The Last Story - Page 11

Bellaisima358 · July 24th, 2009, 06:15 PM

Kool. Wonder why no one trustes Eva....

TwilightRiku_13 · July 25th, 2009, 02:39 AM

Aw, Simba doesn't trust Sora's friends. That really sucks. So, is a new Org. member going to show up? You mentioned one is the last chapter, so I'm kind of wondering who it will be. Anyway, great job, and I look forward to more.

varsha · July 29th, 2009, 10:29 PM

Who thinks tha chapters a short?

CHAPTER 41

PRIDE LANDS : GRASSLANDS

"Aw man, not again" groaned Kiara. "She, really sucks" wispered Sora. "Don't say that! she just need more practice" wispered Goofy. "Aw phoe, we should be looking for organization members" whined Donald. Just then a Lion came out of nowhere with a dog's tail and an x cross on his face. "Your wish has come true" answered Sora. Kiara ran off and Saix just stood there sad. "Hey Moon boy!" yelled Sora. Saix jumped up and looked ready for a fight. "Stop you idiots!" yelled Eva popping out of nowhere. "What are you doing?" asked Sora. "I couldn't trust you" grinned Eva. "Eva, what are doing talking to these animals. "Your an animal too" answered Eva. Saix looked at himself and sat down. "How do you know Kiara?" asked Eva. "I met her on the first day, I help her with her hunting" answered Saix. "Strange, you never help anyone" answered Eva. "U-u- I thought it would be good to change a little" answered Saix going red. "Aww, you like her don't you" sighed Eva. "I do not! she's to young" protested Saix. "Yeah your right, I bet your not even good enough for her" winked Eva at Sora. "Grrr" growled Saix. "Ha, I can't beleive it" answerd Sora. "Come on, we gotta keep track of her" giggled Eva. "Why are you so keen on staying?" asked Sora. "Caus I like cuddling you guys" answered Eva while picking up Sora. "Be careful Eva, he's still just a baby" answered Donald sarcasticly. "Everyone just laughed at Sora going red and hidding his face.

PRIDE LANDS : OUTSCKIRTS

"Why would Kiara come here?" asked Eva. "Who knows" answered Sora. "Hey! the place is on fire" yelled Donald. "What?!" yelled everyone before they saw the grass on fire. "Come on!" yelled Sora. Before they could take a step a bunch of heartlesss popped up around them, this time it was a kind they had never seen. "You guys get going, I'll get rid of these guys" yelled Eva. Everyone ran of and Eva went on fighing the new heartless. When everyone was gone Eva suddenly transformed into a lion but was half dazed and the heartless managed to transport her somewhere else. Mean while Sora and everyone else saw another lion rescuing Kiara but he had a resemblence of scar. The two lions fell of a cliff towards the water and the lion resembling Scar dragged Kiara towards the shore.

Bellaisima358 · July 29th, 2009, 10:35 PM

ooooooh cant wait to find out what happens :)

TwilightRiku_13 · July 30th, 2009, 03:03 AM

Hooray, Saix is now in the picture!!! I have been waiting for Saix to show up; he's probably my favorite nobody out of all of them. Anyway, great job, and I look forward to the next part.

varsha · July 31st, 2009, 12:34 AM

I'm going to add more to the chapter later since it's going to be a LONGER one

TwilightRiku_13 · July 31st, 2009, 01:48 AM

Oh, Scar's son is now there; I forget his name, haven't seen the second Lion King movie in a while. So, what kind of Hearless was Eva fighting, and where did it transport her to? And how did Eva transfom into a lion? I thought you said the cnahge only affected the men. Well, I'm sure all will be revealed soon. Anyway, great job, and I look forward to more.

varsha · July 31st, 2009, 08:22 AM

Scratch that idea of long chapter.

CHAPTER 42

?????????? : ?????????

