Sora's Dream

kulav123 · 07/20/06, 06:57 AM

My first fanfic as a test. Please give any comment you wish. This takes place when Sora, Riku, and, Kairi are 7. This all there is.

" Quess what?", Sora shouted to his two friends Riku and Kairi.
"What?", Said Riku, thinking he would have to get rid of the word in 10 seconds.
"I had the weirdest dream last night."
"What happened?", Kairi asked.
" Well, we were all a lot older. It started off with this big black thing. Then I went to this weird town, wear a lot of little black things attacked me. Then I found Kairi in a castle and fought you, Riku. Then I went to another weird castle where I found a girl that looks like Kairi but blond. Then I went to another weird town where white things attacked me. Finally, you and Kairi were fighting. Then we all went home.."
"Wow, that's worse than the one with the anchovies, the goats, and cupid.", said Kairi.
"Yeah, good thing it will never happen, huh?"
"Yeah."

You know the rest.

Most Wanted · 07/20/06, 05:38 PM

One of the other Dream is sora dreaming about kairi
and him getting there freak on... {I'm lieing}

AngelofAdvent · 07/20/06, 06:40 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by kulav123

My first fanfic as a test. Please give any comment you wish. This takes place when Sora, Riku, and, Kairi are 7. This all there is.

" Quess what?", Sora shouted to his two friends Riku and Kairi.
"What?", Said Riku, thinking he would have to get rid of the word in 10 seconds.
"I had the weirdest dream last night."
"What happened?", Kairi asked.
" Well, we were all a lot older. It started off with this big black thing. Then I went to this weird town, wear a lot of little black things attacked me. Then I found Kairi in a castle and fought you, Riku. Then I went to another weird castle where I found a girl that looks like Kairi but blond. Then I went to another weird town where white things attacked me. Finally, you and Kairi were fighting. Then we all went home.."
"Wow, that's worse than the one with the anchovies, the goats, and cupid.", said Kairi.
"Yeah, good thing it will never happen, huh?"
"Yeah."

You know the rest.

You spellt guess with a Q?

**Thelonepickle** · 07/20/06, 08:53 PM

Your chapter or fic or whatever it was was... Way too short. It scared me.

Your grammar and spelling need a lot of work, and my only reaction this was, "Oh."

._.

So, yeah. o.o; Improve.

07/20/06, 06:57 AM	#1
kulav123 Disney Soldier Join Date: Jun 2006 Age: 16 Posts: 23 Rep Power: 0	Sora's Dream My first fanfic as a test. Please give any comment you wish. This takes place when Sora, Riku, and, Kairi are 7. This all there is. " Quess what?", Sora shouted to his two friends Riku and Kairi. "What?", Said Riku, thinking he would have to get rid of the word in 10 seconds. "I had the weirdest dream last night." "What happened?", Kairi asked. " Well, we were all a lot older. It started off with this big black thing. Then I went to this weird town, wear a lot of little black things attacked me. Then I found Kairi in a castle and fought you, Riku. Then I went to another weird castle where I found a girl that looks like Kairi but blond. Then I went to another weird town where white things attacked me. Finally, you and Kairi were fighting. Then we all went home.." "Wow, that's worse than the one with the anchovies, the goats, and cupid.", said Kairi. "Yeah, good thing it will never happen, huh?" "Yeah." You know the rest.

07/20/06, 05:38 PM	#2
Most Wanted Ruler of Darkness Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Queen, New york Age: 16 Posts: 109 Rep Power: 0	Re: Sora's Dream One of the other Dream is sora dreaming about kairi and him getting there freak on... {I'm lieing}

07/20/06, 08:53 PM	#4
Thelonepickle I don't like bugs! Join Date: Jun 2005 Posts: 3,765 Rep Power: 7	Re: Sora's Dream Your chapter or fic or whatever it was was... Way too short. It scared me. Your grammar and spelling need a lot of work, and my only reaction this was, "Oh." ._. So, yeah. o.o; Improve.

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