The Uncomforting Truth.

SeaSalt IceCream · 02-01-2008, 04:15 AM

Hi, Ok This is my first fan fiction ever written so I really do hope you'll enjoy it! I'll do my best to make an intresting real for you all!

Just so you know where I'm comming from the story starts two days before Sora, Riku and Kairi get the King's letter... Ok I'm not telling you anymore I guess you'll just have to be Surprised.

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The Uncomforting Truth
Written By SeaSalt IceCream

Chapter 1 - Waking Thoughts

Sora rolled over looking at his clock. It was 2 am. He sighed and rolled over looking out his open window. There was a gentle sea breeze comming though. He looked over far towards the Island where Riku now lives. He tossed and turned trying to sleep but more and more thoughts rushed through his mind.

He had been home only a week from his adventures but already he was itching for the excitement of seeing new world, whiping out heartless and seeing new friends. For all the time adventuring with Donald and Goofy Sora missed home but now he was home he wanted to go away again. How could he though? He had no gummi ship. He then remembered how Beast went to fight for Belle in Hollow Bastion. He just simply believed he would find her, and he did. "Maybe... That's all you need to do," Sora said to himself still staring out the window allowing the breeze to flow through his spikey hair. "But... what about Riku and Kairi? What if they don't feel the same way?" His mind kept jumping to adventures he'd had, his feelings were both sad and happy. He smiled as he thought about the afternoon he and Riku first arrived back on their island. Kairi was there waiting along with Donald, Goofy and the King. Things couldn't have been better, but soon after things didn't feel quite so right...

After Donald, Goofy and the King left back home to their castle. Sora realised he had forgotten to ask them if they too had remembered what happened before they went to sleep. If they too remembered Namine. These thoughts were really unsettling and Sora still found it hard to fall asleep.

He tossed and turned but nothing could shake away the many thoughts going to his head. He turned back towards the window and watched the breeze move swifly through the palm leaves. He then saw the sky and sea turn from a dark blue to an orange glow. One by one the stars disapeered as the sun rose. He heard movement down stairs and decided to go down to the kitchen.

His mother was in the Kitchen busily preparing herself some porridge. "Morning!" He called out brightly despite the lack of sleep he had.

His mother jumped, "Sora! Hi honey, you're up early!" she smiled at him but that smile turned into a frown of concern. "Are you feeling okay? You look a little pale. You're not catching somthing I hope?" She left he breakfast and felt her son's forehead.

"Mum... Relax, I'm fine. I just didn't sleep much that's all." He stepped back from her hand and smiled. "I think it was a little too bright last night."

"Well, I suppose it was a full moon last night." She said and tried to look a little less worried.

Sora saw she still wasn't entirely convinced he was ok. "Look mum, I'm alright. Just a little tired, that's all." He said reasuringly.

"Alright then." His mother said similing with a pretend smile. "What can I get you for breakfast?"

"Nothing" Sora replied. "I think I might skip breakfast and go over to the island. I'll be back later."

"Well, I guess then I'll see you later." She smiled at him still looking slightly concerned. "Have a good time!" She called back as Sora waved and headed out the door.

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Endless Reason · 02-01-2008, 04:22 AM

First post! i hope lol... Brilliant! i love it! i cant wait till next chapter!... nothing wrong with it whatsoever!... Also, tis interesting! keep it up!

SeaSalt IceCream · 02-01-2008, 04:25 AM

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Originally Posted by ShadowRikuRising

First post! i hope lol... Brilliant! i love it! i cant wait till next chapter!... nothing wrong with it whatsoever!... Also, tis interesting! keep it up!

Thanks! I hope I get some more readers soon.

I hope they like it too, lol Oh and to anyone, I do take constructive critisism if I think it's apropriate.

Xuan · 02-01-2008, 04:43 AM

Too short. Other than that you're just okay.

SeaSalt IceCream · 02-01-2008, 04:52 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Xuan

Too short. Other than that you're just okay.

Yeah I know but it is only the first chapter...

Elorah · 02-01-2008, 05:01 AM

This is your first fic? Wow, that's pretty good ^_^
The plot seems interesting, about him wanting to get away from home even though he just got back.
I think your chapters could be just a little bit longer though.
Keep up the great work!

SeaSalt IceCream · 02-01-2008, 05:14 AM

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Originally Posted by Elorah

This is your first fic? Wow, that's pretty good ^_^
The plot seems interesting, about him wanting to get away from home even though he just got back.
I think your chapters could be just a little bit longer though.
Keep up the great work!