The darkness in the room was clouding Eva's mind when she woke up. "Where am I?" asked Eva. "In a dark state" answered Saix comeing out of nowhere. "Saix! I'm glad someone's here" yelled Eva. When she finished talking an echo of her voice filled the room that made her shiver. "Don't worry about the empty space" answered Saix. "Wait, what did you mean by 'dark state'?" asked Eva. "Your dark side took over your body, those new creature took over your body and are managing to control you" answered Saix. "What!" yelled Eva. "Yes, as of now your under control but they are sorting through your memories to act like you" answered Saix. "All of my memories?! thats disturbing" answered Eva. "The're only heartless, they don't understand anything but hearts, sort of" answered Saix. Just then a peircing pain struck through her body which ended up making her collapse while latching on to her stomach. Saix came running towards her and helped her up. "Are you ok Eva?" asked Saix. "I think so" answered Eva while holding back tears. "That pain came from the heartless, every few minutes the pain strikes, but it gets weaker after a while, but the stronger the better" explained Saix. "Why would it be better if it's strong?" asked Eva. "It means youy are not fading from your heart" answered Saix giving her a hopeful smile. ''Good" answered Eva. "Here, have a peice of chocolate, I smuggled it with me after desert" answered Saix while handing over a small peice of chocolate. "Thank you Saix" answered Eva before snuggling up towards Eva. "No need to be scared" answered Saix in a soft voice. "How did you know?" asked Eva half awake. "I'm the moon man, how else do you think" chuckled Saix. Eva smiled and ate her chocolate. "We'll be out of here soon" answered Saix before hugging Eva.

TwilightRiku_13 · July 31st, 2009, 03:23 PM

So, the dark side of Eva has taken over her, she is now in a dark state, and the Heartless are trying to read her memories to act like her, right? That sounds right. How did Saix end up there though? I guess he just jumped in after her or something. Man, every aspect of Eva is just really crazy and confusing; each time something happens to her, the affects are different. Anyway, great job, and I look forward to more.

Bellaisima358 · July 31st, 2009, 05:10 PM

Aww...Saix is watching eva....

varsha · August 2nd, 2009, 03:28 AM

CHAPTER 43

PRIDE LANDS : GRASSLANDS

Simba roared as he ran towards the scar resembling lion. The other lion roared back until they started a roaring match. "Stop! Simba he's a good guy!" yelled Sora while trying to stop the beggining fight. "Dad stop!" yelled Kiara before everyone went silent. "Dad I'm fine! Kovu just-" yelled Kiara befroe being cut off. "KOVU!" yelled Simba. "Hey! you! how dare you save the kings daughter!" yelled a baboon. " You saved her!? why?" asked Simba. "I wish to join your pride" answered Kovu after calming down. "No! you are an outsider" yelled Simba. "I have left the outsiders, judge me now for who I am, or for a crime I didn't commit!" yelled Kovu. Simba roared in fustration while walking back and forward and Sora just looked a Kovu just standing there. "Simba you owe her your daughters life" answered Nala. Simba stopped walking back and forward to look a Kovu and then grinned. "Fine, we'll see how much you have changed and if you are worth staying" answered Simba before walking towards pride rock. Kovu just smiled at Kiara who smiled back while Kairi and Namine just looked at them while thinking about something. "Um.. Sora, where's Eva?" asked Riku. "Eva?... OH NO EVA!" yelled Sora before running back to help Eva.

PRIDE LANDS : OUTSKIRTS

Eva lay on the ground in her lion form half asleep. "Eva!" yelled Sora before running towards her. "Sora nudged her with his head and she began to wake up. "Eva are you ok?" asked Sora. Eva cocked her head to her right and then smiled. "I'm ok" answered Eva. "How did you get into lion form?" asked Sora. "I don't know, I pulled my keyblades out and striked the heartless and next thing I know is waking up like this" explained Eva. "Whats wrong with your eyes? they look like some gosts" asked Sora. "Uh.. don't worry about that, it's just a small morning thing but don't tell anyone" answered Eva. "O...k..." answered Sora a little freaked out. "Lets get going" answered Eva. "Yeah" answered Sora finally smiling.

