknowledged what Sora had to say with a glance down into the eyes of the boy encased in his arms. He put his index finger to Sora's lips and spoke to him, 'Shhhh.....for now, we are together, and thats all that matters.' Their attention returned to the graceful sunset, as they sat on the majestic beaches of Destiny Island, watching the sunset together.

-The Next Day-

Kairi spotted the ever-so lazy Sora, carelessly lying in the sand of the beaches, snoring away the afternoon. She thought of how peaceful he looked, and how incredibly handsome he looked while he slept. As it apperead that Sora was to awaken from his lazy slumber, she gave him a soft kick to the ribs, telling him to wake up. With a yawn, Sora was up and ready again, slightly irritated from the kick in the ribs though.

Riku approached the two, while him and Sora exchanged secret smiles. 'Hey you two, we've still got work to do you know'. Kairi lost her focus on Sora and fixated it on Riku, responding to him, 'Yeah, I was just about to tell this lazy bum that, before you showed up.' Riku and Kairi joined each other in a gigle after the two exchanged what was a brief conversation, but had decided to get back to work. After all, it was still a bright, sunny day, and the sky still gleamed a sapphire glow of beauty. The day went on, and the group had collected a myriad of items, from fish, to mushrooms, to rope. It apperead that their raft was going to finally take shape with the items thay have collected. In fact, thats how they had spent the majority of the rest of the day, by late afternoon, the raft was finished.

Kairi called over to Sora, trying to supress any erotic feelings of sentiment. Sora had just refilled the empty water jugs, the jugs were now spilling with fresh thirst quenching water. Sora wondered what she wanted, so as he approached her, he said what was on his mind and asked her 'Yes Kairi, what is it that you want?' Kairi was slightly intimitaded by Sora, but mustered up the courage to tell him ' Lately...I've been thinking, maybe....um...possibly, we could leave wiithout Riku?, you know, just the two of us?' Sora was baffeled, 'Without Riku, but..but why!' We could leave, just the two of us.' She pulled closer to Sora, their lips were almost touching, and they were both sweating profusely. Sora stared into those innocent looking, lush, eyes and could not deny her. Sora agreed and told her that he would leave with her.

Dazed, and concentrated in thought, Sora sat on the quiet beaches for a couple hours, hoping to comprehend Kairi's previous thoughts and actions. A bit more time passed and Riku came and sat next to Sora, just as the sun set. ' Does this remind you of a certain happy moment, Sora?' Riku fingered through Sora's soft hair for a moment as he said this. Sora paused for a second and answered yes. Riku spoke again, Sora.....I was hoping...that me and you....could go without Kairi.' Sora jerked his head in Riku's direction and was wide-eyed and amazed, that both his friends wanted to leave without the other. Sora did not perlong any more confusion or deep thought for the moment, he answered Riku with a yes and walked off. Sora decided he would go home and sit up in his bed until it was time to leave the island on the raft, with whoever he choose. One friend he would probably binded to, the other, lost perhaps, forever.

(I promise, that Chapter 2 will be longer.)

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Old 02/14/07, 05:19 AM   #2
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Its good so far... keep going!
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Old 02/15/07, 10:52 PM   #3
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Chapter 2: Night of Fate


Sora's mind wandered, discussing with himself about who to go with, or if he should confront both of his friends and try to settle this. With the second option, it could always break the firm bond of friendship the three friends have had fo so long, until now. He noticed the sky seemed to be darkening and the wind was strengthening, picking up at a strong rate. Flashes of thunder seemed to be shooting from the sky, and a whirlpool of darkness layered the sky. Then he remembered the raft, and paniced. Sora leaped from his bed, ignoring his mother's cries for dinner. Sneaking out the window and heading down to the island, he was gone, heading for the pier.

He arrived to find the raft in good shape, and as he was just about untie it and remove it from the dark water, several shadow like figures had begun to form in his vicinity. Sora turned around to see little bugs, or so he thought, these were like living shadows with antennas and bright yellow eyes. Sora began to panic, and was frieghtened, he didn't know what these creatures were. The creatures surrounded him and backed him into a corner, but a sudden light warmed him. A huge flash of white light blasted his face, blinding him for the moment. As the light faded, a blade in the shape of a key was in his hand, he had no idea on how it had gotten there or why it was in his hands, but it filled him with bravery, his body grew tense, and he focused on the creatures surrounding him.

