Timefixer

[Azrael]

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Chapter 8

The Town hall was in an open roof building very similar to half of a football stadium. The sunset's light tuned the hall into a lovely shade of pink and orange. Kaiba and Veronica were guests of honor, and as such were led up to the front rows. Veronica looked at the multitudes of people about. They all seemed so sad.

"Everyone here has had a run in with Vampires. Most of the people have lost at least one relative to the vampires. Several have had to kill their relatives because they were turned." James explained, seeing Veronica's thoughtful face. "I brought almost everyone here. As you know I lost my family to Vampires, Apopian ones to be exact. I decided to try to stop them so I started this village, keeping an eye on the news to try to find those who lost relatives to crimes that bear the hallmarks of a vampire attack."

"You said Apopian ones" Kaiba said. "Are there different types?"

"Several. Always growing, I'll tell you how later." For they had now arrived at the front of the rows. "I need to start this meeting." James walked onto the stage, and looked out at his people. "My friends, I have called this meeting for us to decide what to do with the apparent Vampire Kaiba and his friend Veronica." Veronica looked up. So they didn't consider her a Vampire. Good. She had enough problems to deal with. James continued. "Seto Kaiba has lived a good amount of time as a businessman. He has been photographed several times, including recently. He casts a certain reflection and when we did blood tests."

"When did they do that?" Kaiba whispered to Veronica angrily. "Can't you read their minds."

"As curious as I am too, Kaiba, My ethics are slightly more stringent than yours. It does tend to go that way when you can read minds. Now shush."

"He had not drunken anything. I therefore put forth that he is some sort of half Vampire and a very good spy. His powers so far match up to an Apopian Sire." there were hisses and boos from the crowd. Kaiba turned around and glared. It didn't do much good. Veronica broke her comfort zone and placed a hand on his arm. He turned back to James, but was still slightly seething.

"You're usually more collected." She whispered. He shrugged.

"Now, all those for..." A siren went off.

"HE'S A SPY!" A voice ran out. "They're attacking!"

"Whose attacking?" Veronica asked, then started to dip into her ability to sense weapons. Maybe she could tell who it was by what they wielded. Kaiba had a much better barometer in the dusk. He pulled on Veroinca's sleeve and pointed up. She turned her face up too, and saw winged forms stream across the sky.

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Chapter 9:

"Vampires" Kaiba breathed. He was looking at his bretheran. He turned his new face up, and felt Veronica hit him on the head.

"Don't do it." She whispered, pulling knives out of her backback. "You might blow your cover. Just fight, will ya?" He took a knife from her, and waved it around experimentally. "Sorry I never taught you. Good luck." And she plunged into the fray, for the Vampires had landed and were chasing after the townsfolk. Many of them were putting up a good fight. Others just surrendered, and they were either drunk or taken.

"mmm" A voice said, Kaiba turned around. A platinum blond vampiress with red eyes stood there. She wore a tube top and short pants. "He looks delicious." She sauntered up and Kaiba found he could not tear himself away. She placed a slim hand on his chest. "Why don't you kneel down?" Kaiba found himself in a fog, and he fell to his knees, he turned his head to the side... waiting... waiting for a kiss. The girl opened her mouth revealing long white canines. She lowered her head, and broke his skin. His head jerked back in pain for a split second then he grew drowsy with pleasure. Why had he even thought about fighting his nature. It felt so good. A scream rung out. The girl ignored it, but Kaiba didn't. He knew that scream, it was Veronica. The girl was withdrawing her mouth now, having taken about a pint with her. Her mouth now dripped blood that tinted her lips even redder. "Delicious." She muttered. "You truly were, now, why don't you do me?" And with that, she cut her wrist. Every Vampire instinct in Kaiba lusted for that blood, but Veronica's scream echoed in his mind. With a great force of will, he pulled up his knife and buried it in the girls flesh. She screamed, and fell down, true dead. He turned toward Veronica, slowly because of his loss of blood. A gentlemen Vampire had her too and was drinking deeply.

