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Old March 15th, 2009, 01:06 AM   #16
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CHAPTER 3

"Sora...hehe.... you can't catch me....I'll miss you" These were the voices going through the mind of the boy with spiky brunette hair and blue eyes . "Sora are you even listening" answered a girl with short, red hair and who also had blue eyes. "Of course he is Kiari" answered a slightly more mature looking boy who had blue eyes and silver hair. Sora kept quite so kairi wouldn't growl at him. "Like I said, the homework is way too hard for us, we haven't even heard of the question 15x300+200" yelled Kiari. Riku just giggled since he knew the answer. "Why don't we just ask our parents to help?" asked Sora. Kairi and Riku gave him a stare. "What it is good to ask" answered Sora. "Lets forget about it and go to our secret place were it isn't hot". "Ok, you guys go on ahead I'm going to do my home work, somthing you guys should be doing" answered Kairi. As soon as Riku and Sora left, Kairi ran of to her mum for the homework answers. "Your starting to remember her, aren't you" answered Riku. "What do you mean?"asked Sora. "Rainer
, your starting to remember, like me, I keep on seeing a ship that is identical to the one that Rainers sank in sinking over and over again in my dreams" answered Riku. Sora looked at him and said "I keep on hearing her voice and keep feeling the pain of how mean I was to her when kairi came, I can't believe on her birthday when I was going to throw her a suprise party I wasn't there" Sora aswered in sorrow. "But why remember now, after so many years, why now?" Questioned Riku. "Who Knows, hey we've got to do our homework" ansewered Sora trying to cheer himself up.

Night time

"Hey Sora...happy birthday...heres my present... it's a freindship neckla-..... don't lose it...we'll always be frein-...see ya tommorow" This was the dream Sora was having but it was in so many shattered peices.

Rikus Dream

"Help... Riku, Sora.... Help me please....I miss you.... Help" Rikus dream was more of a nightmare and it was in paices too. Why.
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Old March 16th, 2009, 02:08 AM   #17
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This is good for a beginner, keep it up. Your still keeping me interested.
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Old March 18th, 2009, 07:32 AM   #18
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CHAPTER 4

As Eva looked outside from her temporary prison cell window, or just a square hole in the wall with lots of metal bars. She remembered the days she spent Axel, Demyx, Roxas, Larexene and Zexion, then new school students.

HER MEMORY

"Good morning class" Shouted Miss Snoty. "We have five new students since four boys and one girl want missing of the beach, lucky rats, if they were your friends the force is still looking for them, I doubt they will find them" sneered Miss Snoty. The main whispers going around the class were, from the girls "they are sooooo cute, especially the red head" and "hope they sit over here". From the boys "is that the female hulk?" and from the male nerds "look at the chick snort " . Larexene was freaked out at the fact of every one of the male nerds were staring at her and drooling at the same time. Axel was feeling like a star, even though he didn't know how to, and watched as the girls stared at him with admiration of fiery coolness. Demyx was being watched to but he just smiled and waved. Zexion scanned the room for something until he found it, the miniature class library, for all your reading needs. Roxas was looking for a place to sit, he didn't want a place with geeks or Larexene will be grossed out, not anywhere near the cool boys or some skulls will be smashed, not anywhere near a bunch of girls or Axel will start to annoy him, that left only one big table. It wasn't empty, Rainer was sitting there with a book reading. Roxas asked everyone else if they would want to sit there and they all answered yes. They headed over with their books and took a seat on a chair, the principle was cheap and thought big tables saved money. Axel decided he was bored and wanted to see a girl faint and answered " my names Axel, got it memorized?". Rainer didn't know she had company and looked up and smiled at Axel and answered "Nice to meet you, I'm Rainer, don't expect me to be a popular girl and I don't try out in much stuff so I'm probably not much of a freind". Axel was stunned and stoned, the only girl, apart from Larexene, that didn't notice his fiery coolness or find him attractive. Larexene smirked at his attempted to dazzle Reiner and held back a laugh while feeling sorry for Rainer since she didn’t have any friends, she seemed like a nice girl. Roxas was doing the same thing and feeling sympathetic for her. Zexion looked at her and felt like being friends anyway since she looked liked she liked reading. Demyx just couldn’t hold it in and started laughing till he peed on him self. Axel stared at him and got so pissed of he couldn’t control him self and they started brawling on the table which ripped Rainer’s book. This made her really mad, she checked to see if her stockings where up and pounced.

