FFVII: Shadows - Page 2

**yado** · 12/23/05, 11:59 PM

It alright. I figured you had just given up.

inferno232 · 12/27/05, 08:29 AM

Ok, I need Ideas, and my main character kinda sucks, so I am asking for detailed character descriptions for ideas. I just want a few, and when I say I have enough, I'd appreciate it if you wouldn't post more. I might ask for stuff like this every now and then, but not often. Thanks!

Winged Mirage · 01/02/06, 08:51 PM

So, you need some OC ideas, basically? Do you have the personality down, or do you need that as well? PM me and specify, please. I'll PM you back whatever you need.

inferno232 · 01/05/06, 03:16 AM

Never mind, If you feel like still contributing a Character, go ahead, but I might have these two Chapters down! If I mistyped anything, please inform me asap, and if something sucks, go ahead and tell me in your own words. Good critics make good writers! (most of the time) Get ready, Here comes a chapter...

Chapter 3: Awake!

Colinare Bravesoul awoke in a lush, green forest, lost and confused.

“Where am I?” he asked himself out loud.

“You’re here, but you’re not.”

Colinare, who preferred to be called Col, jumped, startled. He had not expected an answer. He stood up and brushed off his clothes, which consisted of old denim jeans and a red T-shirt, and looked around to see who had replied. His deep brown eyes scanned the trees and the bushes, looking for movement.

“It is useless to look for me,” the voice laughed, “I’m hidden from human eyes.”

He ran his hand through his dark brown hair and took in his surroundings. The forest consisted mainly of very tall redwoods no thicker than a telephone post, and he recognized the bushes to be blackberry. The berries appeared to be ripe and juicy, and his hungry stomach growled. ‘Now is not the time for snacks,’ he thought, ‘I must find out who, or what, is out there…’

“I don’t think you’d like those anyway,” Said the voice, “They’re awfully bitter.”

Col was frightened. This creature or person, whatever it was, could read his mind! It could hear his thoughts!

“Now, now don’t be scared. After all, if I wished to hurt you, I would’ve done so long ago. No, I brought you here to warn you of a great approaching peril…”

“What is your name? What are you? And more importantly, where am I?” Col shouted at the top of his lungs.

“My, my… Full of questions, aren’t we? Well, I can answer two of your inquiries.
My name? Turentane. What am I? I guess you could say that I’m a guardian angel of sorts. But as for our location? It doesn’t matter. We’re just in the middle of some random forest.”

“You said something about a warning… What did you mean?”

Col heard a sigh. “Don’t forget what God has blessed you with, kid. It could be taken away at any minute… But when things seem hopeless, don’t cease in your efforts! Remember this, heroes never quit! I won’t tell you exactly what will happen, but it will tear you life apart.” Col noticed the sky start to darken, and the trees began to cast threatening shadows that seemed as if they would reach out and grab him. Yet still the voice of Turentane continued, booming like thunder, “A great evil has been released into the world, an evil that has threatened all life before! You among others will fight it, but other enemies will arise as well! Sacrifices will be made! Friends will be made and friends will be reunited, but some will betray you as well as well…”

The forest started to spin and Col’s vision become blurry. He fell to his knees and tried to talk but found himself unable. The lasts words he heard before he hit the hard, wet ground were Turentane’s.

“But remember,” the words echoed as everything turned to black,
“You will never be alone…”

Beep- beep-beep-beep! Beep- beep- be-
Col slammed his fist on the top of the alarm clock, shutting off the annoying high-pitched beeping. He looked at the time. 9:00, which meant he had four hours to get ready. Getting up with a yawn and walking across his cluttered room, which his dad was always trying to get him to clean, he started towards the shower.

As he showered he reflected on the dream. It seemed so… real. And he could remember everything so clearly. Whenever he dreamed he usually had parts he couldn’t remember, and the parts he could seemed incredibly fuzzy and surreal. But this…

Nah, he was just being silly. Dreams are dreams, he reminded himself. Besides, he had other things to worry about. After brushing his shaggy hair he got out his best jeans and dress shirt. As he put them on he began to go over the plan one last time.

