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Old July 28th, 2009, 10:09 PM   #1
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Old July 28th, 2009, 10:33 PM   #2
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Wow. Just wow

You need to work on a plot, develop the plot, character description, and pretty much everything.
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Old July 28th, 2009, 10:34 PM   #3
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... You're very lazy, aren't you?

At least work a bit to have a page worth on Word. Jesus christ.

Also, you obviously don't really read many books. There's no space between a quotation mark and the first letter.




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Old July 28th, 2009, 10:37 PM   #4
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Old July 28th, 2009, 10:38 PM   #5
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I m still thinking okay you noobs!
The irony just baffles me.
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Old July 28th, 2009, 10:38 PM   #6
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" RAAAGHHH!!!"
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Old July 28th, 2009, 10:39 PM   #7
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WOOSH!
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Old July 28th, 2009, 10:39 PM   #8
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Umm . . . yeah . . . I think you should work on this a lot more, and post it after it's ready. To be honest, this was no where close to being presentable.
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Old July 28th, 2009, 10:40 PM   #9
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I m still thinking okay you noobs!
Then think longer before you throw a bunch of words on the forum without even THINKING about what you're doing.

Do you even read anything?

Even Twilight had SOME time and thought put into it. So work if you want respect.
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Old July 28th, 2009, 10:41 PM   #10
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*checks "Currently Active Users Viewing This Thread" list*

Why do people always gravitate towards these types of threads, but none of the others?
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Old July 28th, 2009, 10:42 PM   #11
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Finish an entire chapter. A chapter in my eyes usually is 5 pages at least unless you honestly have a reason for it to be shorter.

Your reason for only giving us 3 sentences seems only because you're unprepared and have no idea where you're going with it.
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Old July 28th, 2009, 10:45 PM   #12
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Kid is only 12.
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Old July 29th, 2009, 11:10 AM   #13
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oh yeah i read alot of books every weak
Apparently not.
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