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Old March 30th, 2006, 10:54 PM   #1
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The events of this story…what is this disclaimer for anyway? Who cares, just read the story.


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As the World Yearns
Chapter 1
A collaboration between Ryu and Raito


This tale of conquest begins in the heart of The Netherlands, in the small town called Dutchania. A young man lived here by the name of Ryuwielfoo Jonathedo, or Ryujo for short. Ryujo grew up desiring to rule the world one day. He aced school, was very athletic, was class President, President of the Honors Society, Student Principle, loved his parents, and had a great sense of humor. He had deep oceanic blue eyes, dusty blonde hair, a fair complexion, well toned, an excellent smile, and was known as quite the lady’s man. But this young man had only one woman on his heart: the lovely Queen Flahré of the Netherlands. He loved the Queen, the Queen loved him, and they were quite happy together.

On the other side of the world lived another young man in the noble town of Obliviana in Ontario, Canada. This one’s name was Treevee Banivah. TV, as we shall call him, was a similar case to Ryujo. He excelled in school, had charm beyond your wildest imaginations, intellect that challenged the Greek Philosophers, and the kindest heart you could find. He was skilled in the art of Karate, the Samurai Sword, and an excellent archer. He also was known as the greatest soccer player Canada had ever known. With his charm and beauty, even Ryujo was sometimes captivated by it.

For you see, these two were excellent friends growing up, despite the long distance. They agreed in everything, and were the best of friends. Though perhaps the one thing they aspired to do the most was to take over the world. The plans of these two prodigies when they collaborated were astonishing, and taking over the world was their greatest work yet.

As time passed, the two agreed that they should meet and discuss their plans further. So, both Ryujo and TV boarded flights to remote island of Gameria in the South Pacific, and Ryujo brought the beautitul Queen Flahré along with him. What these three did in their deluxe cottage the first night of this adventure remains a mystery. Rumors have circulated, but they shall not enter this story.

However, lurking in the shadows was a foe the three had never expected to encounter. A foe so great, that the plans of world domination could come to a hault.

Who is this foe?

What went on in that cottage?

Why is this such a short chapter?

All this and more to be found out in the next installment of “As the World Yearns.”
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Old March 30th, 2006, 10:56 PM   #2
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zomg, Ryujo sounds so hawt. More. D:
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Old March 30th, 2006, 10:59 PM   #3
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TV sounds even hawter. That's the kind of person that everybody should want to be. xD

Stupid short chapter >.>
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Old March 30th, 2006, 11:04 PM   #4
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Zomg. Ryoujo? TEEVEE? ZOH EM GEE.

Hawt names. Cursed short chapters. Must read more D:
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Old March 30th, 2006, 11:29 PM   #5
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The last time we left off, our three amigos were camped out in the deluxe cottage on the Island of Gameria. They were carrying on, having a jolly ol’ time, but little did they know that trouble and a dangerous foe lurked just around the corner. Find out what happens now in this installment of…


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Chapter 2

“What shall we have to eat, eh?” asked TV, dying for some pizza as usual. Despite the argument, TV won in the end and a nice fresh pizza was cooked, best in the world. Our three friends ate and deliberated, completely oblivious to the on goings outside. A tall dark man was hiding behind a bush, writing notes on the trio’s conversation. All of the sudden, one of the party members (though it is unclear which) said “God” and this foe was infuriated. He lurched outwards and smashed through the nearby window, shattering it to a thousand pieces. He grabbed a knife out of his pocket, and charged at the closest target, which unfortunately was Queen Flahré. Then, all of the sudden, a horn sounded and someone else charged in the front door! The brave hero knocked this foe out cold! “Are you alright, mam?” asked the charming hero.

“Why, yes,” replied the Queen,” I am fine. But who are you?”

“My name is Raitodor Brando, mam. You’re beauty has captivated me, and your deeds go not unforgotten. I am forever in your service.” At this moment, Ratiodor bent down and placed a gentle kiss on the lovely hand of the Queen.

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Next thing you know, Raitodor fell to the ground at the hand of Ryujo, who had just slapped him quite hard. “Keep your hands off my lady!” he said with a stern voice.

“I am terribly sorry sir. My mistake. But I mean no harm, for I am only in debt to the Queen Flahré of The Netherlands. You see, she saved me from being executed for a crime I did not commit many years ago, when she was still Prime Minister.”

The 4 began talking about their current situation, and it was agreed that Raitodor would be a part of this grand fiasco. His skill in world government and law would come in handy on the journey to conquer the governments that held power. All the meanwhile, the intruder lay unconscience on the ground. Finally, it was agreed that he should be tied up to a chair before he woke up, so they did so.

Three hours later…

“I think he’s awakening.”

“Let’s find out his name, eh?”

As the foe awoke, he muttered “What happened? Where am I? Ah yes! The terrible person who spoke the name of God! Where might I find him?”

“I was speaking metaphorically,” replied the Queen in her ever-so-lovely, yet sardonic tone.

“Sorry, but I get frustrated when I hear about God or religion.” replied the foe. “Especially that dreaded Christianity.”

At this moment, each of the other 4 looked at each other, for they all had some kind of background and/or respect for Christianity, but dare not mention it. “What is your name, eh?” asked TV.

“Eduardo Feeneedo Orlando Pescado. But you can call me Phoenny.” relplied the suddenly friendly intruder.

“We should interrogate him, eh?” asked the obvious character. But that, my readers, comes in a later chapter of…

“As the World Yearns”
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Old March 30th, 2006, 11:40 PM   #6
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D: No offense, but this looks like a rip off of Days of our Pr0n <___<' Just not so medival...

Other then that, I think it's a little above average, but I'm not so hyped of the overall fix, which is a disappointment. x_x
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Old March 30th, 2006, 11:45 PM   #7
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Well this is a collaboration between my and Ryu, after all, so it is going to resemble "Days of our Pr0n"
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Old March 30th, 2006, 11:46 PM   #8
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Ya, but the general idea is a total rip. Just because Ryu is working on it, doesnt mean you could think of a more original catching idea. .-. And the jokes (Christianity) and most of the people are the same, just thrown into a different story "universe".

It's good, but isn't fresh or exiting. The most I could say is "Pretty Nice" .-.

But eh, I'm a bastard anyway.
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Old March 31st, 2006, 03:38 AM   #9
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Uhh... Are you Canadian? Because they don't say "Eh" at the end of EVERY single sentence...

At least, none of the many Canadians I've met, anyway.

This fic... too early to judge, I say. Post more chapters. At least you're literate.
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Old March 31st, 2006, 04:39 AM   #10
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It's a joke. He's emphasizing the typical Canadian stereotype just to show character.
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Old March 31st, 2006, 09:02 AM   #11
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RIPPER!!11 D:::

>=O monkey's right though. xD

And well, I took care of one part in the story that has yet to come, Raito did the rest.
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Old March 31st, 2006, 02:12 PM   #12
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D: No offense, but this looks like a rip off of Days of our Pr0n <___<' Just not so medival...

Other then that, I think it's a little above average, but I'm not so hyped of the overall fix, which is a disappointment. x_x
Agreed.

Ratio, what sort of stun are you trying to pull here, neh?

Also: Ryu.... what happened to your updates? -cracks whip- Do I have to take away your food until you write more? lawlz
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Old March 31st, 2006, 02:20 PM   #13
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Am working on it, will be ready in a few days, geez. >.>'
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