PRIDE LANDS : PRIDE ROCK

"Eva? you look sleepy" answered Riku. "I'll be fine" answered Eva before collapsing on Riku. "Figures, It's past her bed time!" yelled Xemnas. Everyone started to giggle before heading inside. "Simba always acted like that" wispered Nala towards Sora. Sora giggled at the thought of Simba being over protecting. Kovu was about to enter the cave before Simba growled him a signal that he wasn't allowed and Kovu walked towards a lone bolder and lay down. Kiara looked at him felling sorry and walked over to him and then came back after talking with a grin on her face. "Why are you so happy?" asked Saix. "I'm going to show him how good my training with you has been tomorrow" smirked Kiara proudly. "I'm sure he will be impressed" smirked Saix. "Guess we'll be leaving tomorrow" answered Sora. "Really? this soon" answerd Simba suprised. "We only came here on other reasons but we'll be back" answered Sora. "Thats good" smiled Simba.

Bellaisima358 · August 2nd, 2009, 03:31 AM

nice chapter varsha :) look forward to more!

TwilightRiku_13 · August 3rd, 2009, 01:34 AM

Kovu, that was his name; I knew it was something like that, but I just couldn't remember. So, Kiara has been training with Saix. Well, that's good; Saix was always a good hunter. Hey, when will we see the big ball? I am really looking forward to that. Anyway, great job, and I look forward to more.

varsha · August 3rd, 2009, 10:27 PM

CHAPTER 44

PRIDE LANDS : PRIDE ROCK

"Wake up!" yelled Kovu. Eva woke up in quick panic wondering what was wrong until she saw Kovu. "What the hell is wrong!?" yelled Eva annoyed. "That weirdo freind of yours has gone all evil dark n stuff" answered Kovu. "What! why didn't you tell me!" yelled Eva before running out. "Sorry" mumbled Kovu.

?????? : ????????

"AAHHHH!" howled Saix in pain. "Saix whats wrong!" yelled Eva. "The heartsless is attacking the others, I'll be free soon" yelled Saix. "What about me?" asked Eva. "Your heartless will attack after me" yelled Saix. "Ok" yelled Eva getting ready for more pain.

PRIDE LANDS : GRASSLANDS

"Eva what are you doing!?" yelled Sora while she attacked everyone in a dark form. "Damn it! come on we gotta attack them!" yelled Riku. Everyone attack both the nobodys and only managed to free Saix. "Why isn't Eva going down!?" yelled Roxas. "Use your keyblades idiots!" yelled Xemnas befroe getting nocked away. Sora, Riku and Roxas joined their keys and a giant ray of light peirced right through Eva before she lost here dark coat.

?????????? : ??????????????

"The light?" sighed Eva before letting it take over her.

PRIDE LANDS : GRASSLANDS

Everyone stopped squinting and found Eva laying on the ground fainted with ripped clothes. "That was weird!" yelled Axel. "Everyone, lets help Eva up" yelled Riku before runing towards Eva. "Looks like I have some explaining to do!" answered Saix. "Fine but lets get going, Eva needs a better place to rest" answered Namine.

Bellaisima358 · August 3rd, 2009, 10:33 PM

nice update, varsha :)....

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July 25th, 2009, 02:39 AM	#152
TwilightRiku_13 Organization Member Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: At my house with Riku, Saix, and Zexion, rocking the red and cheering on the Washington Capitals Posts: 815 Rep Power: 2 Level: EXP:	Re: The Last Story Aw, Simba doesn't trust Sora's friends. That really sucks. So, is a new Org. member going to show up? You mentioned one is the last chapter, so I'm kind of wondering who it will be. Anyway, great job, and I look forward to more.