His mission was to get to the chapel, where one of the greatest heroes of his time was getting married. His name was Cloud Strife, and he had saved the world. He was everything Col wanted to be. A strong warrior, a hero, and an all-around badass. He was respected by everyone in Nibelheim and super famous. Just to be able to see the wedding in person would make Col the coolest kid in town! He would take a secret route through some caves (that only he knew about), sneak in through the roof via secret trapdoor (which, once again, only he knew about), position himself on the rafters, snap a picture, and then get the heck out of there.

After putting on a brown leather jacket over his dress shirt so it wouldn’t get dirty, Col opened his closet and took out his sword. He had found the sword in the caves, collecting rust. It had a plain metal sheath, but the sword itself was amazing. The handle, which Col had wrapped in black leather, was nothing special, but the rest of the hilt was very decorative. Inset in the top of the hilt near the blade was a ruby that was about the size of a nickel, and, once shined, was very beautiful. The actual blade of the sword was two and a half feet long, seemed to shine with a faint light, and had a cross engraved into it. The sword handled very well, but he never had the chance to use it in self defense yet.

Strapping the sheathed sword to his back, Col grabbed a pair of black leather gloves off his dresser and departed. He didn’t stop to eat breakfast, but he wasn’t hungry anyway.

He had just stepped out the door and started down the road when someone stopped him.

“Hey Col!”

Col turned around to see Seth Canintide.

Seth was one of the smartest, luckiest, most handsome boys in the town, and he wasn’t afraid to show it. Once two kids went into ShinRa mansion on a dare, and Seth went in and saved them both without breaking a sweat. Last month he saved a group of girls from a pack of vicious Nibel Wolves. He had a three foot long sword that was once owned by a legendary knight. He certainly lived up to the reputation.

As for looks, in battle he wore iron plate armor, but he usually wore a long sleeved black shirt with blue jeans, and black boots. His ever present sword hung at his side. Brushing his black hair out of his Blue-green eyes, Seth walked up to Col.

“We’re not going to try and sneak into the wedding are we?” He asked “Because you might as well give up. Police have any and all paths barricaded, so there’s no way in.”

Col hated the arrogance in Seth’s voice. “I didn’t know taking a morning walk is suddenly illegal.”

“I just thought I’d inform you so I wouldn’t have to be the hero and save your dumb ass from a bunch of security guards.” Seth said with a laugh.

“You wouldn’t need to, because I can hold my own!”

“With what, that hunk of junk?” Seth said, gesturing towards Col’s sword, “you’d be dead in less than a minute!” Seth then walked away, laughing.

“Oh yeah?” Col shouted after him, “Well at least I’m not an arrogant jerk! That’s going to get you killed someday!”

“Well we’re in a bad mood today, aren’t we?”

Col turned around quickly to find a brown-eyed girl with long, dark brown hair smiling at him.

“Well… I-I can’t stand that guy! He ticks me off!” Col said, stuttering a little. He found it hard to talk around Kayla.

Kayla was the same age as Col, and she was very beautiful. At the moment she was wearing a pink shirt that had ‘The answer is No.” printed on it (She happened to be wearing this shirt one time when Col was going to ask her out.)and a pair of blue jeans. Col had fallen in love with her the first time he saw her. If only she felt the same way…

The girl rolled her eyes and started to walk away. “He’s not that bad Col, you’ve just got to get to know him better.”

As he watched Kayla walk away, Col muttered under his breath, “Maybe you don’t know him as well as you think you do.” It wasn’t surprising that she thought so much of him, after all, she was one of the girls involved in the Nibel Wolf incident…

inferno232 · 01/05/06, 03:19 AM

Here Comes another, hope you like it!

Chapter 4: The Chaos Begins…

Phil, one the security guards, was getting pretty bored. He thought that guarding this wedding was going to be exciting, yet the only disturbance they had heard had turned out to be a squirrel in the bushes.

He started to doze of when he heard a rustle in the bushes. He and his partner exchanged looks. They started to walk towards the bushes when…

The squirrel ran out of the brush and scurried away.

With a severe sense of disappointment, Phil and his friend walked back to their positions.
Talk about a let down…

In the bushes, however…

Col lied as still and as quietly as he could. He didn’t see that stupid squirrel until he was a foot away.

