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| Quoth the Raven Join Date: May 2007 Location: Tomorrow Age: 19 Posts: 2,424
Rep Power: 6 ![]() ![]() Level: 14 EXP: | I only read the first few chapters, but it's pretty interesting so far. I definitely get that "Shounen Jump" feel when I read this. Though, you should work on your descriptions (I found them a bit vague, forcing the reader to compensate) and be more concise (for example, some times you add in adverbs that don't really need to be there). All in all, nice job! I'll finish it up later. |
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| Organization Member | This really was an idea that I had for an anime a while back and I decided to make a story for it on here. Thanks for the tips. I've been trying really hard to work on the descriptions so far. This is only my second story I've ever written so I'm still pretty new to the whole writing thing. |
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| Organization Member | I know I've made you wait and for that I apologize deeply. I finally got the time to update my story. So enjoy the next chapter. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "I knew this would happen eventually." "What's wrong Leo?" "He awakened, it was for a short time but it happened." "It can't be. Capricorn said that it wouldn't happen for another few weeks." "It happened Virgo. It's time to move at double pace." Brittle Bullet Chapter 8: The Scales of Judgement Aries cowered backwards. He wanted to run but something wasn't letting him. Taurus just stood still in shock and watched on in horror. Enka followed Chris with his eyes as he rose slowly into the air. He stopped rising and opened his eyes. They were glowing different colors. One was his normal blue, the other was yellow. Something began to materialize in front of him. It was a set of giant scales. Chris spoke but it wasn't his voice. This voice was loud and deep. It echoed through the junkyard. "You wish to kill me?" he asked Aries. "Well before you can be given the chance, we must judge your soul. It will be weighed against the feather." A glowing white feather appeared on one side of the scales. An outline of Aries appeared on the other. Now he couldn' move at all. He noticed that he was slowly being lifted into the air to face Chris. His eyes caught the symbol onhis head. It was the symbol of Libra, the Scales. "Now let the judment begin!" The scales began to tip and sway up and down on both sides for a nerve-racking 30 seconds. Finally they came to rest with Aries sitting lower that the feather. "It is done," said Chris. The scales dissappeared and Aries was held still in the air. Chris raised his arms out to point towards him. Aries fully metal body trembled from the sight. "You don't deserve to live." Chris clenched his fists and pulled his arms out slowly to either side. Aries' face began to tighten in pain. "GAAHHHHHHHHH!!!!!" It seemed as if Aries' skin was slowly being pulled outward. The metal was being removed from his entire body at once. "Now you're finished!!" The silver liquid metal shot out in all directions along with Aries' blood as he fell to the ground, blood pouring from every open spot on his body. Chris' eyes closed as he swayed and fell to the ground and knocked out. "Chris!!" yelled Enka as he ran to his side. "Wake up man. What the hell was that?" "I don't know what he did to Aries but you're gonna pay for it," Taurus said as he walked towards Enka. He reached down and grabbed him by the hair and lifted him until they were face to face. "Time to die little one." He threw Enka hard into the nearest pile of junk. Taurus bent over slightly and grabbed his right shoulder with his left hand. It looked as if his shoulder blade was rising out of his body. His shirt began to rip and a huge minigun raised from his back and came to rest on his shoulder. He squeezed hard on his arm and the gun began to spin. "I'm gonna enjoy this," he said as he gave his arm one hard tug. Bullets flew like bees from their hive into the pile of trash Enka was in. Taurus turned from side to side slowly annihilating the trash in front of him. After about a minute of firing, he let his arm go and looked the smoke. When it cleared, he was shocked at the sight. Enka was perfectly unharmed. On his left arm was a masiive spinning sheild made of what looked like red light. It slowed to a stop and shut off, returning into his mechanical arm. Enka jumped to his feet and patted the dust off his pants. "You're gonna need more than that little thing to kill me," he said Taurus. Taurus winced in anger. "You're just as arrogant as you used to be you little prick," he replyed. "No respect for your elde-" Enka's foot collided with his chin sending him reeling backwards to stand up straight. Enka charged at him and released something in his right arm. His forearm flipped around and locked into place. His hand was no longer there but was replaced by a large barrel. He jammed the end of it directly into Taurus' stomach. "Sayonara douchebag," Enka said as he fired. He moved back and returned his arm to its original position. On Taurus' belly was a small black device counting down from thirty. Taurus looked at it and freaked out. The minigun on his back returned into his body and he ran from the junkyard. He got no