July 29th, 2009, 10:29 PM	#153
varsha Dual Wielder Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Looking for a friend that cares... Age: 12 Posts: 578 Rep Power: 2 Level: EXP:	Re: The Last Story Who thinks tha chapters a short? CHAPTER 41 PRIDE LANDS : GRASSLANDS "Aw man, not again" groaned Kiara. "She, really sucks" wispered Sora. "Don't say that! she just need more practice" wispered Goofy. "Aw phoe, we should be looking for organization members" whined Donald. Just then a Lion came out of nowhere with a dog's tail and an x cross on his face. "Your wish has come true" answered Sora. Kiara ran off and Saix just stood there sad. "Hey Moon boy!" yelled Sora. Saix jumped up and looked ready for a fight. "Stop you idiots!" yelled Eva popping out of nowhere. "What are you doing?" asked Sora. "I couldn't trust you" grinned Eva. "Eva, what are doing talking to these animals. "Your an animal too" answered Eva. Saix looked at himself and sat down. "How do you know Kiara?" asked Eva. "I met her on the first day, I help her with her hunting" answered Saix. "Strange, you never help anyone" answered Eva. "U-u- I thought it would be good to change a little" answered Saix going red. "Aww, you like her don't you" sighed Eva. "I do not! she's to young" protested Saix. "Yeah your right, I bet your not even good enough for her" winked Eva at Sora. "Grrr" growled Saix. "Ha, I can't beleive it" answerd Sora. "Come on, we gotta keep track of her" giggled Eva. "Why are you so keen on staying?" asked Sora. "Caus I like cuddling you guys" answered Eva while picking up Sora. "Be careful Eva, he's still just a baby" answered Donald sarcasticly. "Everyone just laughed at Sora going red and hidding his face. PRIDE LANDS : OUTSCKIRTS "Why would Kiara come here?" asked Eva. "Who knows" answered Sora. "Hey! the place is on fire" yelled Donald. "What?!" yelled everyone before they saw the grass on fire. "Come on!" yelled Sora. Before they could take a step a bunch of heartlesss popped up around them, this time it was a kind they had never seen. "You guys get going, I'll get rid of these guys" yelled Eva. Everyone ran of and Eva went on fighing the new heartless. When everyone was gone Eva suddenly transformed into a lion but was half dazed and the heartless managed to transport her somewhere else. Mean while Sora and everyone else saw another lion rescuing Kiara but he had a resemblence of scar. The two lions fell of a cliff towards the water and the lion resembling Scar dragged Kiara towards the shore. Last edited by varsha; July 31st, 2009 at 12:33 AM.

July 30th, 2009, 03:03 AM	#155
TwilightRiku_13 Organization Member Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: At my house with Riku, Saix, and Zexion, rocking the red and cheering on the Washington Capitals Posts: 815 Rep Power: 2 Level: EXP:	Re: The Last Story Hooray, Saix is now in the picture!!! I have been waiting for Saix to show up; he's probably my favorite nobody out of all of them. Anyway, great job, and I look forward to the next part.

July 31st, 2009, 12:34 AM	#156
varsha Dual Wielder Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Looking for a friend that cares... Age: 12 Posts: 578 Rep Power: 2 Level: EXP:	Re: The Last Story I'm going to add more to the chapter later since it's going to be a LONGER one

July 31st, 2009, 01:48 AM	#157
TwilightRiku_13 Organization Member Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: At my house with Riku, Saix, and Zexion, rocking the red and cheering on the Washington Capitals Posts: 815 Rep Power: 2 Level: EXP:	Re: The Last Story Oh, Scar's son is now there; I forget his name, haven't seen the second Lion King movie in a while. So, what kind of Hearless was Eva fighting, and where did it transport her to? And how did Eva transfom into a lion? I thought you said the cnahge only affected the men. Well, I'm sure all will be revealed soon. Anyway, great job, and I look forward to more.