When he was sure the coast was clear, he ran out and began to climb the trellis that was on one side of the church to get to the roof. This was all too easy…

Meanwhile, at the wedding…

Cloud stared lovingly into Tifa’s eyes as the priest began the ceremony. He couldn’t believe that this day had finally come! It had taken him three years to get over Aeris’s death and pop the question, but he had finally done it! His thoughts started to return to the memories of the flower girl, but he stopped himself. He wouldn’t let anything ruin this day! Nothing…

Vincent watched the wedding from the back of the church, but there was something he couldn’t quite place…

Where was Red XIII?

Up in the rafters, Col got his camera ready to snap a picture of the kiss. They weren’t even to the “I do”s yet, but he wanted to be prepared.

Col looked down at the other AVALANCHE members in awe. All of his favorite heroes were sitting right beneath him. It was a dream come true! But someone was missing…

“Excuse me,” A gruff voice said, “But I believe this wedding was invitation only.”

Col looked over his shoulder and he suddenly knew who he couldn’t find.

Sitting behind him was the legendary great red cat himself, Red XIII.

Outside the church…

Phil opened a beer and leaned back in his chair. He had just made a deal with his partner. He would keep watch for ten minutes, and then his friend would keep watch for ten minutes and so on. It was the perfect plan…

Phil had only had his eyes closed for a few seconds when he heard footsteps.

“State your name and business.”

No answer.

“I said state your name and business!” Phil said angrily.

Still no answer.

“Listen,” Said Phil, standing up and opening his eyes, “I Don’t have all day, SO STA-” He stopped abruptly once he saw who stood before him.

“My name,” began the white-haired, green-eyed man, “is Sephiroth. My business? The death of scum like you.”

At the wedding…

Col didn’t know what to do. Red had already demanded that he put the camera down and told him that as soon as the wedding was over that he would be taken back to his house and his parents would be informed of everything. Seth was going to have a field day with this…

The priest had just gotten to the “I do”s when a blood-curdling scream came from outside. Everybody looked towards the door in confusion.

“What the he-“ Started Cid, but he was cut off by an explosion as the entrance of the chapel burst apart in a blast of rubble and dust. Col and RedXIII were thrown off the rafters from the force of the explosion. Red, true to the nature of all cats, landed on his feet, while Col, true to the nature of most humans, landed flat on his back.

Col coughed and sat up. Looking through the clearing haze of dust, Col saw the attacker.

He was dressed from head-to-toe in black, black boots, black trench coat, black gloves, the works. He had long ghost-white hair and pale skin, but what stood out most was his eyes. His glowing green eyes… They went perfectly with the murderous look on his face.

He looked straight at Cloud, and with no emotion at all said, “Long time, no see, Cloud.”

The spikey- haired blonde returned the stare, and with hate filling his voice uttered one word.

“Sephiroth.”

**yado** · 01/05/06, 03:31 AM

4 things.
1. No double posting
2.you spelt hand wrong. chapter 3 paragraph 6
3.Who is val? Chapter 3 paragragh 13
4.Those where really good. I hate how mysterious vincent always has to be.

inferno232 · 01/05/06, 04:37 PM

Sorry... Val was my first draft of my main character... Then I changed his name to Col. He ran his had through his hair? Thanks for tellling me, I want to get all the mistakes out pronto. I wish I hadn't made the plot move so fast... but my head was going 200 mph.
Glad you liked it... Wish more people would read though... Thanks for your comments!

Winged Mirage · 01/10/06, 04:51 AM

Heh, of course Sephiroth knows just where the wedding is....XD

Your characters look interesting. I wonder what role they get to play in this big mess...

Take your time. If you rush the story too much, it won't turn out right.

Otherwisr, looking good!

12/23/05, 11:59 PM	#16
yado I taste delicious Join Date: Mar 2005 Age: 16 Posts: 3,204 Rep Power: 7	Re: FFVII: Shadows It alright. I figured you had just given up.

12/27/05, 08:29 AM	#17
inferno232 Keyblade Novice Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In the happy place of my mind known as La-La Land. Age: 17 Posts: 67 Rep Power: 0	Re: FFVII: Shadows Ok, I need Ideas, and my main character kinda sucks, so I am asking for detailed character descriptions for ideas. I just want a few, and when I say I have enough, I'd appreciate it if you wouldn't post more. I might ask for stuff like this every now and then, but not often. Thanks!