more than twenty feet away from the junkyard when the bomb exploded. Enka watched him disappear with delight. Enka winced and grabbed his shoulder on his left. The force of those bullets still caused the recoil to rip an artery. Chris awoke in a haze in the junkyard. Enka stood holding his left arm which was bleeding profusely from the shoulder. It, just as his right arm, was really made of a special bullet-proof metal with a strange attachment. How long had he been out? The last thing he remembered was Aries about to kill both him and Enka and then that wierd artifact glowing. After that, everyting was black and forgotten. What had happened? Taurus was gone and Aries lay dead on the ground at his feet. He had blood coming from every pore in his body. What had happened to them while he was out? "You have been out cold for about a minute or so. Not that much happened," said Enka looking at him nervously. "What happened to him?" asked Chris pointing to Aries' limp body. "Well..." ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- To be continued in B.B. Chapter 9 Tell me what you think. |
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| Organization Member | I just want o anyone who is reading this to know that I'll be writing and posting many more chapters in the next few weeks so if you want to catch up, feel free to read up on the last few chapters. |
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| Organization Member | I know its been a while. Hopefully people are still reading this story. Here is the next chapter. Its another little step forward. But it matters. Please enjoy. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "What a fuckin' brat." "How the hell did he do that, Leo?" "I don't know. Just calm down, you two." "Well now what?" "I'm surprised he survived it, but Taurus is in repair now." "I have a little clean-up to take care of so hold down the fort Virgo." "No problem, Leo." Brittle Bullet Chapter 9: The Lion's Strike A week after the fight in the junkyard, Chris has been hard at work getting the hang of his powers. Teamwork training has been going well with Kibo and Enka. Isaac has yet to show just how good at fighting he really is, but Chris doesn't seem to care. "Should I teach it to him?" "Pleeeease show me!!!" "Aww, why make him wait?" "Ok, fine." Chris watched in amazement as Kibo flipped his special eye into place. He removed a rather large hunting knife from his holster in his back pocket. He flipped it around in his hand over and over again. It rested on the tip of his middle finger. "Watch closely," he uttered quietly. With the slightest flick of his wrist, the knife flew in a massive arc around the room, decapitating all the target dolls in the room. Kibo then caught it lightly and stuck back in its holster. "How do you do that?" Chris asked in amazement. "Can I do it too?" "It's actually something only I can do," replied Kibo. "Sorry, buddy. I wish I could teach you but its impossible. You would have to have an eye like mine. It gives me pinpoint accuracy. As well as a slight ability to see a few seconds into the future." "No way!!" "Yeah, but... If I over use it, my eye begins to bleed. If I don't stop after that, I could go blind." Chris sat down slightly depressed. All he could do was manipulate bullets while Kibo had pinpoint accuracy with anything he threw and Enka was basically half-machine. He felt like the biggest odd man out. Suddenly Isaac burst into the room yelling his head off. "We've spotted him!!!" "What do you mean?" asked Enka frantically. "Leo," replied Isaac quickly. "He actually managed to give up his position. If we can catch him in a pincer attack, we might be able to take him out." Everyone ran to the briefing rom as fast as their feet could carry them. ***** Not a few hours later, Chris, Enka, and Kibo were more than 1,000 miles away looking for Leo. He had last been seen only 3 miles from their current position. They had been traveling for the longest time and they were almost right behind him. The three of them jumped up to the nearest rooftop and decided to get a good vantage point on the surrounding area. In just a few seconds Enka was freaking out. "Everyone get down," he whispered harshly. "Someone is down in the street." When they looked down, a horrible sight met their eyes. The street below was filled with dead bodies. Some lying with missing limbs, others bleeding and mangled in the most gruesome ways. Then Chris saw what Enka was talking about. In the intersection below were two men. One was holding a massive assault rifle and the other had two katanas sheathed on his back. They just barely managed to hear what they were saying. "...said that you were coming," said the man with the gun. "And he was right about that. But he failed to tell you that he and everyone here would die," replied the katana-wearing man. "Are you kidding? You put your swords away and I still have a gun to your face. You think you can survive the bullets from this gun?" "HA!!! You honestly think that you can handle the strongest of the Zodiac?" The boys on the rooftop looked from at one another in a way they had never before looked at anyone. It was as if all their lives were in grave danger. The boy in the street below was Leo. "You aren't so tough," replied the stupidly confident man. "I've