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| Under Water | Interactive PART! YouTube - Chain - Underwater Mix Put this on before you read! Running, Can't we fly in the sky? [Pun not taken]. Going here and there. It's a simple thing, but we need something that lets you go to the stars, at night..... Pant* *Pant* "Seriously, can't school start at 1:59 and ends at 2:00?" Suddenly I felt a gasping wind going through my hair. "Woah....." I saw a Bluring light zig zagging through the road. "Felt like God's Speed". "Hey KID YOUR GONNA BE LATE FOR SCHOOL!" said the bluring light. "I think i know that!" My name is Isle (Pronounced I'll) Misturugi. Im the age of 15 and I go to Fujiagoma High. 531, 532, 534!" said Isle. *Books slammed on the floor* "ISLE YOUR LATE AGAIN!" "I'm sorry Mr. Wallace wont happen again, I PROMISE!" *Bell Rings* "Seriously Isle your gonna get expelled for just being late everyday" said Kazu. Kazu is an old Friend of mine since 10 years before. He's mature and cool. "Hey Isle, did you hear of those new things called Airs?" said Kazu. "You mean those hover boards? Yeah, i saw one before i went to school." said Isle. Well how about those gangs?" said Kazu. "Gangs?" Last edited by Skye; October 14th, 2009 at 01:40 AM. |
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| Beauty Blooms in all Forms Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: somewhere getting distracted =P Age: 17 Posts: 1,769
Rep Power: 3 ![]() ![]() Currently playing: Tic-Tac-Toe XD Level: 31 EXP: | Eeeeeeee!! lol cant wait for more |
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| Keyblade Wielder | squeeeee!! i like iit c: btw you should put the song BEFORE the chapter, so people will see it before they start reading. |
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| Sidekick | this reminds me of air gear but of a different air (LOL NO I DO NOT MEAN THE AIR-BOARDS) |
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| Beauty Blooms in all Forms Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: somewhere getting distracted =P Age: 17 Posts: 1,769
Rep Power: 3 ![]() ![]() Currently playing: Tic-Tac-Toe XD Level: 31 EXP: | awww i didnt listen to the song, dang it! |
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| Beauty Blooms in all Forms Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: somewhere getting distracted =P Age: 17 Posts: 1,769
Rep Power: 3 ![]() ![]() Currently playing: Tic-Tac-Toe XD Level: 31 EXP: | hmmm should it be a fanfic then?? |
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| Keyblade Wielder | At first I thought I was reading a book I have read before then I noticed how different they are. Continue monsieur. |
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| ~Hollow~ Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: The Saltwater Room, listening to Owl City :3 Age: 14 Posts: 1,596
Rep Power: 2 ![]() Level: 34 EXP: | its really good skye!! keep writing it lol!! :3 |
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| Cozza Frenzy | *covers mouth with my right hand flabbergasted at how bad this is* Your style of writing lacks grammar, maturity, and substance. |
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| Burn My Dread Join Date: May 2007 Location: Ivalice Age: 16 Posts: 7,715
Rep Power: 12 ![]() ![]() ![]() Level: 32 EXP: | I'd reccommend that you quit centering your text and don't use any more asterisk actions. Have you looked at a novel recently? I mean, Twilight sucks, but at least it's easy to pick up and read and it doesn't read like a conversation between two people on an internet forum. I don't think you're doing this on purpose, but if you are, please don't try to be a beautiful and unique snowflake in this regard. As for the actual substance/story/etcetc...there's not much of it. |
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| :X Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: In my castle, plotting your demise Age: 18 Posts: 6,699
Rep Power: 13 ![]() ![]() Level: 21 EXP: | Honestly, have you ever taken an English class in your life? |
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| Under Water | Quote:
@Sombre, I am reading a book, but I'm not actually a good writer. @Ulti. Yes And for some reason my computer doesn't have word. So I'm using word-pad | |
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