01/02/06, 08:51 PM	#18
Winged Mirage WHY?! Join Date: Mar 2005 Location: Oh, just hanging out with Demy - HEY GET BACK HERE! Age: 20 Posts: 1,564 Rep Power: 0	Re: FFVII: Shadows So, you need some OC ideas, basically? Do you have the personality down, or do you need that as well? PM me and specify, please. I'll PM you back whatever you need.

01/05/06, 03:16 AM	#19
inferno232 Keyblade Novice Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In the happy place of my mind known as La-La Land. Age: 17 Posts: 67 Rep Power: 0	Re: FFVII: Shadows Never mind, If you feel like still contributing a Character, go ahead, but I might have these two Chapters down! If I mistyped anything, please inform me asap, and if something sucks, go ahead and tell me in your own words. Good critics make good writers! (most of the time) Get ready, Here comes a chapter... Chapter 3: Awake! Colinare Bravesoul awoke in a lush, green forest, lost and confused. “Where am I?” he asked himself out loud. “You’re here, but you’re not.” Colinare, who preferred to be called Col, jumped, startled. He had not expected an answer. He stood up and brushed off his clothes, which consisted of old denim jeans and a red T-shirt, and looked around to see who had replied. His deep brown eyes scanned the trees and the bushes, looking for movement. “It is useless to look for me,” the voice laughed, “I’m hidden from human eyes.” He ran his hand through his dark brown hair and took in his surroundings. The forest consisted mainly of very tall redwoods no thicker than a telephone post, and he recognized the bushes to be blackberry. The berries appeared to be ripe and juicy, and his hungry stomach growled. ‘Now is not the time for snacks,’ he thought, ‘I must find out who, or what, is out there…’ “I don’t think you’d like those anyway,” Said the voice, “They’re awfully bitter.” Col was frightened. This creature or person, whatever it was, could read his mind! It could hear his thoughts! “Now, now don’t be scared. After all, if I wished to hurt you, I would’ve done so long ago. No, I brought you here to warn you of a great approaching peril…” “What is your name? What are you? And more importantly, where am I?” Col shouted at the top of his lungs. “My, my… Full of questions, aren’t we? Well, I can answer two of your inquiries. My name? Turentane. What am I? I guess you could say that I’m a guardian angel of sorts. But as for our location? It doesn’t matter. We’re just in the middle of some random forest.” “You said something about a warning… What did you mean?” Col heard a sigh. “Don’t forget what God has blessed you with, kid. It could be taken away at any minute… But when things seem hopeless, don’t cease in your efforts! Remember this, heroes never quit! I won’t tell you exactly what will happen, but it will tear you life apart.” Col noticed the sky start to darken, and the trees began to cast threatening shadows that seemed as if they would reach out and grab him. Yet still the voice of Turentane continued, booming like thunder, “A great evil has been released into the world, an evil that has threatened all life before! You among others will fight it, but other enemies will arise as well! Sacrifices will be made! Friends will be made and friends will be reunited, but some will betray you as well as well…” The forest started to spin and Col’s vision become blurry. He fell to his knees and tried to talk but found himself unable. The lasts words he heard before he hit the hard, wet ground were Turentane’s. “But remember,” the words echoed as everything turned to black, “You will never be alone…” Beep- beep-beep-beep! Beep- beep- be- Col slammed his fist on the top of the alarm clock, shutting off the annoying high-pitched beeping. He looked at the time. 9:00, which meant he had four hours to get ready. Getting up with a yawn and walking across his cluttered room, which his dad was always trying to get him to clean, he started towards the shower. As he showered he reflected on the dream. It seemed so… real. And he could remember everything so clearly. Whenever he dreamed he usually had parts he couldn’t remember, and the parts he could seemed incredibly fuzzy and surreal. But this… Nah, he was just being silly. Dreams are dreams, he reminded himself. Besides, he had other things to worry about. After brushing his shaggy hair he got out his best jeans and dress shirt. As he put them on he began to go over the plan one last time. His mission was to get to the chapel, where one of the greatest heroes of his time was getting married. His name was Cloud Strife, and he had saved the world. He was everything Col wanted to be. A strong warrior, a hero, and an all-around badass. He was respected by everyone in Nibelheim and super famous. Just to be able to see the wedding in person would make Col the coolest kid in town! He would take a secret route through some caves (that only he knew about), sneak in through the roof via secret trapdoor (which, once again, only he knew about), position himself on the rafters, snap a picture, and then get the heck out of there. After putting on a brown leather jacket over his dress shirt so it wouldn’t get dirty, Col opened his closet and took out his sword. He had found the sword in the caves, collecting rust. It had a plain metal sheath, but the sword itself was amazing. The handle, which Col had wrapped in black leather, was nothing special, but the rest of the hilt was very decorative. Inset in the top of the hilt near the blade was a ruby that was about the size of a nickel, and, once shined, was very beautiful. The actual blade of the sword was two and a half feet long, seemed to shine with a faint light, and had a cross engraved into it. The sword handled very well, but he never had the chance to use it in self defense yet. Strapping the sheathed sword to his back, Col grabbed a pair of black leather gloves off his dresser and departed. He didn’t stop to eat breakfast, but he wasn’t hungry anyway. He had just stepped out the door and started down the road when someone stopped him. “Hey Col!” Col turned around to see Seth Canintide. Seth was one of the smartest, luckiest, most handsome boys in the town, and he wasn’t afraid to show it. Once two kids went into ShinRa mansion on a dare, and Seth went in and saved them both without breaking a sweat. Last month he saved a group of girls from a pack of vicious Nibel Wolves. He had a three foot long sword that was once owned by a legendary knight. He certainly lived up to the reputation. As for looks, in battle he wore iron plate armor, but he usually wore a long sleeved black shirt with blue jeans, and black boots. His ever present sword hung at his side. Brushing his black hair out of his Blue-green eyes, Seth walked up to Col. “We’re not going to try and sneak into the wedding are we?” He asked “Because you might as well give up. Police have any and all paths barricaded, so there’s no way in.” Col hated the arrogance in Seth’s voice. “I didn’t know taking a morning walk is suddenly illegal.” “I just thought I’d inform you so I wouldn’t have to be the hero and save your dumb ass from a bunch of security guards.” Seth said with a laugh. “You wouldn’t need to, because I can hold my own!” “With what, that hunk of junk?” Seth said, gesturing towards Col’s sword, “you’d be dead in less than a minute!” Seth then walked away, laughing. “Oh yeah?” Col shouted after him, “Well at least I’m not an arrogant jerk! That’s going to get you killed someday!” “Well we’re in a bad mood today, aren’t we?” Col turned around quickly to find a brown-eyed girl with long, dark brown hair smiling at him. “Well… I-I can’t stand that guy! He ticks me off!” Col said, stuttering a little. He found it hard to talk around Kayla. Kayla was the same age as Col, and she was very beautiful. At the moment she was wearing a pink shirt that had ‘The answer is No.” printed on it (She happened to be wearing this shirt one time when Col was going to ask her out.)and a pair of blue jeans. Col had fallen in love with her the first time he saw her. If only she felt the same way… The girl rolled her eyes and started to walk away. “He’s not that bad Col, you’ve just got to get to know him better.” As he watched Kayla walk away, Col muttered under his breath, “Maybe you don’t know him as well as you think you do.” It wasn’t surprising that she thought so much of him, after all, she was one of the girls involved in the Nibel Wolf incident… Last edited by inferno232; 01/05/06 at 04:31 PM.