seen 4 year olds scarier than you." "I'll make you eat those words you foolish bastard," countered Leo. He reached back and unsheathed just his right sword with his right hand. It simply came to rest at his side. "You aren't going to charge me?" Leo simply smiled. A half-second later, Leo was 10 feet behind the man with the gun and his sword was straight out like he had just slashed his stomach open. Chris could just barely see it, but suddenly he saw a strange glint of a light flashing all aound the man's body. Just as it was too late, he realized that it was pah that Leo's sword had taken as he ran by with blinding speed. When they heard the click of Leo re-sheathing his blade, the man's body erupted into blood and he fell into several different pieces on the ground. Leo stood silent for a few seconds. Suddenly he turned and Chris met his eyes with his. It seemed for a second as if they were reading each other's minds. And another half-second later, Leo had vanished into thin air. All he left behind was a massacre of epic proportions and one horrible clean-up for the Guild. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- To be continued in B.B. Chapter 10 Hope you enjoyed this chapter as much as I did writing it. I only skipped a week in the storyline because nothing at all happened of any importance in that week. Please tell me what you think of this chapter. |
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| Organization Member | Please someone give me a little feedback on this story. I really want to improve it and make it into something great. Tell me what you think of it and tell more people about it. |
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| Organization Member | Since I'm extremely sick right now, I thought that I would go ahead and write another chapter. In this chapter, much is revealed about the Zodiac and its members. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "Why didn't you just kill them, Leo?" "Why would I? Besides, I want to see how much they will grow." "Hmph. That's almost caring of you." "Don't get smug with me Virgo." "I'm just saying that our troubles would have been done with right then and there." Brittle Bullet Chapter 10: The Game Begins The air in the room was filled with silence. Everyone just looked down at the table. What could any of them say anyway? It was apparent to the Guild that the Zodiac was stronger than anyone had anticipated. Chris, Kibo, and Enka tried to explain what Leo had done, but no one had an explanation. Their hopes were falling away before their eyes. Just as Enka was about to speak, Isaac entered the room. He carried an extremely thick folder with him. By the size, of it, you would have thought that it had years worth of intelligence in it. He slammed it down on the table. The sound resonated against the walls. It made Chris' brain shake in a small way. "Well..." sid Isaac. "I guess there's no helping it now. It has recently been brought to my attention that Leo had massacred several hundred men single-handedly. So now we must begin our final plan to completely eradicate all traces of the Zodiac. I have brought this folder here today because, it contains everything we have ever known about the Zodiac and its members." The room was now even more silent than before. Not because they were nervous, but because everyone wanted to know what was in the folder. Chris' mind began to race at the possibilities of the info in the file. "First things first," Isaac said as he walked to a blank whiteboard. "Based on what we know of the Zodiac's power, we have ranked them from weakest to strongest." Isaac then began writing all the names of the Zodiac symbols. He even numbered them. 9. Capricorn 8. Cancer 7. Aquarius 6. Scorpio 5. Aries (deceased) 4. Gemini 3. Taurus (deceased) 2. Virgo 1. Leo Chris looked at the list and smiled at the two names labeled "deceased". After all, one of those kills belonged to him. The other was from Enka. He then also realized that he had already faced numbers 8 and 6. He managed to injure both of them, but he remembered how much trouble they were. "I will now explain what we know about each seperate member." Isaac sat back down. He began quickly flipping through the pages of the folder. "Ah, here we go." He removed a big bunch of papers all stapled together. Managing a closer look, Chis saw that they were seperate profiles for each Zodiac member. "From the top then," Isaac looked at the first sheet for a second. "Capricorn. He is considered the weakest yet most valuable member of the Zodiac. This is so because he has the ability to see the future. Unfortunately for him, thats the only power he has." "Then he'll be a cake walk right?" asked Enka confidently. "If thats it, then he can't fight at all." "Don't be so sure," countered Isaac. "In a fight he could possibly see all your moves before you do. If we do manage to encounter him, be very careful." Enka lowered his head like a sad dog. Kibo giggled a little at this reaction. He then winked at Chris. He smiled but had no idea what Kibo had meant by it. "Cancer has special bracelets that only respond to her mind waves. They transform into crab claws around her hands and when in this form, they are able to fire any type of ammo she can think of." Chris remembered his fight with the little pink-haired