Sora grasped the mighty blade and swung at fiercely into the pool of shadows, wacking away a few creatures each time he swung. Within a few minutes he had slashed away all of the creatures, but more were rising from the ground again, and Sora decided to run. He headed for the Seaside Shack and noticed Riku on the island across from the bridge. Sora began to head across the bridge, the fierce wind fought against him as he did. Getting closer to Riku, an encasing wrap of shadows started to form around Riku. Sora yelled out to him 'Riku!, whats happening.' Sora heard a dark voice as Riku's solid eyes stared into his. ' One who knows nothing, can understand nothing. The dark voice continued to speak to him, announcing phrase after phrase, until he ended with You are the one who will open the door to the ligh.' Confused as ever Sora ignored and grabbed Riku's hand as he extended it. Riku pulled him close and gave Sora a soft peck on the cheek, Sora's eyes were filled with tears as Riku dissapeared into the pool of shadows.

Sora's hope faded for a second, until the sky began to rumble and roars of lightning burst forth from the dark sky. An enourmous shadow, bigger than anything Sora had ever seen emerged from the imense sky. Finally touching down on the island, it's gigantic head, and blinding yellow eyes glared into Sora's eyes, who now had a strong, and brave look in his eyes. Griping his newly found blade in his hand firmly, Sora rushed forth and swung fiercely at the giant shadows large hand. The shadow's hand flinched back, and his mood seemed to change to anger. The huge shadow stood up and his chest filled with an energy that glowed with a myriad of colors, from red, purple, yellow, and black. A large orb of energy burst forth from the huge orb that was already formed in the shadows chest. Several of these orbs had shot forth in Sora's direction. Sora dodged the first couple of orbs, but one of the orbs hit him directly. Stunned, Sora picked himself up and swung wildly into the huge shadow.

All that he could remember was swinging, swinging that blade over and over as he closed his eyes. He faded away, Sora went blank and everything was dark. Sora awoke to a wet, slimy lick in the face from a floppy eared dog. He looked around for a moment as his vision returned, he was in an alleyway in a town he had never seen before.

(I know, it was basically what happened in the game, but the yaoi/yuri elements will come more into play next chapter.)
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Old 02/15/07, 11:09 PM   #4
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Very, very wekk written. And I love the new point of view.

Keep writing, you're very skilled. <3
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Old 02/18/07, 05:32 PM   #5
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Awww shucks snow.

This chapter's importance, is for foreshadowing, pay attention to what happens, it reveals some things that will have to do with future chapters.

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Chapter 3: When a girl loves a girl

Finally mustering up some of the strength he had left, Sora stood up. He was still recieving post-battle effects, feeling a bit woozy and it was hard for him to tell what was going on. He decided to walk it off. Stumbling a bit he walked into the city square, blinded by the vibrant city lights. Eventually after a few minutes of walking around, all five of his senses were fully functioning. Now in full sight, Sora gawked in amazement at this lush and vibrant tow. Lights hung above, and a smooth marble floor to stand on, couples enjoying a fine dinner together, and a large shop to the north.

While Sora was busy enjoying the sites, two adult women stood tongue locked, and held in each others arms, carefully watching every action Sora made. 'Oh, Alexandra my sweet, are you enjoying the site?.' 'Quite, my dear Evelyn, after all, we had better get some enjoyment of the assignment the boss gave us.' Alexandra, continuing to be fixated on Sora, responded, 'I agree sweet lover, but I'm afraid that we'll need to engage our fellow entertainer at some point in this lovely town.' 'I know, but for now we watch.' With that they disappapeared back into the shadows, still watching.

