Catch me as I fall...

poisonedheart · 03/01/06, 03:47 AM

this is a fan-fic about Sora and Kairi, it's my first one so it wont be that good...
here it is...
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I ran as fast as I could down all the flights of steps doing my best to keep up with Donald and Goofy. I tried as hard as I could to keep the tears from pouring down my face. What if he was gone, what if Sora didn't come back. I tried not to think about that, just to think about getting away from the heartless.
We stopped in the center of the enterance hall in Hollowbastion. Heartless were surrounding us. Donald smacked a heartless on the head a few times. I looked closely at the heartless he hit. It seemed almost fimilar. I walked a little closer to the heartless, it didn't attack.
"Sora?" The heartless didn't move but I knew it was Sora. Heartless began to surround us. I stood in front of Sora. "This time I'll protect you." I was standing in front of Sora, my arms out blocking him.
The heartless were on top of us. "Sora!" I hugged him as tight as I could. The heartless that were on top of us were gone. If was just Sora and me, hugging.
"Kairi, thanks." Sora said in a soft voice.
I didn't say anything back, I was just happy to be here with Sora. Be here in his arms. I felt safe.
Suddenly I woke up from the sound of my mom calling me.
"KAIRI, DINNER!"
I slowly got up off my bed. I didn't want to eat now. I just wanted to lay on my bed and think of Sora. Think of what he said. 'Remember what you said Kairi, I'm always with you to I'll come back to you I promise'
I could feel warm tears forming in my eyes. I didn't hold them back though. I let them fall down my cheek. I let myself cry.
"I'M NOT HUNGAR MOM!" I said as best as I could without choking on my tears. I layed back down on my bed but I couldn't sleep. 'I'll come back to you I promise'
"I know you will." I mumbled to myself. I wipped a few of the tears off my face. Then looked out the window.
It was stormy. Dark clouds were forming in the sky. I looked closly at the beach. A huge shadow was forming and it was getting bigger and bigger.

poisonedheart · 03/01/06, 03:48 AM

that's just a start but i'm mite not be able to post anymore till this weekend

Noezel7 · 03/01/06, 03:53 AM

good start PH!! oh a side note, you might want to hit the enter key twice to seperate the different paragraphs, it makes it easier for the reader to read:D

poisonedheart · 03/01/06, 03:55 AM

yea i'll do that nxt chapter i just wasnt think bout it cuz i hav 2 get of in a bit and i wanted 2 get it posted b4 i left cuz i wont be on again till prolly friday nite

Golden_x_Heart · 03/01/06, 03:56 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Noezel7

good start PH!! oh a side note, you might want to hit the enter key twice to seperate the different paragraphs, it makes it easier for the reader to read:D

i agree - it is a really good start, and id love to see where you take it from here.
also, though, THE ENTER KEY IS YOUR FRIEND!!!
yeah, im done
i wanna see where you take this, so update soon!
<3

poisonedheart · 03/01/06, 04:04 AM

I really wanna rite chap 2 but i hav 2 go then i'm goin 2 my moms 2moro and the internets brokin there so i wont be able 2 go on till friday nite but i'll try 2 get it fixed so i can add chapter 2 but i dont hav time write it rite now...
srry

unknow_92 · 03/01/06, 04:12 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Noezel7

good start PH!! oh a side note, you might want to hit the enter key twice to seperate the different paragraphs, it makes it easier for the reader to read:D

yup it was a good start looking forward to reading the rest of the chapters

True Serenity · 03/01/06, 04:16 AM

I like it!

I'm looking forward to the next chapter. ^_^

slinky · 03/01/06, 04:22 AM

wow good good job nice first chap

KH_Fan_4_eva · 03/01/06, 05:33 PM

That was a cool first part of the story!

Kairi&Sora 4ever · 03/01/06, 11:56 PM

good start! but be sure not to follow the same stories a lot of other people have done on here..a lot of ppl do the kairi-sora fics..and being one of them myself ive had to find a way to make my story original and make it my own..just take this story and make it as original as u can and im sure itll be good!

mew_ichigo · 03/02/06, 12:08 AM

That was super good!!! I sounds really interesting so far. ^-^ I cant wait for the next chapter!!! :D

FlyingTomato1 · 03/02/06, 05:13 AM

Great fic!=D!Its soooo kooooolll!By the way!Do you want me to make a really nice sig for your fic?Cause it looks like you did the other with paint.I dont make sigs for just any fics.Your fic on the first chappie is great enough that it deserves a really shiny sig.=D^-^

Kairi&Sora 4ever · 03/02/06, 08:56 PM

wait FT1 are you saying red's first chap wasnt that good?? hers is by far the best on the forums! no offense poisonedheart b/c urs is good too but i know that flyingtomato1 is good freinds with her so i was jw lol...anyways so this isnt spam POST SOON! and be sure to make longer chaps b/c that one was tiny but still good!

