Starwars

CLOUD598 · March 23rd, 2005, 04:01 PM

"It seems as though the darkness inside you grows...my young jedi am i right? questioned Master Zhar of the jedi council. Master Zhar continued, "well speak up jedi tell me what happened." "we where out on the battlefield with our troops, giving the commands and barking orders at me!" he paused, " well one day while we were out in our bunkers i grabbed my lightsaber and... the jedi falls to his knees sobbing uncontrollably. "grab a hold of yourself jedi!" said master Zhar. "my apologies my lord replied the jedi." Master Zhar nodded his head as if accepting his apologie. " well after i stabbed him all the troops awoke and saw me with my lightsaber in his head." Master Zhar looked ashamed at his young jedi and said " all jedi that do wrong must be punished.............send him to the executionary room." the two guards grabbed him roughly around the shoulders but after that split second he broke free and jumped out of the council's window and raced to a ship and speeded off to another planet. "well,looks like we lost another jedi to the dark side." said Master Zhar...

waddaya think?

CLOUD598 · March 23rd, 2005, 05:57 PM

please give your comments or suggestions.

sorasecondcoming · March 27th, 2005, 05:40 AM

i think it is good

March 23rd, 2005, 04:01 PM	#1
CLOUD598 Keyblade Novice Join Date: Apr 2004 Age: 18 Posts: 58 Rep Power: 6 Level: EXP:	Starwars "It seems as though the darkness inside you grows...my young jedi am i right? questioned Master Zhar of the jedi council. Master Zhar continued, "well speak up jedi tell me what happened." "we where out on the battlefield with our troops, giving the commands and barking orders at me!" he paused, " well one day while we were out in our bunkers i grabbed my lightsaber and... the jedi falls to his knees sobbing uncontrollably. "grab a hold of yourself jedi!" said master Zhar. "my apologies my lord replied the jedi." Master Zhar nodded his head as if accepting his apologie. " well after i stabbed him all the troops awoke and saw me with my lightsaber in his head." Master Zhar looked ashamed at his young jedi and said " all jedi that do wrong must be punished.............send him to the executionary room." the two guards grabbed him roughly around the shoulders but after that split second he broke free and jumped out of the council's window and raced to a ship and speeded off to another planet. "well,looks like we lost another jedi to the dark side." said Master Zhar... waddaya think?

March 23rd, 2005, 05:57 PM	#2
CLOUD598 Keyblade Novice Join Date: Apr 2004 Age: 18 Posts: 58 Rep Power: 6 Level: EXP:	Re: Starwars please give your comments or suggestions.

March 27th, 2005, 05:40 AM	#3
sorasecondcoming Ruler of Darkness Join Date: Jul 2004 Location: ok Age: 17 Posts: 156 Rep Power: 6 Level: EXP:	Re: Starwars i think it is good

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