Reply With QuoteIt has a good storyline so far. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Make Your Own Kind of Music
“Make your own kind of Music”
“Well... what do you think?” Riku blinked and stared out at the room. Kelsie flopped down on her large bed and hugged one of the large stuffed animals there. The ceiling slanted since she was right beneath the edge of the attic, and the walls were entirely covered with scores and posters for plays.
“It’s… Well, it’s you.” He took a large chair in the corner of the room. Kelsie smiled at him from under her white paperboy hat, her sea green eyes glinting with happiness. “Why did you bring me up here anyway?” Riku pushed a strand of his long silver hair out of his clear blue eyes.. He had grown to like the petite half Russian composer since they first meet about a week ago. She was still really shy though, Riku was surprised she had invited him to her house. Kairi was sleeping there, but still…
“I just wanted to show you this piece of music.” She blushed and ran over to the CD case next to him, trying to avoid Riku’s eyes. She fiddled and pulled out a CD. “I… well, I kind of thought of you when I listened to this song recently. You really dance to your own beat.” She blushed again, though she tried to hide it with her shoulder.
“I… I don’t dance.” Sora would never let him live that party down.
“It’s not like that. Youseeeit’sjustaphrase-“
“Kelsie, I can’t understand you when you talk like that, slow down.” Riku cautioned. She took a breath, then continued.
“It’s just a phrase. You don’t really listen to what people think of you, do you.” Kelsie walked over to the CD player, which was right next to Riku. He glanced up at her face, so sincere under that brunette hair.
“Not really, but it’s worked against me.” A lot She finally pressed play.
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“Time to get up!” Sora was being very cheerful. Riku turned over, and pulled the blanket over his face.
“NO.”
“Riku, it’s your turn to push the button.” Sora was still being cheerful. Riku reached out, grabbed their one pillow, hit Sora with it, and pulled it over his head.
“I want to sleep….” He groaned. “What time is it?”
“It appears to be three AM.” This voice was a lot deeper then Sora’s and had a slight smoker’s edge to it. Locke. “And it’s your turn at the hatch.” Riku started to move slowly. Locke, unfortunately, could make just about anyone do anything. Maybe because he was bald…
“You know I hate getting up at 3 AM…” Riku murmured again, trying to get up now. As he reached up, he grabbed Sora’s head and forced it into the sand. As Sora spluttered, Riku sat up and noticed not only the moonlight and firelight glinting off of Locke’s bald pate, but the quiet gleam of Charlie’s guitar. “Charlie’s with me today?” he yawned. Sora spat sand out of his mouth as Locke nodded. With a sigh, Riku crawled out of the tent and gazed at the moonlight waters for just a second.
“Riku, you ready to jam?” Riku just yawned and rubbed some sleep out of his eyes. “Ever listen to records?”
“No.” He trudged off to the forest, Charlie behind him.
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“Well, if it ain’t Ringo and Snowball!”
“Hello Sawyer.” Riku replied as he walked over to the Dharma kitchen for a glass of orange juice. “How was your night?”
“Considering how I didn’t have to read to that brat, fairly nice.” Sawyer kicked back, and rested his feet on the coffee table while putting his hands behind his shaggy blond hair. Charlie started to fume.
“Don’t talk about Claire and Aaron that way!” Charlie shouted back, only for Sawyer to stand up and walk out.
“See you on the beach, Osborne!” Sawyer waved so they back of his hand, and Riku heard the hatch’s side door close behind him in the darkness.
“What a bloody jerk.” Charlie snorted.
“He’s Sawyer” Riku shrugged. “That’s what he does.” Riku sat down on the recently vacated seat and grabbed the folded blanket. “And I’m going back to bed.”
“What about the records? I don’t know this Geronimo Jackson, but they have Mama Cass here.”
“Sure… whatever…” Riku lay down on the couch and pulled the blanket over himself.
Nobody can tell ya;
There's only one song worth singin'.
Riku started up. That song….
They may try and sell ya,
'cause it hangs them up
He half fell of the couch and stumbled over to the record player before completing the verse with a smile
to see somone like you. He sung and grinned.
“You know this song then?” Charlie asked. Riku nodded.
“I have a friend back home named Kelsie. She played it for me once. She said it fit me since I danced to my own beat.”
“Will she be waiting for you when we get off this bloody island?” Charlie leaned up against the wall while Riku just stared at the record.
“Probably not… I just disappeared on her really. But I’ll find my way back someday. She’s… She turned to be important to me. She gives me a balance.” Why was he telling this to CHARLIE? Well, they were both musicians, Charlie and Kelsie. And the both composed…
“Well, Good luck then! “ Beep. Beep. BeepIt was the computer, time to press the buttons. “Who takes first shift?
“I’ll go.” Riku walked off, humming to himself.
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Just a little Rilsie. Charlie and Locke to Lost.
Re: Make Your Own Kind of Music
wow that was really good =3, I really can't wait for the next one ^ ^. *reps*
Aw, that was cute. Your Riku/Kelsie pairing always makes me smile, I just love them together. Quick question, what was the title of the song? I don't really know any Mamas and Papas songs. Anyway, great job, and I look forward to more. Oh, one more quick question, how goes the Lexeaus one-shot? I know you said you were going to work on a story for him, so I just thought I ask.
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Nice job. The plot seems to be flowing nicely, and your details are very good as well.
Re: Make Your Own Kind of Music
Originally Posted by Aqua-Sea-987
Sorry, this was a one shot. If you dropped me some plot bunnies, I could give it a shot, but this and "Naomi" has screwed up my Timefixer/Larxene and 14/HCTB schedule.
Some of this would probably happen in "Identities" Which I will probably write. At some point.
THe title of the song is "Make Your Own Kind of Music" It was used in the first episode of Season 2 of Lost and was kind of adopted by Lost fans as kind of an anthem for the series.
^has said computer that Charlie and Riku were talking about.
The Lexaeus one shot "Naomi" is done and on DA. I need to do some edits though since I just wanted to get it up and I want to put a few more scenes in the final product. I can link you to the DA one, and I'll put it up here when it's edited.
Thank you!
And people, please
What did you like, not like (this one is important), and how can I improve?
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Well this is nice work. Very good as always.
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Thank you ^_^
Can you tell me what you liked, didn't like, and how I can improve?
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Sorry I'm not good at that kind of stuff.
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Alright, Sorry. I just like to ask what people liked and didn't as a way to gauge my work.
Re: Make Your Own Kind of Music
Have you put a link to the fanfic in the Riku/Kelsi Fan Club yet, Mina? LOL, shameless FC advertising FTW!
Well, I've pretty much read most of this already, so my review won't be as long, but here's my opinion on the good and the bad:
My favorite part is the beginning, when they're in Kelsi's room together. I just find it sweet how she basically let him into her inner sanctum, and that she has songs that remind her of him. And I like how, after all this time has passed, he remembers her when he hears the song and remembers her fondly. The romance is nice and subtle, which is how it should be when you're writing a crack pairing and can't just fling them together for the heck of it.
The only thing that I would really suggest improving is the grammar/spelling errors and the fact that many of the paragraphs are squashed together. But you've also told me that you're writing this stuff from a cell phone, so it's understandable.
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http://forums.khinsider.com/fanclubs...e-fanclub.html
^here is the club now!
Thanks! Well... (gah, I'm blushing) subtle romance is always good when you are doing it like this... (and when them separated by time and space)
No cellphone this time, so I'll try to pay closer attention next time (thought I edited it, though I know I'm missing an e somewhere)
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