Yes it is, thankyou!
And yes I will make the next chapters longer!

Elorah · 02-01-2008, 05:58 AM

Yaay! That would be great!
Really looking forward to see what happens next ^_^

SeaSalt IceCream · 02-01-2008, 06:12 AM

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Originally Posted by Elorah

Yaay! That would be great!
Really looking forward to see what happens next ^_^

Sure thing, seeings though the the first chapter was too short I'll write the second tomorrow to make people happy lol.

Elorah · 02-01-2008, 06:22 AM

Ooh cool that sounds good. Well hopefully I'll be back reading tomorrow! :3

Xuan · 02-01-2008, 06:56 AM

I know it's the first chapter. Since its good you should make it longer or else people will feel very unsatsified.

SeaSalt IceCream · 02-01-2008, 07:33 AM

Quote:

I know it's the first chapter. Since its good you should make it longer or else people will feel very unsatsified.

Fair enough, Im writing chapter two as we speak so I will keep that in mind, but you may be sorry. I actually kept it short in fear of making it too boring, but anyway you can expect lots of chapters so no worries on it being too short in the long run ;) .

Endless Reason · 02-01-2008, 07:35 AM

Thats good to hear that you do plan on keeping it up

I would be a bit worried too... i mean, i reckon mines too short, but ppl dont mind.. i spose it really depends on what sort of style your using

SeaSalt IceCream · 02-01-2008, 10:11 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ShadowRikuRising

Thats good to hear that you do plan on keeping it up

I would be a bit worried too... i mean, i reckon mines too short, but ppl dont mind.. i spose it really depends on what sort of style your using

Yeah I guess you're right. Anyways Im writing heaps more now, so let's hope it goes to people's liking. this time.

Stay tuned, I'm half way through writing chapter 2 so expect it possibly tomorrow if everything goes well!

Xuan · 02-01-2008, 11:51 AM

That's great news dude.

However, can I ask how long it takes you to write a chapter? Count using hours please, exclude rest time of course.

02-01-2008, 04:15 AM	#1
SeaSalt IceCream ♥A frozen Dessert Product Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: Just Chilling in the bottom of the Twilight Town Station Freezer! Age: 15 Gender: Posts: 1,588 Rep Power: 2	The Uncomforting Truth. Hi, Ok This is my first fan fiction ever written so I really do hope you'll enjoy it! I'll do my best to make an intresting real for you all! Just so you know where I'm comming from the story starts two days before Sora, Riku and Kairi get the King's letter... Ok I'm not telling you anymore I guess you'll just have to be Surprised. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ The Uncomforting Truth Written By SeaSalt IceCream Chapter 1 - Waking Thoughts Sora rolled over looking at his clock. It was 2 am. He sighed and rolled over looking out his open window. There was a gentle sea breeze comming though. He looked over far towards the Island where Riku now lives. He tossed and turned trying to sleep but more and more thoughts rushed through his mind. He had been home only a week from his adventures but already he was itching for the excitement of seeing new world, whiping out heartless and seeing new friends. For all the time adventuring with Donald and Goofy Sora missed home but now he was home he wanted to go away again. How could he though? He had no gummi ship. He then remembered how Beast went to fight for Belle in Hollow Bastion. He just simply believed he would find her, and he did. "Maybe... That's all you need to do," Sora said to himself still staring out the window allowing the breeze to flow through his spikey hair. "But... what about Riku and Kairi? What if they don't feel the same way?" His mind kept jumping to adventures he'd had, his feelings were both sad and happy. He smiled as he thought about the afternoon he and Riku first arrived back on their island. Kairi was there waiting along with Donald, Goofy and the King. Things couldn't have been better, but soon after things didn't feel quite so right... After Donald, Goofy and the King left back home to their castle. Sora realised he had forgotten to ask them if they too had remembered what happened before they went to sleep. If they too remembered Namine. These thoughts were really unsettling and Sora still found it hard to fall asleep. He tossed and turned but nothing could shake away the many thoughts going to his head. He turned back towards the window and watched the breeze move swifly through the palm leaves. He then saw the sky and sea turn from a dark blue to an orange glow. One by one the stars disapeered as the sun rose. He heard movement down stairs and decided to go down to the kitchen. His mother was in the Kitchen busily preparing herself some porridge. "Morning!" He called out brightly despite the lack of sleep he had. His mother jumped, "Sora! Hi honey, you're up early!" she smiled at him but that smile turned into a frown of concern. "Are you feeling okay? You look a little pale. You're not catching somthing I hope?" She left he breakfast and felt her son's forehead. "Mum... Relax, I'm fine. I just didn't sleep much that's all." He stepped back from her hand and smiled. "I think it was a little too bright last night." "Well, I suppose it was a full moon last night." She said and tried to look a little less worried. Sora saw she still wasn't entirely convinced he was ok. "Look mum, I'm alright. Just a little tired, that's all." He said reasuringly. "Alright then." His mother said similing with a pretend smile. "What can I get you for breakfast?" "Nothing" Sora replied. "I think I might skip breakfast and go over to the island. I'll be back later." "Well, I guess then I'll see you later." She smiled at him still looking slightly concerned. "Have a good time!" She called back as Sora waved and headed out the door. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ __________________ "The thing about being a Good Loser, is that you're STILL a Loser - HOUSE M.D ^Made By Me^ ~Wishing Star Studios~ Last edited by SeaSalt IceCream; 02-01-2008 at 08:50 PM.