"She tastes so good." He said, withdrawing his mouth, then getting closer for seconds. "She really does..." Kaiba plunged the blade into the man, who turned to dust. He caught Veronica as she fell, her face was deathly pale.

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chapter 10:

Veronica was taken from behind when the vampire attacked her. She felt a sharp sting as the fangs broke through her skin, and a sense of drowsy pleasure as the vampire took her blood. She felt not only her physical strength diminish, but also her special abilites.

"This is so good" he muttered over and over. Then he fell into dust as Kaiba plunged a knife into him. She felt her body fall, and then sturdy arms as Kaiba caught her. She blacked out.

She woke up hours later, with a splitting headache. She heard beeping monitors, and had an IV in her arm.

"Kaiba" she croaked.

"I'm here." He walked in the door, He held a book and a newspaper under his arm and gazed at the very brave and not usually invalid girl. He sat next to her, and opened the book. It was "Ivanhoe", one of Veronica's favorites. He started to read, and she sighed in happiness and fell back asleep. She woke up hours later.

"what happened?" She asked when she awoke.

"a fifth of the town either died or disappered. They are burning the bodies of the dead. They count 20 true dead, but they know there are more, because several of them turned to dust when they were staked,"

"Why is this town here?"

"We are here to exterminate Vampires" James said as he walked into the room. "And what better place than by a Vampire nest? We will take a vote on whether or not you will spy for us Kaiba," James stood by Kaiba's chair now, but Kaiba had stood up when James entered.

"Fine." Kaiba assented.

"We can not give you a transfusion, Veronica, because you were drunk and you could turn into a Vampire yourself." Veronica nodded, and tried to prop herself up on some pillows. "No, you are staying down. Kaiba, a word?" Kaiba left the book with Veronica and followed James out of the door.

"the vote will be held in 12 hours. And she was the only survivor." Kaiba glanced out a near by window, then turned away when he saw a funeral pyre being prepared.

"What about this nest?"

"We managed to capture a vampire once, she said that they had a leader and an Originator too."

"Beg Pardon?"

"Originator, the first of a species."

"I thought Dracula..."

"No, common misconception. If a turning is a significant way along, but interrupted, then the one being turned does not turn into the species of the one that turned him, but a derivative, does that make sense?"
Kaiba nodded, he was good with numbers and math. "anyway, the name of the Originator is Apopis."

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Chapter 11

Kaiba looked around. He needed to find someone to take care of Veronica while she was weakened. The people in the town tended to shy away from. They knew he was a Vampire. He had no allies here, maybe not even James. He knew he walked a tenuous rode here. They needed him because of his Vampire abilities, but if he used them too much, then he faced a good chance of being killed. Would he be killed? He mentally ran through all the ways to kill a vampire as he looked for someone who might ally with him: Stakes or knives through the heart, touching them with the Eucharist or dousing them in Holy Water, beheadment..." Kaiba unconsciously started to reach for his throat, but stopped himself. He was a business man, he could not show emotion. He sidled into a cafe, hoping to get a cup of coffee to pass the time. The entire place fell silent. Kaiba strided forward confidently as if the silence did not bother him, He went to the back of the line to wait to order. He needed to integrate himself. He got up to the front. A young man about 18 ran the bar. He had red hair and took one glance at Kaiba before running away. Kaiba restrained a sigh and looked over the counter.

"Hello? I would like to place an order?"

"We don't serve Vampires here." It was an Asian woman this time, her hands folded across her chest.

"I'm not a vamp." She held out a clove of garlic, causing his lips to draw back in disgust.

"Go away." And they forced him out the shop. He sat down a curb and glowered for a bit, then rose to see if someone here would accept him.

"Kaiba?" It was Wren. "What are you donig here?" He straightened up quickly. She couldn't see him like this, all depressed. He was just usually grouchy.

"Trying to merge." He glared at the window, only to see absolutely no reflection. Wren sighed. "Can you do me a favor?"

"Sure, what?"

"Can you keep an eye on Veronica?" Wren's heart thumped loudly for a few seconds.

"Why not." She strained. Kaiba noticed it, but said nothing.

