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Old March 15th, 2009, 11:02 PM   #16
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Well Ziz I must say i am VERY impressed with this piece. The first part brings back some old memories from KH1. I love how you described the opening dream. Props to you Ziz!
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Old March 15th, 2009, 11:20 PM   #17
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huzzah!
another update!
i know this review will be broad and ambiguous but i really liked it!
i have high hopes for this fanfic as it progresses!
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Er, maybe a bit slow and wordy
i agree with her.
but its an easy fix!
anyways can't wait for the next update
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Old March 15th, 2009, 11:55 PM   #18
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What do you mean it's a bit slow and wordy? I did what Ordeith asked me to do!
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Old March 15th, 2009, 11:58 PM   #19
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Awesome. I really like the updated version; there's a lot more detail. Glad to see that Alladin is there, but not so much Jafar. He always scared me. I am still intrigued by the mystery girl from the beginning; can't wait to see her agian. Anyway, great job, and I look forward to more.
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Old March 16th, 2009, 01:48 AM   #20
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What do you mean it's a bit slow and wordy? I did what Ordeith asked me to do!
I don't know what Ordeith asked you to do, but it seemed a bit dull with all those words. I skimmed for the most part. What I saw, I liked, but it comes off a dense
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Old March 16th, 2009, 01:58 AM   #21
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I don't know what Ordeith asked you to do, but it seemed a bit dull with all those words. I skimmed for the most part. What I saw, I liked, but it comes off a dense
Heh, I'm not infallible, Ziz; I suppose that my preference in reading material is more long-winded than most.
It's your own creative work; don't allow my personal preferences to inhibit you.
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Old March 16th, 2009, 02:24 AM   #22
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I don't know what Ordeith asked you to do, but it seemed a bit dull with all those words. I skimmed for the most part. What I saw, I liked, but it comes off a dense
Ordeith requested that I be more descriptive, it was to entice readers who are interested in that sort of stuff.

EDIT: I know, but I am one who prefers description as well. I hate the fact that I try so hard only for people who barely offer any description at all or use the script format for their fanfictions get more reviews than me. It's not right.
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Old March 16th, 2009, 02:27 AM   #23
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I know, but I am one who prefers description as well. I hate the fact that I try so hard only for people who barely offer any description at all or use the script format for their fanfictions get more reviews than me. It's not right.
I concur; such is the injustice of the internet.
Though in the grand scheme of things, I have little doubt that success will meet you if you continue with this writing style as opposed to that of the average forum fanfiction.
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Old March 16th, 2009, 02:45 AM   #24
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I concur; such is the injustice of the internet.
Though in the grand scheme of things, I have little doubt that success will meet you if you continue with this writing style as opposed to that of the average forum fanfiction.
I sometimes do not even know why I try to please people with my ideas when they are creative and original at best. I get shut down and others with lower-quality fanfictions recieve more praise because of less description or because it's comic or because it has yaoi and not a true storyline like I do with mines. I wish people would reviews fanfictions for their quality out of everything.
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Old March 16th, 2009, 02:46 AM   #25
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Ordeith requested that I be more descriptive, it was to entice readers who are interested in that sort of stuff.
well to be honest, the more i read it the more i appreciate the description you put into it because i went back and read another fanfic and it was so non-descriptive and ambiguous that i wanted to just die (not really die but you know what i mean).

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agreed, you do have skill and i appreciate the time and effort you put into this in order to entertain ME and others as well, unlike other authors on this forum.
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Old March 16th, 2009, 02:52 AM   #26
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well to be honest, the more i read it the more i appreciate the description you put into it because i went back and read another fanfic and it was so non-descriptive and ambiguous that i wanted to just die (not really die but you know what i mean).



agreed, you do have skill and i appreciate the time and effort you put into this in order to entertain ME and others as well, unlike other authors on this forum.
Thank you, you're one of the exceptions who do appreciate the fact that despite my limited vocabulary, I try to offer as much in dept description as possible.

I wish I can say that I have skill and I just want to put my mark on these forums.
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Old March 16th, 2009, 02:58 AM   #27
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Thank you, you're one of the exceptions who do appreciate the fact that despite my limited vocabulary, I try to offer as much in dept description as possible.

I wish I can say that I have skill and I just want to put my mark on these forums.
well if it counts for anything
i think your a very good writer
yup its true
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well if it counts for anything
i think your a very good writer
yup its true
Well, going back to the story, I'll have it ready as soon as I can. Be foreworn of some Rose Order and La Compilation references from now on during the story.

The mysterious girl will show up in person in the next chapter as will Los Sincorazones, the Spanish equivalent of Heartless.
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Old March 16th, 2009, 03:06 AM   #29
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Well, going back to the story, I'll have it ready as soon as I can. Be foreworn of some Rose Order and La Compilation references from now on during the story.
even better!

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yess
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even better!



yess
can't wait
And a loved pyromaniac redhead will be cameoing as the villain of the chapter.

One of Dauroth's followers will have a minor cameo during the next chapter titled 'The Dirge of the Pyro'
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