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Old April 12th, 2006, 04:57 PM   #31
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I am trying to be one of those writers who don't force people to read. I guess it's my fault=P I am too good a person to advertise. I don't know why but I don't like advertising<<
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Old April 12th, 2006, 06:55 PM   #32
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Cheers, no need to pressure the girl
the story is doingfine as is
its great ^^
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Old April 13th, 2006, 02:42 AM   #33
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but its not a bad idea to expand your story, post it on other sites

im sure others will like it just as much ^^

btw, i just read one of the chapters again.
just a tip, for the fight with the sea monster, you used the word tentacle several times in succession, in the same paragraph.
try using pronouns, or synonyms to make the story have a more smooth flow to it. thesaurus.com is a good site if u need synonyms.
don't worry, it's a mistake everyone makes, I often find myself having to edit small details that I don't see the first time I read through my story. (example: I recently checked my fan fic, I used Axel's name like 5 times in only like 3 sentences XD )
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Old April 13th, 2006, 02:43 AM   #34
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do'h double post
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Old April 13th, 2006, 05:36 AM   #35
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Wow this is nice. email me the next part of it:)
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Old April 16th, 2006, 04:03 AM   #36
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Wow Ulti. Seriously suspensful. I was like "WTF Surge is going to die? Nuuuu!!!"

Anyways, sorry about the lateness of commenting. Busy Busy, ya know? Anyways, another good set of chapters. It's entertaining and a good read. My little brother read the whole thing with me just now and he wants you to hurry up and get some new chapters up as do I =D. So I say again, great chapter and keep em coming. I promise I'll never be this late to comment again xD
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Old April 16th, 2006, 06:22 AM   #37
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yay my fav fan returns=D Dont worry. Craid is gonna be right back once I get tired of playing Proud mode on KH2=P
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Old April 21st, 2006, 06:39 AM   #38
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Say hello to your new fan, Shady. Very interesting characters, and I cheated by skimming ahead, so I discovered your solid action presentation. I didn't get to read thoroughly, but I will when I get around to doing it. I like that it seems modern, with a few medievil thrown in. And you seem like a subtle type of writer, and those type alway make for my favorite types of fiction. So keep up the good work. It wouldn't hurt to advertize a little. But if you don't want to, I can understand that as well. I don't like to force people to read either.....but its a necessary evil XD
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Old April 22nd, 2006, 06:48 PM   #39
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More or less..My fic is a future type throwing in medievil cameos. Going into the future while preserving the past. I am glad you liked it. And once I learn how to advertise without a swell head, I'll do it.=)
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Old May 5th, 2006, 05:53 AM   #40
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nice fic you did their...**waiting for chapter 7*
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Old May 6th, 2006, 07:24 PM   #41
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True awesomeness...

There I complemented you, NOW GIVE US AN UPDATE SHARPISH!! You know, this would be great as a manga...

Keep it up, UK!
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