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| High Priest of Sloanism Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Depends upon the day and if there is free pizza. Age: 19
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Rep Power: 9 ![]() ![]() | I've decided to write a story about the Vice and Virtue tale I came up with so many moons ago. It shall be told in narratives, each in the POV of a different Vice. Enjoy. NOTE: This fic will most likely NOT be updated on a regular basis. I have many other commitments. First we have Lust. ----------------------------------- “‘Hell hath no fury like a woman’s scorn.’ You would think after the umpteenth time I heard that particular saying, I would have taken it to heart. Sadly, taking advice has never been my strong suit and because of that, I have to start my search over entirely. All of my work was for naught, all because of her. It’s been a pleasure. ~ Lust -------------------------------- Please note that this is merely a rough draft. I do not expect this narrative or any other to be so short in whatever final draft may eventually exist. Last edited by Blackest Night; 02/16/07 at 04:02 AM. |
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| We Suffer for Fashion | I love the mythology of it. I also think it's extremely well written. I should post some of my writing up sometimes, but that's a different story. Altogether, I love it hun. <3 |
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| Oblivion Angel Join Date: May 2005 Location: In Eternal Twilight Age: 17
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Rep Power: 6 ![]() | Interesting indeed, BN. There is something that isn't right, though I unable to think of it, at the moment. |
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| High Priest of Sloanism Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Depends upon the day and if there is free pizza. Age: 19
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Rep Power: 9 ![]() ![]() | I would very much like to know what that thing is, KHFan. When you figur eit out, let me know. |
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| At your service Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: In my castle, plotting your demise Age: 17
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Rep Power: 12 ![]() ![]() ![]() | Well written. Makes you curious. Interesting. I think I shall come to this thread often. Very good work BN. I expected no less from you. Am I the only one picturing Lust sitting in a cozy chair, drinking wine and wearing sexy clothes in front of a blazing fire? |
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| I love the way you make it sound... | Whoo. Short and sweet...my favorite combination. You managed to make it breif and to-the-point but also interested. Congrats. Not many people can do that...I mean, I actually want to read MORE. ^_^ |
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| Oblivion Angel Join Date: May 2005 Location: In Eternal Twilight Age: 17
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Rep Power: 6 ![]() | Never mind about that. The issue I had wasn't really an issue. After reading over it, there is the lust. |
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| You think I give a shit? | Ah. Blackest Night. You make me want to go back to Mthology class again. Even though the teacher was a complete ass hole.. I would still go back. Now for this little tale. Nice clever way of making it into a letter. Love the tales. I shall sit and wait for more. If you do not update, well i will come back. With a very nasty little gift. Love yah. <3 |
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| High Priest of Sloanism Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Depends upon the day and if there is free pizza. Age: 19
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Rep Power: 9 ![]() ![]() | I am having trouble deciding in whose point of view to write the next narrative in. When I figure that out, I shall write a new chapter. Once finishing that, It shall hopefully be up. |
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| You think I give a shit? | Envy. Envy Pure win <3 |
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| High Priest of Sloanism Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Depends upon the day and if there is free pizza. Age: 19
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Rep Power: 9 ![]() ![]() | I have here Envy's narrative. For some reason, I place her in a sympathetic light. Enjoy, I suppose. ----------------------------- “I remember Lust once telling me of his thoughts. During one of our innumerable attempts at overthrowing a king through lust and jealousy, I recall him proclaiming to both me and the empty air his boredom, his exhaustion. He had grown tired of his countless lives, weary of ageless existence. His passion for sins of the flesh fled from those sapphire eyes, replaced for little more than a brief moment with a pleading gaze I had never seen before and most likely shall never see again. Though my words were gentle, my emerald eyes soft, I took pleasure in his words. It was indeed the only time I can remember ever feeling as though I had something that Lust did not: satisfaction. ~Envy Last edited by Blackest Night; 02/16/07 at 04:02 AM. |
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| W.S.N.B.M./O.N.B.P. | I feel sorry for Envy...good job overall though! Bring in Pride next, like Lust said, he's gonna be overjoyed, and you don't wanna deny him that satisfaction, do you? |
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| High Priest of Sloanism Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Depends upon the day and if there is free pizza. Age: 19
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Rep Power: 9 ![]() ![]() | I would enjoy more comments and criticism, please. I am aware they are short, but I intend for them to be more like letters than actual chapters. |
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| You think I give a shit? | Ah. a sad tale. Yet the truth in some form. Envy the word strikes me almost everyday. So i must be a sinner...? Beutiful tale as always. Sorasheart281~ |
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| Member | The same method Stoker used? Something I had contemplated creating a story in the same structure one day... if only I knew with what... Although well-written thus far, I cannot give you a sound evaluation until I recieve more. Perhaps after another letter or two... |
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