"Kaiba, Wren!" James walked down the street, "What are you doing here? the votes soon." Wren chased after Jame's retreating figure while Kaiba strode confidently after the two of them.

[Lycanthrope]

Read the first three chapters. There are a few grammatical mistakes, but nothing necessarily major. Very intriguing fanfic though. I'll read more of it eventually.

[madammina]

Dear Readers,

I am taking a hiatus from the site for the summer. I will continue to work on rewriting Timefixer, but I will not post updates until about September. Leave notes here what you think and I will look at them when I return.

I'm sorry I could not post the town hall meeting, but I will post it as soon as I log back on. Thank you

madammina

[madammina]

New update coming soon! Be patient. It should be up later today or tomorrow!

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I promised a new part and here it is!

Chapter 12

Kaiba stood at the edge of the stadium again, preparing himself to go in. They blamed him. He knew it. THey needed to blame someone and he was part vampire.

"You were here the whole time, they can't blame you for the captures." James muttered as he opened the door.

"what?" Kaiba turned to look at James with his ice blue eyes. "What captures?" He tried to make his voice harsh and dominant. If he could keep his cool after Paradisius and The Big Five trying to take over Kaiba Corp then he could keep his cool while people accused him of being a spy. He had never lost his cool, not even when he had hallucinated that he had an previous incarnation of him that was a minister in ancient Egypt while Yugi was pharoah.

"The Vampires lately have been kidnapping some of the villagers and some people from near by this place." James' phone rang, as he answered Kaiba looked around. Why would the Vampires want that? Why did he even think Vampires existed. It was preposterous in this day and age.

"I'm sorry. I was wrong. They refuse to let you in." James apologized to Kaiba. Kaiba only Hmphed. "Is there anyone who would be wondering where you are? Maybe you should call them." There was Mokuba. Everything had been so hectic that he hadn't checked on his brother.

"I can think of somebody." Kaiba said. And walked towards a public phone. As soon as his back faced James, Kaiba wrapped one of his hands around his locket. The locket that held Mokuba's picture. He leaned up against the side of the booth as he dialed his own private number. The phone ringed.

"Hello?" The voice was tenuous, curious. "How did you get this number."

"Moki, it's me."

"Seto? Seto! Where have you been! The Lawyers said if you didn't check in soon, that you would lose custody."

"WHAT!" Kaiba fumed as he blindly looked into the glass. If he had paid attention he would have noticed his completely absent reflection.

"Yeah, but since you checked in, I don't have to worry. Listen, I started my own deck today."

"that's great Moki." His mind was distracted. They wouldn't DARE to separate these two brothers. Mokuba was all he had left. Veronica would have to leave eventually. She almost never stayed long. She even said that staying this long was an abberation. Normally whatever ruled her pulled her out by now. Moki chattered in his ear. At least he could hear his brother's voice. There was a knock on the glass. James stood outside.

"I have to go. I'll keep in touch, okay?" This next part hurt him, but he had to say it. "And if you need anything, talk to Yugi. Alright?"

"'Course, Seto. Bye!"

"Bye." He hung the phone and opened the door. "Well?"

"You're going at sunset. It took some convincing but people think you should do well. Good Luck."

[madammina]

okay, way overdue, but here's the next part. ( I should note I lost my master copy, so, uh, yeah)

Veronica lay back in her bed, thinking about her dream, Vampires everywhere. Destroying all she had worked so hard to complete. She turned over and started to cry.

"Veronica?" It was Kaiba. He sat down on the seat next to her. "I'm leaving at twilight." She nodded, then suddenly realized he was in her room.

"do you mind standing over there?" Kaiba was surprised, but assented. He dragged the chair over to the corner and looked at her as she composed herself. "What's your plan while here?"

"Go through their library. You need to report back every now and then too. We need to find out what their planing."

"What makes you think their planning anything. You haven't had any dealings wtih Vampires, have you?"

"No, not really. But it seems like they ARE plannig something. James told me something interesting a while ago. He said that the leaders in this town get picked off easily. But it's not like his position. A researcher close to figuring something out will be taken out in an attack right before his speech or something."

"A Spy." Kaiba said. Veronica nodded. "Who?"

