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| Being mellow | Okay. one week ago I wrote this rough draft. Now I have the final draft of my story. I even got a name for the story. Hope you like it. Any suggestions PM me please. Chapter I: Intro Demons. They don't really exist...do they? Demons are just something humans created in their imagination...right? No. They exist. Demons are all over the world. Humans just don't want to believe that they do. They come in many shapes, sizes, and forms. Some are mindless creatures. Others are highly intelligent. Mostly, Demons don't travel around in groups. Only as an individual. They lurk in the shadows. Waiting for prey. Human prey. Preying on the weak. On the innocent. The helpless. Whenever they can, Demons will prey on humans to suit their appetite. But where did demons come from? Where are their origins? Heaven. Yes Demons were once angels but they were banished and cast off as fallen angels. They make their way into Hell or the Underworld. But some just perfer to be in the real world to cause panic.In the cities, they hide and wait. They wait for the time to strike. In a particular city, New York New York, Demons are everywhere. In shadows they hide in the shadows. In the darkness. This is where the adventure begins. Around night, Its raining. A middle aged man is walking home. He mutters as he walks “Damn. I hate my job. Everyday I get yelled at. I wish I can just stand up to my boss and tell him straight up!” While walking, a car zooms past him and soaks him. Angrily, he yells. “Hey watch where you’re going!” He sneezes and continues to walk in the rain. Lighting starts to appear in the night sky. Startled, the man tries to find a alley to stop for a while. He finds one and stops. “This is some storm.” He says. “My wife is going to yell at me for being late.” Lightning flashes again. The man starts to shivers. He then hears sounds from behind. Turning around, the man looks. “Hello?” he says. “Is anybody there?” He hears the sound again. Slowly the man walks toward the sound of the dark alley. He then comes to a dead end. In the corner, he sees some pile of garbage. “Must be my Imagination” he said. Suddenly, he sees the pile of garbage shaking. Taking his umbrella, he slowly walk toward the garbage. The man then pokes the garbage. Nothing. He pokes it again when a black cat comes out from the garbage. The man jumps back. The cat meows. “Oh! You startled me. It’s only a stupid cat.” Says the man as he sighes. Suddenly, A dark figure appears from the sky. The cat runs quickly away as the dark figure slowly stands up. The man starts to trembles. The dark figure opens his wings. “who-what are you?!” the man yells. The figure walks towards him with a chuckle. “Me? I’m a demon. And you….you are my dinner.” Said the demon as he raises his left hand. “No! Noo!” Yells the man As he sees the hand come down. All of a sudden, the demon’s hand is slashed off. Backing up, the demon shrieks in pain. “Argh! My arm! My arm! Who did this?” The demon looks toward the man but what’s in front of him is a black haired boy. In his hand is a sword. The boy is dressed in black jacket with an untucked dress shirt and tie. On his right side of his side is another sword.”You! Who are you? The boy smiles and says “My name is Duo. And I’m part of the Demon Society. But to really answer your question, I’m here to save you.” The demon growls. “You?! To save me? You’re going to pay for what you did to my left arm!” The demon holds out his left arm. The arm starts to changes shape. It shapes into a demonic sword. Then the demon runs at the Duo. Duo sighes. “I don’t have to go all out with you.” He avoids the demon’s sword and then stabs the demon. “You’re just a class C demon. Rest in peace in heaven.” Says Duo as he slashes through the demon. The demon starts to disintegrate. As Duo put his sword back into his shealth, he turns around to the man. “Are you alright?" Asked Duo. Thats it for now. I will try to do this once a week or everyday. Got School to go to. Chapter 2 will answer some questions you might have. I will also give out a character summary with Duo.:mellow: Last edited by Duo_forbidden; 08/20/06 at 07:32 PM. |
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| Member | it's okay I guess, it's creative and somewhat different from other fanfics, I think, but not the greatest I've read. |
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| Court Mage Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: atop memorys skyscraper watching the city Age: 17