01/05/06, 03:19 AM	#20
inferno232 Keyblade Novice Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In the happy place of my mind known as La-La Land. Age: 17 Posts: 67 Rep Power: 0	Re: FFVII: Shadows Here Comes another, hope you like it! Chapter 4: The Chaos Begins… Phil, one the security guards, was getting pretty bored. He thought that guarding this wedding was going to be exciting, yet the only disturbance they had heard had turned out to be a squirrel in the bushes. He started to doze of when he heard a rustle in the bushes. He and his partner exchanged looks. They started to walk towards the bushes when… The squirrel ran out of the brush and scurried away. With a severe sense of disappointment, Phil and his friend walked back to their positions. Talk about a let down… In the bushes, however… Col lied as still and as quietly as he could. He didn’t see that stupid squirrel until he was a foot away. When he was sure the coast was clear, he ran out and began to climb the trellis that was on one side of the church to get to the roof. This was all too easy… Meanwhile, at the wedding… Cloud stared lovingly into Tifa’s eyes as the priest began the ceremony. He couldn’t believe that this day had finally come! It had taken him three years to get over Aeris’s death and pop the question, but he had finally done it! His thoughts started to return to the memories of the flower girl, but he stopped himself. He wouldn’t let anything ruin this day! Nothing… Vincent watched the wedding from the back of the church, but there was something he couldn’t quite place… Where was Red XIII? Up in the rafters, Col got his camera ready to snap a picture of the kiss. They weren’t even to the “I do”s yet, but he wanted to be prepared. Col looked down at the other AVALANCHE members in awe. All of his favorite heroes were sitting right beneath him. It was a dream come true! But someone was missing… “Excuse me,” A gruff voice said, “But I believe this wedding was invitation only.” Col looked over his shoulder and he suddenly knew who he couldn’t find. Sitting behind him was the legendary great red cat himself, Red XIII. Outside the church… Phil opened a beer and leaned back in his chair. He had just made a deal with his partner. He would keep watch for ten minutes, and then his friend would keep watch for ten minutes and so on. It was the perfect plan… Phil had only had his eyes closed for a few seconds when he heard footsteps. “State your name and business.” No answer. “I said state your name and business!” Phil said angrily. Still no answer. “Listen,” Said Phil, standing up and opening his eyes, “I Don’t have all day, SO STA-” He stopped abruptly once he saw who stood before him. “My name,” began the white-haired, green-eyed man, “is Sephiroth. My business? The death of scum like you.” At the wedding… Col didn’t know what to do. Red had already demanded that he put the camera down and told him that as soon as the wedding was over that he would be taken back to his house and his parents would be informed of everything. Seth was going to have a field day with this… The priest had just gotten to the “I do”s when a blood-curdling scream came from outside. Everybody looked towards the door in confusion. “What the he-“ Started Cid, but he was cut off by an explosion as the entrance of the chapel burst apart in a blast of rubble and dust. Col and RedXIII were thrown off the rafters from the force of the explosion. Red, true to the nature of all cats, landed on his feet, while Col, true to the nature of most humans, landed flat on his back. Col coughed and sat up. Looking through the clearing haze of dust, Col saw the attacker. He was dressed from head-to-toe in black, black boots, black trench coat, black gloves, the works. He had long ghost-white hair and pale skin, but what stood out most was his eyes. His glowing green eyes… They went perfectly with the murderous look on his face. He looked straight at Cloud, and with no emotion at all said, “Long time, no see, Cloud.” The spikey- haired blonde returned the stare, and with hate filling his voice uttered one word. “Sephiroth.”