"You better figure that one out. You're going to have the best time of doing that."

"If they don't figure out that I still have my conscince." Veronica smiled.

"Well, it's hidden under all those business dealings of yours." He stared. "okay, not funny." Kaiba got up.

"I have to do some research of my own. And get some sleep." He shook out his brown hair, temporarily uncovering his ears.

"Kaiba."

"What."

"Your ears. They're pointed." Kaiba reached up to feel them. He walked toward the door, but turned around.

"Take care of yourself. Keep an eye on Mokuba, alright." Veronica nodded. And went back to sleep.


The next evening,Kaiba stood in the courtyard. His wings were stretched out and he gazed up at the setting sun. He now wore a long black leather coat, a gift from James. His wings folded against his back as he turned to look at James.

"What do you want me to do?" How hard it was for him to speak those words.

"Find out their plan." With that Kaibi's wings beat. And he slowly raised himself up to the sky. He flew toward a mountain as vampires flew out.

"Brethren!" He shouted. A vampire pulled up short.

"Who are you?" The lead asked. He had black hair cut military style and red eyes. Kaiba's eyes were purple now but he could see in the dark as well as any of them.

"Augustine." He responded, picking the name given to him by Veronica. "I am new, and unblooded. I heard about here so I decided to visit hoping to be allowed in." The leads got together for a bit, debating. THey broke apart.

"We will take you back. Our leader is Apopis. May you drink well here, Augustine."

[Azrael]

I like the new chapters, good to know there's still "good" fanfiction writers in these forums

[madammina]

New one! I still don't have my master copy, so instead of me just rewriting the chapters, I'll have to make them up from scratch.

er, Chap 14

Kaiba's back hurt as he flew back towards the mountain. At Veronica's assistance he HAD worked on his endurance, but the long distance was stretching it. As he got closer, he heard a wailing. His hands flew up to cover his ears.

"What is that?"

"The Falutaij Banshee. Cealach."

"Falutaij?" Kaiba asked, his hands still covering his ears. THe sound hurt his ears and chilled him to his core.

"Vampire Swear. You really are unblooded, aren't you."

"YES." Came back through gritted teeth. The other Vampires laughed.

"You get used to the Banshee's wail after a bit. Just move foward." It took alot, but he managed to do so. As he came into her sightrange, she saw him. He barely gave a passing glance to the green skinned creature with tangled coarse black hair and liquid black lightless eyes. What he could tell was that she could not tear her gaze from him. Her wailing changed, to one of sorrow. They all landed in the cave. Kaiba took in the largeness and how many people... VAMPIRES there were. All different kinds too.

"There are Masterian, Ricean, a few ramanga and Jiang Shi, and thankfully no Draculean."

"How do you know different types?" He muttered. The leader of the squadron grinned.

"You learn very quickly. As a rule of thumb, though, the easier it is for a species to reproduce, the less powerful it is. Draculeans reproduce the least, so they are the most powerful. Masterian reproduce very quickly and as such are among hte least powerful." A red head suddenly came up and kissed the leader.

"Hello... Thanos."

"helloooo Thorn." Thorn very quickly dragged away Thanos to a dark corner. He then heard sounds that made him feel fairly embarrassed which was new for him. As each of the people separated wtih girls a new one walked up to him."

"I'm the ramanga, Mariatu" she whispered throatily in his ear. She had pulled herself up onto his shoulder. "I drink the blood of nobles, only the best for me. Which" her voice got deliciously soft now. "I claim you." She started to kiss his cheek and work her way around to his lips, her legs helping her to do so.

"MARIATU!" She broke off, hissing angrily. One Vampire set fire, somehow, to a nearby lamp, revealing she was wearing something that not even Tea would wear, and made of leather too. The voice revealed itself to belong to a powerfully built man, with red eyes and brown hair. Kabai's hair. "I am Apopis. Originator of the Apopian Vampires obviously. I see you are one too." He pulled Kaiba's face to him, taking in his features. "Purple eyes, eh? I haven't seen that before. Not on a Vampire at any rate. Apopian have red, Masterian have Yellow, and Draculean's do turn red when angry. But Purple...." He sniffed. "You're unblooded too I see."