02-01-2008, 04:22 AM	#2
Endless Reason Everything fades away Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Lies always visible, what's the point? Your eyes, everything is there. Age: 14 Gender: Posts: 2,188 Rep Power: 4 Scan RPG Profile	Re: The Uncomforting Truth. First post! i hope lol... Brilliant! i love it! i cant wait till next chapter!... nothing wrong with it whatsoever!... Also, tis interesting! keep it up! __________________ ^Sig and Av by me(as usual) Everything fades away, nothing left. Do I have reason? Do I matter? No one cares; thoughts constantly running. <3 Amby The Dragoon's Hub. My Graphic's Shop Gifts: Shad's //Ta-Chan's [{My deviART page!}]. I'd appreciate anything on any of my works thx

02-01-2008, 04:43 AM	#4
Xuan FanFic Slayer, K.Theorist Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: I am human, no worries. I don't suck brain juice anyway, it's too juicy. Gender: Posts: 1,008 Rep Power: 0 Scan RPG Profile	Re: The Uncomforting Truth. Too short. Other than that you're just okay.

02-01-2008, 05:01 AM	#6
Elorah Organization Member Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Hunting down fictional characters... Net at the ready Age: 15 Gender: Posts: 484 Rep Power: 1	Re: The Uncomforting Truth. This is your first fic? Wow, that's pretty good ^_^ The plot seems interesting, about him wanting to get away from home even though he just got back. I think your chapters could be just a little bit longer though. Keep up the great work!

02-01-2008, 05:58 AM	#8
Elorah Organization Member Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Hunting down fictional characters... Net at the ready Age: 15 Gender: Posts: 484 Rep Power: 1	Re: The Uncomforting Truth. Yaay! That would be great! Really looking forward to see what happens next ^_^

02-01-2008, 06:22 AM	#10
Elorah Organization Member Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Hunting down fictional characters... Net at the ready Age: 15 Gender: Posts: 484 Rep Power: 1	Re: The Uncomforting Truth. Ooh cool that sounds good. Well hopefully I'll be back reading tomorrow! :3

02-01-2008, 06:56 AM	#11
Xuan FanFic Slayer, K.Theorist Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: I am human, no worries. I don't suck brain juice anyway, it's too juicy. Gender: Posts: 1,008 Rep Power: 0 Scan RPG Profile	Re: The Uncomforting Truth. I know it's the first chapter. Since its good you should make it longer or else people will feel very unsatsified.

02-01-2008, 07:35 AM	#13
Endless Reason Everything fades away Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Lies always visible, what's the point? Your eyes, everything is there. Age: 14 Gender: Posts: 2,188 Rep Power: 4 Scan RPG Profile	Re: The Uncomforting Truth. Thats good to hear that you do plan on keeping it up I would be a bit worried too... i mean, i reckon mines too short, but ppl dont mind.. i spose it really depends on what sort of style your using __________________ ^Sig and Av by me(as usual) Everything fades away, nothing left. Do I have reason? Do I matter? No one cares; thoughts constantly running. <3 Amby The Dragoon's Hub. My Graphic's Shop Gifts: Shad's //Ta-Chan's [{My deviART page!}]. I'd appreciate anything on any of my works thx

02-01-2008, 11:51 AM	#15
Xuan FanFic Slayer, K.Theorist Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: I am human, no worries. I don't suck brain juice anyway, it's too juicy. Gender: Posts: 1,008 Rep Power: 0 Scan RPG Profile	Re: The Uncomforting Truth. That's great news dude. However, can I ask how long it takes you to write a chapter? Count using hours please, exclude rest time of course.

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