(Sorry but I don’t feel like explaining what happens so I’ll show you what Roxas was thinking inside his mind).
“Wow, Axels going to regret ever trying that again, poor Demyx, can’t believe he peed his pants while laughing”. “Man can that girl punch, hope Axel and Demyx don’t go into a coma”. “Ouch, that’s going to sting for a while, finally they’ve stopped”.
BACK OUTSIDE ROXAS’S MIND
“Hah you got beaten up by a girl, this time it wasn’t me” Larexene Shouted. Axel and Demyx lay on the ground in desperate need to go to the hospital, luckily the sick bay was the next best thing. Every girl and boy in the class backed away since they knew when she was angry, she was angry. “Um... Rainer do you mind taking Demyx and Axel up to the sick bay” asked Miss Snoty who was also backed up like the rest of the class. “Ok” answered Rainer with a smile. She helped Axel and Demyx up who were so terrified they just wanted to run away like little babies, but they couldn’t since they had been smashed all over but not on the darkness parts. You know what me, the narrarator, means. As Axel and Demyx limbed along Rainer thought she would apologize. “Sorry about that, it’s just that you were getting on my nerves and you ripped my book and.... sniff sniff what smells like sewage” paused Rainer. Axel looked at Demyx and he shrug. “Don’t look now cause there luggage in the back trunk. Rainer immediately stopped helping him and he fell to the ground. “Eeeew gross, why didn’t you tell me” Shouted Rainer. “What I was scared” Demyx wined. Rainer grabbed him by the collar and dragged him instead and stayed more onto Axel side. Axel looked at her and said “guess you really do have feeling for me”. Rainer’s eyes widened and grabbed him By the collar and dropped him so she could drag him as well. “That punishment for thinking I like you” growled Rainer.
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Old March 19th, 2009, 06:20 AM   #19
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What do you guys think?
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Old March 21st, 2009, 03:50 AM   #20
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I really like this story. I like your Rainer/Eva character; she seems pretty interesting, and I like anyone who beats up Axel for being a total jackass, especially when he deserves it. Anyway, good job, and I really look forward to see where you take this story.
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Old March 28th, 2009, 12:50 AM   #21
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CHAPTER 5

Back at class the room was in chauc since the teacher forgot to call the subtitute down when she had a break. "WHY ME" yelled Zexion as he tried to read his book.
Larexene was running away from the war of the geeks as they fought over her, Roxas wondered why a really popular girl was being nice to him all the time while trying to finish some of his maths. Then they heard loud foot steps, then the door handled turned very slowly. everyone ran to their seats and trampled Zexion as he tried to sit down in a very quite spot. Roxas and Larexene were on their seats looking around and wondering where Zexion was and why everyone switched to silent mode. Slam! went the door and poor Larexene and Roxas fell of their seats frightened. When they looked up the saw a very tall and musley man with army clothes on standing in front of them. "WHY ARE YOU NOT IN YOUR SEATS" yelled the man while spitting out lots of suliva. The very popular girl stood up and answered "sorry mister Bootcamp, I accidentaly pushed Roxas over, Larexene and Zexion were running around the room and triped over the books". Mister bootcamp went red and looked do at Zexion who was still on the ground moaning like a sick dog and Larexene who sneered at the girl knowing she was flirting with Roxas before. "YOU TWO UP TO THE PRINCIPLES OFFICE NOW" yelled mister Bootcamp while spitting suliva. Larexene ran over Zexion, scraped him of the pavement and walked over to the door. Roxas sat on his chair and noticed the popular girl giving him a flirty smile. Having no emotion he took no notice and went to get changed into his sports uniform like everyone else.

SICK BAY

"OOOOOOOOWWWWWWW" yelled Axel as Rainer tighened a peice of cloth around his leg. "Shut up already, you sound like Tracy the populer girl in my class when she's got a paper cut" yelled Rainer. The nurse told her to help Axel because she was helping Demyx. "I can't help it since your trying to kill me more, give me a break already" shouted Axel. "Done, now yor head, arm and leg can recover propally" answered Rainer slapping him on his head since thats where it hurt most. "OOOOOOWWWWW, WEREN'T YOU LISTENING, GIVE ME A BREAK" yelled Axel. Rainer ignored him and went to help Demyx, when she tighened his cloth she did it gently. Axel just cursed under his breath. They got on their weel chairs and headed out to the hallway then out the door leading them outside, Rainer was right behind them just incase they feel in a ditch.

ON THE FEILD

Mister Bootcamp was making the boys do ten laps around the school while the girls did girly push ups. Tracy didn't do it sinc she had a "faick" doctors note. Instead she was staring at roxas who didn't even break a sweat while doind his 9th lap. Then she saw Rainer running towards the feild with Axel and Demyx right behind her. She sneered at her with jealosy since most of the boys liked her. Mister Bootcamp noticed her and smiled, he liked the fact that she hurt the boys that made her mad.