girl from a month ago. What a bitch, he thought to himself. "Aquarius is able to clone herself several times over. Scorpio has control over a strange set of straps around his arms. He also wear shoes equipped with automatic pistols on the heels. Aries had the power to maniulate metal but Chris made short work of him." Chris got a little shy at this comment. "It was nothing," he said modestly. "Really... I don't even know what I did." "All that matters is that one of the Zodiac is dead thanks to you," chimed in Kibo. "You should be proud of yourself." "Ahem... back to the task at hand," cut in Isaac. "Gemini is a strange one. The only description of his powers that we have is that he is able to change the structure of his DNA. None of us or our research team could figure out what that means. I guess we will just have to wait until we encounter him. Taurus had several heavy class weapons stored in his body. This included an RPG, a mini-gun, and a small cannon of some kind. But he has also been eliminated as well. Thanks to Enka." "I sure am glad you gave me that time-bomb attachment." Enka had a huge smile on his face again. "As for Leo and Virgo," sighed Isaac. "we know almost nothing about them. They've managed to stay off the radar for years. For Virgo, all we have is a quote from one of our former members, which reads: "She messes with your head, man. Makes you say things and see some wierd shit." As for what that translates to, we have to wait and see. Leo is a whole nother story." Enka, Chris, and Kibo exchanged worried glances with each other. "This is the first account we have ever had of his powers and they don't seem to add up. He appears to be extremely fast. Faster than the speed of light even. He cut a man into 10 pieces in less than half-a-second. He clearly wasn't lying when he said that he was the strongest in the Zodiac." Suddenly, the room was filled with talking and discussion of what to do next. "Hold on, hold on," yelled Isaac. "Starting now, our mission is to head down the list. We are going to take them out one by one. We have tabs on three of them so we'll find them fast." "So when are we moving out then?" asked Kibo nervously. "And who are we going after?" "Tomorrow morning..." Isaac was silent for a good ten seconds. "Chris and I will move after Scorpio and Gemini." Chris sat in awe. Already they were skipping at least four people on the list and going after 6 and 4? He wondered where this would eventually lead him. And would he be able to handle them? Only time would tell. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- To be continued in B.B. Chapter 11 Obviously one of my longer chapters. This is sort of the lead up to the climax of the story. You could even say that it will end soon. But trust me, I have at least another 15 chapters left in the story. Please tell me what you think. |
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| Organization Member | I would like to invite everyone reading this story to read the first chapter of my new project. It is called Solstice: First Equinox. It is a new original story I'm working on. Feel free to use the link in my sig to take a quick read of Chapter 1. Please let me know what you think of it in it's thread. Thanks again. |
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| Organization Member | Here is the next chapter for you. This is a quick intro to the fight that will occur next chapter. Please enjoy. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "Fools. All of them." "Why do you say that Leo?" "They're going after Scorpio and Gemini." "And..?" "Capricorn already told them. Interception is key to eliminating them." "Plus those two together in a fight is quite a deadly combination." Brittle Bullet Chapter 11: The Appearence of the Hybrid The ceiling almost seemed like a shield at the moment. Chris simply stared longingly at it almost as if it would protect him from whatever was out to get him. Ignoring the fact that he and Isaac were supposed to be packing for their trip, he just layed there listening to the room breath. Silence always suited him. He never spoke in class. Only said small sentences, even to people he knew. Now his life has taken a head spin into oblivion. His world was falling apart around him and a new one was replacing it. He sat up slowly and slumped his shoulders. In is right hand sat a pistol. It was the same pistol that Isaac had given him the first day that they had met. It's bullet was the one that had shot Scorpio the first time he used his powers. Remembering this made Chris question his own mortality. Why do I have these powers? Is there more to them that even Isaac doesn't know? His imagination ran wild as he tried to imagine what else his primary ability could lead to. Then his mind took a bad turn. What if one of them does kill me? What then? And if I do die, how will it happen? Chris hung his head low. His depression had never been so bad before. Just as he raised his gun to his temple, the door of his room came crashing open. Isaac was the one that busted it open. "WHAT THE HELL DO YOU THINK YOU"RE DOING?" Isacc yelled as he jumped across the room and tackled Chris. He wrestled the gun from his hand. He stood back up brushing the dust off his pants. "You're supposed to be packing. Not trying to kill yourself. Get back to