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| Being mellow | Okay I got chapter II. Just to remind you guys who reads this, This has nothing to do with kingdom hearts. This is an orignal work. Chapter II is a little long. Hope you enjoy.:mellow: Chapter II The Order of Demon Society “So that was it huh? A class C demon? What the hell Duo. You really didn’t have to get involved.” Said a man with a black trench coat. Two other men with black trench coats were with him as well. “Still, it was a good thing you was right there though.” “Well Dan, I was in the neighborhood. I was doing some roof patrol anyway.” Said Duo. “Do I still have to file a report?” Dan sighed. “Of course. You know the procedure. Of course, if you would charge up your cell phone once in a while, you wouldn’t have to go back to headquarters. And no. You can’t use my phone.” “Yeah yeah.” Duo glanced up at the dark night sky. It was still raining. “Well I don’t feel like jumping rooftop after rooftop to go to back to base. Can I get a ride with you guys?” Dan stared at Duo. “Why don’t you walk back? Come on get in the van. I need to get back to my post anyway.” Said Dan. There’s a Society, which existed since the death of Christ that protected mankind against Demons. This Society work in secret. In history, they first started in Europe. They protected kings and queens as well as their people. As Humanity spread across the world, so did the Society. Over time, the Society was part of the world. Still in secret, they continued to protect. They adapted to the new world to fight demons. Even in the 21st century. However, there are some that know that this Society exist. To put it more bluntly, government knows about it. Even the United Nations knows. But they keep it under wrap. Away from the known public. What is this Society called? They are called the Demon Society. Demon Society isn’t just a Organization that vanquishes demons. They also serve another purpose. To save them as well. Some demons are not evil. Not all demons come from the underworld. They also come from people hearts. When demons see so much hatred and despair in human’s hearts, they exploit it. Those that hearts that been tainted by demons can be saved if allowed. Humans that are nearly demon can be healed. Another set of demons that are allow in the order are half breed or half-demons. Half demons cannot be healed. Rather, they can learn to control the half demon inside of them and live among humans. Branches of Demon Society are all over the country. The main headquarters of Demon Society for the United States is located in New York. This is where Duo is headed. As Duo sits in the van, he starts to listen to I-Pod. He looks out of the window and sees nothing but rain. “It seems like the heavens are crying for some reason.” he thought. Duo wasn’t an ordinary child. He is a half demon. His father was a demon. His mother was a human. That’s all he knew. He never knew what happen to them. Duo was born in Demon Society. He was taken care for by the leader of Demon Society, Evan Hamilton. Still in the care of Demon Society, he was still an outsider. As a half demon, Duo only had few friends. When he was 13, he joined Demon Society to vanquish demons and to save them. Now in the present, Duo is still in the Society. Quietly, he listens to his music as the van takes its final turn to Demon Society. On the right stands a large building about four stories. On the middle of the building, is a logo that’s says: DS. “Well we’re here.” Says Dan as he stops the van. “Now I have to get back to my post.” “Okay. Thanks for the ride Dan.” said Duo as he get out of the van. Duo turns to watch Dan drive off. He then stares at Demon Society headquarters. “Well here goes nothing.” Says Duo as he walks toward the building. As he walks, he waves at the camera by the door. Approaching the door, he knocks with the handle on the door. The door slightly opens. Duo walks in. Inside, it was a long hall, bright with lights that hanged from the ceiling. In the middle of the hall was elevator door with two tall men in black suits. “Hiya! You guys working hard?” asked Duo. “Yeah. Nothing to do but to guard this elevator.” Said the tall man on the right. “Which floor will you be going on sir?” asked the man on the left. “I’m going up. I need to file a report.” Says Duo as he enters the elevator. Inside he pushes a button to go up. Slowly the elevator goes up to four. As the door opens, another hallway appears before him. Duo starts to walk through the hallway. Finally, Duo comes to a door in the middle. Up on the door reads Evan B. Hamilton Commander of DS. Duo knocks on the door. “Duo reporting in sir.” Says Duo. There was no response. “Maybe he didn’t hear me.” wonders Duo. He tries again. “Duo reporting in sir.” No response. Duo turns the door knob slightly. ‘Well…it’s open.’ Slowly Duo walks in the office. Inside is a large room with a desk in the middle and a stained glass window. As Duo walks, Lighting scrapes across the sky. Thunder rumbles in the distance. At the desk the chair is turned back facing the window. “Um…Commander sir?” Duo walks towards the desk. He looks and sees a finished cigarette in the tray. He then goes to turn the chair. Nothing. No one was in the chair. Duo slowly reaches his two swords from his waist. “Alright Commander. I know now that you’re in here. Where are you? Duo turns around to look in the back of the room. Suddenly a flash of light in the corner appeared. “A bullet!” thought Duo as he blocks it with his sword. Duo rushes at the corner quickly. More shots came from the corner. Duo slashes upright. “Gotcha!” yelled Duo. “Too slow.” Said the tall figure as he moves to the right at the second. The tall figure then shoots Duo. “Ahh!” Pain shot up at Duo’s right shoulder. He then drops his sword. Slowly the figure picks up the sword. He then aims it at Duo’s forehead. “You’re a half demon. You should never let your guard down even for a second.” Duo looks up. “Crap. That makes 40 wins and 13 losses huh, Commander?” |
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