slinky · 03/03/06, 09:44 PM

bringing this back to first page

this isnt dieing that easily

03/01/06, 03:47 AM	#1
poisonedheart Keyblade Novice Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: it would be cool to live in Destiny Island or Hawii Posts: 74 Rep Power: 0	Catch me as I fall... this is a fan-fic about Sora and Kairi, it's my first one so it wont be that good... here it is... -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I ran as fast as I could down all the flights of steps doing my best to keep up with Donald and Goofy. I tried as hard as I could to keep the tears from pouring down my face. What if he was gone, what if Sora didn't come back. I tried not to think about that, just to think about getting away from the heartless. We stopped in the center of the enterance hall in Hollowbastion. Heartless were surrounding us. Donald smacked a heartless on the head a few times. I looked closely at the heartless he hit. It seemed almost fimilar. I walked a little closer to the heartless, it didn't attack. "Sora?" The heartless didn't move but I knew it was Sora. Heartless began to surround us. I stood in front of Sora. "This time I'll protect you." I was standing in front of Sora, my arms out blocking him. The heartless were on top of us. "Sora!" I hugged him as tight as I could. The heartless that were on top of us were gone. If was just Sora and me, hugging. "Kairi, thanks." Sora said in a soft voice. I didn't say anything back, I was just happy to be here with Sora. Be here in his arms. I felt safe. Suddenly I woke up from the sound of my mom calling me. "KAIRI, DINNER!" I slowly got up off my bed. I didn't want to eat now. I just wanted to lay on my bed and think of Sora. Think of what he said. 'Remember what you said Kairi, I'm always with you to I'll come back to you I promise' I could feel warm tears forming in my eyes. I didn't hold them back though. I let them fall down my cheek. I let myself cry. "I'M NOT HUNGAR MOM!" I said as best as I could without choking on my tears. I layed back down on my bed but I couldn't sleep. 'I'll come back to you I promise' "I know you will." I mumbled to myself. I wipped a few of the tears off my face. Then looked out the window. It was stormy. Dark clouds were forming in the sky. I looked closly at the beach. A huge shadow was forming and it was getting bigger and bigger.

03/01/06, 03:48 AM	#2
poisonedheart Keyblade Novice Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: it would be cool to live in Destiny Island or Hawii Posts: 74 Rep Power: 0	Re: Catch me as I fall... that's just a start but i'm mite not be able to post anymore till this weekend

03/01/06, 03:53 AM	#3
Noezel7 Organization Member Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: With my beloved Arima!! Age: 19 Posts: 418 Rep Power: 0	Re: Catch me as I fall... good start PH!! oh a side note, you might want to hit the enter key twice to seperate the different paragraphs, it makes it easier for the reader to read:D

03/01/06, 03:55 AM	#4
poisonedheart Keyblade Novice Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: it would be cool to live in Destiny Island or Hawii Posts: 74 Rep Power: 0	Re: Catch me as I fall... yea i'll do that nxt chapter i just wasnt think bout it cuz i hav 2 get of in a bit and i wanted 2 get it posted b4 i left cuz i wont be on again till prolly friday nite

03/01/06, 04:04 AM	#6
poisonedheart Keyblade Novice Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: it would be cool to live in Destiny Island or Hawii Posts: 74 Rep Power: 0	Re: Catch me as I fall... I really wanna rite chap 2 but i hav 2 go then i'm goin 2 my moms 2moro and the internets brokin there so i wont be able 2 go on till friday nite but i'll try 2 get it fixed so i can add chapter 2 but i dont hav time write it rite now... srry

03/01/06, 04:16 AM	#8
True Serenity your forgotten memory Join Date: May 2004 Location: anywhere but here. Age: 19 Posts: 1,527 Rep Power: 6	Re: Catch me as I fall... I like it! I'm looking forward to the next chapter. ^_^

03/01/06, 04:22 AM	#9
slinky are we having FUN yet?!? Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: somewhere falling down stairs what else? Age: 17 Posts: 1,080 Rep Power: 5	Re: Catch me as I fall... wow good good job nice first chap

03/01/06, 05:33 PM	#10
KH_Fan_4_eva Organization Member Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 426 Rep Power: 3	Re: Catch me as I fall... That was a cool first part of the story!

03/01/06, 11:56 PM	#11
Kairi&Sora 4ever Organization Member Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: On the vast beaches of Destiny Islands awaiting his return..* Age: 17 Posts: 419 Rep Power: 3	Re: Catch me as I fall... good start! but be sure not to follow the same stories a lot of other people have done on here..a lot of ppl do the kairi-sora fics..and being one of them myself ive had to find a way to make my story original and make it my own..just take this story and make it as original as u can and im sure itll be good!

03/02/06, 12:08 AM	#12
mew_ichigo Warrior of Light Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: ...I only live in places that has cookies in it... >.>...chases the Gingerbread Man Age: 16 Posts: 548 Rep Power: 4	Re: Catch me as I fall... That was super good!!! I sounds really interesting so far. ^-^ I cant wait for the next chapter!!! :D

03/02/06, 05:13 AM	#13
FlyingTomato1 Keyblade Weilder Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Hiding from the people at Subway Posts: 254 Rep Power: 3	Re: Catch me as I fall... Great fic!=D!Its soooo kooooolll!By the way!Do you want me to make a really nice sig for your fic?Cause it looks like you did the other with paint.I dont make sigs for just any fics.Your fic on the first chappie is great enough that it deserves a really shiny sig.=D^-^

03/02/06, 08:56 PM	#14
Kairi&Sora 4ever Organization Member Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: On the vast beaches of Destiny Islands awaiting his return..* Age: 17 Posts: 419 Rep Power: 3	Re: Catch me as I fall... wait FT1 are you saying red's first chap wasnt that good?? hers is by far the best on the forums! no offense poisonedheart b/c urs is good too but i know that flyingtomato1 is good freinds with her so i was jw lol...anyways so this isnt spam POST SOON! and be sure to make longer chaps b/c that one was tiny but still good!

03/03/06, 09:44 PM	#15
slinky are we having FUN yet?!? Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: somewhere falling down stairs what else? Age: 17 Posts: 1,080 Rep Power: 5	Re: Catch me as I fall... bringing this back to first page this isnt dieing that easily

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