putting your stuff together." Just as he handed the gun back to him, Isaac noticed the look on his face. "What's wrong with you lately? Ever since getting rid of Aries, you haven't been the same." Chris shook a little as the image of Aries' dead body flashed through his mind. His words stumbled on themselves but he finally managed to get out his thought. "What if I die out there?" he asked with small tears forming in his eyes. "What then?" "You're not going to. We'll all protect you with our lives. You are after all our only hope of ever defeating the Zodiac. Just get your stuff together so we can get out of here." Chris, slightly reassured, got back to packing his things. Isaac smiled and left the room. Chris zipped his bag shut and followed quickly. Downstairs, everyone was waiting to wish them good luck and goodbye. Kibo and Enka both ran up and gave Chris big hugs. Enka even had a small gift for Chris. "Not yet," said Enka cutting off Chris' motion to open it. "Open it when you think the time is right." He simply smiled and pushed him out the door. Chris and Isaac stood side by side on the empty city street. The sun was just rising over the hills. Its golden light reflected off of Isaac's silver hair. From this angle, Chris could see his other eye that was always under his bangs. It appeared to be closed. He thought nothing of it and just followed Isaac's every move. ***** Scorpio sat on a big wooden crate. The empty hangar was echoing even the smallest noise. He looked down at the figure standing in the shadows of the corner. Scorpio smiled and ran his hand through his messy black hair. "Won't he be surprised?" asked Scorpio giggling. "To see both of us here at once. Capricorn sure was right about last time. Hopefully he's consistent." The figure shook a little. "Don't mock Capricorn," said the figure. It was the voice of a boy. "He is more valuable to the Zodiac than either of us could ever hope to be." "Ya' don't hafta talk like that in fronta me ya' know," replied Scorpio seriously. "we are after all the only ones here. Besides, I know Leo told you what was on his mind." "I'm being serious though," countered the boy. "We definitely need to watch him closely." ***** Chris and Isaac walked along the empty runway at an abandoned airport. They surveyed the area as they walked on. Straight at the other end of the runway was an old hangar. "This isn't good," muttered Isaac. He set down all of his stuff and Chris followed suit. "That door shouldn't be open already." Chris stared hard and also saw that the hangar was wide open. What was worrying Isaac so much? "Let's go see who is here to see us," Isaac began sprinting towards the hangar. Chris kept up the best that he could. As they approached, they were shocked to find what was waiting. A boy walked out of the hangar. His messy black air and loose fitting clothing were vague. But it was the straps on his arms that gave him away. He took a stance that showed off his gun-shoes. His smile got extremely wide. "Well, what do you know? Capricorn was right again. Go figure," Scorpio stated condescendingly. "Long time no see Libra. I see you brought that loser again." Isaac glared at Scorpio and his face became filled with anger. "I'll show you the loser here you little prick. I've got years more experience than you." "And my name isn't Libra," butted in Chris. "That may be my sign but its not my name. It's Chris. I'll teach you to remember that." Scorpio shook sarcastically. "Oooooo, I'm so afraid." He laughed maniacally. The laughter grew and echoed out of the hangar behind him. "Well I've got someone here that would love to hear you say that." Isaac and Chris looked at each other dumbfounded. What the hell was he talking about? "HEY!!" called Scorpio back into the hangar. "THEY"RE HERE GEMINI!!!" Isaac stepped back afraid. Chris simply waited for Gemini to exit the hangar. Footsteps could be heard just inside the entrance to the hangar. Chris could only stand stark still, paralyzed with shock. Standing where he expected Gemini to be... was his best friend Zach. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- To be continued in B.B. Chapter 12 Let me know what you think. |
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| Organization Member | I know I haven't put up a chapter in a while. School has kept me super busy. The next chapter will go up by friday at the latest. Please be patient and you won't be disappointed. |
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| Notorious White Mage Captainess Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: The Haunted Mansion Age: 20 Posts: 7,335