PRINCIPLES OFFICE

"Well well well, looks like two new students are going to be two new brats" answered the principle. Larexene just looked at his ugly and bushy eyebrows while Zexion just kept his head down. "Get out of my sight I don't need to give a lecture today so just go back to class" Answered the principle. Zexion and Larexene just smiled and walked out of the room.
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Old March 28th, 2009, 03:58 AM   #22
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Good update, varsha. Seriously, members of the Organization and high school do not mix. I totally like Rainer; I like anyone who beats up guys who piss them off. Good job, and I look forward to more.
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Old March 28th, 2009, 08:12 PM   #23
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yay another update.

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he liked the fact that she hurt the boys that made her mad.
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Old March 29th, 2009, 10:15 PM   #24
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thanks, this helps me out alot with the updates
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Old April 6th, 2009, 03:16 AM   #25
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CHAPTER 6

LUNCH TIME

"What are you doing" asked Rainer as she stared a Axel who was climbing Larexene to stay away from, THE WATER. "He's got a thing with water" smirked Demyx. The Nurse from the sick bay said it was ok if they took of their casts and got of the weel chair. "Really? I thought that was a joke" answered Rainer. "Alright I've had enough" yelled Larexene and she threw the water out and Axel was thrown on the ground. "No THE WATER is back" yelled Axel. Everyone stared a him. "Ok, so I have freinds and one of them is a afraid ok water, one can somehow surf in the pool, one that can't reconise the fact that a girls in love with him, one thats a goddie good and one that is a bit like the hulk.. I think thats right" explained Rainer. "Hey she is not in love with me" yelled Roxas wich made all the kids look at the table and Tracy blush on the other side of the room and all the other girls squel. "Alright puiny eat fist" yelled Larexene wich ended up with a cat fight travelling around the cafateria. "Whoa, Rainer can sure fight, hope no one lookes their shirt and bikini" answered Axel with a pervert look. Roxas looked at him and shivered. Then Rainer stopped and so did Larexene. They looked at Axel in disgust. Then two boys and one girl entered the room. One boy was musly and brown, the other boy had a blue buinie and white ling jacket and the girl had silver hair and had some of the front over one of her eyes. "Hey Seifer" yelled Rainer to the boy with the buinie. Seifer smiled and walked over to her. "How com you weren't at the dicaplinary comitiee area" answered Rainer with a smile. "I uhh.. had to finish homework" Answered Seifer while blushing furiously. "Oh well, come and meet my freinds, oh and take as long as you want, at least the promoter's quit, I wonder if he's GA-" Rainer stopped talking since the chinese students were there. "This is Roxas, that's Axel, that's Demyx, that's Zexion oh and you already know Larexene" answered Rainer. Seifer looked at the students and then glared and then sneered. "Looks like the local circus, epecialy blondy" sneered Seifer. "Their not that bad" answered Rainer. "Atention students but every one will have to auditon for the school play so please come to the gym for auditions" yelled the principle on the speakers. "All right lets go" sighed Rainer. Off they went.

AT THE GYM

"Next" yelled the judge at Tracy. "All right it's my turn" answered Rainer. Roxas was on the top of the stage handling the curtains and everone else was out side in the rain. "Know Rainer we would like you sing a song, a passionite disney one" answered the judge. "Ok, I will sing part of your world" Rainer answered. She took a deep breath and as soon as she was going to start the rail at the top of the stage broke and Roxas came flying down and fell on Rainer. After the fall Rainer and Roxas noticed they, WERE KISSING!!!!!!. "Bravo, Bravo" yelled the judge. Riner punched Roxas off and he went flying like a rag doll, since he had no emotion. Tracy and Siefer had sneaked in and saw the whole thing. Tracy went red and her hair went puffy, while Seifer just had his mouth wide open. "The secret play was romeo and Juliet, and you , Roxas, will be Romeo and you, Rainer, will be Juliet" yelled the judge. "No give backs" answered the judge. Roxas and Rainer had their eyes wide open.

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Old April 6th, 2009, 03:00 PM   #26
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i like your chapter/story
axel is funny lol ;D
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Old April 7th, 2009, 03:38 AM   #27
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Another good update. Axel is such a baby, and I think Rainer and Seifer have a crush on each other. That was cute. Anyway, I look forward to the next update.
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Old April 7th, 2009, 10:37 PM   #28
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Is it that predictable? read th chapter it's finishe'd now
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Old April 8th, 2009, 02:51 AM   #29
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oh and chapter 7 is comin soon
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Old April 8th, 2009, 03:18 AM   #30
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That was funny. Rainer and Roxas kissed, and Tracy and Seifer are jealous. Question, where the hell did Roxas fall from? What, was he playing in the rafters or something? Anyway, good job, and I look forward to more.
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