Catch me as I fall... - Page 2

poisonedheart · 03/03/06, 10:47 PM

i would have made the chapter longer but i didnt hav alot of time i just wanted 2 get i down my plan was actually long but i had like 5min 2 type the whole thing so i couldnt get wat i wanted but i'll put the next chapter on 2day and FlyingTomato1 could u make me a signature?

keyblademaster42 · 03/04/06, 12:45 AM

not the best ive seen but pretty good id give it 7 otta 10. good luck with the second chap

poisonedheart · 03/04/06, 01:07 AM

heres chapter two....
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Catch me...

I could feel it getting a lot colder.

I'm falling...

I wanted to run downstairs I wanted to hide.

Save me...

I wanted to be anywhere but here.

Your far away...

Yet, I stayed looking out the window.

Far...Away...

I just watched the darkness get bigger. I knew what was happening. The hearless were here. So why didn't I run? Why didn't I run far, far away from this spot?

I could hear my family downstairs, calling, calling for me to help them.

"KAIRI, KAIRI, PLEASE, PLEASE HELP US!!!!!!!!KAIRI?"

Why was I still here. They needed me. Could I even move.

Am I dead?

Sora....Sora....where are you?I need you.Don't you hear me calling your name?

Am I calling him?

Don't you see me falling?Do you Sora?Can you not hear me?Can you see the tears running down my face?

I felt like I was floating. I was now on the beach. Staring right up in to the darkness. Watching it. Just watching it. I could feel the ground dissapear under my feet. Nothing around me but darkness. I was falling...falling...falling...

Sora...

Please...

Catch me as I fall....
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mew_ichigo · 03/04/06, 01:25 AM

That was super good!!! It got alot more interesting! =D Tehe story is awesome so far!

*gives your fan-fic so far a 9/10 and puts it on a paper*

Kairi&Sora 4ever · 03/04/06, 01:28 AM

seemed a bit repetitive..but it was pretty nice

Anonymous · 03/04/06, 01:29 AM

I read the both and this is actually one of the Kairi sora fanfic that I don't want to tear to shreads!

The second chapter wasn't as good as the first, but I still liked it!

poisonedheart · 03/04/06, 01:31 AM

thanx everyone...
i'll get the 3rd chap on 2nite

poisonedheart · 03/04/06, 02:05 AM

heres chapter 3...
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Why didn't you catch me?Why didn't you save me?Do you even hear me?....Sora?

I felt a sharp pain on my head.

Sora...

I gently touched my head, checking for blood.

SORA!

There was alittle but most was dry.

PLEASE, PLEASE, SORA...AWNSER ME!!!

I would be fine though.

I felt a sharp pain in my heart. Then a voice came to me...

kairi...

SORA?!Sora is that you?

yes...

He sounded weak, and scared...

Why didn't you come to me, I called your name...

I heard. Are you ok?

I'll be fine. Why didn't you come...Sora I'm scared...

I know...

Why aren't you coming? I need you!

I know...

I began to cry...uncontrolably...but why. I knew something was wrong with Sora. I told him I was frightened and he didn't come...

Sora...Where are you?
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srry it's so short but I'm going out to dinner now and I just wanted to get this part down. I'll write more when I get back.

slinky · 03/04/06, 02:12 AM

wow good job u r making this good

Anonymous · 03/04/06, 02:19 AM

I haven't liked these past 2 chapters. The first one was good

Kairi&Sora 4ever · 03/04/06, 02:53 AM

im gonna have to agree with BHKiller...

poisonedheart · 03/04/06, 07:28 AM

I looked at my surrounds. It all seemed fimilar, but the aching in my head kept me from remembering it. I sat up a little bit. My eyes hurt a little from crying and I was guessing they were also red. I was on a bed. The covers had not been over me, and I was thankful for that becuse the room I was in was very warm.

Where am I? Where am I?

I just couldnt place it....it seemed like I'd been here many times and it seemed completly strange.

The room was small. There was a dresser in one courner. The bed I was laying one in another and in the center a table with two chairs. The chairs were both pulled out. Papers were scattered across it. There were two cups of water also on the table. It looked like someone had recently been here. There was one window by the door. The blinds were over the window so I couldn't see outside.

I know now! I'm in that house in the third district. I'm in Traverse Town.

I remembered being here after Sora saved me. Then he had come back here and I was not and Arieth told him I left to the Underground Cavern. Sora went there and we talked. Sora said that our hearts are connected. "Our hearts are connected and the light from our hearts broke through the darkness."

I slowly closed my eyes.

"It's my lucky charm, be sure to bring it back to me."

"Don't worry, I will."

"Promise?"

"Promise."

Sora, where are you? You promised.

"Don't ever forget, where ever you go, I'm always with you."

I could hear Sora's voice again.

If I was falling would you catch me?

I giggled. Of course would.

Then how come you didn't?

I layed back on the bed in the third district.

What do you mean?

No one replied.

Sora?

At first I was worried. I wasn't he responding? There was this feeling inside of me though. I knew he was safe. And I knew he was with me.

