A New Adventure: A KH Fanfic - Page 2

Rauxlen · April 29th, 2008, 11:49 PM

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Originally Posted by Riku Fan1415

Also, if you're planning to include the Pride Lands in your story, it's best to give thought on two things:
A. What animals Riku and Kairi will be (lions are most logical, though)
B. If Simba's daughter has been born yet

Yeah... I had to think about that. That's why I said 'I'll see what I can do with it'. I really didn't know if I should put the world's that were used in KH2 for the fact that I would have to try and figure out what would happen there after KH2.

I was planning to make Riku and Kairi lions, because Sora's one.

Simba's daughter was born at the end of KH2 (video in the credits). I'm just wondering if she'll be important. I don't think she would have grown very much in a few days.

Riku Fan1415 · April 29th, 2008, 11:57 PM

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Originally Posted by KH_Fantatic

I don't think she would have grown very much in a few days.

Well, there's another thing. We don't really know when that scene between Sora, Riku, and Kairi took place with the letter and all. It coulda been a year after Kh2 for all we know.

Rauxlen · April 30th, 2008, 12:05 AM

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Originally Posted by Riku Fan1415

Well, there's another thing. We don't really know when that scene between Sora, Riku, and Kairi took place with the letter and all. It coulda been a year after Kh2 for all we know.

I didn't really think about it. I just assumed it was a few days after KH2 because Sora, Riku, and Kairi's looks didn't change at all. But one year after KH1, everybody looked totally different (except Sora, he didn't change too much). I guess we just have to pretend that it was a few days after KH2 because that's what I thought it was when I wrote this.

~~trazin~~ · April 30th, 2008, 08:28 PM

i agree with KH_fanatic i thought it was only a few days after the game and it is her fan ffic so she should be able to do whatever he wants with it right

Rauxlen · April 30th, 2008, 09:11 PM

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Originally Posted by trazin

i agree with KH_fanatic i thought it was only a few days after the game and it is his fan ffic so he should be able to do whatever he wants with it right

...

You do know that I'm a girl, right?

~~trazin~~ · April 30th, 2008, 09:44 PM

srry i screwed up with that ill edit out though

Rauxlen · April 30th, 2008, 11:30 PM

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Originally Posted by trazin

srry i screwed up with that ill edit out though

lol, it's ok! Just understand that I'm a girl, ok? Rofl!

Riku Fan1415 · April 30th, 2008, 11:52 PM

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Originally Posted by trazin

i agree with KH_fanatic i thought it was only a few days after the game and it is her fan ffic so she should be able to do whatever he wants with it right

Hey, chill out, I'm just offering suggestions (looks like Riku Fan 1415's about to cry):sad::cry:

Rauxlen · May 1st, 2008, 12:00 AM

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Originally Posted by Riku Fan1415

Hey, chill out, I'm just offering suggestions (looks like Riku Fan 1415's about to cry):sad::cry:

I know you are. I've been taking them to mind, also. I was thinking of the same exact thing for the Pridelands, but not so much on the "one year after KH2" thing, only because Sora, Riku, and Kairi look exactly the same as in KH2 when they got the King's letter.

Thank you for your help, I really appreciate it.

To everyone who actually reads my FF:
Thank you for reading, and thank you for the comments. I love the advice, it helps me a lot. So thank you!

Riku Fan1415 · May 1st, 2008, 01:06 AM

Also, because of the fact that all the worlds' villains were defeated, like Jafar, and Oogie Boogie, think about whether or not you'll include those. Here's a list of worlds whose main villain has been defeated:
Space Paranoids
Pride Lands
Halloweentown
Atlantica
Land of Dragons

Hades, being a god, always returns, obviously, and for Agrabah you could make a story out of the third movie, include Saluk as a villain (the guy with the golden claw, pronounced Suh-look), and Casim (Aladdin's dad, pronounced Kah-seem)

Again, these are only ideas, as a reader I enjoy being surprised by the author

Rauxlen · May 1st, 2008, 02:29 AM

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Originally Posted by Riku Fan1415

Also, because of the fact that all the worlds' villains were defeated, like Jafar, and Oogie Boogie, think about whether or not you'll include those. Here's a list of worlds whose main villain has been defeated:
Space Paranoids
Pride Lands
Halloweentown
Atlantica
Land of Dragons

Hades, being a god, always returns, obviously, and for Agrabah you could make a story out of the third movie, include Saluk as a villain (the guy with the golden claw, pronounced Suh-look), and Casim (Aladdin's dad, pronounced Kah-seem)

Again, these are only ideas, as a reader I enjoy being surprised by the author

Hm... You lost me at the 'Aladdin' thing. I personally didn't know that there was a second movie... I guess I'll have to go study... For the Pridelands, I might be able to do a whole thing on the second movie, and somehow (impossibly) speed up time so that Simba's daughter is the same age as in the movie...

Another problem (unfourtunately) is that I need a new group of villains to make an appearance. I don't really know if nobodies and heartless will cut it. Organization XIII (unfourtunately) is out of the picture, so they can't be used as enemies anymore. And... I don't even know what happened to Malificent... So... I'm REALLY stuck right now.

I'll put some surprises in the story (if I can get past my problems). But you'll all have to wait until then.