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| Organization Member | I know it was a long while but school has been a real chore lately. Without further ado, here is the next chapter. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "What's on your mind?" "A lot. A lot is on my mind Virgo." "Like what?" "Life. Death." "It's not like you to talk in absolutes Leo." "We'll see" Brittle Bullet Chapter 12: The Clash of Fates Chris stumbled backwards slowly. His mind was at a stand still. Zach stood smiling before him. It seemed to Chris that the only way to get out of this was to die. He couldn't possibly kill his friend. "Isaac," he whispered nervous to turn. "I can't do this. I can't kill my best friend." Suddenly Zach spoke up out of nowhere. "Best friend?" he asked smiling maniacally. "You were never a friend to me. If you were at any point, you certainly aren't now." "Is this some kind of joke?" yelled Chris back. "Joke? Of course not. I'm Gemini. It is my mission to bring you back to the Zodiac. If I find that impossible, then I have permission to kill. Those were Leo's word to me right Scorpio?" "Indeed they were Gemini," replied Scorpio laughingly. Those damn straps still scared Chris. And that messy black hair still reminded him of that first day. The smile reflected the shine of the sun. Chris turned to Isaac to ask for a plan of action but when he looked, he realized that it was too late. Isaac was reaching into his pockets. On each hand he had a yo-yo when he pulled them back out. Chris wondered how much better he would be with two than one. Following his lead, Chris removed the two pistols from their holsters at his waist. He quickly checked each clip to see if they were full. Scorpio immeadiately took advantage of this moment and fired a quick shot from his left shoe. Chris looked up just in time to see a yo-yo stop the bullet in its tracks. "Bad move," said Isaac as he pulled the yo-yo back. "You're my opponent, not his." "Fine by me," countered Scorpio. "Either way, you're both gonna die." One of his straps shot backwards and launched him through the air back into the empty hangar. Isaac sprinted after him leaving Chris and Gemini outside together. Chris and Gemini stared into each other's eyes. Silent, they could almost read each other's minds. Chris switched off the safety on both guns. "So you never were my friend were you Zach?" "No I wasn't. And thats not my name. It's Gemini." "So why did you get to know me then?" "Because my mission was to watch you and contain you should anything happen. That bastard with the yo-yos compromised everything." Chris smiled. He wondered exactly how Isaac had found him. "Why didn't you just kill me when you had the chance. Isn't that your mission now?" "No. I'm trying to recruit you back into the Zodiac. We need you complete our goal." "Well if we are going to fight right here, don't you need a weapon?" "Oh don't worry," replied Gemini removing his hands from his pockets. He stretched out his hands and fingers. "I've got everything I need right here." Chris gave him a funny look and then reluctantly raised his guns. He placed his fingers on both triggers. All he needs? What was it that Isaac said about his powers before... he alters his DNA. Guess I'll just find out what that means for myself. Gemini stood completely still. The triggers fell back hard and a bullet launched from each barrel. They zoomed straight at Gemini's forehead. He simply moved a hand in front of his head and the bullets went into his left hand. But Chris noticed that there were no bullet wounds. He had simply absorbed them into his hand. Gemini spun around and threw out his right arm hard and two bullets flew out with the exact speed of a gun. Chris stammered and tripped with shock. The bullets knocked the gun out of his left hand. Gemini ran towards him but instead of doing anything to Chris, he simply caught the gun and stopped. Chris stood back up with his pistol at the ready. Gemini could only laugh at the expression on his face. "What the hell did you just do?!" screamed Chris. ***** Isaac rolled sideways dodging yet another fling hooked strap. God I hate those things. Fucking hooks. He already had several wounds up and down his arms and legs. Scorpio simply flipped back and forth not bothering to fire his guns. "What the hell did you just do?!" screamed Chris. Isaac looked behind himself to theopen hangar door. He was really worried about Chris. "I see that Gemini has revealed his ability to him," smirked Scorpio. "Lets just block out the distractions shall we?" All six of his straps shot to the door and slammed it closed. Darkness fell on the hangar. Scorpio laughed yet again. Isaac removed and small canister from his back pocket. He pulled a switch and tossed it into the air. It began flying around spouting out floating lights. The room was yet again illuminated. But the lights were spaced funny and only circles of light were scattered across the area. ***** Chris looked behind himself to see the hangar door close. He freaked out and looked back to Gemini. "Well it looks like Scorpio is about to have some fun," said Gemini. "Guess I better get serious, too." Gemini placed the pistol in his left hand and held out his right arm. He placed the bottom of the handle against his forearm. The gun slowly sank into his arm and vanished into thin air. Strange bumps began moving up and down his right forearm. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- To be continued in B.B. Chapter 13 Tell me what you think. |
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| Notorious White Mage Captainess Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: The Haunted Mansion Age: 20 Posts: 7,335
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| Organization Member | All will be revealed soon. There are a lot of the pieces of the plot that won't be fully understood until near the end. But im glad that your thinking of every little piece of the story. |
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