From Selphie's Point of View

[LemonTWIST264]

Hi everyone, and thanks for reading, this is my first chapter of this, so comment and if i get good reports back, i will make another and so on and so forth...
((in my story some things arent equvilent to the game/series of comics))((This is in Selphies point of view as u can tell from the title haha))

A Step Into The Past...
Selphie and Kairi had been sisters. Kairi was 2 at the time of Selphie's birth, but their mother had health problems and could not take the strain of having another child, Kairi and Selphie's mother died when Kairi was 6 and Selphie was 4. Kairi decided never to talk to little Selphie ever again because she believed it had been her fault their mother died. Kairi and Selphie were sent to live with their uncle, the mayor of Destiny Islands.

Back to the Present...
I watched Kairi and Sora from behind the palm trees. 'How could she do this to me, She knows I have liked Sora since the first time I saw him' I said to myself. I crept a little closer to hear what was going on. "Oh Sora, your soo funny!" Kairi giggled, "Nahh, I can't be that funny..." "Of course you are! You just don't like admitting those kind of things silly!" Kairi chuckled. I knew that she was just trying to make me jealous..I knew it. Kairi glanced in my direction and gave a mad glare, 'Uh-Oh, She saw me...' I thought and sprinted away. As I got into my house I ran up the stairs into my room "WHY DOES KAIRI HAVE TO BE SOO PRETTY AND CHARMING AND ALWAYS GET SORA'S ATTENTION!!!" I screamed in a shrill voice and plopped on my bed and cried for hours. I didn't eat dinner that night, I was too depresed, I had already changed into PJ's about an hour before, And sat on my bed. My bed had faced a large window which I watched the sunset at when I felt sad. However, I was too busy crying to see the pink pastel shaded sun hang low on the horizon. By now it was dark and no stars were seen, I glanced upward, and there it was, my key to all, a shooting star. Here was my chance, my chance to wish I would be the one to be with Sora in the end. " Oh beautiful shooting star, please let Sora and me be together..forever and always." Then right after my wish was done, the star disaperd into the atmosphere. I hope this kind of stuff works as they say it does I thought to myself and chuckled in spite of it. I yawned, and my stomach grumbled. I knew I was hungry, I went downstairs and looked at the kitchen clock, it read "11:27" wow I have been up for a while...I grabbed a few cheetos, and a water bottle and went upstairs. I fell asleep listeing to the waves hit the shore, it was like the ocean was serenading me. I dreamt, that Sora and I were floating in the clouds, and we were togheter, Kairi was no where in sight, and there in my dream we shared a kiss.

Well I hope you liked it! Comment back if you liked it alot and if i get some good comments I will come out with the next chapter, I already have enough ideas planned. Thanks!:D

[wisdom&valor]

I love it write more

[Zexilicious]

awesome write more please

[Destiny_Seeker]

its barely literate, theres no compostion to it which makes it really annoying to read..and the plot is a little well, flat. it doesnt intrest me its need more appeal and really needs to be longer, but hey you gave it your best shot

[Mr.]

Originally Posted by Destiny_Seeker

its barely literate, theres no compostion to it which makes it really annoying to read..and the plot is a little well, flat. it doesnt intrest me its need more appeal and really needs to be longer, but hey you gave it your best shot

Agreed.
Sorry, I'm not a fanfiction writer, and I can make things better than this...crap. -__-
*eats this fanfiction then hurls into a toilet, which he flushes quickly*

[wisdom&valor]

Originally Posted by Mr.

Agreed.
Sorry, I'm not a fanfiction writer, and I can make things better than this...crap. -__-
*eats this fanfiction then hurls into a toilet, which he flushes quickly*

:( thats mean she just started she dosenot know the rules i think this is preety good for a begginer i measn i am writing one and you problalby going to do this to me too go easy on hershe'll improve

[Destiny_Seeker]

it is going easy on her..i could have said much meaner things if i had wanted too..me and Mr. said things pretty nicely actually..i mean do u expect us to lie to her and tell her its good?

[Mr.]

Originally Posted by wisdom&valor

:( thats mean she just started she dosenot know the rules i think this is preety good for a begginer i measn i am writing one and you problalby going to do this to me too go easy on hershe'll improve

-__-
Now, you know, these excuses that everyone is a 'beginner' are quite stupid.
If you can't be literate, DON'T WRITE FANFICTIONS.
YOU MUST BE LITERATE...TO WRITE FANFICTIONS. =D
I'm not in the mood to get flamed, so I won't flame anymore.

[wisdom&valor]

I am sorry i know i have to be literate thats why i use spellcheck on fanfics.

[TheClamWhisperer]

I agree with Destiny Seeker and Mr. Why don't you take a look at Thelonepickle's 'Articles of Literacy' thread. You most certainly need more descriptive adjectives in your sentences, but the plot line is kind of bare unless something exciting or unique happens.

And the 'enter' button is your friend ^_^ it makes it so much easier to read if you seperate each paragraph.

[Mr.]

Originally Posted by wisdom&valor

I am sorry i know i have to be literate thats why i use spellcheck on fanfics.

The creator of this fanfiction should follow those words when he/she is creating a fanfiction.
SPELLCHECK IS A MUST.

Originally Posted by SorasAngel1292

I agree with Destiny Seeker and Mr. Why don't you take a look at Thelonepickle's 'Articles of Literacy' thread. You most certainly need more descriptive adjectives in your sentences, but the plot line is kind of bare unless something happens.

And the 'enter' button is your friend ^_^ it makes it so much easier to read if you seperate each paragraph.

Exactly.
By the way, have you updated, 'Angels and Demons' yet? It's FUN, and I want more. D: