You Promised......

KH_Fan_4_eva · 02/25/06, 11:22 AM

This my first ever fanfic so dont be too mean,and plz commant!

Chapter 1:Remembering

A girl around 15 with crimson hair was sitting on the Popou tree at Destiny Island.Her name was Kairi,she looked sad,she always looked sad now adays...Since Sora and Riku had left.She looked up too see the sun set,Sora had always said the sunset on Destiny Island was like dropping red,yellow and Orange paint onto the sun.Thinking about this made her more sad.It had been a year since Sora,Kairi and Riku were at Kingdom Hearts,but Kairi could discribe it as if it was yesterday.

Every now and then Selphie,Tidus and Wakka would try and cheer her up but every time Tidus or Wakka would say somthing about Riku or Sora and then they would get a slap around the face from Selphie.Kairi had changed alot over the year,her feelings for Sora were the same but her looks were differnt,her crimson hair was now shoulder lengh,and she now wore a pink sleeveless hoody but the hood was black and a white top under it,she also wore a pink mini skirt,her shoes were the same but they were pink.

Every night she would walk to the beach and wait and see if Sora would return to her,but every night when he didnt she would wisper to the air as if sending a message to him"You Promised"

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Tell me If you like it or not

KH_Fan_4_eva · 02/25/06, 04:18 PM

Seeing as no one is talking I will do another Chapter!

Chapter 2:School Boys

Kairi was starting her first day of school today,she may of been 15 but Kairi's,Sora's and Riku's parents agreed that they wouldnt let there children go to school.But Kairi's parents changed there minds about that when Riku and Sora had left,they thought that Kairi would meet other kids if she went to school,but Kairi didnt agree with that.The only people she would have as friends at school were Selphie,Wakka and Tidus,the Uniform looked good on Kairi,it was a white top with a blue and white tie,then a blue and white checked mini skirt.

As she walked down the road to school boys would whistle and stare at her,as she walked into school with Tidus,Wakka and Selphie a boy apeared infront of her,he had black spiky hair and dark brown eyes,he was cute but nothing compeared to Sora.He stuck out his hand and said "Hi!Im Toby!"Kairi smiled at him and replied"Im Kairi".they chatted for a while and Kairi found out he was the most populer boy in school,then he asked her somthing she wished no one but Sora would say to her."Do you want to be my Girlfriend?"

Kairi looked at him in discust"NO WAY!"she yelled at him,"why not?!"said Toby shocked.Kairi was speackless for a while then she said"Because im already with somone""Well whats his name so me and my mates can beat him up and then you can be me!"he said"well I dont think thats posible"said Kairi quietly"AND WHY NOT?!"he yelled in her face."Because Im with a guy named Sora"she said.

Toby couldnt say anything for a while then he said"So your the Kairi who is in love with Sora the Keyblade master and best friends with Riku,the boy who went into darkness?"Kairi nodded,this was going rough day for her she knew it.

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Hoped you liked it!Sorry if there a bit short!PLZ PLZ PLZ commant!

AngelofAdvent · 02/26/06, 01:27 PM

I pretty good. It explains what Kairi is doing while Riku and Sora are away

KH_Fan_4_eva · 02/26/06, 01:54 PM

*Angles come out and start singing*YES!Somone Finally came!!!

Taokitty · 02/27/06, 12:58 AM

Me: Lol! I like the story so far!
Gem: But... how do they know?!O_o
Nanala: Who knows?=^_^=
Thea:....

King_Mickey1000 · 02/27/06, 01:13 AM

A few words mispelled but it's pretty good =D

unknow_92 · 02/27/06, 02:53 AM

i like its good
update soon

KH_Fan_4_eva · 02/27/06, 05:09 PM

ok,the good thing is that I have like 7 chapters of this story in a book

Rose · 02/27/06, 07:21 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by KH_Fan_4_eva

ok,the good thing is that I have like 7 chapters of this story in a book

I like your fan fic, KH_Fan_4_eva! Keep it coming!

KH_Fan_4_eva · 02/27/06, 07:43 PM

Sorry if my fanfic 'ent good,seeing as its my first(and sorry about the spelling!)

Leave me alone!

As Kairi walked down the hallway with Tidus,Wakka and Selphie,all the girls would wisper about her.

It was still her first day of school but Toby had blabbed to the WHOLE school that she was with Sora.Even the Teachers knew,in every class a teacher would ask her"what was Sora like?"and the whole calss would look at her,It was starting to get on her nerves.

As she was walking Toby appeared"hey kiar-""Kairi"she corrected"oh well,no one cares"he said"I care"she wispered to herself.

"Right Kairi I worked somthing out"he said with a smile"I thought I saw smoke!"Kairi said with a smile.

"No need to be mean"he said"well anyway,You no Sora has left and everything,and there is no chance of him coming back cuz its been a year?Well that means you can go out with me!"he said with a smile

"Thats where your wrong"said a voise,everybody turned around to see who was talking,but Kairi was the fastest,as she turned around in the corner of her her eye she saw a boy with light brown spiky hair and Ocean blue eyes that you could get lost in."Sora......"She said with a smile.

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Please tell me if you liked it or not!

Taokitty · 02/27/06, 08:19 PM

Me: Stupid.. nosy... students.. and the teacher should know better >.> LOL
Gem: Awsome update!
Nanala: Ori? Toby is a jerk!O_o
Thea:...

Rose · 02/27/06, 08:32 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by TaokityxTheaxGem

Me: Stupid.. nosy... students.. and the teacher should know better >.> LOL
Gem: Awsome update!
Nanala: Ori? Toby is a jerk!O_o
Thea:...

Um, what on EARTH is that all about? Anyway, yay! Sora has returned! Woohoo! Screw Toby.

Taokitty · 02/27/06, 08:51 PM

Me: I was complimenting about the teachers in the chapter, saying how annoying and snoopy they are! lol(Don't ask why I almost always have,"laugh out loud..")

unknow_92 · 02/27/06, 11:47 PM

yay !! the second chapter was a great one ( stupid toby )

update soon plzz

Anonymous · 02/28/06, 01:10 AM

Honestly, this is really werid...

How does Toby know all this? Did she opnely release that Riku went into darkness and that Sora was the keyblade master?
And why would the teachers care? THey've never heard of her, its her first day there...
And I am not particularly fond of your writing style, but that's just me

(THis isn't meant to be hurtful, just my opinion)

02/25/06, 11:22 AM	#1
KH_Fan_4_eva Organization Member Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 426 Rep Power: 4	You Promised...... This my first ever fanfic so dont be too mean,and plz commant! Chapter 1:Remembering A girl around 15 with crimson hair was sitting on the Popou tree at Destiny Island.Her name was Kairi,she looked sad,she always looked sad now adays...Since Sora and Riku had left.She looked up too see the sun set,Sora had always said the sunset on Destiny Island was like dropping red,yellow and Orange paint onto the sun.Thinking about this made her more sad.It had been a year since Sora,Kairi and Riku were at Kingdom Hearts,but Kairi could discribe it as if it was yesterday. Every now and then Selphie,Tidus and Wakka would try and cheer her up but every time Tidus or Wakka would say somthing about Riku or Sora and then they would get a slap around the face from Selphie.Kairi had changed alot over the year,her feelings for Sora were the same but her looks were differnt,her crimson hair was now shoulder lengh,and she now wore a pink sleeveless hoody but the hood was black and a white top under it,she also wore a pink mini skirt,her shoes were the same but they were pink. Every night she would walk to the beach and wait and see if Sora would return to her,but every night when he didnt she would wisper to the air as if sending a message to him"You Promised" XxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxX Tell me If you like it or not Last edited by KH_Fan_4_eva; 02/26/06 at 10:01 AM.

02/25/06, 04:18 PM	#2
KH_Fan_4_eva Organization Member Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 426 Rep Power: 4	Re: You Promised...... Seeing as no one is talking I will do another Chapter! Chapter 2:School Boys Kairi was starting her first day of school today,she may of been 15 but Kairi's,Sora's and Riku's parents agreed that they wouldnt let there children go to school.But Kairi's parents changed there minds about that when Riku and Sora had left,they thought that Kairi would meet other kids if she went to school,but Kairi didnt agree with that.The only people she would have as friends at school were Selphie,Wakka and Tidus,the Uniform looked good on Kairi,it was a white top with a blue and white tie,then a blue and white checked mini skirt. As she walked down the road to school boys would whistle and stare at her,as she walked into school with Tidus,Wakka and Selphie a boy apeared infront of her,he had black spiky hair and dark brown eyes,he was cute but nothing compeared to Sora.He stuck out his hand and said "Hi!Im Toby!"Kairi smiled at him and replied"Im Kairi".they chatted for a while and Kairi found out he was the most populer boy in school,then he asked her somthing she wished no one but Sora would say to her."Do you want to be my Girlfriend?" Kairi looked at him in discust"NO WAY!"she yelled at him,"why not?!"said Toby shocked.Kairi was speackless for a while then she said"Because im already with somone""Well whats his name so me and my mates can beat him up and then you can be me!"he said"well I dont think thats posible"said Kairi quietly"AND WHY NOT?!"he yelled in her face."Because Im with a guy named Sora"she said. Toby couldnt say anything for a while then he said"So your the Kairi who is in love with Sora the Keyblade master and best friends with Riku,the boy who went into darkness?"Kairi nodded,this was going rough day for her she knew it. XxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXx XxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxX Hoped you liked it!Sorry if there a bit short!PLZ PLZ PLZ commant! Last edited by KH_Fan_4_eva; 02/25/06 at 07:26 PM.

