Torture Story

[Sazzah]

Damn! I was angry! XD
Please don't be scared

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I want to drag him upstairs, punch him, kick him in the area, throw him downstairs, drag him up the stairs again and then pull out his eyes, rip out his tongue and then throw him out a window whilst attached to a rope around his neck and then pull him back in the house through the broken window and then throw him out another window and then shoot him 3 times, break his skull, attempt to find his brain (good luck with that) and then cut off his legs with a wood saw and then hack his hands off and then stick needles in his torso and then break his neck even more and then kick him some more and then push him out the window on a rope made out of barbed wire and then jump on him and then feed him to the crows!!!

[Rapidus Procella]

So where exactly is this "so-called" torture story?

[Watson]

Originally Posted by King Sora X

So where exactly is this "so-called" torture story?

This, by far.

All I see is a small paragraph of anger-filled rantings, using large text to make it seem more substantial then it is.

Or is that it?

[Annoyance]

Originally Posted by King Sora X

So where exactly is this "so-called" torture story?

More like, "Where's the story?"

This is more of a incredibly long sentence that was written because a boy cheated on her or something and written in maybe 5 minutes.

Sazzah, if you want to write a story, writing a bunch of actions isn't being discriptive. It only makes your story boring and bland. Action after action after action gets you no where higher than a 5 year old talking about how he caught a frog.

"And then, I jumped in the pond and then I caught it and then and then and then..."

Do you see what I mean?

This isn't a story. There's no plot, there's no character development, no reasoning for anyone's actions else than "LOLS ANGRY TIME".

[hood]

Wait this is a story? How?