Sora decided to visit the local shop. When he opened the door, an elderly man could be seen at the counter, who instantaneously yelled at him, 'What do you want boy!' 'Oh, sir, I was just checking the shop out, I'm new here, and wondered if there was anything I could get here?' The old man stared at Sora in a mischeivous way, scratching his chin he said 'How much munny you got?' Confusingly, Sora responded, 'What's munny?' With a satisfying, and defiant look on his face he told Sora 'Thought so, if you don't have munny, you can't get anything here.' Sora now developed a sorrowed look on his face, giving the old man a feeling of remorse himself. 'Here kid, take this, it's a potion, when you get hurt during battle, you can use it to heal yourself.' Sora started to leave excitedly, and the old man yelled to him, 'By the way, the names Cid.'

Pocketing his new item, Sora started to walk off, until he saw a young boy who looked just like Riku, and with a sudden jolt Sora yelled to himself 'I've gotta find Riku!' Just as Sora was about to run off, a man stepped out of the alleyway and yelled at him in a gruff way, 'Hey you!' Sora stopped, and replied to the man, 'What, what do you want?' 'The key, give me that key of yours.' Sora honestly felt stupid at this moment because he had forgotten he even had the blade in the shape of a key, attached to his left hip in a holster. Sora told the man, 'your not getting this from me, no way!' 'Then I guess I'll have to take it from you.'

The man withdrew a sword that had a blade extending from what looked like a gun. Sora grasped his blade firmly, ready to fight. The man rushed at Sora in a frightening way, and swung his large sword at Sora's face. Sora quickly rolled out of the way and attempted to swing at the man's back. He was much too quick and intelligent for that to get him though. The sword-weilding man blocked the attack with his sword. Now sword-locked, the man forced Sora back with a strong push and held open his palm, muttering something under his breath, a burst of flames shot into Sora's chest. Sora fell, and his vision faded away. That was quicker, and easier, than expected, he'l need some training.'

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Old 02/18/07, 05:33 PM   #6
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You have a lot of potential, I like it
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Old 02/18/07, 10:17 PM   #7
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Yay! *claps*

Nice job, I'll be sure to remember stuff. ~_^ *takes notes*

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Chapter 4: A Man Named Leon

Sora's eyes peered open, revealing the face of a smiling Kairi. 'Kairi, is that you?' The giddy Kairi smiled and giggled at him and told him, 'Kairi, who's Kairi, silly?' Sora rubbed his eyes, reopening them to reveal a topless woman. Sora yelped in embarassment. Oh, silly, don't worry about it.' The man who had knocked Sora unconcious stepped away from an open window an spoke firmly to the topless woman, 'Yuffie, you really shouldn't do that, you spoke the guests with those horrid things.' The topless woman, who's name was now revealed as Yuffie grew an angered face at this and stuck up her lip, turning her head, saying Well, well, mister, you won't be seeing them for quite awhile then.' Yuffie put a shirt on.

Sora came out from his corner, relieved of the embarassment he had felt before. "Are you to married?' The two spoke at the same time, 'Yes.'Sora stared at the two for a second at then he remembered that the man had knocked him out previously. 'Hey, what was the big idea with you knocking me out?' The man paused for a moment, then spoke firmly. 'Firstly, my name is Leon, and as for me knocking you out, I had to. It's that key, the heartless will always be tracking you as long as you have it.' 'The heartless, are they those shadows that had been chasing me?' Leon responded 'exactly.'

Yuffie interupted. 'You guys are tense, and Squ-, I mean Leon, aren't we supposed to be looking for our mothers?' Leon's head yanked in Yuffie's direction, 'I'm sorry, I forgot about that, but for now, we have to join Sora with those Donald and Goofy lovers, it's important, King's orders.' Yuffie paused, with a sad look on her face, just for a moment, but then she said, 'Alright, Leon, you win; Sora, get your keyblade and let's go, we're meeting in the Third District square.' Sora grabed his keyblade off the bed, looking at it for a moment, he finally whispered to himself, 'Keyblade.' Sora's attention broke from the Keyblade, and he jumped out the window, along with the others, allowing this new, and mysterious journey continue.

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Gah! a bit short. But, I'm not much for long chapters.
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Old 02/21/07, 10:33 PM   #9
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Noooo, not Yuffie x Leon... D:

Meh, I'll get over it. XD

That chapter was okay, keep writing! <3
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