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Old 05-14-2008, 05:01 PM   #1
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I could use your feedback. but don't bother telling me stuff about the characters cause i like them the way they are, and i'm pretty pleased with the clouds. What i want to hear about is the water, trees, grass and sand and all that stuff. i also want to know if i should put outlines around the background parts like the characters, or if i should leave just leave it with them. Also, ignore the sides of the picture, i'll fix that later.

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Old 05-14-2008, 05:06 PM   #2
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I like how the background has a soft quality to it. ^^ I think it's fine, although that's just my opinion.
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Old 05-14-2008, 05:20 PM   #3
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I like how the background has a soft quality to it. ^^ I think it's fine, although that's just my opinion.
Thanks. I like it too, but i get second thoughts on everything, that's why i'm asking.
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gah you bitch XD amazing how do you do thin lineart so well?
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Wow, very impressive, that is very very good.
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Old 05-14-2008, 06:56 PM   #6
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gah you bitch XD amazing how do you do thin lineart so well?
lol! Thaks, i don't know, doing the lines it actually pretty easy fo rme. It just comes to me i guess.

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Wow, very impressive, that is very very good.
Thanks, from the looks of things so far, it looks like i wont have to fix anything.
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it's a fantastic drawing, especially since I have a hard time drawing non-humans.
It is kinda obvious that the background was kinda thrown in and her left leg should be a bit closer to her center ( just a bit). Other than that it's great.

shadow might be off but I'm no expert in that field.
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it's a fantastic drawing, especially since I have a hard time drawing non-humans.
It is kinda obvious that the background was kinda thrown in and her left leg should be a bit closer to her center ( just a bit). Other than that it's great.

shadow might be off but I'm no expert in that field.
Yeah it was, i hate doing backgrounds I noticed the leg too, but since it's just a little off, i'm going to leave it. And the shadow, no matter where i put it, it seems off to me. Can anyone help me out with shadow?

Can you think of anything to help me with the background, or should i just let it be?
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I personally hate fixing finished drawings so I think you should leave it be but, the fact that you made the back ground soft and the shadow hard throws off the picture. And I think the background should be hard where she's closer and softer as it goes to the horizon line.
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I personally hate fixing finished drawings so I think you should leave it be but, the fact that you made the back ground soft and the shadow hard throws off the picture. And I think the background should be hard where she's closer and softer as it goes to the horizon line.
Definitely. The shadow should have softer edges and be lighter since the person is farther from the ground. When you hold a flashlight up to the wall and put your hand between the light and the wall, there's a shadow. The closer your hand is to the wall the smaller the shadow is but it's also more crisp. As it gets closer to the light the shadow is bigger but lighter and you may not be able to tell the shape of your hand. In this case, try not to make it so black and recognizable. Obviously it has to look like the person, but not so defined.
Also, try moving it more out of the picture; down, that is. The girl's shadow is barely even on the picture, so try to follow that. Make it so that it does still line up, but closer to the bottom edge perhaps.

Other than that, the background (and the characters) look very good. I think the biggest thing would be the contrast between the cartoons and then the realism of the background. Try continuing that realism contrast by adding some grains in the sand closer to the characters, at least to add some foreground definition beyond just the shadow.
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Definitely. The shadow should have softer edges and be lighter since the person is farther from the ground. When you hold a flashlight up to the wall and put your hand between the light and the wall, there's a shadow. The closer your hand is to the wall the smaller the shadow is but it's also more crisp. As it gets closer to the light the shadow is bigger but lighter and you may not be able to tell the shape of your hand. In this case, try not to make it so black and recognizable. Obviously it has to look like the person, but not so defined.
Also, try moving it more out of the picture; down, that is. The girl's shadow is barely even on the picture, so try to follow that. Make it so that it does still line up, but closer to the bottom edge perhaps.

Other than that, the background (and the characters) look very good. I think the biggest thing would be the contrast between the cartoons and then the realism of the background. Try continuing that realism contrast by adding some grains in the sand closer to the characters, at least to add some foreground definition beyond just the shadow.
Thank you very much! i'm gonna do that and see how it comes out.
I fixed it, here's the link , it's also on the first post as well. I added foot prints too, but i'm not liking them. you think you can help with them as well? if not i will probably take them off.
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Old 05-15-2008, 02:04 PM   #12
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You did a really impressive work on the characters, caught the Sonic-y style perfectly.

About the background, did you really draw that yourself? Cause it looks kind of copied and pasted from an artwork of Emerald Coast. O.o
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i did it by myself, but it is a part of the stage. i saw that part of the stage and thought it would be perfect for the characters, plus the sand looks way different then it does in the game. I can do sonic characters by memory but yet to do backgrounds by memory. I suck at backgrounds, i'm getting better though, you can see it in the clouds

I don't think it looks copied and pasted though, cause it doesn't look 3D, or is it just me?
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i did it by myself, but it is a part of the stage. i saw that part of the stage and thought it would be perfect for the characters, plus the sand looks way different then it does in the game. I can do sonic characters by memory but yet to do backgrounds by memory. I suck at backgrounds, i'm getting better though, you can see it in the clouds

I don't think it looks copied and pasted though, cause it doesn't look 3D, or is it just me?
Oh, okay, I was just wondering because it looked so damn familiar. ^^
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Old 05-15-2008, 02:43 PM   #15
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Oh, okay, I was just wondering because it looked so damn familiar. ^^
I would of asked a similar question too. But thanks for the compliment.
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