July 31st, 2009, 08:22 AM	#158
varsha Dual Wielder Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Looking for a friend that cares... Age: 12 Posts: 578 Rep Power: 2 Level: EXP:	Re: The Last Story Scratch that idea of long chapter. CHAPTER 42 ?????????? : ????????? The darkness in the room was clouding Eva's mind when she woke up. "Where am I?" asked Eva. "In a dark state" answered Saix comeing out of nowhere. "Saix! I'm glad someone's here" yelled Eva. When she finished talking an echo of her voice filled the room that made her shiver. "Don't worry about the empty space" answered Saix. "Wait, what did you mean by 'dark state'?" asked Eva. "Your dark side took over your body, those new creature took over your body and are managing to control you" answered Saix. "What!" yelled Eva. "Yes, as of now your under control but they are sorting through your memories to act like you" answered Saix. "All of my memories?! thats disturbing" answered Eva. "The're only heartless, they don't understand anything but hearts, sort of" answered Saix. Just then a peircing pain struck through her body which ended up making her collapse while latching on to her stomach. Saix came running towards her and helped her up. "Are you ok Eva?" asked Saix. "I think so" answered Eva while holding back tears. "That pain came from the heartless, every few minutes the pain strikes, but it gets weaker after a while, but the stronger the better" explained Saix. "Why would it be better if it's strong?" asked Eva. "It means youy are not fading from your heart" answered Saix giving her a hopeful smile. ''Good" answered Eva. "Here, have a peice of chocolate, I smuggled it with me after desert" answered Saix while handing over a small peice of chocolate. "Thank you Saix" answered Eva before snuggling up towards Eva. "No need to be scared" answered Saix in a soft voice. "How did you know?" asked Eva half awake. "I'm the moon man, how else do you think" chuckled Saix. Eva smiled and ate her chocolate. "We'll be out of here soon" answered Saix before hugging Eva.

July 31st, 2009, 03:23 PM	#159
TwilightRiku_13 Organization Member Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: At my house with Riku, Saix, and Zexion, rocking the red and cheering on the Washington Capitals Posts: 815 Rep Power: 2 Level: EXP:	Re: The Last Story So, the dark side of Eva has taken over her, she is now in a dark state, and the Heartless are trying to read her memories to act like her, right? That sounds right. How did Saix end up there though? I guess he just jumped in after her or something. Man, every aspect of Eva is just really crazy and confusing; each time something happens to her, the affects are different. Anyway, great job, and I look forward to more.

August 2nd, 2009, 03:28 AM	#161
varsha Dual Wielder Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Looking for a friend that cares... Age: 12 Posts: 578 Rep Power: 2 Level: EXP:	Re: The Last Story CHAPTER 43 PRIDE LANDS : GRASSLANDS Simba roared as he ran towards the scar resembling lion. The other lion roared back until they started a roaring match. "Stop! Simba he's a good guy!" yelled Sora while trying to stop the beggining fight. "Dad stop!" yelled Kiara before everyone went silent. "Dad I'm fine! Kovu just-" yelled Kiara befroe being cut off. "KOVU!" yelled Simba. "Hey! you! how dare you save the kings daughter!" yelled a baboon. " You saved her!? why?" asked Simba. "I wish to join your pride" answered Kovu after calming down. "No! you are an outsider" yelled Simba. "I have left the outsiders, judge me now for who I am, or for a crime I didn't commit!" yelled Kovu. Simba roared in fustration while walking back and forward and Sora just looked a Kovu just standing there. "Simba you owe her your daughters life" answered Nala. Simba stopped walking back and forward to look a Kovu and then grinned. "Fine, we'll see how much you have changed and if you are worth staying" answered Simba before walking towards pride rock. Kovu just smiled at Kiara who smiled back while Kairi and Namine just looked at them while thinking about something. "Um.. Sora, where's Eva?" asked Riku. "Eva?... OH NO EVA!" yelled Sora before running back to help Eva. PRIDE LANDS : OUTSKIRTS Eva lay on the ground in her lion form half asleep. "Eva!" yelled Sora before running towards her. "Sora nudged her with his head and she began to wake up. "Eva are you ok?" asked Sora. Eva cocked her head to her right and then smiled. "I'm ok" answered Eva. "How did you get into lion form?" asked Sora. "I don't know, I pulled my keyblades out and striked the heartless and next thing I know is waking up like this" explained Eva. "Whats wrong with your eyes? they look like some gosts" asked Sora. "Uh.. don't worry about that, it's just a small morning thing but don't tell anyone" answered Eva. "O...k..." answered Sora a little freaked out. "Lets get going" answered Eva. "Yeah" answered Sora finally smiling. PRIDE LANDS : PRIDE ROCK "Eva? you look sleepy" answered Riku. "I'll be fine" answered Eva before collapsing on Riku. "Figures, It's past her bed time!" yelled Xemnas. Everyone started to giggle before heading inside. "Simba always acted like that" wispered Nala towards Sora. Sora giggled at the thought of Simba being over protecting. Kovu was about to enter the cave before Simba growled him a signal that he wasn't allowed and Kovu walked towards a lone bolder and lay down. Kiara looked at him felling sorry and walked over to him and then came back after talking with a grin on her face. "Why are you so happy?" asked Saix. "I'm going to show him how good my training with you has been tomorrow" smirked Kiara proudly. "I'm sure he will be impressed" smirked Saix. "Guess we'll be leaving tomorrow" answered Sora. "Really? this soon" answerd Simba suprised. "We only came here on other reasons but we'll be back" answered Sora. "Thats good" smiled Simba.