01/05/06, 03:31 AM	#21
yado I taste delicious Join Date: Mar 2005 Age: 16 Posts: 3,204 Rep Power: 7	Re: FFVII: Shadows 4 things. 1. No double posting 2.you spelt hand wrong. chapter 3 paragraph 6 3.Who is val? Chapter 3 paragragh 13 4.Those where really good. I hate how mysterious vincent always has to be.

01/05/06, 04:37 PM	#22
inferno232 Keyblade Novice Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: In the happy place of my mind known as La-La Land. Age: 17 Posts: 67 Rep Power: 0	Re: FFVII: Shadows Sorry... Val was my first draft of my main character... Then I changed his name to Col. He ran his had through his hair? Thanks for tellling me, I want to get all the mistakes out pronto. I wish I hadn't made the plot move so fast... but my head was going 200 mph. Glad you liked it... Wish more people would read though... Thanks for your comments!

01/10/06, 04:51 AM	#23
Winged Mirage WHY?! Join Date: Mar 2005 Location: Oh, just hanging out with Demy - HEY GET BACK HERE! Age: 20 Posts: 1,564 Rep Power: 0	Re: FFVII: Shadows Heh, of course Sephiroth knows just where the wedding is....XD Your characters look interesting. I wonder what role they get to play in this big mess... Take your time. If you rush the story too much, it won't turn out right. Otherwisr, looking good!

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