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Old September 17th, 2009, 09:15 PM   #1
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Axel's reaction

Demyx thought it would be funny to not tell Axel where they were going on the mission.
"I don't think it's such a good idea to take Axel there without telling him...." said Xion.
"Oh, relax, this is gonna be really funny!" said Demyx.
"But you know how much he hates water!" said Xaldin.
"That's why it's gonna be funny!" said Demyx.
"I'd better tag along to watch, then." said Larxene.

"WAGHHHHH!" shouted Axel when they were in Atlantica.
"BWAHAHAHA!" laughed Demyx and Larxene.
"YOU'RE GONNA PAY FOR THIS!" shouted Axel.
"Uh oh!" said Demyx, swimming away with Larxene.
"COME BACK HERE!" shouted Axel, giving chase.






Tell me what you think about this one. Although bad replies will leave me broken-hearted.
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Old September 17th, 2009, 09:17 PM   #2
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It was cute, but I wanna see more bulk to each story if you don't mind Shadow-kun ^.^

Axel in atlantica... XD Wait! Larxene could fry everything there into Fish sticks!
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Old September 17th, 2009, 09:17 PM   #3
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not bad, but you could elaborate on it a bit, maybe say what happened if Axel catches them or something like that
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Old September 19th, 2009, 11:12 PM   #4
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Funny story XD
But you could maybe make it a bit longer, otherwise I suggest giving people heads up and call it "super mini stories"
but then it's all up to you.
make some more since all I see is one.
don't forget about the size
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Old September 19th, 2009, 11:20 PM   #5
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What evereybody else said, it needs bulk.
I like the story though! You can describe what's going on, like how they are getting there, and what Axel did to deserve that. Can't wait for another, better story! ^^
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