I feel asleep

*******

I woke up from a knocking sound on the door. I sat up quicklly. Looked around. The light was off and also in the room was Yuffie, Leon, Cloud and Arieth. They all were laying somewhere. Most likely they had been sleeping but the knocking had waked them up.

The knocking was louder than normal knocking. It was nearly pounding. Nobody went to get the door. I guessed it was an unwanted guest.

I sank deeper into the bed. Nervous about who was pounding on the door.

"Don't move anyone. It's somebody whose with the heartless." Leon slowly stood.

"How do you know?" I wispeared.

"I just do."

The pounding on the door grew louder and the fear in the room also grew. I was shaking, but I tried to remain calm.

Sora? Sora, are you there? I'm scared. Someone is outside the door, pounding on it.

I know.

How? How do you know?

I can see everything.

FlyingTomato1 · 03/04/06, 12:06 PM

ZOMG!Great chappies! I'm gettin started on that sig..*coughfirstpostcough*
Yeah redharry's fanfic is da greatist but i wasnt a user when she started it...i made her a sig for Silverwings 2..she already has one for SW3 , and its the koolest sig ever..so why should i make another unless she asks me?

mew_ichigo · 03/04/06, 05:29 PM

YAY! I really like it!! =D Its getting super good now!!

I cant wait for the next chapter!

Kairi&Sora 4ever · 03/04/06, 06:24 PM

yeah i know FT1...i didnt mean to make it sound like wanted you to make red one now..i meant like back then...haha anyways the chap was better but a bit confusing

03/03/06, 10:47 PM	#16
poisonedheart Keyblade Novice Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: it would be cool to live in Destiny Island or Hawii Posts: 74 Rep Power: 0	Re: Catch me as I fall... i would have made the chapter longer but i didnt hav alot of time i just wanted 2 get i down my plan was actually long but i had like 5min 2 type the whole thing so i couldnt get wat i wanted but i'll put the next chapter on 2day and FlyingTomato1 could u make me a signature?

03/04/06, 12:45 AM	#17
keyblademaster42 Organization Member Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: between a rock and a hard place Age: 18 Posts: 730 Rep Power: 4	Re: Catch me as I fall... not the best ive seen but pretty good id give it 7 otta 10. good luck with the second chap

03/04/06, 01:07 AM	#18
poisonedheart Keyblade Novice Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: it would be cool to live in Destiny Island or Hawii Posts: 74 Rep Power: 0	Re: Catch me as I fall... heres chapter two.... ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Catch me... I could feel it getting a lot colder. I'm falling... I wanted to run downstairs I wanted to hide. Save me... I wanted to be anywhere but here. Your far away... Yet, I stayed looking out the window. Far...Away... I just watched the darkness get bigger. I knew what was happening. The hearless were here. So why didn't I run? Why didn't I run far, far away from this spot? I could hear my family downstairs, calling, calling for me to help them. "KAIRI, KAIRI, PLEASE, PLEASE HELP US!!!!!!!!KAIRI?" Why was I still here. They needed me. Could I even move. Am I dead? Sora....Sora....where are you?I need you.Don't you hear me calling your name? Am I calling him? Don't you see me falling?Do you Sora?Can you not hear me?Can you see the tears running down my face? I felt like I was floating. I was now on the beach. Staring right up in to the darkness. Watching it. Just watching it. I could feel the ground dissapear under my feet. Nothing around me but darkness. I was falling...falling...falling... Sora... Please... Catch me as I fall.... ----------------------------------------------

03/04/06, 01:25 AM	#19
mew_ichigo Warrior of Light Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: ...I only live in places that has cookies in it... >.>...chases the Gingerbread Man Age: 16 Posts: 548 Rep Power: 4	Re: Catch me as I fall... That was super good!!! It got alot more interesting! =D Tehe story is awesome so far! gives your fan-fic so far a 9/10 and puts it on a paper

03/04/06, 01:28 AM	#20
Kairi&Sora 4ever Organization Member Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: On the vast beaches of Destiny Islands awaiting his return..* Age: 17 Posts: 419 Rep Power: 3	Re: Catch me as I fall... seemed a bit repetitive..but it was pretty nice

03/04/06, 01:29 AM	#21
Anonymous The Unknowing Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Amongst others Age: 16 Posts: 1,554 Rep Power: 5	Re: Catch me as I fall... I read the both and this is actually one of the Kairi sora fanfic that I don't want to tear to shreads! The second chapter wasn't as good as the first, but I still liked it!