"Yes" Kaiba muttered. He knew he would have to show some respect if he was to survive. He HATED that. As it was he tried to pull himself into his business persona. "I am."

"Your name?"

"Augustine. Augustine Kaley." Apopis smiled, revealing his inch long teeth. Then he picked Kaiba up by the throat and threw him against a wall. Kaiba got up and hissed, revealing his own extended fangs and his eyes turned a more redish shade of purple.

"You'll be fine." Apopis walked away. "And you can feed tomorrow."

"Sir, I... I was a vegan in life. I'm not that comfortable."

"A what?" He turned around, red eyes aflame.

"A vegan. No animal products what so ever." Veronica again. What had she gone through to come up with a detailed COver story like this for him? Apopis shrugged.

"They daylight has come anyway." The vampires separated, Some hid in the back of the cave, while others continued.... the Apopian's though twtiched their shoulders and their feet were drawn up to ceiling. They crossed their arms and went to bed. Thanos, naked, drunken, and bloody grinned at Kaiba.

"We sleep like this." He slurred. He did the same motion, then got knocked out as his head hit the floor.

"Fine." he muttered and repeated the movement. It was odd looking at the world upside down. But he was suddenly overcome with tiredness and quickly fell asleep.

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chap 15

"Wake up" a voice whispered. Kaiba groaned. "Seto, wake up." Kaiba detatched violently from the ceiling and fell onto the ground.

"Who are you." He muttered, looking at a misty semi-transparent white skirt.

"Ceallach, the Banshee. You're mother."

"My mom's name was Kelly." he grumbled, trying to pull himself together.

"That's a nickname for Ceallach." She said smiling. "Now come outside before someone else wakes up."


It was about noon, and the sun dappled across the grass outside the cave, one of the few bits of life around the area. Kaiba sat on the ground, his wings resting gently across his back. Ceallach leaned up against one of the trees.

"How do I know you're my mom." He asked. He didn't trust her. She smiled, then said in reply.

"You're favorite food as a kid was pancakes, you liked to play chess, you're first book was Good Night Moon,but you favorite book, when we left, was Adventures of Huckleberry Finn. You're first word, I know you like to say was Neutron Blast, but it was actually water."

"that works." Kaiba said half grumbling, half astonished. Not even Mokuba knew what his first word was. "What's a Banshee?"

"The spirit of those who died in childbirth or who gave birth to a still born." She sighed, looking out across the valley to the town. "doomed to predict the death of others." Ceallach left her post by the three and floated to by him and sat down. "I met your father on a battlefield. I was predicting death, while he was drinking the almost dead. I don;t know how,but we fell in love. He could for a bit"

"what?"

"Dracula tried to turn him, but was interrupted. It was incomplete, making him not only a derivitave but an Originator. But with that comes a shred of the soul for a short time. It gets...used up. For Vampires, souls are finite and only Originators"

"and me?"

"Don't worry. You're young, unblooded, and "

"Only for so long." Kaiba said flatly.

"What?"

"I feel it already... the hunger... the thirst..." Ceallach looked at him in astonishment, seeing a hard white gleam on his lips.

"Don't THINK like that." She insisted, the sun half falling through her.

"Can you do something for me?" he asked.

"You're deliberately changing the subject, but yes."

"Take a message to the town there. Let them know I'm alright." Ceallach nodded.
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Veronica woke up in the library, her face sticking to a copy of Camilla. She smelt... tea. Black chai tea.

"Goody!" in a rare moment of recent enthusiasm she grabbed the tea, noticing a card with "For good Studying" written on the paper. It was perfectly warm, so she could drink it quickly, and not worry about burning her toungue. As soon as she was halfway done though, she knew SOMETHING was wrong. She collapsed onto the floor, her palms just barely holding her up as she choked on bile and vomit rising in her throat. She threw up.

"Help!" She cried.

"I'll get some." two voices cried. One was Ren. The other was a new voice. Looking up through teary eyes before she passed out, she saw someone green.

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