August 3rd, 2009, 01:34 AM	#163
TwilightRiku_13 Organization Member Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: At my house with Riku, Saix, and Zexion, rocking the red and cheering on the Washington Capitals Posts: 815 Rep Power: 2 Level: EXP:	Re: The Last Story Kovu, that was his name; I knew it was something like that, but I just couldn't remember. So, Kiara has been training with Saix. Well, that's good; Saix was always a good hunter. Hey, when will we see the big ball? I am really looking forward to that. Anyway, great job, and I look forward to more.

August 3rd, 2009, 10:27 PM	#164
varsha Dual Wielder Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Looking for a friend that cares... Age: 12 Posts: 578 Rep Power: 2 Level: EXP:	Re: The Last Story CHAPTER 44 PRIDE LANDS : PRIDE ROCK "Wake up!" yelled Kovu. Eva woke up in quick panic wondering what was wrong until she saw Kovu. "What the hell is wrong!?" yelled Eva annoyed. "That weirdo freind of yours has gone all evil dark n stuff" answered Kovu. "What! why didn't you tell me!" yelled Eva before running out. "Sorry" mumbled Kovu. ?????? : ???????? "AAHHHH!" howled Saix in pain. "Saix whats wrong!" yelled Eva. "The heartsless is attacking the others, I'll be free soon" yelled Saix. "What about me?" asked Eva. "Your heartless will attack after me" yelled Saix. "Ok" yelled Eva getting ready for more pain. PRIDE LANDS : GRASSLANDS "Eva what are you doing!?" yelled Sora while she attacked everyone in a dark form. "Damn it! come on we gotta attack them!" yelled Riku. Everyone attack both the nobodys and only managed to free Saix. "Why isn't Eva going down!?" yelled Roxas. "Use your keyblades idiots!" yelled Xemnas befroe getting nocked away. Sora, Riku and Roxas joined their keys and a giant ray of light peirced right through Eva before she lost here dark coat. ?????????? : ?????????????? "The light?" sighed Eva before letting it take over her. PRIDE LANDS : GRASSLANDS Everyone stopped squinting and found Eva laying on the ground fainted with ripped clothes. "That was weird!" yelled Axel. "Everyone, lets help Eva up" yelled Riku before runing towards Eva. "Looks like I have some explaining to do!" answered Saix. "Fine but lets get going, Eva needs a better place to rest" answered Namine.

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