03/04/06, 01:31 AM	#22
poisonedheart Keyblade Novice Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: it would be cool to live in Destiny Island or Hawii Posts: 74 Rep Power: 0	Re: Catch me as I fall... thanx everyone... i'll get the 3rd chap on 2nite

03/04/06, 02:05 AM	#23
poisonedheart Keyblade Novice Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: it would be cool to live in Destiny Island or Hawii Posts: 74 Rep Power: 0	Re: Catch me as I fall... heres chapter 3... -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Why didn't you catch me?Why didn't you save me?Do you even hear me?....Sora? I felt a sharp pain on my head. Sora... I gently touched my head, checking for blood. SORA! There was alittle but most was dry. PLEASE, PLEASE, SORA...AWNSER ME!!! I would be fine though. I felt a sharp pain in my heart. Then a voice came to me... kairi... SORA?!Sora is that you? yes... He sounded weak, and scared... Why didn't you come to me, I called your name... I heard. Are you ok? I'll be fine. Why didn't you come...Sora I'm scared... I know... Why aren't you coming? I need you! I know... I began to cry...uncontrolably...but why. I knew something was wrong with Sora. I told him I was frightened and he didn't come... Sora...Where are you? ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ srry it's so short but I'm going out to dinner now and I just wanted to get this part down. I'll write more when I get back.

03/04/06, 02:12 AM	#24
slinky are we having FUN yet?!? Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: somewhere falling down stairs what else? Age: 17 Posts: 1,080 Rep Power: 5	Re: Catch me as I fall... wow good job u r making this good

03/04/06, 02:19 AM	#25
Anonymous The Unknowing Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Amongst others Age: 16 Posts: 1,554 Rep Power: 5	Re: Catch me as I fall... I haven't liked these past 2 chapters. The first one was good

03/04/06, 02:53 AM	#26
Kairi&Sora 4ever Organization Member Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: On the vast beaches of Destiny Islands awaiting his return..* Age: 17 Posts: 419 Rep Power: 3	Re: Catch me as I fall... im gonna have to agree with BHKiller...

03/04/06, 07:28 AM	#27
poisonedheart Keyblade Novice Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: it would be cool to live in Destiny Island or Hawii Posts: 74 Rep Power: 0	Re: Catch me as I fall... I looked at my surrounds. It all seemed fimilar, but the aching in my head kept me from remembering it. I sat up a little bit. My eyes hurt a little from crying and I was guessing they were also red. I was on a bed. The covers had not been over me, and I was thankful for that becuse the room I was in was very warm. Where am I? Where am I? I just couldnt place it....it seemed like I'd been here many times and it seemed completly strange. The room was small. There was a dresser in one courner. The bed I was laying one in another and in the center a table with two chairs. The chairs were both pulled out. Papers were scattered across it. There were two cups of water also on the table. It looked like someone had recently been here. There was one window by the door. The blinds were over the window so I couldn't see outside. I know now! I'm in that house in the third district. I'm in Traverse Town. I remembered being here after Sora saved me. Then he had come back here and I was not and Arieth told him I left to the Underground Cavern. Sora went there and we talked. Sora said that our hearts are connected. "Our hearts are connected and the light from our hearts broke through the darkness." I slowly closed my eyes. "It's my lucky charm, be sure to bring it back to me." "Don't worry, I will." "Promise?" "Promise." Sora, where are you? You promised. "Don't ever forget, where ever you go, I'm always with you." I could hear Sora's voice again. If I was falling would you catch me? I giggled. Of course would. Then how come you didn't? I layed back on the bed in the third district. What do you mean? No one replied. Sora? At first I was worried. I wasn't he responding? There was this feeling inside of me though. I knew he was safe. And I knew he was with me. I feel asleep ******* I woke up from a knocking sound on the door. I sat up quicklly. Looked around. The light was off and also in the room was Yuffie, Leon, Cloud and Arieth. They all were laying somewhere. Most likely they had been sleeping but the knocking had waked them up. The knocking was louder than normal knocking. It was nearly pounding. Nobody went to get the door. I guessed it was an unwanted guest. I sank deeper into the bed. Nervous about who was pounding on the door. "Don't move anyone. It's somebody whose with the heartless." Leon slowly stood. "How do you know?" I wispeared. "I just do." The pounding on the door grew louder and the fear in the room also grew. I was shaking, but I tried to remain calm. Sora? Sora, are you there? I'm scared. Someone is outside the door, pounding on it. I know. How? How do you know? I can see everything.

03/04/06, 12:06 PM	#28
FlyingTomato1 Keyblade Weilder Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Hiding from the people at Subway Posts: 254 Rep Power: 3	Re: Catch me as I fall... ZOMG!Great chappies! I'm gettin started on that sig..coughfirstpostcough Yeah redharry's fanfic is da greatist but i wasnt a user when she started it...i made her a sig for Silverwings 2..she already has one for SW3 , and its the koolest sig ever..so why should i make another unless she asks me?

03/04/06, 05:29 PM	#29
mew_ichigo Warrior of Light Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: ...I only live in places that has cookies in it... >.>...chases the Gingerbread Man Age: 16 Posts: 548 Rep Power: 4	Re: Catch me as I fall... YAY! I really like it!! =D Its getting super good now!! I cant wait for the next chapter!

03/04/06, 06:24 PM	#30
Kairi&Sora 4ever Organization Member Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: On the vast beaches of Destiny Islands awaiting his return..* Age: 17 Posts: 419 Rep Power: 3	Re: Catch me as I fall... yeah i know FT1...i didnt mean to make it sound like wanted you to make red one now..i meant like back then...haha anyways the chap was better but a bit confusing

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