~~trazin~~ · May 1st, 2008, 04:32 PM

don't worry KH_fanatic you will think of something
oohhhh i got an idea for my FF next chappie here i come

Rauxlen · May 1st, 2008, 07:25 PM

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Originally Posted by trazin

don't worry KH_fanatic you will think of something
oohhhh i got an idea for my FF next chappie here i come

Cool! I can't wait to read the next chappie!

Rauxlen · May 13th, 2008, 05:40 PM

Yays! I'm finally done with chapter 3! Here it is!

Chapter 3

The gummi ship neared its destination. Donald lowered the ship down to the ground. The door slowly opened. Sora jumped out onto the green grass below. Riku, Kairi, Donald, and Goofy all followed out behind him. Riku and Kairi looked at all of the beautiful plants in the garden.

“Whoa!” exclaimed Kairi, “These plants are so awesome! They’re huge, and they have different shapes!”
“Yeah, I thought that the first time I came here too,” said Sora.
“Gosh, the first time Sora was here was only a few weeks ago!” said Goofy.
Riku and Kairi laughed.
Sora sighed, “Let’s go find Queen Minnie.”
“The Queen’s always in the library,” Donald said.

The friends walked up some stairs, down a LONG hall, through the library door. They saw the Queen looking at some books.

“Queen Minnie! We’re glad you’re here!” exclaimed Goofy.

Queen Minnie turned around and smiled. “Everyone, thank goodness you’re here!” she said, “I need to ask you some things… First of all, do you know where the King is?”

“No, but he told us to tell you that he’s sorry for leaving again,” said Sora.

“Oh,” said Queen Minnie, disappointedly. Suddenly, her frown turned into a more happy expression.

“The King sent me a letter, also. He told me to show it to you whenever you got here,” said Queen Minnie, pulling out a bottle.
“I guess he knew that we were coming here first,” said Sora.
“If he asked us to do something, he knew we would do it as soon as possible,” said Riku.
“May we see the letter?” asked Kairi.
“Oh yes, of course,” said Queen Minnie, happily handing over the bottle.

Sora, Riku, Kairi, Donald, and Goofy all looked at the letter:

Dear Minnie,

I’m sorry for leaving again, but the worlds are in danger (again). I sent Sora, Riku, and Kairi over to the castle to deliver a message to you. I know they will come soon. Please show them this letter. Their’s is below the one I sent to you.

I’m Sorry,
Mickey

Dear Sora, Riku, and Kairi,

Thank you for coming to the castle. I have your new mission written in this letter. Heartless and Nobodies are attacking the worlds once again. I need you to protect the citizens of the worlds and destroy the fiends attacking them. I fear that Maleficent’s behind this, but I don’t know for sure. I need you to investigate that matter also. I feel like a new danger is upon us.

Be Careful,
King Mickey

“Why doesn’t he just send this stuff with the first letter?” asked Sora.
“Maybe he wanted it to be kept in a safe place so it would be confidential,” suggested Kairi.
“I wonder what the King’s doing,” said Riku, “I mean, we’re beating up all of the bad guys, what could he possibly be looking into?”
The three friends pondered this thought for a minute.
“Maybe he’s looking for Ansem the Wise. They were friends,” said Sora.
“Maybe he’s looking into the real threat, the source of all the Heartless and Nobodies,” said Kairi, “We could just be helping him with that.”

The friends decided that was their best explanation. They would just have to go on with their mission. ‘Maybe we’ll run into the King on this adventure,’ Sora thought. He hoped that he was right. Then he could know what was really going on.

“Oh, Donald, before I forget, Daisy wanted to talk to you,” said the Queen, “Let me go get her.”
“Oh no,” quacked Donald.
“Gosh, Donald. It’s just Daisy,” said Goofy.
“Yeah, I know, but-“ Donald was cut off by a door slamming.

Daisy walked in and gave Donald a death glare. “Donald Duck! You forgot our date again!” shouted Daisy.

“But Daisy, it’s not my fault!” exclaimed Donald.
“That’s what you always say! You say that the King sent you on some important mission and you couldn’t come,” said Daisy sadly.
“Daisy, I’m sorry, but I really do go on important missions!” said Donald, trying to comfort her.
“Yeah, whatever. Just be sure you don’t miss the next one!” exclaimed Daisy.

Sora, Riku, and Kairi laughed at Donald’s Dilemma. “It’s not funny!” shouted Donald. The three friends continued laughing, while Donald yelled at them to try and get them to stop.

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Ok, that was it! I have no clue when the next chappie will be up (I get writer's block all the time, plus the problems I encountered earlier).

After I wrote this chapter and read it, I realized that the beginning and closing of the King's letter to Minnie sounded like they were breaking up/divorcing, so please don't laugh, I didn't mean for it to sound like that.

Also, sorry for taking so long on this one, I needed some things I needed to work out for later chapters that would be decided in this one. So this chapter WAS important to the rest of the story! :P

XIII's follower · May 13th, 2008, 06:37 PM

If you're still taking suggesstions for worlds, I have a few:

The Hunchback of Notre Dame
Treasure Planet
Howl's Moving Castle(the movie already has a plot about losing one's heart already in it)
Toy Story
The Incredibles
A Bug's Life
Monster's Inc.

I'll post more when I come up with some