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Old 05-04-2008, 02:29 PM   #76
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Old 05-04-2008, 03:05 PM   #77
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[Name of story] Kingdom Hearts: The Keyblade Diaries
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Old 05-04-2008, 03:47 PM   #78
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Okay, I've left something for you. Beta readers, feel free to look it over and leave your thoughts.
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Sorry, bizness, I'm not really into KH fics, so I didn't read it, maybe other Beta Reader?

But as far as I saw...you hardly need any suggestions. Seemed pretty good.
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Nice idea, Allstar. I have a lot of time on my hands most of the time, so i think i'll join this little brigade of betareaders, if you dont mind.

A major turning point in Destati is coming, so i may get someone to beta read the chapter when i get around to writing it (I've got a ways before i get there).

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[Chapter]Basically its two chapters somewhere towards the beginning. I want to write the beginnning chapters still but need inspiration...or something
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I want to know if honestly this story is even worth my working on.
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Old 05-06-2008, 09:25 PM   #83
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I'll take a look at it for you later, Gil. Busy at the moment.
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Old 05-07-2008, 02:42 PM   #84
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Nice idea, Allstar. I have a lot of time on my hands most of the time, so i think i'll join this little brigade of betareaders, if you dont mind.

A major turning point in Destati is coming, so i may get someone to beta read the chapter when i get around to writing it (I've got a ways before i get there).

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I read yours anyway, so I'll take care of it. Just PM me when you post it. I've kinda been trailing off a little on following some of the fics around here.

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I'm going to sound so rude when I say this, so... *gives cookie now* D8;;

I don't mean to sound rude at all, BUT if you're going to ask me to do anything with this thread in a pestering sort of way, you'll have to spell my username right before I do anything with this. :d I'll gladly sticky this, but spell my name right first! 8D; Thank yew!

I also have a suggestion to make on the beta request form. To make things easier in advance and save some stories later, why not put a section on there of specifically what the writer's need improvement on in their stories? At the moment, the beta reader's only purpose in this thread is improvement with grammar because anything else was mentioned. Some writers may be looking for specific areas that they need help with, and grammar might not necessarily be one of them. There's many things that writers want improved when it comes to beta reading, like content/character development, dialogue, plot flow, description, etc. That's just my suggestion, though. :d

Otherwise... ZOMG I NEED A BETA ANYONE WANT TO BE MY BETA I'LL MAKE A FORM D: Not specifically sure which story yet, but I guess... >.>... <.<... THIS ONE IT SHALL BEEEE!

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And, for what I want to improve in my story? Dialogue, grammar, character development, and story flow, specifically one part in the chapter!

Thank you in advance to anyone willing to be my beta for this chapter! :D
You can go ahead and PM it to me TR. I had tottaly spaced about this.

And thanks for the sticky! It'll bound to help everyone out!
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Old 05-07-2008, 05:32 PM   #85
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Old 05-07-2008, 06:32 PM   #86
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Woot! Stickied! =D
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Old 05-10-2008, 06:22 PM   #87
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Congrats on the sticky.

[Name of story]: The Chronicles of Ragnar (An Original Fantasy Story)
[Author's name (or username if you prefer)]: Shadow Denizen
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I've already had to double post so please C&C. And I'd prefer if Grimm read it, since he's been reading it so far (I think), but anyone else is fine.
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You had to double post? O.o

I think I missed out a part then. I am following it.

Btw, in the memory of Takushi Rena's idea for better reviews...what exactly do you want help with? As I don't recall you making a lot of grammar mistakes, which is the only thing what we are correctin so far.

State what you need help on, and I'll try to give you advise. ^^
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Old 05-11-2008, 09:56 PM   #89
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You had to double post? O.o

I think I missed out a part then. I am following it.

Btw, in the memory of Takushi Rena's idea for better reviews...what exactly do you want help with? As I don't recall you making a lot of grammar mistakes, which is the only thing what we are correctin so far.

State what you need help on, and I'll try to give you advise. ^^
Well, it's all about the plotline. I want to know if I'm going too fast with the story, or if it's too boring. Basically, I want help with the plotline development.

Plus, I want to update, but I don't want to triple post.
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Old 05-11-2008, 10:06 PM   #90
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Yes, well, I'm not in the mood for reading or writing today..sorry. I'll comment tommorow.

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