02/26/06, 01:27 PM	#3
AngelofAdvent Start the Machine Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Down on Fascination Street Age: 15 Posts: 1,588 Rep Power: 5	Re: You Promised...... I pretty good. It explains what Kairi is doing while Riku and Sora are away

02/26/06, 01:54 PM	#4
KH_Fan_4_eva Organization Member Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 426 Rep Power: 4	Re: You Promised...... Angles come out and start singingYES!Somone Finally came!!! Last edited by KH_Fan_4_eva; 02/26/06 at 02:29 PM.

02/27/06, 12:58 AM	#5
Taokitty A Chagrined Fool. Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: People's Fragile Dreams, Relinquished from Anixiety Age: 15 Posts: 1,495 Rep Power: 5	Re: You Promised...... Me: Lol! I like the story so far! Gem: But... how do they know?!O_o Nanala: Who knows?=^_^= Thea:....

02/27/06, 01:13 AM	#6
King_Mickey1000 I taste like chicken Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: Somewhere up high...getting ready to snipe your ass Posts: 1,148 Rep Power: 5	Re: You Promised...... A few words mispelled but it's pretty good =D

02/27/06, 02:53 AM	#7
unknow_92 Ruler of Darkness Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: U.S and mexico Age: 16 Posts: 184 Rep Power: 0	Re: You Promised...... i like its good update soon

02/27/06, 05:09 PM	#8
KH_Fan_4_eva Organization Member Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 426 Rep Power: 4	Re: You Promised...... ok,the good thing is that I have like 7 chapters of this story in a book

02/27/06, 07:43 PM	#10
KH_Fan_4_eva Organization Member Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 426 Rep Power: 4	Re: You Promised...... Sorry if my fanfic 'ent good,seeing as its my first(and sorry about the spelling!) Leave me alone! As Kairi walked down the hallway with Tidus,Wakka and Selphie,all the girls would wisper about her. It was still her first day of school but Toby had blabbed to the WHOLE school that she was with Sora.Even the Teachers knew,in every class a teacher would ask her"what was Sora like?"and the whole calss would look at her,It was starting to get on her nerves. As she was walking Toby appeared"hey kiar-""Kairi"she corrected"oh well,no one cares"he said"I care"she wispered to herself. "Right Kairi I worked somthing out"he said with a smile"I thought I saw smoke!"Kairi said with a smile. "No need to be mean"he said"well anyway,You no Sora has left and everything,and there is no chance of him coming back cuz its been a year?Well that means you can go out with me!"he said with a smile "Thats where your wrong"said a voise,everybody turned around to see who was talking,but Kairi was the fastest,as she turned around in the corner of her her eye she saw a boy with light brown spiky hair and Ocean blue eyes that you could get lost in."Sora......"She said with a smile. XxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxX Please tell me if you liked it or not!

02/27/06, 08:19 PM	#11
Taokitty A Chagrined Fool. Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: People's Fragile Dreams, Relinquished from Anixiety Age: 15 Posts: 1,495 Rep Power: 5	Re: You Promised...... Me: Stupid.. nosy... students.. and the teacher should know better >.> LOL Gem: Awsome update! Nanala: Ori? Toby is a jerk!O_o Thea:...

02/27/06, 08:51 PM	#13
Taokitty A Chagrined Fool. Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: People's Fragile Dreams, Relinquished from Anixiety Age: 15 Posts: 1,495 Rep Power: 5	Re: You Promised...... Me: I was complimenting about the teachers in the chapter, saying how annoying and snoopy they are! lol(Don't ask why I almost always have,"laugh out loud..")

02/27/06, 11:47 PM	#14
unknow_92 Ruler of Darkness Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: U.S and mexico Age: 16 Posts: 184 Rep Power: 0	Re: You Promised...... yay !! the second chapter was a great one ( stupid toby ) update soon plzz

02/28/06, 01:10 AM	#15
Anonymous The Unknowing Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Amongst others Age: 16 Posts: 1,554 Rep Power: 5	Re: You Promised...... Honestly, this is really werid... How does Toby know all this? Did she opnely release that Riku went into darkness and that Sora was the keyblade master? And why would the teachers care? THey've never heard of her, its her first day there... And I am not particularly fond of your writing style, but that's just me (THis isn't meant to be hurtful, just my opinion)

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